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Gummy February 28th, 2008 8:49 PM

What's the most objectionable thing you plan to add to your story (if you haven't done so already)?

Spoiler:
Had an ex-gym "die" in a Pokemon stampede. And then there was that Machoke Massacre in Mission Pokemon... yeah, I'm a sick person.

Saffire Persian February 28th, 2008 11:39 PM

Chaptered fics would be a little much for these sort of prompts. Usually for this type of thing, short one-shots(1,000-2000 words) or drabbles (50-500 words) are the way to go. Not that you should limit yourself to that length if you feel like going over, but in livejournal communities that do these type of things, this drabble/shot one-shot limit seems to be favored by the majority of writers.

Percy Thrillington February 29th, 2008 9:11 AM

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Originally Posted by Hanako Tabris (Post 3378790)
That's why I was leaning more towards the latter choices, Jax. Since it would be less restrictive to the author. If the prompt is "Bulbasaur" then they have to include a Bulbasaur even if they really don't want to. But with a prompt like "growth" it's more open to interpretation.

And I was thinking of along the lines of a prompt community. Just hand out a prompt, say that the writers have X amount of time to write a story, and then post. More fun that way.

I'll wait to see about other options, and possibly post the first topic tomorrow. :3

And no contests. Since finding judges will be hard, and it will be more fun.

Oh, and how long should it be between prompts?

Well, as nearly everyone has said that one-shots should be the way to go, would you not just need one prompt?

JX Valentine February 29th, 2008 10:33 AM

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Originally Posted by Oni Raichu (Post 3380617)
Well, as nearly everyone has said that one-shots should be the way to go, would you not just need one prompt?

If this is prompt-community-style, that means that there's one one-shot for every prompt. In other words, it probably won't be just one single challenge. For an example, I'd recommend checking out Fanfic 100, a prompt community that functions on this sort of system.

Unforgettable February 29th, 2008 7:01 PM

I really am glad to see so many people interested in this =3

JX Valentine February 29th, 2008 11:26 PM

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Originally Posted by YunaDances (Post 3382094)
I really am glad to see so many people interested in this =3

You kidding me? I love prompt challenges. I'm currently working on a set of fifty prompts over at LJ. Not exactly my best work, I admit, but it's always fun to look at a prompt and try to come up with a story that stems from the idea.

txteclipse March 1st, 2008 12:08 AM

I participated in a one-shot contest on another board that limited the writing to 1000 words and that felt really comfortable for the time frame we were given (I think it was like 10 days or so). Those were fight scene one-shots however, which tend to be short-ish, so we could raise the word limit here a bit.

I'm thinking the prompts would either be to write a story centered on the ideas surrounding one word, or to develop the idea of a quote. Or, we could post a picture, and make that be the setting, which could be really interesting.

Astinus March 1st, 2008 12:25 AM

I was dumb and forgot that this was a leap year. xD So I'm waiting for March 1, only because I'm slightly obsessive about that.

You know, if you guys want a prompt to be used, send it my way. No matter what it is - a word, a quote, a picture, whatever - we'll use it.

The way that I have this planned is that I'll sticky a thread in the main forum with each prompt having it's own post. Then, when all the fics are in for that prompt, I can run through and link them all.

Organization. Yay.

I'm also thinking either two weeks or one full month between prompts. I would prefer a month, since I take a long time to get something polished for publication. But I can change it if need be.

Gummy March 1st, 2008 7:47 AM

Well, today seems like a good day to get this thing started. Is it going to be like those contests at SPPf or are we doing this just to make a thread full of creative one-shots (either way, I'm in).

diamondpearl876 March 1st, 2008 8:14 AM

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Originally Posted by Gummy (Post 3383497)
Well, today seems like a good day to get this thing started. Is it going to be like those contests at SPPf or are we doing this just to make a thread full of creative one-shots (either way, I'm in).

No, no contests. This is just for fun.

Unforgettable March 1st, 2008 10:31 AM

Alright, I today is a great day to get this started!!

I think that a month would be the best for it. So that it can be polished, or if you have writer's block, it gives you time to get something written.

Scytheteen March 1st, 2008 3:12 PM

Geez, I get banned for three months and you guys add 100 pages. Ahahaha. I'll just answer a random question.

What's the most objectionable thing you plan to add to your story (if you haven't done so already)?

Probably to have my main character cheat, I haven't done many fanfics.

txteclipse March 1st, 2008 3:26 PM

What's the most objectionable thing you plan to add to your story (if you haven't done so already)?

Well, so far I've had a bullying scene, some slightly bloody fighting scenes, and some dark themes. I'm going to have a few emotionally charged fighting scenes, which will probably make them fairly intense. Other than that, there is a small chance I will have some alcohol/tobacco use (it's set around the middle ages).

Yamato-san March 1st, 2008 5:30 PM

damn.... my question's gotten pretty popular, hasn't it?

TurtleKing March 2nd, 2008 5:38 AM

What's the most objectionable thing you plan to add to your story (if you haven't done so already)?

Spoiler:
Killing off an important character. But that won't happened until the sequel of Poke Special Manga: DP. The title of it will be Poke Special Manga: DP: Nightmare in Canalave.

Alter Ego March 2nd, 2008 6:03 AM

What's the most objectionable thing you plan to add to your story (if you haven't done so already)?

Well, since I haven't released anything, it's all on the drawing board, but a few of my more controversial ideas include:

1) A young main (early teen) developing a naive crush on a considerably older woman (think, crush-on-a-teacher type situation) which the latter - incidentally, a main villain - quite ruthlessly exploits to drive her own agenda.

2) A character dying in a very bloody kind of way. Thought to be fair, the level of gore-in-writing isn't high because that part is described from the viewpoint of the victim, who is in shock and doesn't realize his situation until just before his consciousness fades. The brutal murder is heavily implied, though.

3) Pokémon killing people. Sort of controversial given the generally happy, go-lucky image of the franchise, I suppose.

4) A character getting driven mad by the big bad and eventually committing suicide under the delusion that it will stop the big bad's evil plot.

5) A main character spending the better part of her life locked up in an insane asylum.


I think those cover the general gist of things, though I might have forgotten some. :3

Why do you use Pokemon nicknames?

Umm...because I feel like it? xD Dunno', I guess it really started with RPing, where giving nicknames was the only way to assure that my character's pokémon wouldn't get mixed up with the x amount of others from the same species lounging about. Makes them feel more like proper characters too. If the character really isn't the type to name their pokémon, I don't push it, though.

How important is the title of a fic?

Ehh...this topic has pretty much been explored to its full extent, so I'll just second what's been said. Quite often (especially when I'm low on time) the title is what determines whether or not I open the thread. So yes, titles are very important indeed.

Is it okay to cut down on the description when you're trying to add a mysterious atmosphere to your chapter?

Definitely. At least, I'd like to think that it's okay seeing as how I'm doing it all the time myself. Oftentimes what's not being said has far greater impact than what is being said. Heck, if you really want mystery then you'll pretty much have to cut down on the explanations at some point or the other.

How do you feel about "n00b" comments about your fic?

Haven't had the chance to enjoy this yet, but n00b comments in general bug the heck out of me, so I probably wouldn't like it much. >.< Might have myself a laugh if they're suitably ridiculous ones, though. xD

Do you welcome the use of legendary Pokemon in your fic(s) or try to stay away from them?

Ehh...depends. I usually try to make use of the less known and obscure species, to which legendaries obviously don't belong, but at times I just need to draw on that divine/semi-divine status they possess, and in those cases I won't shy away from doing just that. In general, they don't tend to be my first choice, though.

