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I'm supposed to be studying chemistry, but screw that. Numbers are floating out of my ears at the moment. Besides, this is studying English isn't it?
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Welcome to FF&W as well as the world of Fanfiction, dbcification! It's an exciting world, writing is. Length is not a concern. If people criticize you for length, it would be about how you rushed this, or it didn't flow like this, or this wasn't shown to be important enough, or anything else. Overall, it shouldn't matter. Long or short, as long as it's good writing, it's fine. People do not get turned off by long stories, trust me. I mean people read books all the time. I read the last Harry Potter book the day it came out because I was so excited, despite it breaking 700 pages. It did take me all day to finish it, but that's okay. It was a really good read and a satisfying ending. The same applies for fanfiction. Write as much as you need to get your story across, that's all that really matters. The protagonist leaving isn't a prologue, I'll tell you that right now. A prologue would be some big event that sets your story into motion, like 9/11 caused the war on terror. Yeah, that's not exactly a story example but you get the point. Preferably, you should write in chapters. A lot of authors have acts, but that's just to separate the chapters. Not many release their story in acts. Use chapters. It's neater and easier to track, posting each chapter one at a time. So now, onto the egg and Sneasel. Yes, they are known to be seriously vicious, but that doesn't mean there aren't exceptions. I don't see why that would be so important to Professor Elm; it's just one Pokemon. It's temperament is a bit more mild, but overall it's still a Sneasel. It doesn't have three arms or an extra head, so why he'd be interested is beyond me. Professor Elm studies eggs, right? It would more canon if Professor Elm wanted to study the aging of a Pokemon hatched from an egg in captivity versus one in the wild, so he could ask Ethan about that and his help in research that way. In this case, you can mention how different its nature is from other Sneasel because of the way it was raised, you might mention egg moves, there are a lot of things you could do in that case. It's far more interesting rather than, "This Sneasel wouldn't hurt a fly. I think I want to study why!" If he studied people like that, he'd study everyone. He'd wonder why some people like this type of music and not this, because that's the standard kind. He'd survey what their favorite hairstyle was, and he'd be running around the world with a lot of questions. He'd wonder why some people can solve math problems, whereas others can't without a calculator. Ironically, Ash is like that. I mean the way you're describing the character, since you want to use his mindset. AKA, being a complete doofus, can't tie his own shoes without yelling Thunderbolt, can't put 2 and 2 together (literally), etc. He also loses his temper easily, like when he met Paul in Sinnoh. I swear every time they met, Ash tried to act cool and Paul called him a loser and voila, Pokemon battle! The same goes with Trip, because that prick calls Ash a hick all the time. Come on Trip, get some new insults. Red neck jokes get old. Anyway, your character wants revenge? That's a different meal. Revenge is a meal best served cold. That's a big tone, in my opinion. The antagonist would have to do something more than just piss him off. It would be interesting to see his demeanor change as he continually meets his rival and his Sneasel feeds off that dark personality. And then they keep adding their negative influence, so you get some really messed up character. And that's freaking awesome. Now that does complicate things since you want that goody goody stuff in him. I mean, the only thing you can really do is change him. Don't make him be like Ash, a snot-nosed, selfish kid, and make him really chill or something. Either way, you'll figure something out. Oh, one last topic: Eggs. Nah, that's not a big deal. Pokemon are practically worshipped in their world, so receiving a Pokemon egg is like catching one without the effort. The problem is how they receive the egg, but you won't reveal the plot so there's nothing else I can say. Yeah, I finished! I'm so happy. Well, now I wasted about 10 minutes typing and doing nothing but help other people, when I should study. But studying is really boring and I prefer writing and reviewing and that stuff. Oh well. Big woop. Good luck with your story and I'll be looking forward to reading it! |
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Well, thanks psyanic. But now that that I think about it, I need a few final things solved before I feel I'm ready to continue with the fic:
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My, my, my. My. So many people to help! Yes, two is a lot in my book. I don't have very high standards. That's just depressing... These spoiler tags are annoying me now. Boo~
Okay, so first at dbcification: Your Sneasel idea is still a bit off. I think the point of training Pokemon is to make Pokemon stronger. Being different doesn't necessarily help it. Looking for the perfect Pokemon is like finding your special other. Your special other is not perfect, I'll tell you that right now. It's all about looking for the person you can see in the perfect light. Stop looking for the perfect thing, make it perfect for you. The Sneasel should be perfect for the trainer. It should be like a match. Studying abnormal behavior (which is really subjective in my opinion) in Pokemon is, like I said before, trying to figure out what a normal person is like. It's impossible to do that because everybody is different. Honestly, making Sneasel so "special" makes the idea of it seem forced. Try to work in the canon. I know I mentioned this before, but I'm really starting to like the idea of Professor Elm wanting to study how Pokemon born/raised in captivity differ from those in the wild. It's just more logical. I know you want Team Rocket to be stronger than usual, but taking over regions just isn't realistic. Team Rocket is as strong as they are depending on your world. That's part of world building. Make them how you want them to be, don't judge them based on the games. Look at a few other works of fanfiction. If you can't find any decent ones, just message me or Google, or even Bing if you're feeling lucky. A few have Team Rocket and they're not exactly wimps, but trainers aren't looking for the perfect Pokemon. They just battle them or fight against them the way they always do, with their normally trained Pokemon. Okay, so for the whole Ilex Forest thing. I mean, that's not a bad idea as long as the writing is solid. Then again, that's the case for anything really. I never heard of Celebi laying an egg to begin with. What's more important is why is it injured? And why would it trust the duo with an egg? It's not the fact that it just disappears, but more of the fact that its introduction and its behavior act more in canon. Yeah, no spoiler tags. I'm being a rebel. And now for FourCartridge! Yay! Even though he's probably getting tired of my rants... Oh well. He'll just deal with it. Spoiler:
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I had an idea here and I'll write it out;
(this one is very weird so bare with me) Out of revenge for being the main reason for hating herself, Palkia wraps the moon to a different dimension. As Palkia sits back and enjoys her suffering, Cresselia is distraught over the moon's disappearance and angrily orders her underlings to search for it. While Giratina and her friends try to help her cope through this unfortunate situation, the moon goddess feels that she should get to the bottom of the situation. Who would be so vile as to steal the moon? So she seeks the strongest Pokemon of Unova to use her Psychic powers to align the stars and trace the moon and figure out the culprit. |
I'm pretty sure you mean "warps" instead of "wraps" here. Now, I'm not entirely clear on Palkia's motive. You word it a bit awkwardly, making it seem like Palkia hates herself out of revenge. I think you mean Cresselia hurt her feelings, but then again, I'm not sure. You might want to clear that up before the story starts though.
I didn't think Cresselia really had a following or grunts or underlings. She's pretty much solo, just like Darkrai. They're both alone for good reason though. Cresselia is like the dream keeper of the Pokemon world, so all she does is fly around. I'm assuming she uses the moon to do her rounds, like Santa Clause flies around all night and only during the night. I think immediately, she'd assume the culprit to be Darkrai. So the story should start around there, accusing Darkrai, while he continually laughs like a cynic. And stuff like that, ya know? Totally a random suggestion, but who knows? I'm always wondering why people try to make their characters find this Pokemon because it's so powerful. So I hope you do satisfy when it comes to explaining what it is and why it's wanted. It is kind of cheating for Palkia, since she can just hide in one of her dimensions for a while, so I'm interested to see how that'll turn out. Other than that, I can't say too much. It's a good idea, though a bit quirky, but that's fine. Just make sure to stick to a bit of canon. One thing I appreciate in stories is logic. Good luck! |
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Haha! Long things to read fills me with glee. That sounded better in my head. And no! Another spoiler tag... Nah, who cares. I'm wondering how long it'll take for me to fully respond to everything. Here I go!
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I see your points on Cynthia and the Psychic type gathering, it does seem a bit odd... In my defense, I barely played Gen IV except for Heart Gold, so most of my knowledge of Cynthia is hurriedly Bulbapedia'd. As a last note on the Ethan/Lyra name choice... It actually started off as a set of placeholder names, but as I wrote and imagined and experienced the story with and through them, I really got attached to them as characters in their own right, and I think after I start posting the story, you'll see that as well. This may be a bit weird, but on occasion, I will sort of get in character and answer for/through them to sort of flesh them out. If its weird... Meh, I don't care, it works. :P Whew, that took about twenty minutes on my iPod. |
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In my Pokeverse here, Palkia was teased by Cresselia because of her powers. So in the current story I'm writing now, Palkia got to see just how powerful she really is. So in this idea, she starts to get angry with Cresselia for teasing her all this time. That's why she warps the moon in this idea. Oh as for the Pokemon being sought out, it's not only because she's powerful but she has the ability to align the stars and feel the dimensions with her psychic abilities. |
Hey guys for a long time I have wanted to write a pokemon story. I have tried many times,but was never successful in finishing it. So this time,I came with a diffrent approach. Having 2 main characters who start and travel together. I also finaly have a more pokemon anime like style,but also a real storyline. Of course their will be rivals,but haven't gotten that far yet. So I help in seeing if this will be any good. And hopefully it doesn't follow any movies.
