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The Bird Lord June 25th, 2004 8:19 PM

The Flame of the Chicken of Death
 
Prolouge: The Blaze of Blood

The sky bled blue. The sun was setting. A forest of evergreens called Masala stood below.

Two kids at around the age of fourteen walked on a trail in the woods. One was a boy with jet black hair and black eyes. He had a pikachu which followed him. The other was a girl who had torqouse eyes and orange hair.

"Hey Misty"said the boy"It's getting dark. We'd better go."

"Right." replied Misty.

Just then the pikachu lept on the boy's shoulder who was named Ash. "What's up Pikachu?" said Ash as the mouse sniffed the air. Then Pikachu darted of his shoulder and into the evergreens. "Pikachu?!"
"
C'mon Misty!"

Ash followed his Pokemon as it ran through the brush. The plants became thicker and thicker as they went deeper in the forest. Soon Pikachu disappeared out of sight. "PIKACHU! What's the matter?" yelled Ash.

Then a high-pitch screamed pierced the air. "BBBBIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIKAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!"

"PIKACHUUUUUU!!" screamed Ash as he ran. Other sounds filled the night now. "Hoot hoot""Noct OWl"

Suddenly he came into a scorched clearing. Misty appeared right after him. In the middle of the clearing lay a hunk of flesh. They looked at it in disgust. Only when it moved did Ash realize this was Pikachu. Pikachu was covered in blood. Two huge gashes were in it's side. The rest of the body was scorched. Ash realized that there was no way to save it. Tears ran down his cheek.

"B-b-b-b-b-biga" it cried as life sped away from it. "NO-NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO" screamed Ash. "I-WILL-AVENGE-YOU-PIKACHUUUUUUU"

Then a bush rustled. Ash turned around in time to see a huge black claw covered in flames rushing to him....to rip him.....to tear him. "ASH!" cried Misty as a huge fiery leg kicked her in the head. He and Misty never heard another thing. They both were dead.

I'm gonna edit it later to add more details and stuff. And I finally found a way to write about Ash and his dumb Pikachu being killed without making spam. So what do you think about the story. And I do know that everyone knows what killed ash, misty, and pikachu. If there are any mistakes please correct me (grammer,etc.). Any suggestions or critism would be helpful even if it's a bit rude.

oni flygon June 27th, 2004 9:42 AM

Well, if you want to improve your grammar, you better use microsoft word. Your story doesn't explain a lot for the first chapter. Just destruction and all... I guess it's a Blaziken out for blood? Dunno... but... you can improve...


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