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My New Hack: Pokemon Dark Shadow
Pokemon Dark Shadow Version READ THIS: This is a revamp off of my failed hack: Pokemon Carnelian. It has the same region, same world map, it is not a new or different region. Hack of: Leaf GreenStory: Spoiler:
Pictures:http://img242%3C/a%3E%3C/font%3E%3C/font%3E%3Ca%20href=http://img242.imageshack.us/my.php?image=rte1.png%20target=_blank%3E%3Cfont%20size=4%3E%3Cfont%20color=Blue%3E.imageshack.us/img242%3C/font%3E%3C/font%3E%3Cfont%20size=4%3E%3Cfont%20color=Blue%3E/3897/rte1.th.png Spoiler:
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Graphical improvements: Gloomy graphics for that dark feeling. Videos: None yet. :shocked: Banners: Made by ageangel: http://img42.imageshack.us/img42/1400/noptob.jpg Code:
http://img194.imageshack.us/img194/8587/pokemondarkshadow.png Code:
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Me - Mapper, Palate Editor, Title Screen Changer, Text Editor, Tile Editor PM me if you want to join!! |
The Fakemon coud use a little work (like Body proportioning, and Shading). Who created it? The map is too much like Viridian Forest, and that was fairly unnatural, and the tiles aren't the greatest in the Worl, due to the green mountains.
Region Map looks a bit too clustered. try making it bigger with more routes (and longer ones!) Good luck! |
Marxville - that map IS viridian forest, all he has changes is paint-like green thing for the trees.
The world map looks a bit weird, it has a ton of empty space to the left hand side and the shape is rather... Odd. The story doesn't actually make sense, you missed out a line saying someone stole the Pokemon (aka. Him I think?) |
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Everything looks a bit too like the original(That looks like a celebi sprite)
But with some work i'm sure you could make it happen. Looks like a good hack though. :) Good luck :D |
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I also NEED someone to either give me a new world map or put on in themselves. I forgot to mention that I need someone to put in music, because my computer doesn't want to load Sappy. Quote:
Can someone give me their opinions already? I'm working on new scripts currently... This one doesn't seem to compile right: #dynamic 0x720ACE #org @start lock faceplayer msgbox @yesno 0x5 if 0x1 goto @yes if 0x0 goto @no release end #org @yesno =Would you like a berry? #org @yes giveitem 0x87 0x01 msgbox @yay release end #org @no msgbox @sorry boxset 0x6 end #org @yay =Thank you. #org @sorry =Well, that sucks. It's supposed to give you a berry for if your Pokemon is poisoned, a Pomeg berry. The banner's in guys!! Thanks Ageangel! |
This is quite bad, First your story needs a little fixing, The celebi evo doesn't look right at all i recommend hiring a spriter, Another thing about the celebi sprite it's green for the front and red for the back what? The map isn't orignal i recommend reading a tut on how to design one. The only thing i even see good about this hack is the banner ageagel made. But i could be wrong (I don't think i am) but i could be. Maybe your prove me wrong and when hack of the week,
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Wowy there.Aren't you a little rude?
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But they are right with what they are saying.Really,do you think the celebi evo sprite will be smashing? :\ You need to work more on the story. |
I Really dont like the Fakemon Legendary
It's Fat >3 Could you make it a little more Cuter? Well Nice Work *giggles* -Yasumin >3 |
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What is wrong with your sprite?Its too fat,and it looks like alien. :\
No cute,as Yasumin said before. The story....lets say its not exciting. |
http://img41.imageshack.us/img41/6287/cerebitop.png
I'm no spriter, but this is what is wrong: -Scratchy black lines -Missing any signs of a mouth -Its head is profile rather than just looking slightly left -Its arms look like fins -Its feet... look like random boxes you rushed in. -Its colouring is identical to Celebi's, and yet still looks uterly wrong (except the blue bits, which are wrongly places anyway) Suggest: Getting a spriter, searching for Celebi evolutions that have been previously made and asking the spriter if you can use it. Whats wrong with the story? -You STILL havent added in the line I told you was missing, so it doesn't make sense. -The story doesn't actually kick in until the final tournament, which I am going to assume is far into the game. Don't you think thats a bit boring? Suggest: Fix the above. Whats wrong with the maps? -Far too much long grass -The colour pallette just looks wrong, like how bright the grass is compared to the trees. -Fence has random gaps and so serves little purpose except to fill in space. -I see no bushes, and I like bushes. Suggest: Don't feel the need to make large maps, make them small if you want. On large maps make a defined path that twists around and make sure its not so repetitive. |
Yeah I Wish Someone would edit it? and the Story could you make it a little bit
Adventurous? xD *thinking seriously* No Offense huh okies? ^_^ Good luck on it. and also you said it's muscular right? it's look like not >3 You should make it a little cuter or scarier rightie? hihi Just some guss =3 *winks* -Yasumin >3 Your Sweet Friend ^_^ |
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Did you put the new sprite up? I suggest looking at Chesu's tutorials in the pixel art section and using them to create your legendary. I'm not trying to sound rude but it isn't that good. It still has the problems others have pointed out and looks flat. So I think you should redo it completely and use the tutorials.