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Glad to see you want to write stories! Welcome to FF&W and the magical world of writing Pokemon fics!
Before I say anything about what you wrote down, you might want to check your spelling and grammar and basic mechanics. Just from what you said, you don't space after commas, don't spell things correctly, using the wrong "their, they're, there", etc. So before you post, save readers the trouble of those errors so they can read it enjoyably and without too much of a hassle. Sorry to tell you but having not one but two trainers traveling together is not something unspeakably new. It's a slightly different approach, but it's still pretty darn close to standard anyway. Okay, so now you outlined us the characters. I think that's one of the biggest mistakes new writers tend to make. Do not save readers the trouble and try listing out random facts about your characters. You have appearances, and in stories, you usually don't bother with them. They're not important. Readers don't read because the main character is sexy. They read because the characters are interesting and have some kind of personality, which supplements a good ole plot. When you start telling us Dalex is 5'11, the first thing people think will be, "So what? Who cares?" Don't make that mistake. The same goes with the history. Unless it's completely vital to the plot, don't bother. It's also unimportant. Of course, if it somehow shapes how the character interacts because of a bad experience, then yeah, say something about it. But don't give us an biography on all the useless information. And finally, you don't tell us much about the plot at all. You tell us everything but the plot, actually. Characters, setting, no plot. So there isn't much to say about that. I can only guess the two characters will travel Unova, get badges, conquer the Pokemon league while they beat Team Shadow. |
So, I'm new to these forums and relatively new to writing fiction as well. More or so, re-introduced to writing. It's been years since I've actively applied my thoughts creatively into any literate format. However, I recently found myself ready to write and have had a lot of ideas being thrown around in my head with an equal amount of difficulty bringing any of them to full form.
Anyways, one of the ideas I'm working on is a tragic comedy about a wanna-be/would-be superhero named Char Man. Whether or not this man will be a Pokemorph or some deprived lunatic running around in a Charmander suit wielding a flamethrower, I haven't decided. I'm currently planning on it being a one-shot, but depending on how much I enjoy writing it and how much more story I can put into it could potentially become a series. The following is a summary for one idea I have related to the character: Spoiler:
There you have. My love-letter to comic book heroes in all of their glory. Sound off and let me know what you think of my idea! |
Seriously, what's with the spoilers? :c
The story is quite weird. And different. Very, very different. I can't help but wonder where the logic is in this story. He wants to kill his boss? Okay, I guess that's kind of sensible. I mean, who doesn't? But it's a tad extreme. Next, it's the fact that he's a human and any Pokemon can launch a Hyper Beam or Water Gun at him and he's screwed. Super heroes? Those are your justice trainers or whatever. Come on, trainers take down Team Rocket. Not even the police seem to do their job, so ten year olds with a Squirtle travel around and beat up a crime syndicate. For a person to run around with a flamethrower? What's the good in that in a Pokemon world? It would be slightly more plausible if this story took place in the real world, if at all. And I'm wondering where the plot actually comes in. He's a lunatic who wants to save the world, whatever. Not my problem. Where's the adversity? People trying to chase him down? One more question, what kind of idiot is mugging a person in front of Silph Co.? It's obviously populated there and quite a busy street with all the employees coming and going, so I guess you're implying that he sees the mugging way before Silph Co. |
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"The Rocket Wars" drawing board.
I am planning a new fanfic that I will work on during my Spring Break.
It will be based off an old RP called "Deadly Alliance" from PE2K, created by Dark Amethyst. In the plot. Ash Ketchum turns to the side of Team Rocket, after Giovanni tricks the ten-year-old into believing that he is Giovanni's son. Meanwhile, Giovanni has power in the mainlands of Kanto, Johto, Hoenn, Sinnoh, and Unova, having some of his agents eliminate Teams Magma, Aqua, Galactic, and Plasma, then brainwashing the remaining members to join Team Rocket. Giovanni wants to, obviously, rule the world with an iron fist, killing those who oppose him, and enslaving those who can't stand up to join the growing rebellion. On a remote Island, victims of the Rockets' tyranny are starting a rebellion, ordered by Arceus. They call themselves "Pokemon Crusaders". So far, the small subgroups in the Crusader base are the White Ninjas (Normal and Flying specialists), the Brown Berserkers (Fighting, Rock, and Ground specialists), the Red Gladiators (Fire specialists), the Green Samurai (Grass and Bug Specialists), the Yellow Spartans (Electric specialists), the Purple Gurus (Psychic, Ghost, and Poison specialists), the Blue Pirates (Water and Ice specialists), the Black Knights (Dark specialists), the Silver Hunters (Steel Specialists), and the Gold Vikings (Dragon specialists). The two founding leaders of the Crusader rebellion are a young couple whose wedding was forced to be postponed in order to fulfill an ancient prophecy involving a war on the Rockets. Eric Damon watches over the activities of Brown Berserkers, Green Samurai, Purple Gurus, Black Knights, and Gold Vikings. Peggy Owen does so for White Ninjas, Red Gladiators, Yellow Spartans, Blue Pirates, and Silver Hunters. Each chapter will have two sides: The Rockets and The Crusaders. Will good triumph over evil? Or will Giovanni finally achieve his goal of world domination? Read "The Rocket Wars" to find out. Coming soon to PokeCommunity! |
I don't know where to put this. I would put it in the plot bunny thread, but you seem willing to go with writing this already. And it's not just an announcement for a fic, because you haven't posted it yet.
I'll move this to the plot bunny thread so if you would like opinions on the plot, you can get it there. But as a general rule, you can't post a thread in the Writer's Lounge just saying that you're going to be posting a fic soon. |
revenge fics
I asked this question on serebii and bulbagarden and got different responses. How can you pull this off?
I had an idea of one. The story takes places a few weeks after a story I'm currently working on called Space lives on my breath. In this upcoming one, Palkia wants to seek revenge on Cresselia, a girl who has been tormenting her for her abilities for the past 3 years. The reason Palkia did this? When Palkia started school, Cresselia has always made fun of her and made her school life miserable. She would call her names, make fun of her spatial abilities, and throw things at her, and even get the other Pokemon to join in. And for those 2 years even when she was at home, Cresselia's words hurt Palkia to the point that she thought she was worthless. When in reality, Cresselia makes fun of Palkia because she dislikes that Palkia was technically the strongest female Pokemon in class when it has always been her. If the other Pokemon knew that then she wouldn't be popular anymore. Plus she felt that she had a better life and better boyfriend than she did. Darkrai mostly comes at night to that's the only time she gets to see him that is until he had to be enrolled in school. During that time in this story, he learns that the time he spends with Cresselia means alot not only to her but it starts to make him better as well. How she does this is that when Cresselia, her servants and her friends are having a party, she warps the moon to her dimension. Or another revenge plot I had was her messing her up for her party, like ruining her beauty. Also, she does this because Cresselia has been saying all this time that space was nothing, but in another fic, you'll know that it's not the case. I know with the moon there are tides involved but will this be reasonable for a revenge fic? |
As, tbh, the thread is asking for advice on your story idea rather than discussing revenge fics in general, I'll merge this with the Plot Bunny thread sticky.
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So . . . I have a small idea for a fic I'm going to write, which is kind of loosely based on the history of Unova. Hopefully, I won't write myself into a corner this time like with all my other fics. For this one, I'm going to write a vague outline / timeline first so the plot doesn't just randomly stop.
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I've got a weird idea for a story that may or may not fail.
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I want to write my stories gere too, so that I may have something to share(I have 3 different stories with 2 notebooks for each, and I wish to write another story here). Well the plot goes like this.
