Conversation Between Legendarian Mistress and Fuyu
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  1. Fuyu
    March 15th, 2010 4:50 PM
    Fuyu
    using temporary internet can't.
  2. Legendarian Mistress
    March 15th, 2010 4:37 PM
    Legendarian Mistress
    *pokes*
  3. Fuyu
    March 14th, 2010 4:09 PM
    Fuyu
    Okay. Lessee...
    First one...

    I'd take out most of the adjectives, and I have no clue about where it was going. For the last sentence I would put "Your fingers get sore just thinking about attempting to pull one out."

    The second one I really don't know what to do with I'm afraid. Sorry.
  4. Legendarian Mistress
    March 14th, 2010 4:04 PM
    Legendarian Mistress
    Quote:
    Hundreds of shining, light blue crystals stuck out of the ground as that great entrance, appearing perfect and big, like you would find at the Hearthome church, approached more, and thus becoming only greater and marvelous. Some crystals stood as tall as a good human height and some peeked out smoothly, like an ordinary rock. The truth was the lustrous crystals were well wedged into the ground. The thought of simply trying to pull one out alone gets your fingers sore.
    I think you may have used the wrong word here. And there’s something about the end of the last sentence that bugs me. I think it’s the tense, but I’m not sure how to fix it.

    Quote:
    When close enough to see inside the great cavern, the crystals look plain compared to what is the inside. The sun at first stands out at extreme brightness after the hell-fire amount of time inside Mount Coronet. Many pure stone pillars, of many heights, stand tall and glorious, and shine with their soft cherry blossom finish. Many of the pillars are speared at the top, some pillars are plain, some look like the top was blown off, and a few are gone, only their base left standing. In the middle of the largeness lays a peculiar small elevation with a triangular figure. The elevation is circled by many pillars, in perfect form, height, and only speared. Those pillars stand out with an extra silver glare under the great light of the sun.
    Do you mean the sun in the sky? I got the sentence after a few more read throughs, but I think it may need to be reworked, somewhat.

    Dagzar's helping me, those are her quotes.
  5. Legendarian Mistress
    March 14th, 2010 3:20 PM
    Legendarian Mistress
    *pokes*
  6. Fuyu
    March 10th, 2010 5:04 PM
    Fuyu
    KAy. See ya tomorrow.
  7. Legendarian Mistress
    March 10th, 2010 5:03 PM
    Legendarian Mistress
    Gotta go.
  8. Legendarian Mistress
    March 9th, 2010 3:38 PM
    Legendarian Mistress
    Hey, online?
  9. Legendarian Mistress
    March 8th, 2010 6:53 PM
    Legendarian Mistress
    Oi
  10. Legendarian Mistress
    March 7th, 2010 2:59 PM
    Legendarian Mistress
    *pokes*
  11. Legendarian Mistress
    March 5th, 2010 6:39 PM
    Legendarian Mistress
    Online please? Need someone to talk to, am bored.
  12. Legendarian Mistress
    February 28th, 2010 3:19 PM
    Legendarian Mistress
    *pokes*
  13. Legendarian Mistress
    February 26th, 2010 3:09 PM
    Legendarian Mistress
    I can't log onto AIM for some reason.
  14. Legendarian Mistress
    February 25th, 2010 7:26 PM
    Legendarian Mistress
    *pokes*
  15. Fuyu
    February 25th, 2010 5:42 PM
    Fuyu
    LOL :D