As a side note, but does anyone else have difficulties in writing a first chapter? For the aforementioned planned fic, I've thrown out about four different chapter beginnings because not a single one of them seems to work. So, how do you write a first chapter, and what sort of elements (in medias res, detailed descriptions of the setting, et cetera) do you use to do it?

Yes. HECK YES. I've tried so many opening chapters now that I've lost count, everything from hectic chases and ominous, horrorish scenes to moments of quiet contemplation and cutesy-happy, innocent ones. I'm absolutely horrible at pinning down beginnings for things (right now, I have like three or four separate ones that I could pursue, each one of which would branch out into a distinctly different fic x.O) and I seem to have too much of a tendency for just pushing backspace and starting out from scratch again. >.< So yeah, it's just lots of experimental typing (sometimes just doing whatever pops into my head) with occasional saves of better attempts onto text documents for later judgment until I'm finally satisfied, pretty much like what I do with my RP plots except that the process is slower.

Mostly, my opening chapter (well, the drafts for my chapters) tend to be split into two types. The first is a confusing kind of scene that the reader won't fully understand until its context is laid down (something which won't happen until a few chapters later). The main character is introduced, but only by their mannerisms and their actions (in some of them I don't even give a name at the beginning) with no background for how they got to doing what they're currently doing, why they're doing it, where they're doing it, or indeed even what precisely they're striving for. The other type is pretty much your standard, textbook-model fanfic opening, where I lay down the basic background and current life situation of the character along with the basics of their current goal and - usually - some foreshadowing of conflict to come. Lately, I've been leaning towards the former type, though. I don't like tipping my hand too early on in the game, though of course I'll have to take the necessary precautions to ensure that I'm not being too selective. After all, I do want my readers to understand what the heck is going on in the story; I just want to make them work a little for it. x3

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Originally Posted by Scythekid (Post 3385143)
Geez, I get banned for three months and you guys add 100 pages.

Well, I was gone for a week and this already grew two pages. Ahh...there's no place like the lounge, eh? x3 Welcome back, by the way.

Dragonfree March 2nd, 2008 7:38 AM

Quote:

As a side note, but does anyone else have difficulties in writing a first chapter? For the aforementioned planned fic, I've thrown out about four different chapter beginnings because not a single one of them seems to work. So, how do you write a first chapter, and what sort of elements (in medias res, detailed descriptions of the setting, et cetera) do you use to do it?
Hmm. Generally the beginning is one of the first things that come to me about a new fic, actually (such as with Morphic, where the idea of a scientist coming on a talk show to try to justify the abortion of hybrid fetuses was literally the first thing I thought of). But I've had this problem with one fic, in particular a one-shot. It's basically a horror interpretation of the move Curse as used by non-Ghost Pokémon. I originally wrote one version of it which I wasn't really satisfied with, and then I've been attempting to rewrite it but can't possibly figure out where it would be best to begin it. ><;

Alter Ego March 2nd, 2008 9:54 AM

Ohh...this sounds like fun indeed. Reminds me of that time when I decided to write a pokémon fanfic using the poem "The night before Christmas" as my prompt and only...well, the night before Christmas as writing time. Didn't get very far, but it was a fun exercise all the same. XD

So yeah, I'm going to be playing around with this, though if I ever get anything finished before the deadline remains to be seen. This is looking to be good, clean fun regardless. :3

And yeah, seconding a month as regular writing time. It's an easy way to keep track of the deadline too. That way, those who really want to polish get to do that while those who have slower creative processes or constricting real life commitments (*Points at self*) get a fair shot at finishing their work in time too.

Percy Thrillington March 2nd, 2008 10:11 AM

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Originally Posted by Alter Ego (Post 3388553)
Ohh...this sounds like fun indeed. Reminds me of that time when I decided to write a pokémon fanfic using the poem "The night before Christmas" as my prompt and only...well, the night before Christmas as writing time. Didn't get very far, but it was a fun exercise all the same. XD

So yeah, I'm going to be playing around with this, though if I ever get anything finished before the deadline remains to be seen. This is looking to be good, clean fun regardless. :3

And yeah, seconding a month as regular writing time. It's an easy way to keep track of the deadline too. That way, those who really want to polish get to do that while those who have slower creative processes or constricting real life commitments (*Points at self*) get a fair shot at finishing their work in time too.

Sounds like a fun excercise XD.

I think a month is good too, for the reasons that everyone else has pointed out before me.

Jezebel March 2nd, 2008 11:34 AM

Yep, I agree to a month. I usually need that full amount of time anyway.

Astinus March 2nd, 2008 2:46 PM

A month has already been decided. I figured that was the safe way to go.

Yamato-san March 2nd, 2008 2:48 PM

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Originally Posted by Dragonfree (Post 3388113)
It's basically a horror interpretation of the move Curse as used by non-Ghost Pokémon.

just so you're aware, "Curse" was actually a complication when the game was converted to English. In Japanese, のろい "noroi" can mean both "a curse" (using the kanji 呪い), and "slow" (uses the kanji 鈍い). As you can see, they played on the homonym (and possibly took advantage of the fact that the games practically never use kanji, just kana), making the same move act differently with Ghost-types.

Gummy March 2nd, 2008 2:49 PM

So... has anyone even started their fic yet? I have ideas but nothing written.

Astinus March 2nd, 2008 2:54 PM

I have the first few sentences written in my mind, and a general idea of what the fic is. Haven't written anything actually, since from Thursday afternoon until Monday night I don't write.

But I do have to have the fic finished by the twenty-fifth, since it's a birthday present for someone.

Gummy March 2nd, 2008 2:59 PM

A fic about rain as a present? Cheap That's real nice Hanako. :P

Astinus March 2nd, 2008 3:18 PM

xP I'm not about to ship off a present to another country. Besides, it's what my group of friends do: we write stories or draw pictures for presents since that's where our talents are. And it means a lot more than that present that you can buy at a store.

And yeah...some of us live in different countries. So it's difficult. xP

Dunsparce March 2nd, 2008 3:31 PM

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Originally Posted by Oni Raichu (Post 3378162)
For one-shots or short stories, this would be a good idea, say, someone comes up with a theme, like, 'Articuno', and we'd all have to write a shrt story fo some sort on Articuno.

So, I'm all for it.

I already have had a comedy Idea for an Articuno fic I came up with years ago.

Articuno is all schizo and emo after loosing his home to Blaine, and thus many misadventures insue, trying hard to get Blaine off without loosing to his Magcargo (That usually 1HKOs it with Fire and Rock Atatcks). I got the idea thouroughly developed, but I've never summed up the courage to actually write it >.>;

Dunsparce March 2nd, 2008 3:45 PM

What's the most objectionable thing you plan to add to your story (if you haven't done so already)?

Spoiler:
Having one of my characters having a non-platonic feelings for their now-deceased sibling


If adds more drama, IMO.

Percy Thrillington March 2nd, 2008 5:26 PM

So what are we looking for Hanako, one thousand words? Five hundred words? Whatever you feel like?

Astinus March 2nd, 2008 5:44 PM

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Originally Posted by From the official rules
5.) No word limit. The fanfics are not being judged, so go crazy writing them.

Go crazy means...well, write as much as you want. Since these fics aren't being judged, I figured that there was no point in placing a word cap.

Unforgettable March 2nd, 2008 5:48 PM

I started writing mine... ish... It will change like 20 million times before the end of the month....

And I personally would LOVE to get a fan fic or fan art for a birthday present! =] Things like that mean so much more than store bought things I think.

Astinus March 2nd, 2008 6:22 PM

Agreed one hundred percent on the fic/picture as present thing, Yuna! ^^ I love the present I got from my friend when she used her fic characters to wish me a happy birthday two years ago.