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http://img34.imageshack.us/img34/2669/cerebitopedited.png Here's the new sprite.
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Why does Celebi have an evolved form anyway, and why is it a fighting type? There's no reason Celebi would evolve, and give a reason that it's a fighting type. |
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What might be an idea is to study poses of various pokemon, and do slight edits of those. To give yourself alittle more skill in positioning, angle and so forth for your Celebii evolution.
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I don't think machomuu is much of spriter. Neither am I, I can take something and kind of edit from there. |
Does anybody wanna sprite for me?
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To be honest, you're asking people for help, and their honest opinions about your work, and yet when they give it to you, you throw it back in their faces. There is no nice way about it, the celebi evo looks fat, and you do need a spriter, and before you say it, no, I don't sprite, I compose, that's my area. If you want help, maybe try taking constructive critisisms mate, otherwise you're getting nowhere here.
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http://img34.imageshack.us/img34/2669/cerebitopedited.png
This is the new sprite? You made it worse, First you managed to cut off a quater of it's body, You haven't done anything to it but cut off his body. How can you even do that? |
Mate, if you want my honest opinion, quit while your ahead, but if that option doesn't suite you, then try searching through other threads for people who are scripters, and then pm them or leave a message on their profile asking for a hand, you're more likely to get answers from them then.
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yo man what's with the fat celebi man
if you need a spriter i the man your looking for. although i'm a spriter for short time i've done some damn good sprites. +i'm not that good making pokemon sprites though. but i could do overworld sprites and battle trainer sprites :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D::D:D:D |
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Okay i have to say, this game is crappy, i'm sorry it just is.
and i have a list. first, even the description about the story bores me, i read the first sentence and i was like *yawn* the maps are pitiful, it's like square, square ,square, and for a little spice you add a rectangle. the sprite looks like a fat guy who had too many mcydees burgers. And e painted himself green. the world map looks like a raped french fry. here's some advicce, fail this hack like your first, take sometime to learn more scripting because if you failed that one sript you put up, you gonna have a hard time with ones that prove semi difficult. get reviews from your friends on storyline and map, and lastly get together with other people, because at this rate you'll never get a playable version |
I've just decided, through your criticism, a new Fakemon will not be added. The storyline will be scrapped, but I have to ask, WHAT IS WRONG WITH MY MAPS!!!
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2. Square? SQUARE? I don't see the squareness. 3. The sprite is no more. I have given up on the sprite and putting in Fakemon. 4. That is really bad language, and it is fine. =P 5. "Fail this hack like your first". I wanna smack you. |
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notbob, i hope ur still there as i haven't seen any news 4 a while. I have read through the whole thread and all i saw was criticizm, some that were constructive. People were telling u 2 give up, saying all the bad points about the hack, it would put anybody off. Sure the sprite is not the best, the overworld map is a bit unnatural, there are a few grammar points which need 2 b fixed in the story but a lot of those things don't really need 2 b said twice. People have been criticizing ur game wich u think is good, and u havent handled these peoples points well. U havent quite listened 2 wat they hav 2 say and u kept on going on about people complaining about ur sprite and that u wanted a spriter. Now im really new 2 the hacking world so i dont quite understand how all these things work but i think that if u had continued on with the game regardless of what people said, somebody could get motivated in making a sprite 4 u. I don't quite c y people don't like ur story other than that it sort of gets 2 the plot at the end and that the whole point is 2 catch this evolution of a legendary. As somebody said, legendary aren't meant to evolve. U could just change it into some really strong grass fighting dude which is what u wanted. I could design it if u wanted help as I'm a reasonably creative guy who has a little background with drawing, but i couldn't sprite it 4 u, as i've never done that b4. Change ur story a bit, add a few more information like starters, get more maps, show us screenshots, then people may start 2 pay attention 2 u. U shouldn't get caught up in the past with what uve done. Also what u think is good, others may not like. U have 2 bear this in mind when ur making something 4 other people 2 enjoy. I've got a lot more 2 say but i can only bother telling u if ur going 2 listen. So send me a message if ur continuing. I also feel sorry for u. |
Why did u make the new legendary a fatter celebi?
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