Well, that's actually not the version to read... the one on that personal web site linked in my sig is actually the better one, with several extra scenes and edits that the one posted there doesn't have...
Link is here... it works on my computer, so it *should* be correct...
http://www.dp479.webs.com/
Oh, and feel free to post your comments about my latest story in the thread... I always like getting replies :)