It's a new chapter for Hoenn region. You are a newbie pokemon trainer(let's name it you until I think of a good name). Pokemons from Sinnoh region have weirdly appeared all over, but it wasn't that much of a serious problem. In the midst of peace, a new organization rises. Unlike Magma and Aqua who attempted to control Groudon or Kyogre, this new organization seeks 6 pokemons, the Regi Trio and the Weather Trio. Well that's all I have to say, I will be the one up to twist it up. I need some feedbacks and the name of course XD. Also, I shall write it in a diary form, but dialogs are something like this: You: Go Mudkip! Tackle! Trainer: Uh Poochyena...um..block? |
For the name...I'm assuming your character is male, so for some unknown reason I'm going to suggest "Evan". If it is female, I'd suggest Anya, again for the sake of randomness.
Personally I don't think it's a good idea to do dialogs that way. It sounds kind of amateur, like you're cutting corners. Just my opinion :D |
Hmm, it actually takes me longer of I "make the dialogs like this", I don't even know where to place the commas!
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You're right, Dracoflare! As for the whole using "said" part of your advice, it really depends on the writer. I rarely use any dialogue tags (using action to tell who is speaking), and the ones that I use I mix up instead of just using the same ones. But others like using "said" for each dialogue tag. It's up to the writer, and it's much like everything else. Just know how to use it.
As for your plot, right now it's very basic. It just seems like a usual original trainer fic with only one trainer and fighting off against the boss of the evil team, helped by the rival. It sounds almost like the other Pokemon manga, Special, in a way. Do you have any more details on the plot to mark it different from other OT fics? But really, a large part of the Electric Tale of Pikachu manga was the humor in it. Capture that humor, and that will make the fic pretty unique in itself. Well, that and no one seems to remember that Electric Tale of Pikachu exists. So just having a fic based on that is rare. Drgons90, you do have an interesting idea. Exploring why Sinnoh Pokemon suddenly appear in Hoenn will make for a good plot right there, but with the new team trying for six legendary Pokemon, that's six chases you can make exciting. You say that you have ideas to twist up the plot, and that's good. With the idea to write it as a diary, you just have to remember that that's how you really catch your character's voice. By the way they write and react to things after the fact. For the dialogue, I'm going to have to agree with Zayphora. Personally, I like the quotation marks over script. But if you want to do script, than that's fine. If you do want to change to the quotation marks, I can certainly help you with any questions you may have on punctuating dialogue tags. |
Everyone seems to have forgotten my idea, so I'll post it again.
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Yes, that would definitely get read. At least by me.
I never read any creepypastas before, so I had to look up what Creepy Black is. That alone is a good story. To see that a fanfic is going to go deeper and turn the idea into a horror/mystery story is even better. Personally, I can't think of any advice to give. But in answer to your question, as I said, the fic will be read by at least one person. |
As a side note, I am a bit iffy on your decision to rename them. The protagonist maybe not so much as they are namable in the games, I suppose could be argued, but Red to Asher? That seems a somewhat unnecessary change to a canon character (given it seems you're working from the HGSS canon in which is name is established), and might confuse some people too (after all, that's mighty close to Ash, who Red already bears similarities too as well in Pokemon choice etc).
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Well, I'll try to do my best to make it unique. Also, I might not be able to post everyday since I am very busy in real life, but I'm really hoping that the fic can go on endlessly.
As for the humor part, I'm not sure if I can give it some lols, but still I will do my best. I better get started then, you post it at the main forums right? Another question, I looked through the examples of fanfic written, they all had that [Pokemon] or [Other]. How do you put that? Is it automatic? |
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Maylee and The World of Pokemon
Hi everyone - this is my first post on PokeCommunity and will hopefully lead to my first Pokemon fan fic. I usually write fan fics as screenplays, so I'm quite excited to write this one in story form. I'm trying to write a sort of series of episodes (each a story in itself but with a continuing arc) from the point of view of the main character, Maylee (though in 3rd person). I have the bigger picture sorted out, but the first episode/story is tricky. The plot idea for it is in spoiler tags because I've written a lot and don't want to fill up the page.
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PokeBox Game Site Story Line
I am working on a pokemon adopt site and I have just finished an outline for the story line. I am more of a coder than a writer so I am looking for some feedback and maybe some creative help. So I got my ideas down but there's probably a better way to present it. Thank you so much for looking it over :) note: I removed the images in post that are on site.
Story Welcome to Poke Island soon to be trainer. You had to come here to recieve your very first pokemon and join the initiative to repopulate the world we live in with pokemon. To fix the mistakes of our past. As you know there are no more wild Pokemon to obtain! They have all been caught or battled for training till fainted. But there is still hope! It has been noted that no pokemon has fully gone extinct and that some one somewhere has it. As such it is everyones duty to level the pokemon, care for them, breed them, and then trade them to other trainers. For doing such work you will be paid for your efforts to buy items and new pokemon eggs to raise. Battling Forbiden That's right, Pokemon battles are now outlawed and illegal to partake in. This decision is to stop the loss of more wild pokemon that are brutally trained on and never recieve medical aid, but are left fainted in the wild. This also stops trainer negligence who push their pokemon to hard. This will also free up a lot of recourses as medication, status healers, and free healthcare will not be overburdened. We understand your conce with the issue of leveling your pokemon so please read on to our scientific findings. Prof. Oak's Findings Professor Oak has been studing pokemon for many years. He came up with the theory that pokemon do not need to battle to evolve or level up and get stronger. But rather it is social interaction that enables them to develope and live a healthy life. Many were astonished at this fact but many of the other scientist confirmed it to be true. Even though battleing does drive up a pokemons experiance, it is just social interaction, experiances can be achieved through safer means. This obviously helped push the laws that eventually outlawed battling completely. New Technology With humans and pokemon sharing the same world space began to run out pretty quick. But a new Poke Box has also been developed, one that can theoretically hold an infinite amount of pokemon. As such pokemon are not allowed to wonder about without a trainer. This keeps everyone safe from wild pokemon attacks, or illegal pokemon training battles. Pokemon are also tagged convienanlty to their owners and can not be easily stolen. This allows any trainer to take out a pokemon even if they do not own it. What they can do with the pokemon is limited to only social interaction but this way trainers can work together to take pokemon out of the box system and help them develope. However the owning trainer is in full control if their pokemon evolves, recieves an item, is used for breeding, or is traded. We Hope You Enjoy Your Social Adventures Here at PokeBox |
Moving this to the Plot Bunny thread, since you're just asking about your plot.
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I had an idea for my plot as well but I'm having a hardtime putting it down. Basically, I'm trying to base of on an moment in Heartgold/Soulsilver to where the female Team Rocket grunt was telling you, the player, that she thinks Proton is this and that and how she thinks he's cool and that he's all she needs. Well, I am trying to make it to that that when he sees that Team Rocket has come back in the Unova reigon (well the team was recreated by that same girl with her friend and they have renounced their criminal ways and wanted Team Rocket to be a detective agency) and sees that same girl (because yes he remembers her), he wants to meet her.
So he meets her and the Team and start talking etc and in the end they get together. Problem is that when I put them in a relationship, there's something I'm not doing right and it's to do with Proton. Can this plot *still* be doable? |
Depends what your problem is with Proton. If you're keeping him in character, and his canon characterization is as someone who can't be in a relationship (for whatever reason), then you might have to consider the story a no-go.
But it all depends on what your problem with Proton is. Do you mind giving us more details? |
The story isn't a no go, I just posted part of it right now. Besides I see other people put him in a relationship so you can't just count me out.
Problem is, temperamental is a feeling I fail at trying to convey. |
Just because other people write about a couple in fanfiction still doesn't mean that it will work. People write out-of-character couple fics all the time, so it's still possible that this couple won't fully work no matter how or who writes it.
You asked if the plot is still doable. I said it might not because Proton might not want to be in a relationship even if you want him to be. That's how I answered because that's what you asked. Instead you wanted to know about a part of his characterization, which could only be answered if you posted the story in question. While you did today, it wasn't posted yesterday, and I couldn't use it to answer your new question. This thread isn't for characterization help. It's for plot help, which is how I answered. The only way to get an answer for your current problem is to wait for someone to read and review your story. |
Well I have two plot bunnies I've been putting some work into and one that just popped up while I was asleep last night.
1. A young Nurse Joy gains her first Pokecenter. Her experiences as she learns how everything can and will go wrong and just how idiotic trainers can be. Told in letters and conversations with her older Joys. 2. The life of a Pokemon Trainer is greatly romanticized but few travel and even fewer make it very far. 17 year old Emile is now old enough to become a trainer. He is expected to one day take over his father's, Norman, gym. For this reason he is being sent out on a journey to become a stronger and well respected trainer. Emile is ecstatic, being the only one of his friends able to go, but little does he realize that reality differs from the stories. 3. The Isham region is in turmoil, the region's legendaries are slowly destroying the land. Researcher Issac is part of a taskforce to stop this. He and his partner find that there is a common link between legendary pokemon incidences. One trainer named Ash. The taskforce is sent to capture Ash and have him quell the powerful beasts. |
Pokemon: Obsidian City setting
Hi guys!
