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A small poem I wrote while listening to my music.
Aye... I wrote this at like, 2am, dont yell at me, and no flaming.
Longing Longing to touch him To look in his eyes To give him a kiss And see his surprise To ruffle his hair To hold him near To know he is longing To fight off my fear To close the door To watch the flame To watch the man I will not name To say the words 'I love you' And to hear the reply 'I love you too' To kiss his cheek To hold his hand To watch him close To adore this man To caress his cheek To hug him tight To sit and watch Him every night. -Ciera I wrote this, because I had posted another poem at another site, and the admin there said to use less I, me, you. So here it is. *bows, then falls over, asleep* |
Heh though its not exactly my type of poem, and that its hard for me to get the feeling of it.. because I'd have to probably... imagine I was a girl... and stuff blah, its a pretty nice poem. There's no flaws that I can pick out, besides the fact that I'm the one reviewing it (Awful reviewer). I'm not that critical about poetry, as long as it is something that my little brain can interpret, and has well-composed rhymes, I havent any mistakes to pick out. Keep it up, I say.
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Wow, I like the poem a lot! Very um, sensual. >.<
I like these types of poems. |
I like this poem a lot...it is full of emotion.
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I am glad you people like it ^^
lol jokestr |
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