And don't worry, Dogar The Brave. This challenge is a monthly thing, so even if you can't write a fic this month for this prompt, there will be many other chances in the future.

I should forget about thinking about writing tonight. I just got me some loverly Sim-eyes. <3

TurtleKing March 2nd, 2008 7:08 PM

Ah. The prompt: Rain. I may give it a go. I need some practice.

Bay March 2nd, 2008 7:16 PM

Yeah, like everyone else said, this fic challenge thing sounds found.

Hm...rain? Dang it, I got one fic idea I can use but it'll be a big spoiler for "Nothing, Everything" (thought up of a few backstory ideas to use...XD)

Not sure if I'll make it this month as I'll be very busy this month. Hope to try for one prompt though. ^^

Unforgettable March 2nd, 2008 8:42 PM

So I just know this fic is NOT going to be one of my best works. =/ But tis cool. It happens. I've very out of practice, I haven't wrote it a long LONG time...

Jezebel March 3rd, 2008 12:31 PM

I have a couple of ideas I'm playing around with but who knows if it'll turn out for the best.

IceDragon2439 March 3rd, 2008 12:42 PM

I have my idea ready, just haven't started because I need to finsih schoolwork. [My mom's going crazy over it =(] I should have it finished before the month is over. Anyways, I just can't wait to see what others come up with =).

Phanima March 3rd, 2008 2:36 PM

This does look interesting. *w*

I think I'd definitely be able to join, seeing as how I wrote it up and finished it yesterday after I read through everything, my only problem is waiting til the month's over. x3

But I guess I should go over it a few million times just to make sure its as good as it can be. -nods-

Astinus March 3rd, 2008 3:30 PM

You can actually post it at any time. ^^; The deadline is just when all fics have to be in by. No later. Sooner? Oh yes.

So go ahead and post it now. I won't mind.

Dunsparce March 3rd, 2008 3:37 PM

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Originally Posted by Dunsparce (Post 3389997)
I already have had a comedy Idea for an Articuno fic I came up with years ago.

Articuno is all schizo and emo after loosing his home to Blaine, and thus many misadventures insue, trying hard to get Blaine off without loosing to his Magcargo (That usually 1HKOs it with Fire and Rock Atatcks). I got the idea thouroughly developed, but I've never summed up the courage to actually write it >.>;

Is my idea really that bad? O.o;

Astinus March 3rd, 2008 3:44 PM

It's not that your idea is bad, Dunsparce. It's just that for the challenge, we're staying away from Pokemon-specific prompts. So there won't be any prompts for say "Articuno" because it would really limit the writers. They would have to involve an Articuno some way. The way it is now, though, the writers can just ease in "rain" somehow, and have free reign (pun not intended) over the rest of the fic, as long as it's Pokemon-related somehow.

So you can write your fic if you want. It just wouldn't be for the challenge.

Yamato-san March 3rd, 2008 4:38 PM

hey, I wrote up a little rant in the contest thread which nobody replied to.

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Originally Posted by Yamato-san (Post 3379205)
I agree, having the guideline be to simply include a certain Pokemon doesn't really do much. In the SPPF contest which I wrote for, the condition was to feature a battle with a Cacnea against a Sandshrew, as well as an evolution (which doesn't necessarily have to be either of the aforementioned battling Pokemon). Not only did I lose that, but I didn't even get in the top ****in' three!!! While I couldn't say the one-shot I wrote was perfect, especially that early draft (incidentally, this is the very same one-shot that eventually evolved into my hentai), I at least stuck close to the subject matter at hand.

My story was a romance taking place in a desert, with a Cacnea as the main character's Pokemon. Early on, he battles against a cheeky kid with a Sandshrew, and ends up losing when it evolves into a Sandslash mid-battle (and said battle was kind of important). You know what the first-place winner was? Some story about a Fakemon that escapes human captivity and evolves in the process (or something like that), and where was the battle between a Cacnea and a Sandshrew? Briefly mentioned to be occurring in the background, that's where. Seriously, how the bloody hell do I lose against a writer who just passes most of the given subject off into a side-note? [cough] But my personal venting aside, a writing contest should actually expect the writers to heavily involve a certain subject in there story, not just plop it into the background and be done with it. If writers can't really show how they can deal with certain restrictions, a particular element they're required to involve in their work, then what's the damn point? You may as well just have a typical "who can write the best one-shot?" and not even bother with specific themes.

Which I guess leads to my new question: Have you ever been sorely dissatisfied over the results of a contest, award nominations, etc.?

And I'd love to hear comments on my past situation if you've got any. ^^'

Scarlet Weather March 3rd, 2008 4:57 PM

Most objectionable thing I'm adding....

Spoiler:
Well, let me put it this way. Pokephilia will show up. It will involve a certain massage lady in a certain town in a certain region who refers to Pokemon as "sweetie". It will be funny. But other than that, most of the really objectionable stuff are things the villain(s) will do. Gale has lax morals, but not enough to kill someone or something like that, and he's really too self-centered to spend much time developing a serious romantic relationship with anyone, so the chances of something off-color springing from that are virtually nil. Well... if you really want objectionable material from a protagonist, I suppose that my female lead could be maneuvered into a difficult situation, but that remains to be seen.


Incidentally, I have a question for you all:

What is the favorite thing you've ever had one of your characters say?

Seriously, I like coming up with things for my characters to throw around, and Gale's cheeky personality is a perfect way for me to interject funky comments. My personal favorite quote so far is his little throwaway "I won't go so easy on ya next time!" It's not so much what's being said as the fact that it basically sums up Gale's overconfidence in a nutshell.

Dunsparce March 3rd, 2008 4:59 PM

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Originally Posted by Yamato-san (Post 3392964)
Have you ever been sorely dissatisfied over the results of a contest, award nominations, etc.?

Yes. I've my fic was never even mentioned on either SPPf, Pokecommunity, and this obscure(yet decently populated) Pokemon forum.

I've never been able to lure people in. >.<;

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Originally Posted by ACC-M (Post 3393037)
What is the favorite thing you've ever had one of your characters say?

Skarmory's line that describes his personality perfectly:

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Originally Posted by Coherence, Chapter 4
"You can talk to me?" Lee said, surprised. How was this Skarmory able to communicate with him when it had taken him so very long to understand Ziggy?

"Yes, indeed I can. It's a side-effect of being so incredibly intelligent," Skarmory said airily. Ziggy scoffed quietly behind Lee.


Grovyle42(Griff8416) March 3rd, 2008 5:13 PM

What is the favorite thing you've ever had one of your characters say?

There were a few 'Corphishisms' that I'm proud of, but some others I look back on and think "What was I thinking?"

I also liked Treecko's reply to Jeff's "What kind of friend would I be if I let you move in this condition?" which was "A friend who knew who he was dealing with."

Astinus March 3rd, 2008 6:38 PM

Have you ever been sorely dissatisfied over the results of a contest, award nominations, etc.?
I haven't been dissatisfied with the results of a contest, but I was in the way that a contest was run. The person in charge randomly decided a week before the deadline to put a page limit on the entries after participants wrote stories that were longer than the cap.

But I do agree that the way that contest you entered, Yamato-san, wasn't fair in picking the winner. If the contest is supposed to be the main part of the story, than a fic where the battle is just a brief mention shouldn't have won.

What is the favorite thing you've ever had one of your characters say?
Ah, this came about from writing during class:

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"Professor Elm said north of Kanto, I think. We're going to have to fly there, or take a plane."
x3 Aden, you're wonderful.

But as for something that will actually survive a round of proof-reading? Ah, nothing has struck me yet. Except for a grown man popping out of a row of potatoes in a garden and yelling "Peek-a-boo!"

