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  1. Misheard Whisper
    March 5th, 2009 7:20 PM
    Misheard Whisper
    And it's not American slang, it's just laziness >:(
  2. Misheard Whisper
    March 5th, 2009 7:03 PM
    Misheard Whisper
    A runon sentence is a sentence that is like this one with no punctuation whatsoever that makes the whole thing run badly and makes it very difficult for people to read and unfortunately you do it all the time! I have trouble writing a runon sentence when I try to, but you manage to do it with minimal effort. How odd.
  3. Misheard Whisper
    March 5th, 2009 6:47 PM
    Misheard Whisper
    And that's a horrible runon sentence.
  4. Misheard Whisper
    March 5th, 2009 6:46 PM
    Misheard Whisper
    It's a grappling hook, (aka grappler) and the correct plural of thief is thieves, not thiefs.
  5. Misheard Whisper
    March 5th, 2009 6:40 PM
    Misheard Whisper
    >_>
    <_<

    I know, but I don't mind. Occasionally I feel the need to hang somewhere...a little quieter, ya know?
  6. Misheard Whisper
    March 5th, 2009 6:35 PM
    Misheard Whisper
    Dude, there's EVERYTHING forums. However, after a quick look around...the biggest STar Wars forum I saw was about 1400 members...too small for my needs. If I finish Beta 24, I'll post it here.
  7. Misheard Whisper
    March 5th, 2009 6:28 PM
    Misheard Whisper
    Maybe I should go look for him on Star Wars forums?
  8. Misheard Whisper
    March 5th, 2009 5:07 PM
    Misheard Whisper
    I didn't put too much complex stuff in. Twi'leks are humanoid aliens with what seem like two tails coming from their head, like Jabba's majordomo Bib Fortuna, and the Jedi Aayla Secura. A Nubian cruiser is that silver ship that Padme flies. Droidekas are rolling droids, but you probably knew that.

    Yeah, ShadowComics would be good. I don't think he's a member here...
  9. Misheard Whisper
    March 5th, 2009 4:54 PM
    Misheard Whisper
    Can I PM you the prologue to a Star Wars fanfic, then?
  10. Misheard Whisper
    March 5th, 2009 4:44 PM
    Misheard Whisper
    Oh, and what the fazookie is this?

    "Elliot was running down Newbark town he was lost again and he needed to find the right way fast before he gets more lost."

    That's a horrible runon sentence, and they're all through your fics and RPGs. ... I rest my case.

    Oh, by the way. Do you happen to like Star Wars?
  11. Misheard Whisper
    March 5th, 2009 4:42 PM
    Misheard Whisper
    Well, just let me know when you reckon you've got it down.
  12. Misheard Whisper
    March 5th, 2009 11:01 AM
    Misheard Whisper
    "They're", "their" and "there" were just examples. Yes, I know all fics have errors. What I'm saying is that yours have an awful lot, and you're making no apparent effort to correct them. I can't put it any blunter than that.
  13. Misheard Whisper
    March 4th, 2009 10:04 PM
    Misheard Whisper
    Dude, you're not getting me. You don't write for yourself, you write for an audience, and you need to remember that! If your fic is unintelligible, people will just find something else. It's not just you. You post your story for other people's entertainment, and right now, it's not entertaining me, because I'm having to wade through an ocean of painfully awkward syntax to decipher each line before moving on.

    People want easy reads. Not easy, plot-wise (Readers love a good quagmire of a plot, with tons of twists and turns), but surface-wise. It's as simple as capitalising where capitalising is needed, putting periods where they should be, spelling common words right (spelling "unintelligible" as "unintelligable" is understandable, for instance, but getting "their", "they're" and "there" confused is not), and rereading your sentences so that they flow comfortably and smoothly. Don't forget that your whole story needs to flow nicely, too; all the bits and bobs need to interweave, join together and meld neatly into a work of art.

    Until you can show me you're trying to do this, you shall get no reviews from me.
  14. Misheard Whisper
    March 4th, 2009 7:27 PM
    Misheard Whisper
    Excuses. I swear, I'm not reviewing another fic if I can see ten mistakes just by glancing at it.
  15. Misheard Whisper
    March 4th, 2009 7:21 PM
    Misheard Whisper
    I'll read a fic of yours when you can show me one with no horrible grammar errors.

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