I'm coming up with a futuristic, dark Pokemon setting that takes place in Kanto, which I will use in both a tabletop RPG and (hopefully soon) in a fan fiction that I am planning. I've always wanted to see the Pokemon world portrayed this way, as it seems like in reality it would be a horrifying setting to live in when people could carry huge monsters in their pockets. This is what I have so far on the history of Kanto and how the Pokemon world developed before and after the events of Gen 1-2: Spoiler:
I'd appreciate any feedback on realism and whether or not this political/economic explanation works well with what Pokemon fan base already knows about the Pokemon world. I'm really excited about the concept and would like to make it really in-depth. Thanks! |
It's a decent basis imo, and could be interesting to explore as well (I've seen some neat fics with varying ideas of Pokemon world setup going wrong later one as well so it's something that I'd be interested in reading too). Seems fairly well thought out too, and atm I don't see any notable flaws with this what-if; seems belieable enough. Exploring how the working Pokemon felt about it, etc would be something to consider btw; seems like it could be a waste to ignore that side of the history.
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Thanks, Bobandbill! I'll be sure to add that in there somewhere for you as the story develops. I've just finished the first chapter of the fan fic and the url to my Tabletop RPG's website is on my home page.
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I've been playing around with an idea for a while and I'd love some feedback.
A wild SUMMARY has appeared! Sasha, a lonely little street rat with a talent for stealing things, is picked up by Team Rocket and trained. Years later, Red destroys Team Rocket and sends Giovanni into hiding, leading the police force to capture and imprison many Rockets, including Sasha. Playing nice with the other kids gets her out on good behavior after two and a half years - but it also gets her a cranky parole officer that she has to report to constantly. When news of Rocket's resurgence reaches her, Sasha leaves Saffron to go find out what her old teammates are up to, and ultimately goes on a quest to get revenge on Red, who has recently secluded himself on Mt. Silver, for landing her in jail - and to teach him some lessons about how the real world works while she's at it. Thoughts? Comments? Anything that needs to be brutally torn apart and burned? |
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Is Sasha literally a rat? It gets slightly confusing because I thought Sasha was a Rattata at first given that she's picked up my Team Rocket, which made it sound like she's a Pokemon. Anyway, I don't find that 'playing nice' would get her out of jail. Given that she's stealing (and I don't really see that as a talent; stealing is like art or plumbing - you have to build your skill) and working for a nefarious organization such as Team Rocket, I can assume Sasha is not young and would be in an actual prison or some juvenile correction facility. In either case, 'playing nice' wouldn't exactly earn her parole, but because she seems to be a bit low-ranking, I suppose she could get off early. However, there won't be too many nice kids to play with in a prison (using this interchangeably from juvenile correction facility). Her parole officer may provide a lot of interesting situations since Sasha has to report to the officer, so there's that. I can only say that it might be difficult to go to Mt. Silver when you have an officer to report to considering that Mt. Silver isn't a little hike in the woods. Another thing is that Sasha has very little motivation to go after Red. First, you have to remember that Red practically took down the organization by himself. That alone should show how powerful of a trainer he is. Of course, it's your story and the situation could be virtually everything, but it's important to note that Red is not going to roll over. Sasha's old 'teammate's should also be in jail, so she wouldn't exactly check up on them all that frequently. Also, Sasha doesn't have a good reason to get revenge. I mean, she got picked up by an organization and it fell. So what? It's like landing a job in a company that goes bankrupt the next day. It's not your fault or anything. That sort of happened. You'll just get a new job. Sasha, to me, should move on away from crime, because look where it got her. She got in jail, not a place of unicorns and cotton candy. Your idea is fine. I like the idea of revenge fics, and I've tried playing with them myself but never get around to it, but in a story driven by revenge, there has to be a legitimate reason for revenge. Besides, if Team Rocket was on a revival, what drivers her to go after Red when she could just melt into Team Rocket once more? |
And that's pretty much exactly why I wanted feedback! I wasn't even sure if the idea was plausible, let alone a good one. Thanks for your input!
I may rework the idea later, I may not, but for now it looks like this one's going to be set aside. |
Too many plot bunnies
Okay… since the plot bunny thread is “dead”, I’m under the impression someone will tell me off since it’s been a month, so I’ll put it here and hope I don’t get hammered for it.
I’m mulling over several plots for what I should work on. All of them different – although all of them rather dark. They span from mystery dungeon to conquest to completely original, but I like to think they’re all original, and the kind of thing that hadn’t been done yet. I’m just so unsure which one I should do… Doom and Desire. The Protagonist named “Ark” is a ranger. Not a Pokémon ranger – he’s an unofficial caregiver for Pokémon who live in a wildlife preserve – which he lives next to . Two weeks before the story, he nearly died – but was brought to life with a machine. Problem is – Ark is a technophobe, and fears his spirit has died, even though his body was brought back. While exploring a forest (not in the preserve), he finds a trainer attacking an Absol. Seeing as Absols cause disasters, the trainer is socially justified in his actions. But before the Absol is killed, Ark asks to capture it first. That way he can return the body when its dead, and carry it home so he can skin it and make a cloak. The trainer agrees and sells Ark (who carries no pokéballs, being afraid of them) a pokéball, which he captures the Pokémon with. The other trainer then kills the Absol. Ark brings the Absol to the Pokémon centre, and revives it. While the Absol is somewhat grateful, she is also stubborn. Seeing she isn’t fully healed, Ark keeps her in his house overnight so she can heal – whether she likes it or not. During the night however, the Absol inadvertently casts a curse on him – using doom desire (I know that’s inaccurate, but it’s fiction). Ark has two weeks to live – then he will die. So he and a reluctant Absol set off on a journey to find the wish-granter Jirachi – the only one who can save him. Way of the warrior. Every pokéball in the world is connected to the grid. A giant network which is connected to every ball in the world via satellite uplink. This keeps track of every capture and prevents any pokéball tampering as well as allowing lost trainers to be located via GPS by pinging their pokéball. A brilliant system. Simple. Effective. Genius. Totally safe. If all goes to hell and Pokémon somehow become compromised and lose control – there’s even a failsafe. Total Recall. But it’s all safe… Until Team Plasma gains acess to that grid What happens when they initiate failsafe Total Recall – returning every Pokémon in the world to their pokéballs and locking them in there? What happens when only Team Plasma can unlock their pokéballs? When only they have any Pokémon power? Someone has to fight back – and those someones are the Pokémon rangers. But their capture stylers can’t control Pokémon as effectively as a trainer with a pokéball. Fortunately for them – there is another way. Long before the time of pokéballs, the secret rested… In Ransei. The way of the warrior. The ability to link with Pokémon. It’s the only way to stop Team Plasma, and Celebi’s going to show the rangers how to learn this ability. Rangers travel back through time to learn to link with Pokémon, while all the while their friends form a resistance against team plasma – trying to combat their movements with wild Pokémon being controlled. The rangers (and former-team-plasma-leader N, whom has defected) in the past must learn to link with Pokémon, gather a team (or a small army), find Dialga and then return to their own time to fight back team Plasma. Sixty-four-squares. Three years ago, the war between Johto and Kanto came to an end. But not before sixteen Johto soldiers entered celebi’s sacred temple – which also happened to contain sixteen Johto soldiers in hiding. Celebi saw this opportunity as a way to settle his conflict with his rival – mew, and called him. Together, they captured and erased the memories of all the humans in the temple. The humans were reverted to young ages (thirteen or so) by celebi, and given extraordinary powers by mew. Three years later, three orphan children are brought together by fate, and by their mysterious necklaces – each adorned with an onyx chess piece. They soon find themselves caught in their own private war with the white team from Johto – and are forced to wage the final conflict between mew and celebi. They can run, they can hide, or they can die. Lowbrid. Emile is part-Pokémon, part-human. Life as a scientific experiment is never easy – especially when all the bad guys seem to want to get their hands on you. So what do you do? You fight… seems easy, right? Wrong… because wherever there’s a hybrid human with awesome Pokémon power, there’s someone like Emile. A hybrid Pokémon with miserable HUMAN powers… oh joy… This is because the “pokémorphs/hybrid” story is all too cliché. So to mess with the cliché, I turned it upside down. Emile is a Riolu who lacks any Pokémon power, growing up as an experiment and leashed to a mad scientist by his drug-dependency. He just wants to train and live – his scientist creator seems too concerned with his DNA, and Team Rocket, for god-knows-what reason – want him too. He’s been told he’s genetically unstable – so when he evolves, anything could happen. He could possibly gain Pokémon power. But what he doesn’t expect… it to evolve into a FEMALE Lucario… Pit dog. Grail is a human pit-dog. A warrior who fights for the amusement of Pokémon. Kidnapped at 14, his beloved Lucario was taken from him and held hostage by psychotic wild Pokémon. If he wants to keep her alive – he must fight. He must fight and win. Because if he loses a fight – his mate loses her life. Grail has survived for an entire year. The longest anyone has ever survived in the pit… ever. He