JX Valentine March 3rd, 2008 10:33 PM

Thanks for the responses to my earlier post, guys. At least I know I'm not alone here. XD

Unfortunately, I still don't have any inspiration as to what to do yet. Maybe I should just take a break?

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Originally Posted by ACC-M (Post 3393037)
What is the favorite thing you've ever had one of your characters say?

Well, there was that one time when Viola thought this was a brilliant idea:

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Originally Posted by Midsummer Knights, Chapter Seven
"Well, ah..." Viola laughed nervously for a moment. "I-if you, um, if you put it that way, then..." Her eyes widened, and she pointed frantically to something over Orsino's shoulder. "Oh my God!"

Orsino, naturally, turned. His eyebrow quirked when he saw nothing but Viola's workshop behind him. With that, he turned back around to find the place where Viola stood just a moment ago completely devoid of a person. A sharp gasp and a grunt filtered into his ear from his side, and with that, he turned to see his nidoking holding Viola by the back of her coat collar so that her feet dangled several inches from the floor with the package just a few inches from her shadow.

Nothing like "Look! A distraction!" to provide comic relief.


Also on the list: Bill completely BSing a funeral (in the tone of Terry Pratchett).

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Originally Posted by Goldfish Funerals
"Dearly beloved," he said. "We have gathered here today to honor the life and death of, um…"

"Pudge," Rose said.

"Right." He nodded. "Pudge the magikarp. He was a good fish, very obedient, energetic, and kind." He paused for a dramatic emphasis. It seemed appropriate. "However, after a long and arduous battle with cancer, he now has gone to the Giant Fish Bowl In the Great Beyond."


And lastly, a recycled quote I keep wanting to use (but consistently ends up in crappy stories that don't make it to the public). It usually has to do with a reference to Gregor Samsa (in Kafka's The Metamorphosis), a comparison between him and Bill, and the comment that this in itself is incredibly bleak, to which Bill responds:

"Oh, no, it's okay. I've always wanted to be a fictional character."

Bay March 3rd, 2008 11:08 PM

What is the favorite thing you've ever had one of your characters say?

In "Nothing, Everything", there are a few quotes from the characters that I loved. Here's my favorite that I posted so far:

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Originally Posted by Nothing, Everything, Chapter Six

Bunny nodded and then grinned while her hand flew up towards the ceiling.

"Of course! It was the war between Hoenn and Sinnoh! The two regions went against each other because of their different perspectives of history." Bunny’s mind then got struck by those four words:

Different perspectives of history.


I just love the way I had portrayed Bunny in that scene. XD

There's one other quote I love, but that's not until in the fifteenth chapter which is not posted yet. :X

Phanima March 4th, 2008 2:11 AM

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Originally Posted by Hanako Tabris (Post 3392714)
You can actually post it at any time. ^^; The deadline is just when all fics have to be in by. No later. Sooner? Oh yes.

So go ahead and post it now. I won't mind.

Ooooh, that's good to know.

Although, incidently, I've gone over it a few times and decided to extend it a bit more, since I came up with this new awesome idea that would undoubtedly make it 10x better. xP

*shot'd for lack of modesty

Anywho, I should be able to finish it by this weekend, but just to clarify (I've read the rules ><) when I'm done, I just make a new thread and add "FFC" to the title, yeah?

Oh and another thing, can One Shots have multiple chapters or just a simple story?

Minos Yewman March 4th, 2008 3:22 AM

Is the current prompt 'rain'. Its just that's what everyone's saying and I want to know before I start writing.

P.S. When's the deadline?

Phanima March 4th, 2008 3:43 AM

Hanako-chan made it into a thread, see?

But yes, the prompt is rain and it's due at the end of this month. C:

Long time amirite? ><

Percy Thrillington March 4th, 2008 10:04 AM

I have mine finished too, Phanima. I'll just edit it repeatedly as I always do. How many people are taking part in this, does anyone know?

Dragonfree March 4th, 2008 11:00 AM

Have you ever been sorely dissatisfied over the results of a contest, award nominations, etc.?
My ego has, plenty of times (most of all, I think, when The Fall of a Leader didn't win anything at the last TPM Silver Pencils after a bunch of nominations that got my hopes up too much). My more sensible mind, not particularly. Unless you count the time at the Serebii.net forums where my fic won about twenty awards it didn't deserve and everybody proceeded to ***** about how much they hate the popular authors who win everything, but I can't say it's really humanly possible to feel genuinely sore about that.

What is the favorite thing you've ever had one of your characters say?
Ooh. Lots of them. From The Quest for the Legends, it's probably this one:

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“My father always used to say that there were two reasons you should make each and every one of your birthdays the best party you’ve ever had,” he said gleefully while cutting a slice for Alan, May and finally himself. “One: It might always be your last birthday, and in fact that becomes likelier every year, so it’s good always to assume it is. Two: It’s well worth celebrating that you were wrong about it last year.” [...] “So well, cheers to Mark for not having dropped dead yet!” he said, raising his glass of milk.
From chapter 32 of The Quest for the Legends, quoting Sparky. Or maybe this one:

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“Oh f… crap,” Chaletwo groaned.
From chapter 34. Or maybe this one:

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Well, Mount Fever isn’t that far away, is it? Mark argued. It would be easy to reach the roots of the mountain before that time. We deserve to take it easy for a little while, right?

“Well, sure, you do,” Chaletwo replied coldly. “I was just thinking, you know, since some human idiot got the brilliant idea of building a town in the middle of the crater of a dormant volcano and Volcaryu’s release would cause it to erupt…” Mark’s stomach churned uncomfortably at this point. “Well, I figured that, you know, you wouldn’t want all those people to get fried. Sorry I got that impression. I’ll leave you to your happy fun battle now.”
Chapter 36. A lot of readers like this one.

Of course, The Fall of a Leader has a lot more quotes I love, and some more serious ones:

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Death was a fact of life. Death was an ultimate truth. Death was not to be feared, because you inflicted it on others. Because they feared it too. Because you, too, would one day die, just like the prey that struggled with shining, begging eyes against your deadly scythe.
This is probably my favorite paragraph I've ever written. So it's not actually a line of spoken dialogue, but it is from Shadowdart's POV and shows his thoughts.

From Morphic, it's this:

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“Making sense?” the phone shouted at him. “She was making exactly no sense at all! You didn’t even say half of the stuff we talked about! And for Christ’s sake – well, not his, specifically, but you know what I mean – babbling on about how I have weird ideas when I’m drunk? What the ****?”
The speaker is Dave, one of my favorite characters I've written. And this here is one of my favorite scenes:

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“I don’t get it,” she muttered.

“What?”

“Religion.”

“That’s because unlike those nutsos you’ve got some sense in your head.”

“My parents believe in God too.”

Dave pretended not to have heard her for a few seconds. She watched a fly sit down on the back of his neck. If she slashed at it she could accidentally cut his head off. Haha. Oops.

But she liked him, so she didn’t actually do it. And even if she hadn’t liked him, there would have been complications. Too obvious who did it. No good Pokémorph sympathizers left to defend her in court. Somebody would point out her mental age of sixteen and say she was responsible for her actions. Everybody else would agree because they wanted to get rid of her. ‘That fly was getting on my nerves’ had never worked well for her. Jail. Tiny cell with stale air. Nothing decent to eat. It just wouldn’t pay.
Can't go wrong with Mia the sociopathic Scyther Pokémorph and Dave together in a car.

Unforgettable March 4th, 2008 5:32 PM

Hokay, so time is drawing near!! Ok, so we still have a while... but you know XD And I totally am sad that the post got deleted. =[ Tis ok.
I am having such a hard time writing this one. I have my one I don't like as a back up, but I don't want to use it unless I have to, I'm just not too happy with it. =/

Hanabanako you changed your name!!! *gasp*

Incinermyn March 14th, 2008 2:15 PM

Hmm... I'm stuck again...

