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Deja Vu November 1st, 2009 8:22 AM

Poke Polo
 
Hey all! Welcome to the thread of my new comic, Poke Polo! There's only a few episodes so far, but hang in there, I'll pump em out as fast as I can!


~Archive~
(Text is hyperlinked.)
1-The Beginning
2-Who's that Pokemon!
3-Battle Numero Uno
3½-Strange Occurances
4-Mr. Odep
5-Into the Lolli Lab! ~TBR~

TBR=To be released


EXCLUSIVE! Pokecommunity Fun Facts!
1.) Tono carries an Kabuto and Tona has an Omanite.
2.) The character's father works all day at a Farm Store in Azalea Town.

Credits

Kabutopzilla - Inspiration
Dragoon - Trainer OW's
Previous - Littleroot Map
Colton - Pyrotechnics
Majin Piccolo - Speech Bubbles

ScizorZ November 1st, 2009 10:45 AM

lol but that "hehe" guy mysteriously disappears in the next panel

Deja Vu November 1st, 2009 3:31 PM

Yeah lol, he was a reference to a guy in the comic Pogeymanz by Kabutopzilla.

ScizorZ November 1st, 2009 5:31 PM

the perv? lol. It's funny how this is a spoof of a spoof of all Pokemon Fan Comics

MechaTrickster November 1st, 2009 6:05 PM

This comic caught my attention in a few seconds im already a fan :D

Deja Vu November 2nd, 2009 2:34 PM

Bumpdate.

2-Who's that Pokemon!
3-Battle Numero Uno

BrockObama November 2nd, 2009 6:26 PM

lovin it man, keep up the good work.

Loki November 14th, 2009 10:43 PM

I'm pretty sure that 90% of the comments in this thread could be considered spam.
Please, add a little more constructive commentating in your repertoire, people.

I've deleted the ones that are exceptionally useless, and given warning infractions to those who were borderline useless.
Though, if you read the rules, even the borderline ones with essentially be just as useless.

Rule #4 guys. Rule #4.

Deja Vu November 17th, 2009 2:21 PM

Thanks for the cleanup Loki.

Bumpdate.

4-Mr. Odep

Deja Vu December 5th, 2009 8:07 AM

Well needed bumpdate.

Don't Mess with Magikarp!

st.jimmy December 6th, 2009 3:28 AM

common sense is enough to stop anybody from entering a pedophilic manic rapists lab dont yas think? :P

good one :)

[NovaPirate] December 6th, 2009 8:38 AM

Ehh. Your comic is /okay/, to be honest.
A lot of the jokes are things we've seen before in "spoof-comics", and the strange and random "warps" to other dimensions are a bit annoying (and again, we've seen 'em a million-and-a-half time before), because they don't offer anything to the plot or humor.
Magikarp's glock was funny the second time, but is a bit overused throughout.
Also, try to stay away from actions using asterisks (e.g. » *Psshhh*)
Finally, to make it easier comic speech bubbles tend to go from top to bottom, so that the reader can see the linear progression in the story without trying to guess which way to look.

That's all. Good luck.
Try and be creative.

Edit;
After scanning over the most recent Pogeyman comic, it would appear you are entirely uncreative with your crazed Magikarp. Kudos to you.
Try not to blatantly steal ideas from comics on the same forum. It's pretty.. blatant. And annoying.

Kabutopzilla December 6th, 2009 10:55 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by [NovaPirate] (Post 5376720)
Edit;
After scanning over the most recent Pogeyman comic, it would appear you are entirely uncreative with your crazed Magikarp. Kudos to you.
Try not to blatantly steal ideas from comics on the same forum. It's pretty.. blatant. And annoying.

He stole no ideas from me. Superkarp appeared in Pogeymanz upon Deja Vu/Blue Phoenix's request, same with the white-clothed guy. I simply cameo'd Superkarp. If anything, I stole ideas from him, with his consent.

Ah well. May as well offer some advice while I'm here.

Visually, you're doing great, especially if this is your first comic effort. As for plot and humor, I can see that you're trying to follow the formula I used in Pogeymanz (which isn't a bad thing). The plot is rather difficult to decipher, but then again, that can be expected. The humor isn't half bad. While it mostly only elicited a cheap laugh/mental chuckle from me, the one great gag was Superkarp's reaction to Mario being annoying. That made me laugh aloud.

The comic isn't bad. Just keep doing what you're doing, and you'll get better naturally. If this is your first comic effort, you're already doing better than me when I began comicking.

Deja Vu December 6th, 2009 2:25 PM

Thanks for the critisism guys. I'll try and use some of that advice.

To Nova: Just reiterating what 'Zilla said, I was cameo'd in that.

Which on a seperate note, thanks for that 'Zilla.


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