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pokemon battelers
ok this is my first comic ever...so here we go you better love these and if you dont too bad ^_^ POKEMON BATTELERS Character Bios: http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/codybio-1.png http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/ashleybio.png http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/mikaylabio.png COMICS: Spoiler:
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LATEST COMIC: http://i256.photobucket.com/albums/hh190/burstninjax/comic8.png |
hm...
as I said through PM before, work on these: 1. Chariters 2. Plot 3. Effects 4. Layout k? I'm sure this will be atleast interesting. ^^ |
ok well here it is omic two... and three
The Journey Begins pt 2 The Journey Begins pt 3 and starting with comic four i will make six panles...okay have fun reading |
Work on grammar. Periods, capitalizations, spelling.
Stop using periods. It really gets annoying after the third speech bubble in one panel with '...' Don't mix styles. Styles are like Vinegar, Oil, and Water. Fr/Lg stays with Fr/Lg, RSE stays with RSE, and MD stays with MD. They don't like to be mixed up. That includes maps, sprites, etc. And 'Battelers' is actually 'Battlers'. |
...i like the use of md sprites...and idont really plan on scratching all the sprites of pokemon i need...also i spelt it wriong for a reason that you will find out later in the comic...um as for the use of fr/lg sprites...other than places i wont be mixing ows again...so i think that solves all the problems
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You purposely put periods right there, didn't you.
Anyways, you still haven't said anything about the periods or grammar. Are you going to address those? |
...yes my grammer will get better...but the periods symbolize a pause...not just a ...um i guess i could use a comma, so ill probably start that...i hope that helped
BIG UPDATE CHARACTER BIOS ARE UP |
hm...
Your chariters bios are just sprites, but since you sent to the new full ones through PM, I have to say the bio text needs to be bigger. I could barely read it. Keep up with the comic, Burst. |
...you have to click them...then it goes to the bio...but i will make the text bigger...also comic 4 will be out by the end of the weekend
EDIT:...um sorry for not getting the comic up...its not like people care...T.T well if you peopl;e want you can make a character for the comic...also you have to click the sprites to go to the bios... ...ok im making a new post because i feel like it yell at me later heres comic 4 now we're getting somewhere...sort of EDIT: HERES COMIC FIVE Pokemon Battelers also edited bios are up |
hm... intresting.
I'm curious what these battlers are. keep up the nice work, Burst. |
Did you seriously say 'That's the cool way to spell it.'
Could you at least have come up with a reasonable excuse? Maybe make it a joke/pun that reoccur (like the bad guy/rival/random person/Pokemon comes and asks the same question). And you need to explain why he took him to the Batteler HQ. 'Like, I just decided to take you to our Secret HQ for kicks. Because we have nothing better to do.' Also, if you're going to spell Battlers wrong, I suggest yo spell it wrong all the time. Work on your capitalizations some more as well. Good luck! |
ok guys heres an update on the battelers
http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/bluebatteler.png blue batteler specializing in water types, he has a wailmer mantine, and mudkip http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/redbatteler.png red batteler, specializing in fire types, he has magmar and torchick http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/blackbatteler.png black batteler, specializing in ghost and dark types, he has banette shuppet and duskull http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/yellowbatteler.png yellow batteler, specializing in electirc types, she has pikachu and magnazone http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/pinkbatteler.png the pink batteler, specializing in normal types, she has delcatty porygon and aipom the pokemon battelers headquarters http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/pokemonbattelerbase.png |
to tell you the truth, the battlers are almost similar to the power rangers. XD
but they're neat, can't wait for the next comic. |
...lol they are actually based off the power rangers...yeah i was bored
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I asked if you wanted me to fix your OWs for the battlers. |
thanks achy that would be cool if you had some ideas for them
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when I'm done, can I use them too for my comic?
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I dont know why, but I really like it...I love it how you put the Pokemon into the base, they are from Mystery Dungeon, right?
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yup all tyhe pokemon ows are pmd and the trainers are all r/s/e the places are fr/lg and r/s/e in some cases
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I think the comic is really good and quite funny. But there is one problem. You told us there is a reason for the mistake in the word Battelers. And the reason just looks like you thought, "Upps. I made a mistake, better make up a cheesy way to cover this up now!!!!" And it doesn't really please the reader, it's a bit dull. And I don't really like the Battelers. But there is one great thing. The backgrounds. Did you make that base yourself! Cos it looks really good.
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Oooh! Now I cannot wait to see the next eppy lmao!
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it's more of a filler eppy,
and I don't think you gave cody any real interaction with the battlers that should of happend instead of "Hi Cody!" *One healing-poke'mon sesson later* "Bye Cody!" I was kinda dissappointed. But I can't wait for the next episode. :D |
well hes really not supposed to get a big interaction with them, hes only supposed to vaguley know them...i know it all sounds weird but it will eventually make sence...or atleast i hope...
ok now since cody is goin to eight island heres the map http://i199.photobucket.com/albums/aa202/burstninja/pokemon/mikaylaisland.png the tent is a contest hall |
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