I've had a bit of time on my hands lately and have been working on Feral Twilight a lot, and then I find myself going back to the prologue of my fic. The thing that bugs me about it is the little fact that I can't decide between two of them...

Prologue 1: I have a scene involving the anatgonists of my fic Cleopatra Drake and one of her minions Nathan Kyles. The scenario involves them meeting one winter's night on the balcony of Cleo's penthouse. In the fic, she's a really rich woman who will do anything to gain immortality as promised to her in a dream by a legendary wolf demon embodying fear that was sealed away centuries ago. In order to release the demon from his prison, she had Nathan go on an expedition into the depths of an abyss in the middle of my fake region of Ronac to retrieve an item known as The Nostalgia Coffer, in which is said to lie another world where dreams, fantasies, and memories are given life. The scene involves Nathan as he gives her the item. And that it...

Prologue 2: I have a scene involving a younger version of my region's leading Pokemon Professor, Dr. Felicia Barnes, as she and her mentor watch as a satanic beast is summoned to destroy the creature she created over the course of several years.

Both have a little bit to do with my fic's plot, but the second deals with some more immediate stuff.

bobandbill March 15th, 2008 1:28 AM

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Originally Posted by Skunter (Post 3401681)
Hmm... I'm stuck again...

I've had a bit of time on my hands lately and have been working on Feral Twilight a lot, and then I find myself going back to the prologue of my fic. The thing that bugs me about it is the little fact that I can't decide between two of them...

Prologue 1: I have a scene involving the anatgonists of my fic Cleopatra Drake and one of her minions Nathan Kyles. The scenario involves them meeting one winter's night on the balcony of Cleo's penthouse. In the fic, she's a really rich woman who will do anything to gain immortality as promised to her in a dream by a legendary wolf demon embodying fear that was sealed away centuries ago. In order to release the demon from his prison, she had Nathan go on an expedition into the depths of an abyss in the middle of my fake region of Ronac to retrieve an item known as The Nostalgia Coffer, in which is said to lie another world where dreams, fantasies, and memories are given life. The scene involves Nathan as he gives her the item. And that it...

Prologue 2: I have a scene involving a younger version of my region's leading Pokemon Professor, Dr. Felicia Barnes, as she and her mentor watch as a satanic beast is summoned to destroy the creature she created over the course of several years.

Both have a little bit to do with my fic's plot, but the second deals with some more immediate stuff.

Hmm, any possibility of doing both? They sound like different scenes, so why not have the two in a long-er prologue?

If you have to choose... well, it depends - which is more important for the fic - the one that gives immediate stuff, or the longer term plot-developing? If the immediate stuff can be introduced in the first or second chapter and won't distrube the pace, go for the first one, otherwise, slowing introduce the ist prologue as the story goes on.

Also, which one happens first, if they don't ahppen at roughly the same time? If one is, say, a few years or months before, etc, have that as the beginning, as otherwise you'd have to introduce a past event later on, and that would be diffficult to do without distrubing the plot and pace...

Hope I helped...

Incinermyn March 16th, 2008 3:01 PM

Kind of helped. Some minor parts of the first I could merge with the second and give it a little more depth and mystery. Thanks, bobandbill!

txteclipse March 16th, 2008 8:52 PM

I have an interesting conundrum. A person who's fic I'm reading has just begun a shipping between the main human character and the main pokemon character. I can't say I'm surprised, as there have been elusions to this for a while now. However, it still kind of bothers me, as I don't really like the idea of a pokemon/human relationship. I know it's not my story and etc., but I have certain life experiences that would cause me to discourage such a plot element (how's that for not going into details?).

I guess what I'm asking is "what should I do?" Should I tell the writer that they should really think about it before they do this, tell them right out not to, or simply let them take their own course and stop reading if it becomes too much of a problem for me? It would be hard to do the last part, as I really like their fic otherwise and have been reading/critiquing it for a long time, as they have been doing with mine. As a result, it would be really awkward to simply drop off the face of the earth with regards to responding to their fic. Anyone have suggestions or knowledge with any of this type of thing?

JX Valentine March 16th, 2008 9:15 PM

The best you can do when it comes to that sort of thing, txteclipse, is probably to just tell them that you don't feel comfortable with it or that it won't work for reasons X, Y, Z. Also, if you've been a regular reviewer up until then, tell them politely that it's not your cup of tea, that you're sorry, and that you can't read on. (It may make you seem like a bit of a jerk towards them at first, but if you do it by stating that it's based on personal preference, they might take it better than you simply disappearing on them.) Unfortunately, you can't outright tell a writer not to follow a certain plot -- just that it may not work (or that the writer will most likely have difficulties with it) for specific reasons -- because in some cases, the writer has already had the plot planned out for chapters in advance or had originally meant to go down a specific path (such as a cross-species ship) from the beginning (and the reviewer can't write a story for an author).

Sorry if that doesn't help much.

bobandbill March 16th, 2008 9:42 PM

At least voice your dislike towards it, but don't make them change the story just for you. maybe take the discussion up in PM's if need be.
If it really is too much for you (ie you feel too uncomfortable reading it), then tell them that you are dropping out for reasons you expressed, so they understand why. Otherwise the author may feel discouraged about your disappearence and may abandon your fic. If you can stick it out however, there may be other parts that you can read and enjoy that don't include perhaps, but again it does depend on the story itself.

Did the author warn of it occuring later on at the beginning of the fic?

txteclipse March 16th, 2008 9:56 PM

No warning whatsoever, except the elusions I mentioned earlier. The two characters had a kind of draw to each other, and I suspected he (the writer) might take the fic in that direction.

It's funny, because I kept telling myself throughout the story that he wasn't doing what I thought he was doing. I credited it to an overactive imagination (a curse, at times), but now it seems my worries were not ungrounded.

He's still fairly early on in the situation writing-wise, but the fic is definitely leaning that way. I messaged him a bit ago, basically saying that I was uncomfortable with where he was taking things. I also told him that he should at least be careful with what he's writing, but I didn't press the matter. It's basically up to him to decide what to write, I suppose, and I have to live with that fact.

It's just that I've seen some of the things he's getting into cause some serious problems. That sounds intense, and I didn't actually say that to him, but I've seen it happen. In all honesty I'm kind of worried about him more than anything, because like I said I've had some experiences with this stuff that casts it in a rather dark shade for me. It's like watching someone reach for a stovetop that you know is hot, but they think is cold and you worry that they'll take your warning as an insult to their intelligence.

EDIT: v It did help. Thanks muchly.

bobandbill March 16th, 2008 10:09 PM

Hmm... well, consider the amount of stories that have PokemonxPerson relationships (which personally is too... weird for me as well) stories that are around... I wouldn't worry about the person who's writing this him/herself, as more than likely if they're fine in actually writing this stuff, then they shouldn't really go into any 'serious' problems. A word of warning should be fine, but don't press the issue, and maybe hold it of for later if it does delve deeper into that sort of stuff (which it sounds like that it is...)

I'd say keep reading for now - if it does get worse, then state that as you told him/her, this sort of story is no longer for you and leave on good terms with the author. Besides, if you have had 'issues' with that sort of thing, than there's no blaming you for your decision to stop reading. The thing is, the writer as well should be aware that such stories are bound to put people off, and understand that.

Unless the fic hadn't been pre-planned to go in that direction, the author probably should have mentioned that in the beginning however.

Hope I helped...

