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May 16th, 2016 9:34 AMstarseed galaxy auticornOh, okay. :D I'll be waiting for you then! In the mean time, I'm going to play Pokemon X for now.
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May 16th, 2016 9:33 AMOuterTsuchinokoLol, I totally got that backwards then. Yeah I did get that other message. I was in the middle of downloading it since I don't have an account. I'll add you once I'm setup.
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May 16th, 2016 9:26 AMstarseed galaxy auticornNo, I meant you as being the friend, not being the complete stranger. O____o Anyway, do you maybe of Skype? (not sure you got my other message) If so, just add me on xxmusicsavedmexx then. I'm under @AdorbzFangirl. Be sure to tell me it's you also. XD This'll be loads easier if we can discuss it over Skype instead.
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May 16th, 2016 9:25 AMOuterTsuchinokoYeah it probably isn't the easiest to reread on an ipad. Well if you want me to help I will, but only if your comfortable with it. Lol at me being a complete stranger.
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May 16th, 2016 9:23 AMstarseed galaxy auticornbtw, do you maybe have Skype? It might be easier to discuss this over that. I'll be able to keep up with you a lot more too. My Skype is: xxmusicsavedmexx under @AdorbzFangirl. :3
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May 16th, 2016 9:20 AMstarseed galaxy auticorn...not really. The reason I don't is because I feel if I reread them for errors, it's going to cause me to just rewrite the whole thing over instead. DX I also write the chapters on my iPad as well. So, there are always a lot of errors I don't notice when I write them through. I usually just post them straight to Mibba via my iPad. It's usually because my iPad autocorrects muk that's not even wrong. -_____-;
Hm... well, I guess I could trust you to help out. I'd rather it be someone I've come to be friends with than a complete stranger. It might help me out a lot, considering my dilemma with re-reading them all on my own too. I've also been trying to hard to work on how I explain things and how I use the dialogue. This is one of my weakest points right now, and I don't really know how to improve on it. I'm a self-educated writer, so I have to learn mainly by input of others, reading books or doing research on writing topics. In the end, it doesn't seem to stick in my brain at all due to my poor reading comprehension. ;o; -
May 16th, 2016 9:03 AMOuterTsuchinokoFinished reading both chapters. Pretty good so far. Do you read what you've written over before posting it because there are a lot of errors, especially in the third chapter. You should fix those types of things because when reading stories with many errors it can have an effect on people being immersed in the story. I can help you with that if you'd like. Also the word chuckled, I think you should try to find more words you can use instead of using that one so often. I don't know it just started to feel odd to me reading that over and over again. Overall I liked it a lot, especially when they met at the swings. I'm glad that the brother didn't come over to butt in, but after the exchange between Declan and their Mom I understand why since he trusts her more to make good decisions.
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May 16th, 2016 6:41 AMstarseed galaxy auticornGood news! I finished the second chapter. Here it is for your reading pleasure. :D I figured it would be a good time for them to at least meet as old friends. Their friendship will start to pick up as the story progresses, and they form a huge bond along the way. ^^
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May 16th, 2016 3:23 AMstarseed galaxy auticornI get that a lot lately with pokemon games. :c I suffer from a burnout. Right now, I have pokemon named after J-rockers at the moment. :P
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May 15th, 2016 7:12 PMOuterTsuchinokoI need to restart X soon. I lost my save before when I bought a new 3DS. Been playing AS since release. I been wanting to actually play Pokemon instead of shiny hunting, but since I'm doing that Spring Shiny Quest I been trying to get my six. I got three but I'm feeling burnt out from it. Ugh.
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May 15th, 2016 6:56 PMstarseed galaxy auticornYeah. Anyway, I think I'll end writing for the night. I really want to play Pokemon X for a little while instead.
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May 15th, 2016 6:25 PMOuterTsuchinokoGood idea, it'll probably feel too fast if they fell in love mad quick.
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May 15th, 2016 6:00 PMstarseed galaxy auticornI'm going to do my best with this story. ^^ I just want to pace it some before they fall in love.
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May 15th, 2016 5:59 PMOuterTsuchinokoWell take your time to make it good.
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May 15th, 2016 5:56 PMstarseed galaxy auticornI know! I adore him. XD Also, I'll probably start the first chapter tonight, but I don't know if I can finish it before tomorrow. I have to think of ideas first before anything else. XD So, I'll start doing that. I also want to do some more character development on Eli (the love interest).

