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Yami's Girl June 24th, 2004 11:14 AM

A Quest to Fit In
 
Chapter One:The Espeon Clan With one Umbreon

As her new name, Moonlight, sank in she felt misplaced for once.Her name had just been issued for she evolved, and her pack gave names after eveloution. As her whole pack were Espeons, she had just evolved into an Umbreon. As it got darker her rings began to glow.Moonlight sighed and got up. She ran back home and the pack knew she was coming because of her glowing rings. She came to her family Moonlight saw a fire they managed to control. As most Umbreons hate light she now did too. Most of her pack was asleep she had lots of energy. She ran into the woods happily. She was now asleep after running for a while she dreamed of what happened to her.

Chapter Two: Moonlight's dream
It was sunset and a little eevee was battling a Corphish. The little eevee used a quick attack on it. The Corphish stumbled then used Crabhammer. Eevee then used bite. And Corphish used metal claw and hit the Eevee. The Eevee used the last of its energy to use iron tail and beat the Corphish. It was a littledarker now. Eevee was exusted. Then it started evolving! But since it was darker and not lighter she evolved Umbreon. She showed her pack and she got her name Moonlight. Moonlight woke up. She couldn't go back. She didnt belong there. Then she ran away to find here place in this world.
Please comment on this. Its my first fanfic. Chapters 3 coming soon!

Shana June 28th, 2004 3:52 PM

It's a really good story! One suggestion is maybe you could make your chapters a little longer. But I really liked it!


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