is allowed to return home after every fight – bloody and bruised and unable to tell his parents the truth – but he is monitored. His master’s step-daughter, an Absol named Aash, and her master’s servant Hypno monitor him – alerting him when it’s time to fight, and making sure he doesn’t tell anyone about his secret life. The pit is more dangerous than it used to be. Grail is becoming stronger with each fight, but lately, his opponents have begun to… change. Freakishly distorted humans, itching and writhing in pain, but wielding mighty and unexpected strength. They have been mutated. Soon Grail’s master fears his opponents have become unacceptably strong. When he learns the source of his opponents’ strength, he implements the same procedure on Grail – transforming him into a part-Pokémon chimera. Grail’s part of an underground human-fighting league, fighting other captured humans in order to save himself, and his Lucario – who is used as a bargaining chip to keep him fighting. When he finally escapes them, he soon learns that his is not the only “pit” in the league. He also learns that the league will stop at nothing to kill him. Contras Umbra. Pokemon mystery dungeon story. After an exchange student dies mysteriously in his sleep, a class of schoolmates inherit mysterious orbs in accordance with his will. Nek minnit - they find themselves trapped in a world of mystery dungeon as pokemon, and are forced to fight their way to the centre of the realm against evil shadow pokemon. Next day they wake up as humans again, confused and unsure about what happened. But the next time they sleep - they're back in there... Pokemon mystery dungeon with a twist. The protagonists keep their memories upon entering the pokemon world, but they also return to their own world, jumping from one to the other, and having to defend BOTH from evil pokemon. Any suggestions, comments or anything of the like? I'd like to hear opinions - which would you rather see? 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Of course, it doesn't mean it can't happen, but if you don't have a buyable explanation for it then it's going to hurt the believability of the story. (There's more about that in the first post). Alternatively I'd suggest thinking up some other event if you want the guy to be cursed and then search for Jirachi with an Absol (which is a neat premise in itself, imo). Way of the warrior sounds interesting, certainly; mixing rangers with conquest certainly is different (and as far as I know there is little in the way of conquest fic out there compared to the rest too). One thing that came to mind though; if Celebi can take them to the past, why not just take them to just before team plasma appear so they can stop them? |
Firstly - kills. Yes. My pokeball theory is that when a pokemon in a pokeball is taken to a pokemon centre, it can be re-healed to a previous stage - much like a computer's backup - even if it's dead. The dying and reviving creates a connection between them - they're alike in that regard.
Doom desire - i do have a reason for that. Asbol's pokedex entry states that it causes (or predicts in some cases) disasters. My fictional theory is that an absol enters a cursed state while asleep, and casts doom desire upon an individual - or a town - which is nearby. Celebi... okay, i'll have to think around that. That's a good point... Thanks for the help, btw. ^_^ |
Honestly, I really like Way of the Warrior. I'm a little into scifi dystopians so there's probably some bias in there, though.
Sixty-Four-Squares is interesting as well, it never occured to me that there could be a war between the regions... That actually gives me quite a few ideas, personally :p As far as the story though, you definitely have a lot of options with just that general plot. For Lowbrid, you can branch off this significantly with the new Pokemon ReBURST series, I don't know the details but it's on Bulbapedia if you want to use it for any reference or just for ideas. |
There's not much on ReBURST - but i get the general idea. Sixty-four squares is rather alike it, plotwise. The idea for 64 squares though, is that each human with a chess piece has two pokemon moves they can use. When they get together with another human who has a chess piece, the first of them can transform into pokemon form, while the second maintains the first's form. The pokemon is dependant on the two's moves.
So the main three have: 1: Razor wind, psychic. 2: Psycho cut, detect 3: Teleport, agility 1 and 2 can come together and make absol 1 and 3 can come together to make gardevoir 2 and 3 can come together to make gallade. Two pokemon can be active at once - as long as one remains to maintain the other two's transformations. Thanks for replying. I'm still thinking them over - possibly i will combine a couple of them into one... |
Ok, I've been toying with this plot idea for a while now, but so far, I've been completely unsure as to how I can go about organizing it and turning it into a basic Chapter-based fan fiction. I've attempted to put together a decent plot for several fan fictions in the past, but I could never properly set the bits of information, character-histories, and interesting ideas into a proper plot that I could go about writing. I feel I've come the furthest with this one when it comes to setting up basic character histories and the world the events take place in, but I still have -VERY- little and I was hoping that someone more experienced when it comes to writing fan-fictions could tell me what they think about the basic premise for my Fan-fiction and hopefully assist me in getting it off the ground.
Anyways, Here it goes: Spoiler:
As you can see, I've only plotted out the ughtmost beginning of the Fan-fiction, and there are plenty of holes in what I do have. The characters I have pulled together are fairly vaguely developed and I haven't fully worked out their personalities. I was hoping that a more experienced writer could assist me in solidifying what I do have and turning the concept into a full-fledged story. I think Team Magma's reasoning should revolve around Groudon, though I'm unsure as to how that'll fit in, and I still haven't worked out the origin of the gems, though I'm thinking of tying those in to Arceus. |
One small comment I could make is that you might want to change the name of your main trainer. "Ethan" is the name of the male trainer from HG/SS, and some readers might automatically insert him in the story instead of your own original trainer.
To help with the starting location, think about what Haruza would do after leaving Magma. If he's still interested in archaeology, he might be near the desert where the fossils are located. Maybe even in Rustboro with the guy that's trying to revive fossils. Or he might be near the volcano if he wants to keep his eye on Magma and thinks/knows that they could always strike the volcano area for Groudon (which they do in the games). Or he might be in a bigger town so he could hide better in case Magma is looking for him. As for the personalities, the way that works for me is to just write the story. Or just write random scenes. That way, you'll get some idea of how the characters will react to certain situations, and work from there. Or if you wanted to, you can find character creation questions online that ask details about the characters you want to make up, and supposedly that helps you learn more about them. Magma could use the gems to create a mass amount of Pokemon that could help them fight and get Groudon. Or just to fight back against anyone who tries to stop them by using surprising Pokemon. I'm not clear on how the gems decide what Pokemon to create. Like why Slugma made of water? Are the gems controllable (can the person choose in any way what the Pokemon species would be?) and will Haruza study the bodies to find out more about the gems? He left Magma in a hurry after the gems were discovered, so like maybe he could study them a bit to find out a weakness or even just how they work. And I don't know what's the point of Ethan's mother being deathly ill. If he leaves her anyhow, why didn't he do that before? And does her illness mean anything to the plot overall? Or was it just a way to keep Ethan in town long enough for him to be chosen by the professor and then picked for the plot of the story. That's just some questions you can try to figure out to get more details on the plot. It's just what I noticed that could help you fill in details and maybe get started. |
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As for the gems, I've put a great deal of thought into them. Each gem starts off as a blank slate with an empty soul within, the element its attributed to being the only defining characteristic of the gem. The gem can have both the mental and DNA imprints of any one pokemon implanted into it and from that, the soul stored within the gem takes the form of that pokemon. Then, whenever activated, the gem gives birth to that pokemon and infuses it with the element of the gem. Why water-Slugma? That took some careful consideration as well, but I've decided that because the original stash of gems were destroyed, they can't be too choosy on the elements of the pokemon they use. Since both the DNA and mental imprint of an existing pokemon is required, and these men are only grunts, they were tossed the water-type Slugma as scraps leftover from their testing of the Gems; simply a back-up in the case that their regular pokemon fail. Another thing about the gems that I'm adding in to justify not making an army of one pokemon from a single gem is that every time a gem is used, the soul of the gem is implanted to the pokemon. That soul then returns to the gem as its new body destabilizes. As for his mother, that's exactly the case.....But I didn't see the logical fallacy there until you pointed it out. I guess I could say that his love for her kept him from leaving her alone in her physical condition. When he realized the gravity of the situation, he went home and explained everything to her....And she convinces him to go? I guess both her permission and the tug of the urgency of the mission would be enough to push him to go. When it comes to studying the bodies, there wouldn't be a need. The professor made the initial discovery and did a substantial amount of research before shutting the operation down. There'd be no point in studying the pokemon because at the very least one of the two knows how they work. The real mystery is how Magma's getting ahold of the Gems after the initial quarry was destroyed. I've also given their reasoning some thought, so tell me what you think of it..... Spoiler:
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OK the gems make more sense now with how they work. It works better. And now Haruza not needing to study the bodies makes sense. So I can't see any holes in that right now.