Dragonfree March 19th, 2008 4:28 PM

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It's just that I've seen some of the things he's getting into cause some serious problems. That sounds intense, and I didn't actually say that to him, but I've seen it happen. In all honesty I'm kind of worried about him more than anything, because like I said I've had some experiences with this stuff that casts it in a rather dark shade for me. It's like watching someone reach for a stovetop that you know is hot, but they think is cold and you worry that they'll take your warning as an insult to their intelligence.
Wait, what? The way I understood your initial post, Pokémon/human relationships were a personal squick of yours and you yourself would have a difficult time reading it, but now you're sounding more like it's flat-out dangerous for the writer, and here I really don't understand how. Losing readers? No writer should honestly care about that, and if they're writing Pokémon/human relationships at all it's clear that they don't care. Are you implying that Pokémon/human relationships necessarily somehow make the story into something the writer doesn't want to write even if they were planning the relationship all along? Sounds pretty absurd to me, really. o_O

So unless you can elaborate on that and come up with some very good arguments for Pokémon/human relationships necessarily ruining a story for the author himself, you should definitely not tell them not to write it, politely or otherwise. Imagining myself as the author in the situation, I know all you would accomplish would be ticking me off and making sure I won't miss you when you stop reading as I would conclude you were an idiot all along. Your personal preference has absolutely no right to dictate what the author can and can't write, and Pokémon/human relationships aren't something people casually include for the heck of it; it seems pretty clear that the author had been carefully planning this all along, especially with the allusions you mentioned, and probably intended for this to be a big point in the story. I mean, picture telling Tolkien as he is halfway through writing Lord of the Rings that the story is great but he should make it happen in the real world and not involve any rings. When you read a story, you have to do it on the author's terms. When you criticize it, you have to be doing it with the aim to help the author tell the story he wanted to tell, not the story you want to read.

So. You can give simple constructive criticism on it, as long as there is something to criticize. Is the relationship too sudden or is there no good buildup of chemistry between the characters? (Sounds unlikely in this case, what with all the 'allusions' you speak of.) Is the relationship realistic in the situation? Do the characters accept it too easily? But don't just strive to find something wrong with it to disguise your personal taste as constructive criticism, and pretty much no matter how you criticize it, the relationship itself sounds like the author intended it to be a big point as I said before; you'd really only be giving advice on how to make the relationship work out better in the story and not encouraging the writer to remove the relationship. Again, you really shouldn't encourage the writer to remove the relationship if the story is obviously built around that relationship. You can encourage the removal of minor things that don't undermine the point of the story, but chances are this is not one of those things.

This is the situation where "Don't like it, don't read it" actually does apply. Just like you can't force the author to write something other than the story they want to tell, the author can't force you to read a story you don't want to read. Just tell them that you can't read the story anymore because the subject makes you uncomfortable. Or, if you're willing to tolerate it for the elements you like about the story, just read on and ignore it. Tell the author you happen to be uncomfortable with it if you wish, but don't try to dictate what their story should be about. Of course the author probably should have included a warning with such a controversial subject in the story, but it doesn't change that your personal preference can't tell an author what kind of story they should write.

Taylor5 March 19th, 2008 4:29 PM

i'm writing a fanfiction and I don't know how to post it. can some one help me here. just PM me if you have anything to say about it.

JX Valentine March 19th, 2008 4:39 PM

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Originally Posted by Taylor5 (Post 3414251)
i'm writing a fanfiction and I don't know how to post it. can some one help me here. just PM me if you have anything to say about it.

Mmm. What exactly are you having difficulties with? Is it a formatting problem or a "I don't know if I should" sort of problem? If it's the former, just remember to double space between paragraphs (the way you see Dragonfree do so in the post above yours), and the other formatting shortcuts should be above the text area. If it's the latter, then I'd say find a willing beta reader, or someone (who you don't know personally -- so no family members, for example) who can read over your story to iron out the grammar problems and little details, first to be absolutely sure that it's quality work.

Taylor5 March 19th, 2008 4:43 PM

I will do that. but really I just wanted to know how to post my fan fic.

Mike Ukiuki March 19th, 2008 4:56 PM

Yah Taylor I will help you with your spaces and stuff. ( good story bad way to write )

Astinus March 19th, 2008 6:45 PM

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but really I just wanted to know how to post my fan fic.
In the main section of Pokemon Fanfiction, there is a button that looks close to the "Post Reply" button, but it says "Post New Thread". Hit that, and you should be taken to a screen that looks like the Reply screen (where you type when you posted).

Type a title into the title box above the main typing area. Place your fic in the main typing area. Scroll down a bit past the rows of smilies to the "Submit New Thread" button and click that.

There's your thread.

txteclipse March 20th, 2008 11:03 PM

Dragonfree, I think I'll just give you the sparknotes of what I said to this author to avoid a long and drawn out discussion of what I should and shouldn't do. I basically said
a) I was personally uncomfortable with the subject matter,
b) Pokemon/human relationships is sketchy territory,
c) to make sure he wants to take his fic in that direction,
and d) that, regardless of everything else, shipping usually merits a higher rating.
In my opinion, that was pretty honest. I was explaining my personal discomfort with the subject matter, as well as notifying him that yes, this is controversial stuff, and he should be sure he's ready for what that implies.

Now for his response. He basically said that he didn't intend his fic to be a shipping story, and that the situation was just something he figured the two characters would find themselves in eventually from having been together for so long. I can see that as something that would probably typically happen given the situation: it was more of a passing "what if" than a definitive acceleration in the relationship.

Sydian March 21st, 2008 11:35 AM

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Originally Posted by oni flygon (Post 1634)
hmm...I made a new fanfic... a short Pokemon Special, Shipping, fanfic... it's called "Under the night sky" heh... I can't think of a better titile XD

btw, Congrats on your Modship ^^NICK^^

A Pokemon Special fic? Those interest me the most...I'll be sure to read.

Gummy March 23rd, 2008 4:27 PM

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Originally Posted by SilverSmeargleSplatter (Post 3418914)
A Pokemon Special fic? Those interest me the most...I'll be sure to read.

You do know you quoted a message from five years ago, right? XD

EDIT: 700th post btw.

Astinus March 23rd, 2008 5:14 PM

Hoh my gods, Silver. XD That's just...one of the more awesome thing I've seen today that didn't involve my Sims. XDXDXD

oni flygon hasn't written anything in a while, but I did find some of his old stories.

The Professor
What Are Friends For?
Smitten
Onii-chan
Valentine's Day
The Tree Across The Meadow
City of Blinding Lights
Love's Lost
Call of Dragons
Confessing and Paths
Ties of Love and Friendship
Roommates
Some Things Never Change...
Under the Night Sky
Friday

o.o There we go. All of oni's Special fics. If I find any more, I'll let you know. :D

TurtleKing March 23rd, 2008 5:19 PM

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Originally Posted by SilverSmeargleSplatter (Post 3418914)
A Pokemon Special fic? Those interest me the most...I'll be sure to read.

-Pokes my fic and pokes you-

Pokemon Special Fic in my sig, kid! :)

Percy Thrillington March 25th, 2008 8:49 PM

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*Ding Dong* went the door bell as I rushed down the stairs in my pokegear. It was Travis and we walked out the door on our very first pokemon adventure! We ran till we reached the forest but I couldn't find my way out so I used my pokenav to look but just then team melancholy appeared and flew off with my Chickerita. "NOOOOO!" said Jerry as we ran after them but it was too late. We decided to make camp. I pulled out my sleeping bag and slept well. That morning charmander and cyndiquil and Mark cooked some stuff for breakfast and it tasted good. We ran the 100 meters back home and found a note saying my parents were kidnapped by team melacnholy. I ran after then but saw a helecopter with a yellow "M" on it and started to cry.

