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  • OH I ALSO WANT TO ADD that the pikachu gif you used is the cutest thing I've ever seen where's it from?! ;o;
    Dear Mirandax, your request is now available at a visible version at my shop. Please use the new pic's URL instead of the old one you're using now.
    Hi!

    I noticed you're a new member so I wanted to let you know about a rule that I wasn't sure you were aware of. :3 I'm referring to this post here. In every post on PC, you're required to have at least 4 words and 25 characters in a post, to make sure that what you're posting actually has substance. In addition, Pokemon Voting Polls has a rule that you have to add a reason to every post, for the same reason. :) I'd rather have you just edit the post than delete it, so you know for next time!
    Definitely places on the Northeast coast. People love going there, because there are pretty beaches, "exotic" food, and that kind of stuff.

    I wouldn't personally like to go there, because I'm not a big fan of beaches. But if you're into it!Just note that I said "Northeast coast", because if you go to Continental Northeast, you'll experience a dry desert along with Caatinga vegetation. Yikes!
    Well, I'd say "have fun", but since you're going there in August, you still have two weeks. So, have fun at your house!
    Not one hundred percent nice, it's super duper cold in some places and SUPER hot in others (even in winter), but the area I live in is quite all right. Indeed, Brazil has some beautiful locations!
    I see... Well I guess so, when it's Winter in the southern hemisphere, it's Summer in the northern one. Now I noticed that I actually typed "it's winter here" instead of "it's summer there, correct?" Silly me =P
    Are you going to Portugal as a tourist or you'll visit some relatives? Well, I said on the last one it's winter here in Brazil but, yes I am in Brazil =P
    Sorry but from the looks of it all you did is copy and paste my example and left the rest exactly as it is.

    Personally, I think you need a bit more experience to be able to keep up with my RP. Perhaps try out Pokémon Trainer Academy or practice writing on your own, until you can manage a style.

    Sorry!
    I can see you've thought through what's happening, which is great, but as a whole it's still very scattered. I love how you've thought to mention a lot of battles - but I think it might be better to only include the first one, with Brock, as that's probably the most important to Miranda's story.

    If you look at the top, it's one HUGE paragraph of description and things. This bit could do with breaking down into proper paragraphs, which will make it way easier to read.

    Then, after that, you seem to have the opposite problem - where you go on to new lines.
    Like this, rather than completing a paragraph. It becomes more a list of what everyone is saying.

    The best way to fix this would, firstly, remove *some* of the events in the history. Or simplify them slightly. For instance the conversation with 'Jan' to get Machoke is very text-dense. Rather than him saying things literally you could just describe how he says things.

    Spoiler:
    15~20 degrees Celsius or Fahrenheit? =P It's apparently 15ºC/59ºF, but since it's raining and very windy, feels like much colder.
    Well, not really. It's actually Winter here in Brazil. I'm on vacation, yes, but it's already ending. Classes start again on August 1st. What about you? It's Winter there, correct?
    Baha, the spoiler is a well kept secret! ;D

    Only kidding, what you need to do is put
    Spoiler:
    Yep it's a lot better! If you space it out a bit better it'll also look nice and easy on the eyes:

    Spoiler:
    Oh thanks! Not many people say that to me. And I believe my name is a tad common here hehe.
    I see, I see. This forum is pretty big. I've been here for more than two years and there are still things I haven't seen!
    I'm good, thanks! But it's cold here, my hands are freezing!
    Sure you can use that as a basis :) Take your time with it though, you don't need to finish it until Friday really ^^.
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