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I'm in the very early planning stage of a fic...Don't have a plotline yet, just a partial general idea..
There is a person that is not a trainer. Said person for some reason, travels around their region(Preferably a region with a higher amount of forests or rivers) Said person has colleagues in his/her proffession. Said person, while going about their way in the normal going-ons of their profession, stumbles upon an illegal organization. Said organization, though illegal, is intertwined with goverment and popular society. Said person, along with several colleagues, has to find a way to dismantle the organization, without help of of the public or the goverment(Or rest of the goverment, in case said person is a goverment official) |
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Yeah, the illegal actives DO have to do with pokemon.
I'm not sure what said person's proffession would be. It'd have to be something that would make them going all over the region. |
Please don't double post by repeating the same thing you said; sometimes forums move slowly is all and you need patience. If you want more attention to questions you ask the only way to possibly help it is to post about in the community some more (e.g. review fics, answer other people's questions, make a discussion topic, etc, so people may be inclined to help back, so to speak).
Maybe you should consider approaching what the profession should be with what it has to do with the illegal activities/the organisation doing them. What sort of people would such an organisation typically deal with, and then consider from that what roles would involve someone travelling a lot to be in that profession. After all it also has to fit the story as well. |
I am trying to write a Pokemon fic based off Power Rangers...
I am thinking of either making ten Rangers with the Energy Types from the TCG, or maybe something else. I'm totally open to ideas. The TCG Rangers and possible first "Zords" Green Grass Ranger: Leavanny Red Fire Ranger: Magmortar Blue Water Ranger: Walrein Yellow Lightning Ranger: Ampharos Purple Psychic Ranger: Gengar Brown Fighting Ranger: Rhyperior Black Darkness Ranger: Umbreon Silver Metal Ranger: Klinklang White Colorless Ranger: Staraptor Gold Dragon Ranger: Haxorus |
Okay, I'm sincerely sorry for that Bobandbill :/
Oooh, I could make a goverment agency related to what the illegal organization is doing...hmm..the region'll be Hoenn...Thanks! |
That's alright, just keep it in mind for future is all.
@ Digimon Kaiser: My memoris of PR is...fuzzy at best, even if I watched a lot as a kid, heh. Idk how'd you'd make it work given you havn't given any details on that... but with a PR, I'd think this guy already looks like one in a way: http://www.serebii.net/blackwhite/pokemon/625.png Not quite sure how some of those other Pokemon would work as a PR... depends how you protray it but I don't really...'see' it yet. Also, why ten; just because that's the number of TCG types? Would that be too many a number of main characters if you intend them to be that, I wonder? (It won't necessarily be if you can handle them, but it's more than what I recall the team being, and would be harder). |
I've got this idea for a fanfic. It takes place in between the times of Black and Black 2. It's from the eyes of an ex-Team Plasma who now has realized his mistakes and changed his ways. He has now dedicated his life to the dangerous path of fighting Plasma. He knows much about the organization, as he worked for it, and he uses his knowledge to help destroy there plans. I haven't seen to many fics from the evil side, especially one like this. What do you guys think about it?
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Worht a shot, certainly; could be interesting seeing it from the perspective from an ex-team member (I suppose ala Pokemon Colosseum with its protagonist actually), and you'd have a lot of things to play around with that way too. Any plans to show/explain why/how he realised his mistakes? I know there's a few members of plasma who felt they were wrong 2 years back in the B2W2 games.
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He realizes his mistake due to realizing that what Plasma was doing is wrong. And that there true plans where to just steal Pokemon and build an army. He believed they where actually working for the good of the Pokemon like many believed.
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I was recently inspired by Pokemon Conquest to totally redo my Pokemon and Kingdom hearts Crossover. It will take place only in worlds of Kingdom Hearts, but with Pokemon, and traveling through the Lanes Between. It will be focused on three main characters that are Keyblade wielders, and all friends with each other, that are training with Masters Eraqus, Yensid, and Nomekop. Each hero will come with their own unique story and some worlds are exclusive to a particular one's plot. But Master Xehanort wants to control all worlds, and Pokemon, for himself, and is unleashing the Heartless, and also closing the door to some Pokemon's hearts, to achieve his goals.
Trava is a young woman, with her Knowledge, and a Chikorita, alongside a great sense of justice, she will do anything to protect her friends, Pokemon, and allies. She has green armor, red hair, and blue eyes. Ogon is an adolescent male, with his Emotion, and a Cyndaquil, alongside a childish attitude, he will persist at his goals until the end. He has red armor, blue hair, and green eyes. Vody is a great man, with his Willpower, and a Totodile, alongside a poor sense of Light and Darkness, he will do just about anything to prove to others that he is worthy of a Keyblade. He has blue armor, green hair, and red eyes. All three start out with a Kingdom Key. Trava's is colored like Palkia, Ogon's is colored like Dialga, and Vody's is colored like Giratina. (Fun fact: The names of our heroes are Russian for the type of Starter they have chosen.) The worlds are (brace yourselves for a long list of worlds) 1. Land of Departure (all) 2. Twinkling Town [Traverse Town and Twilight Town combined] (all) 3. Enchanted Dominion (Vody only) 4. Dwarf Woodlands (Ogon only) 5. Castle of Dreams (Trava only) 6. Wonderland (Vody only) 7. Beast's Castle/Fabled Countryside (Ogon only) 8. Agrabah (Trava only) 9. Olympus Coliseum/Underworld (all) 10. Radiant Garden/Hollow Bastion (all) 11. The Land of Dragons (Vody only) 12. Prankster's Paradise/Monstro (Ogon only) 13. The City of Bells [can't type it in French] (Trava only) 14. Disney Town (Vody only)/Disney Castle (Ogon only)/Timeless River (Trava only) 15. Atlantica (Vody only) 16. Pride Lands (Ogon only) 17. Space Paranoids (Trava only) 18. 100 Acre Wood (all) 19. Neverland (all) 20. Keyblade Graveyard (all) Prepare for Pokemon Xrossed: Kingdom Hearts! Coming soon to Pokecommunity! VM or PM me with critique and praise! |
It kind of sounds like BBS only with Pokemon and different characters. There's really not much to say beyond that, since there's not much of anything else to critique. I am wondering where the "Pokemon" part is going to be explained. How did worlds based around Disney suddenly wind up with Pokemon everywhere? Does everyone in the world own Pokemon? Or is it only certain people, like how it is with the keyblades?
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I haven't done anything writing in a long time, so I'm completely rusty. I'm trying to think of a plot I'm thinking of implanting this in a Pokemon game, but I might convert it to a original IP.