*one week of overly encouraging reviews later*

I needed to get Chickerita back so I asked my uncle if we could use his hot air balloon and he said yes so we all climed aboard. "Where we gonna find team malehghaoly's hid out?" said Brock. I"dunno but I think it's over by the mountains" we flew to the mountains and there was a big M carved in stone and so we went inside and June was captured by the guards. "GO POLIWAG!" and I threw out my pokeball. Venusaur used solar beam and June was set free and then we found Chickerita being held in some machine. We turned the machine off the the lever was stuck and then Chickerita was stuck until Zapdos burst through the ceiling and set chickerita free. It said we needed to follow it and so we got in the balloon and followed Zapdos to Pokemon Island

*Astinus' stamp of approval*

So on pokemon Isle people aren't allowed to I was turned into a pokemon and was following a meowth around until we came to a cave.

*random end with a cliffhanger and no intention of a follow up, instead I begin an entirely new story*
Why did I just post that? Because I have a question for you people. How do you react to those types of stories where the author is obviously trying to tell a story? These are the types of stories that are in the middle between SPAM and quality work. So do you correct the mistakes or just quiz the author on why, say, Travis just appeared out of nowhere with no background story at all?

Just a question that was going through my head the last few days that I wanted to ask.

bobandbill March 25th, 2008 8:57 PM

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Originally Posted by Oni Raichu (Post 3434262)
Why did I just post that? Because I have a question for you people. How do you react to those types of stories where the author is obviously trying to tell a story? These are the types of stories that are in the middle between SPAM and quality work. So do you correct the mistakes or just quiz the author on why, say, Travis just appeared out of nowhere with no background story at all?

Just a question that was going through my head the last few days that I wanted to ask.

Well, it depends if that IS the case. If I can see their effort into writing a proper story, then I would dot he whole 'correct mistakes and offer advise' thing, but if I cannot see that at all, or very little, I would start to question the author more, and my review would be a tad nastier, so to speak.

Also depends on my mood, I suppose. Or if I have time to bother going every little thing...

JX Valentine March 26th, 2008 5:20 AM

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Originally Posted by Oni Raichu (Post 3434262)
Why did I just post that? Because I have a question for you people. How do you react to those types of stories where the author is obviously trying to tell a story? These are the types of stories that are in the middle between SPAM and quality work. So do you correct the mistakes or just quiz the author on why, say, Travis just appeared out of nowhere with no background story at all?

Personally, I feel that SPAM would be more along the lines of a two-line story that violates every rule of grammar it encounters or a story that very obviously violates the rules of a board, such as lemon fics or fics that heavily emphasize the concepts of violence, drugs, and sex without actually trying to be serious.

That said, if a story like this is posted, I know for certain that the writer is most likely a kid who needs a little guidance (assuming that the things like "Astinus' stamp of approval" is not actually part of the story). So, I'll give him concrit and a bit of patience if he was going to continue. Point out the errors, suggest ways to iron out the little details, and generally try not to be overly snarky because you know the kid honestly doesn't know.

However, as you've said at the end, he has no intention on continuing the story, so I think a review wouldn't really be necessary. Instead, I'd go with reviewing his most recent work. (The exception to this rule essentially lies in finished stories and one-shots, I feel, except where the don't-revive-threads rule is in effect.) After all, he might have a reason why he's not continuing other than boredom, so if he realizes that his older story was crap, there's really no point in reviewing his self-acknowledged crap, you know?

Sydian March 26th, 2008 7:57 AM

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Originally Posted by Gummy (Post 3426299)
You do know you quoted a message from five years ago, right? XD

EDIT: 700th post btw.


I did realize that. -hides- That's...bad. xD

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Hoh my gods, Silver. XD That's just...one of the more awesome thing I've seen today that didn't involve my Sims. XDXDXD
Why, thank you. O.o

Incinermyn March 26th, 2008 9:12 AM

Meh... I've kind of got a thing...well, two things I'm having a hard time making sense of in my upcoming fic Feral Twilight...and I was wondering if someone could give me some advice...

My first problem is that I've a few fakemon that that my main character Jay Christie is known to have from the beginning of the story, but two of them kind of look a little bit like two preexisting Pokemon. And these are them...

Skunter-http://i241.photobucket.com/albums/ff58/HuntsmanSkunk/Skunter.jpg
Lupudle-http://i241.photobucket.com/albums/ff58/HuntsmanSkunk/Lupudle2.jpg

To me, they seem to be kind of close to Skuntank and Mightyena, though really they not supposed to be like evos or anything like that. I was just wondering, though, if they're too close... Would anyone get confused if I used them? Really, I'd like to because their supposed to match a theme I gave my trainer using savage pokemon, which they're both supposed to be.

My second problem is somewhat related to my usage of Lupudle and another fakemon that's supposed to be the antithesis to its full evo, Metalupus. This creature's supposed to be one of two dragonite rank wolves who's evos are determined by whether their baby form loves or hates its trainer; Metalupus being the ultimate result of love and Canersia being the result of hatred. The thing I was wondering about is how I was planning to have Jay's Lupudle evolve into Metalupus during a battle against Canersia (who, in the fic, is manipulating the head of a crime syndicate using shadow Pokemon so that he can summon forth a demon that's supposedly able to create and control the shadows as a means to raze humans from existence) and whether or not that would be too cliche to have the wolf evolve then.

JX Valentine March 26th, 2008 9:57 AM

Reminds me of Plusle, Minun, and Pachirisu's relationship to Pikachu. XD

Seriously, though, it's okay. As long as your fakemon aren't essentially (insert Pokemon here) with a slightly different look, I really don't think anyone will notice. Most likely, you'll be working on describing them in the fanfiction, so you can assume that people's visualization skills will render the Pokemon further from the designs of those canon Pokemon than the mental image you have in your head of them, if that makes sense.

As to the evolution, it's something that I've seen many times in fanfiction, but personally, I really think it depends on the circumstances surrounding it. If that occurs at what is essentially the climax of the story, you can still pull it off because that does tend to heighten the drama of the moment.

Astinus March 26th, 2008 12:53 PM

I have a seal of approval? I honestly did not know, and now I realize that I've been kind of neglecting my mod duties in favor of...really happy Sims.

And I would never approve a story like that. Why? Because I'm a mean old b-witch without a care in the world, and no other color but black in my heart.

I would tell that person who wrote that story that they should improve, and at least know how to spell a Pokemon's name right. And to make paragraphs, and spell-check, and add more, and all these other random pieces of advice that I don't give anymore because I don't review.

And now I'm really confused. Seal of approval?

Oh, Skunter, your links...I can't click them. :< But yeah, if your fakemon fills a role that no canon Pokemon and fulfill, then you are all right.

JX Valentine March 26th, 2008 1:19 PM

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Originally Posted by Astinus (Post 3435954)
and now I realize that I've been kind of neglecting my mod duties in favor of...really happy Sims.

Ah, the Sims. The computer game that makes a pervert and a peeping tom out of all of us.

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And now I'm really confused. Seal of approval?
Oh, no, my dear. Stamp of approval. Stamp. It's something completely different. Really.

Seriously, maybe Oni was thinking of the old way I reviewed? Or someone else's current reviewing system? Or maybe the way the USDA reviews chickens and livestock?

Astinus March 26th, 2008 1:34 PM

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Originally Posted by Jax Malcolm (Post 3436014)
Ah, the Sims. The computer game that makes a pervert and a peeping tom out of all of us.

This is why I'm really glad that EAxis got with the times and realized that not everyone chases after the opposite. And with the quality of pictures I can take in the game...!