"It's over, they've won. In a region in which the government isn't a hierarchy, in which opinions are respected. Now, all that is gone. The government has been overthrown and destroyed. The streets are patrolled by goons at every turn, the folks are afraid to leave their homes. Neighborhoods have been torn down, and residents have evacuated out of the city. I never thought this would happen, yet it has. Call me cryptic, but this is the start of a war. It has been planned for months, and they did it. The ones that were laughed at for years, they become the emperors of the city. In hopes that their disease doesn't spread through out the once respected nation, I plan to join the revolution." |
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My story is set like 15 years into the future after the BW events occurred. Unova Pokemon migrated because of various people traveling across the world for boats and how others just fly there. Ok, so I got this. Well there's this boy name Blake Chambers, a 10 1/2 year old ambitious boy that strives to beat the Pokemon League like any other amateur trainer. He's inspired by me actually, but I will make him age though and have character development for his hot headed characteristics. He can be kind of hot headed that can let people think of him as a kid however, but he is quite intellectual and skilled in fighting. But he has this father that was like him and left him at the at age 5. His partner, Quil the Cyndaquil, is like aggressive. He has a bad past of how his parents were lost and how people were meant to abuse him, even trainers that tried to own him or that owned him would hurt him harshly. That made him quite a monster though, especially with his massive power. Well, I tried making a team named "Team Earth", this evil organization that tries to get some special type of gem(s) so they can control the legendary Pokemon Lugia, Celebi, and Ho-Oh. But like Team Rocket, they get to steal Pokemon and they would test and experiment them for power. They also want to have world domination. Team Rocket that was disbanded 15 years back, returns back to business to fight Team Earth for that same purpose. Like I am planning on letting Team Earth make an appearance somewhere around the time Blake gets his 1st or 3rd badge of Act 1, where things slowly gets interesting while he goes his journey and get one of the sacred jewels that both of the evil organizations have by the monks of Sprout Tower. Anyways, I kind of need help with this. Like for fighting styles for Pokemon, how do I seem to make them interesting? Because like I was planning on Blake's Elekid fight a trainer's Lampent that is strong and fast that knows Will-O-Wisp and Hex. |
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As for the fighting style, there's a few basic pieces of advice. Remember that the Pokemon don't just stand still during battles. Describe how they move when dodging attacks or performing their own. As for attacks, use them in different ways. Like in this thread, where Quick Attack is used to move around the battlefield, and not just as a quick dash to ram into the opponent. |
Hello, I am Pointblank, I am relatively new here, and I am planning on making my first fanfic. Here is the gist of the idea hope you like it:
The story takes place slightly ahead into the future, say 5-6 years. A "world war 3" has broken out, and involves everyone this time. The viewpoint will be of a 23 year old Martin Sharp, a part-time soldier who was called out when the fight breaks out. From what I have written down so far, the story begins in Turkey, one of the major battlegrounds in the early stages of the war.Through Sharp's perspective, the war would be chronicled through his and a few other characters eyes, although the story fixates around Sharp. What do you of the fanfic forum think? |
I'm taking a break from Pokemon Johto Adventures since my motiv is going down, so I'll try working on another fan fiction.
In addition to how I planned the Marowak story in May 2011, I tried writing a story based off how a Shuppet's life as a doll when she was with her master. I got inspired by this story in May about a Yamask. And see the synopsis in the spoiler, since it's long. Spoiler:
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Hi all. I'm really new to the forum, and though I'm not new to pokemon, as it's been part of my life since I was just a kid, I'm returning after a good near decade and a half of not caring.
One of the things I've been into between then and now is character development and script writing. I know scripts aren't everyone's cup of tea here, but I do put a lot of effort in to make sure that they're a performance and story, rather than just back and forth dialog. Hopefully you all will enjoy them, once I get around to starting to write. Now we're onto my plot. It's still being thought over, but my mind's eye is enjoying it :) Recently I've gotten into post apocalyptic stories (I know, I know - boooo overdone!) More the Book of Eli and Jericho type Apocalypse more so than zombie type that we see in Walking Dead. My plot is a pretty heavy mash up of taking pokemon and dumping it in the world that was the over all scenery for The Book of Eli. I hope that doesn't lose me any credit as a writer (obviously my scenery inspiration credit goes to that movie) - it's just what /really/ inspires me. The setting is some few decades past the year of the "last" pokemon league, as the were disbanded as the economy crumbled and resources were thin. Pokemon were now used as workers, and any type of recreational battling that wasn't purely for self defense was frowned upon. However, there still are some people who refuse to believe it's over. In the "new world," pokemon are divided into 3 categories: Inedible Defense, Inedible Worker, and Edible. So, unfortunately, if your pokemon is not rock, ghost, or steel - it's food, and if it's not your food - someone else is going to make it theirs. The regions have been too built up with new towns to fit any large sustainable farms. sooooooooooooo, that brings us to my main character - Tori. Tori is a mid-twenties female "trainer" who was raised by a gardener mother and fighting pokemon trainer father. Her mother, being a gardener, raised her family, as well as the family's pokemon, to be mostly herbivores. Tori, at her introduction, is at the beginning of her "adventure" and has two pokemon: Growlithe: a pokemon given to her by her father to "keep her safe - keep her warm" (his words to the growlithe) and Torterra: Her grandmother's pokemon that was passed down to her mother, and then to her. It is a very old pokemon, an though it can still get around just fine, and fight when need be, it is much happier dozing off. This pokemon is mostly used as a portable garden, as it's back can sustain plant growth. I've toyed with ideas of what exactly she's going on an adventure for, and what I've come up with so far is that, similar to book of eli, there is a city of "elders" way off. I've considered it being the original elite 4 + red, and Tori's attempt is to convince them to restore the pokemon league and bring their powerful pokemon out of hibernation and attempt to restore order and convince the masses to find ways to rebuild civilly. But ^ that is way off, and will probably take me forever and a decade to actually get to 8D.... Some random tidbits of things that are different in this world. Large structures like pokemon centers and gyms were forced into makeshift shelters when disasters forced people out of their homes. Similar to the scenery at some shelters after the US's hurricane katrina - some were far less than safe and thefts, rapes, and murders run rampant. This caused most "good" people to be forced out of the shelters, and what is left is colonies of criminals waiting to prey on naive travelers thinking that the pokemon center or gym is their sanctuary. Most of the good people, including pokemon center staff, have now been forced underground and there is an elaborate network of messengers that have created ways of passing medicine, vegetation, and injured pokemon undetected. (note: Electricity is still available but it is rare. Thieves [team something? who knows] will often use their own electric pokemon to follow electrical pulses of other electric pokemon being used to sustain power - so it's best to do without, or if you need it, to use very little very quickly) umumumum.... .___. yeah. I hope it's not too cliche? ^^; |
Hii PC FF&W community~!
I'm Michael and I'm brand new here. Fan Fiction and writing are going to be my main thing in my time here at PC and I'd like to begin my first project ASAP, so I'd like to get some input on an idea that's been floating around in my head for the last few days. A brief disclaimer: I typically don't do all OC or mostly-OC stories, but this one has really got me thinking and I'd like to give it a shot. Basically, my plot begins in the real world for a brief period of time. Grady Myers, the story's protagonist, is a seventeen-year-old guy and just beginning his senior year in high school. He's still a huge Pokemon fan and a bit of a "geek." He's shy and kind of socially awkward. He's not very popular and doesn't like large groups of people. He used to have a close group of friends and they all used to love all things Pokemon: Battling and trading each other in the games, watching the anime, playing the trading card game, reading the manga. They are all vastly different in personality now and have grown apart through the years. One common childhood love reunites Grady and his three one-time friends in the strangest of ways when a twist of fate brings these friends together in the same place, at the same time. An inexplicable accident knocks them out cold and sends them to an undisclosed location. When they come to, they're sprawled out in the middle of a forest. A series of events (to be left alone until I actually right my story) leads them to realize they have somehow ended up in the Pokemon universe. This, however, is not the Pokemon universe they thought they had known in their childhood. It is far from it. Things don't always turn out well. People die. Pokemon run rampant. Sometimes Pokemon don't just "faint". Pokemon deemed good for food are bred for slaughter and harvesting. A real crime syndicate by the name of Nightshade epitomizes evil. They don't just steal Pokeballs from trainers. They kidnap, take ransoms, run the black market, and turn to excessive violence. That's the other thing, they come armed. Fully automatic assault rifles, handguns, and explosives are common loadouts for the typical NightShade grunts. They encompass the true criminal, and the worst part is their connections to high-ranking officials leaves them completely free from the law. Becoming a Pokemon trainer is not an ideal occupation here and is certainly not something for a 10-year-old kid like Ash. Seeing as they have no way home, and being completely unaware of their area, they wander off and come across a man by the name of Dayan Aspen. They make up a story about how they're from another region and that they're lost. When Dayan begins to question them, Grady tells him they're looking for the local Pokemon professor and wish to receive their first Pokemon. Dayan, being that professor takes them back to his lab and their journey begins. Basically, my idea here is still in a draft-type stage. I just wanted to get out the few ideas I'd strung together for this story and plan on building on it from here. I figure I want to make it kind of dark and ominous, but at the same time I want it to have its lighter moments. I plan on using a lot of sarcasm and humor throughout. I still haven't thought about what to call this region yet, but I am working on that. This will have mostly the same basic gym leader thing but it will have the tournament-based league championship like in the anime. Battles will be a lot more violent and gory. People and Pokemon alike will die. People will experience trauma and psychological issues. It will probably have adult themes and will have strong language. Anyway, the actual story will basically keep swapping around between their quest with the pokedex/gym badges, their altercations with Nightshade, their in-group issues, and a few side story things. It may or may not have a romantic twist added to it. I just haven't decided that yet. The story will probably be pretty long. In prior experience, my writing will start of with a like 800-1000 word first chapter, and each chapter will get longer and longer, so this could turn into a pretty huge story when I actually start it. I don't know if I've done a very good job with this post. I usually just start writing, so I'm not sure if Idid a good job communicating my idea. I hope to get at least some kind of response, though, even if it is negative! Thanks~! |