*shuts herself up*

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Oh, no, my dear. Stamp of approval. Stamp. It's something completely different. Really.
I reiterate: I'm in college, and I can't read.

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Seriously, maybe Oni was thinking of the old way I reviewed? Or someone else's current reviewing system? Or maybe the way the USDA reviews chickens and livestock?
And now I have the image of my smiling face on a gold sticker that says: "Approved by the gods of neutrality! Good quality fanfiction to feed your family!"

Seriously, Oni, what did you mean?

Bay March 26th, 2008 1:46 PM

Man, whenever I'm busy, this place gets busy. XD

On that post Oni Raichu did, too me I think the writer is putting some effort into his/her story. I remember doing my first story I probably had a thousand grammar mistakes. He/she has a gist of telling a story but not really the showing part yet and the pacing. Yeah, pretty much how I would do a review on that story is to tell him to work more on the emotions and to look over the story and fix the story (both on grammar and other things like emotions) up to his/he ability until he's ready to post.

And on Sims? Hadn't played too much of it because of school and work, but I saw my sister played that game and was addicted to it for quite some time. XD

Okay, now to get my lazy butt and revise Chapters 8 and 9 of "Nothing, Everything". XD

Percy Thrillington March 26th, 2008 8:28 PM

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Originally Posted by Astinus (Post 3435954)
I have a seal of approval? I honestly did not know, and now I realize that I've been kind of neglecting my mod duties in favor of...really happy Sims.

And I would never approve a story like that. Why? Because I'm a mean old b-witch without a care in the world, and no other color but black in my heart.

I would tell that person who wrote that story that they should improve, and at least know how to spell a Pokemon's name right. And to make paragraphs, and spell-check, and add more, and all these other random pieces of advice that I don't give anymore because I don't review.

And now I'm really confused. Seal of approval?

Oh, Skunter, your links...I can't click them. :< But yeah, if your fakemon fills a role that no canon Pokemon and fulfill, then you are all right.

I was stuck on the next sentence and I had already done one week later of n00b reviews, so I just saw your username as I was scrolling down and I was reading through one of Johto101's fan fics, which reminded me of the way Jax (as she, herself, guessed) used to do that yoke of approval on fics on PFU. I wrote it down, unaware of the controversy it would cause.

Sydian March 27th, 2008 7:30 AM

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o.o There we go. All of oni's Special fics. If I find any more, I'll let you know.
Thanks...I'm gonna read Friday...since it's the only one my stupid school isn't blocking. X.x

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( good story bad way to write )
Heh heh. ;D

Oh yeah, I'm having some personal problems and won't be able to post chapter three of Just A Brother for a while...my thread won't be closed for...need say, neglect? xD The only time I've had to get on here is at school, and it blocks my own story...so...nyah. X.x And mah story's going good so far...I can't wait to get everything up...and written...haven't had time to write, either. And I've had writer's block.

JX Valentine March 27th, 2008 9:06 AM

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Originally Posted by SilverSmeargleSplatter (Post 3438429)
Oh yeah, I'm having some personal problems

Hope everything clears up soon. O_o It's okay. Sometimes, we all need a break from the computer to take care of things.

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my thread won't be closed for...need say, neglect? xD
I let my stories idle for a few months too, so I think you can get away with it. XD

Astinus March 27th, 2008 9:32 AM

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Oh yeah, I'm having some personal problems and won't be able to post chapter three of Just A Brother for a while...my thread won't be closed for...need say, neglect?
If you don't post every three days, your thread gets closed. I've just been lazy and haven't gotten around to closing threads yet.

So just as a note, people: If you haven't updated your fic yet, do so. Otherwise, your thread gets closed.

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I wrote it down, unaware of the controversy it would cause.
I love the fact that since I don't use emoticons in my posts that much, no one knows if I'm being serious or not.

JX Valentine March 27th, 2008 9:35 AM

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Originally Posted by Astinus (Post 3438687)
If you don't post every three days, your thread gets closed. I've just been lazy and haven't gotten around to closing threads yet.

Oh yeah. I forgot that you make an exception with me because I'm your lover.

I mean...

Astinus March 27th, 2008 9:42 AM

I just choked on some blueberry nuggets.

Right, aren't we supposed to be discussing fanfiction?

I'll start: I was going to write something today, but I left my pencil in my other class. Now I can't write anything, so I'm going to skip my math class and organize my pr0ny pictures of my Sims.

BREAKINGBEN March 27th, 2008 10:02 AM

Heh, uhm... here's a weird question but, How do you type Ho-oh's cry? I need it for the first chapter of my fic >.<.

Astinus March 27th, 2008 10:11 AM

Like so: CAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I normally just write that "Ho-Oh screeched/cawed/cried". There's no need to actually write the sound that it makes. It's like a few good paragraphs of Pikachu talking in "Pika pika chu pi ka!" I just say that Pikachu chattered, and just kind of leave it at that.

BREAKINGBEN March 27th, 2008 10:13 AM

Well, I don't really want to give it away that it IS Ho-oh.. I want people to guess at it :).

JX Valentine March 27th, 2008 10:16 AM

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Originally Posted by BREAKINGBEN (Post 3438803)
Well, I don't really want to give it away that it IS Ho-oh.. I want people to guess at it :).

You can still go with what Astinus suggested, simply replacing the word "Ho-oh" with either a physical description ("a rainbow-colored bird screeched" or even just "a bird screeched") or calling it "fierce but melodious" -- or something along those lines. I would suggest playing the cry over and over again and trying to describe what you hear.

BREAKINGBEN March 27th, 2008 10:17 AM

Ok, I guess I'll just go with a description.

Gummy March 27th, 2008 12:14 PM

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If you don't post every three days, your thread gets closed. I've just been lazy and haven't gotten around to closing threads yet.

So just as a note, people: If you haven't updated your fic yet, do so. Otherwise, your thread gets closed.
Wait, you are joking here, right? What if there are no replies to a chapter and the next one can't be finished in three days?

bobandbill March 27th, 2008 12:16 PM

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Originally Posted by Gummy (Post 3439175)
Wait, you are joking here, right? What if there are no replies to a chapter and the next one can't be finished in three days?

... he's joking. Would be odd otherwise...

Gummy March 27th, 2008 12:29 PM

Ah, thanks, bobandbill (btw, Astinus is a girl). Got a little scared there. I don't even start writing my next chapter until about four days after the previous one was posted/finished.

Unforgettable March 27th, 2008 1:20 PM

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Originally Posted by Astinus (Post 3436071)
This is why I'm really glad that EAxis got with the times and realized that not everyone chases after the opposite. And with the quality of pictures I can take in the game...!

*shuts herself up*


I reiterate: I'm in college, and I can't read.

I just died. And I'm happy for it too! Not every girl likes a guy, and not every guy likes a girl. I'm surprised that there weren't redneck hardcore church people complaining about it yet.

And it has been proven, college makes you ability to read go down. And the ability to spell also. XD

JX Valentine March 27th, 2008 1:22 PM

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Originally Posted by Gummy (Post 3439217)
Ah, thanks, bobandbill (btw, Astinus is a girl). Got a little scared there. I don't even start writing my next chapter until about four days after the previous one was posted/finished.

So, I'm guessing you also took my comment right after that post seriously in light of the one just before it? XD

(Although I might be serious. I may or may not know that Astinus is very good.)

Sydian March 27th, 2008 2:49 PM

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If you don't post every three days, your thread gets closed. I've just been lazy and haven't gotten around to closing threads yet.

So just as a note, people: If you haven't updated your fic yet, do so. Otherwise, your thread gets closed.
Yikes. I'll be on it tomorrow. X.x

My fic is going a million times better than my other...-throws it out- EVIL!


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