@ TrainerTori, can't comment much on it being based on the Book of Eri or whatnot due to not having read it. =p Nonetheless:
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The premise of them being in the Pokemon world but 'not as they know it' is one that holds potential but also one that has been done before. You'd also want to think through how come the league system is running as before when everything else is going so badly, and Pokmon frequently get badly injured/die, etc. I don't think it'd be at all easy to pull that off, so it may require some brainstorming. Just in case I'll say to try not to have it just dark for the sake of it (and same for you debating having that 'romantic twist' or not too). Also: be sure that if you're having people from the real world teleported to this Pokemon world that this theme is consistent through the story. Otherwise you might as well just be using characters from the world, and it is as said something that has a fair bit of potential in it. |
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The specific scenario I had in mind is where Tori needs Fly, but the person who has it refuses to hand it over without a whatever badge (previous generation badge). So, being naive, she stomps on over to the pokemon gym and is greeted by squatters rather than the gym leader she's looking for. Well it turns out that the "current gym leader" (or who should have been) has basically given in to these squatters, allowing them to abuse the gym as long as they basically offer them protection from others. (Gym leader could defeat these squatters, but would rather not spend the rest of his life just defeating people to keep out of his gym, so he'd rather make a deal with one group, and let them fight his battles) I imagine it's something like a grass gym, but it's been so destroyed that Tori walks in thinking it's ground/rock. Anywho, she gets attacked and basically captured by the squatters and is kicking, screaming, and flailing like mad. Mr. pathetic "current gym leader" is all "let her go, she's here to talk to me" viola, quick battle, she gets whatever "badge" which actually doesn't even physically exists anymore, so she grabs his jacket in an attempt to drag him out to the person with the HM. He slips out of it but she figures his jacket is better proof of a defeat than nothing, so she takes that as proof and he chases her, so when she gets back to the person with the HM, they're all like "you have no gym badge" tori is all glare-face at "current gym leader" and he makes the person hand over the hm. *hufhufhuf* sorry if that was really wordy. Everything is still up in the air, so that may be kinda confusing as you read it, but hopefully it makes a little sense at to why that clause was there? Quote:
So if you've got any suggestions, shoot them my way! The only thing I can think of is just horridly cliche and I hate it. Basically, unlike the games, I imagine that the "elite 4" have all of the powerful legendary pokemon. Not some random kid who just happened to catch it :B With the fights for resources, people are turning on each other and destroying what is left. Tori, being raised a vegetarian and "farmer/gardener/whatever" is wanting the world back with farms, reserves, etc. And she's always wanted to be a pokemon trainer, and she's just pissed that the world has come to a place where that's not an option anymore XD so she's just like FINE THEN, ILL JUST MAKE YOU MAKE THE POKEMON LEAGUE. In her "life" right now, she can't do anything. She can't be a pokemon trainer like her dad, she can only farm these teeny little space on the back of a torterra with her mom, so she's just had enough. So she's thinking she can convince the elite 4 and their super magical pokemon to basically "settle" petty disputes between cities, destroy dilapidated areas and rebuild them with renewable resources. (ie: put in "pokemon-made" lakes, feilds, etc) Because currently, Elite 4 and a small town of people are just cooped up in their little happy city with their teenie gardens, sustaining their tiny sanctuary, and just ignoring the current state of affairs outside. so, in short, she's doing this because she has nothing better to do... Which is REALLY weak :/ so I really need help here, and if that involves changing a bit of Tori's back story - then I'm completely open to it. I'd also considered, on a fleeting whim - though I don't want to include any deep relationships in my story line - I had considered her having had a relationship with one of the elite 4 at some point. (Before they were elite 4, then they became part of it and vanished) And thinks she's going to go convince them. Though I would rather not shed light on that in the story and rather leave that till she gets face to face with him. Quote:
So no, like voltorb and such wouldn't be eaten and would be used for electricity - worker, but at the same time, they could be used as defense. However, like you were saying, in the case of a fire pokemon. It isn't completely white/black. A growlithe would be edible, yes, but it's also a worker. It would be a worker until food was needed. but for pokemon like onyx, voltorb, etc - you can't eat them so they're always going to be defense/worker. So a less than honest pokemon center is going to be more willing to heal your onyx than they are your bidoof, they'd more likely tell you that your bidoof is now of "food quality" and that their resources are going to cost more than his worth in "food" |
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My main plan for this would be that, especially in the beginning, the protagonists would need to realize the world is less-than-perfect. Seeing as though actual inhabitants of the world would be aware that doing stupidly heroic things won't necessarily turn out well, I could see one of the protagonists getting caught up in the moment and doing something of such a nature and somebody that is actually from the Pokemon world would make a snarky and condescending comment, scolding them for their stupidity. Quote:
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That, and the fact they are from the real world shouldn't be a theme that's forgotten later in the story and just used as a beginning. Do they have any inclination to try to get back? What if some do and some don't? How do other pople act towards them acting potentially out of place? And so forth.
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Try thinking on aspects of her backstory then. Why does she want to be a Pokemon trainer so much? Also, what benefits does the Pokemon League offer? As in not just to her but other people too? Maybe that can be examined and used as a motive for her to go request it (not just for herself but for other people/on other people's request as well). And maybe it doesn't have to be exactly 'like it was' as well - maybe she just wants a hybrid League, or one that offers something different that fits this setting better. |
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Well, i'm back and my mind's still wandering.
A couple of ideas are really set solid now, but alas indecision cripples me still... The first is called "Of the Dead". It's a darker pokemon story with a little mix of reality, played on Yamask's pokedex entry. The human protagonist is a boy of about 18 who is assigned as "Death" by Arceus or giratina (i'm not sure just how much of a "demon" figure giratina is). He was once regarded as the most promising young trainer of the generation due to his skill - and he raised his pokemon without going on a journey. But when Team (undecided) attacked him and came after his prize pokemon after he had been interviewed on a news program, his pokemon sacrificed themselves to try to save their trainer. Rather than seeing this as an act of faith and loyalty, the boy though the was a horrible trainer for letting his pokemon die (yes, die - not faint) and refused to keep another pokemon ever again. The secondary protagonist is an immortal hybrid lucario with a difference. As opposed to the usual and cliche "human with lucario's powers" he's a "lucario with no powers", fighting using a sword. He was respected due to his hardcore training and his perseverance even though he was weak - but shunned because he was slowly growing more human like. In a rivalry battle over a potential mate, he was killed by his opponent. But in death and as he approached Arceus, Arceus told him he was neither a pokemon or a human, and had no place to put him without causing damage in the afterlife's delicate hierachy. Thus - Arceus sent him back to the land of the living, essentially ignoring the fact that he died and pretending it had never happened. Since then he's been immortal - but he's still powerless. When he was revived, his clan thought he was cursed and he was exiled. The human becomes the reaper in exchange for one of his dead pokemon to be returned to him - but in a cruel twist of fate, he is given a mask. It's much like a mask of a Yamask - but it is shaped like an absol's face. When he puts it on, it merges with him and his own personality is merged with his dead-absol - thus he has the memories of both, as well as his absol's dark powers and a big scythe. He is slapped together with the lucario at Arceus'/giratina's request - the lucario being drawn in by the promise of power as a reward and the human being bound by his soul to do as Arceus/giratina bids. Their quest is essentially to hunt down Yamask which have broken out of their ruin prison and possessed people. The yamask have possessed people and turned them into ghostly demon-like monsters, and the human and Lucario have to stop them. The Yamask may even be not human souls, but pokemon souls who have broken free of death and manifested themselves within Yamask. Thus when a human is possessed, they become a hybrid of whatever pokemon that yamask used to be Pokemon actually "die" in this story. It works on a principle that all pokemon have natural armour - much like "shields" in a sci-fi film or video game - which is an inner energy which coats the body. The same energy that lets pokemon harness super-strength and generate special attacks. A pokemon's natural armour absorbs serious damage from attacks. When the pokemon "faints" its natural armour falls, and it becomes as frail as a human - allowing it to be killed by anything as simple as a knife. Normally when a pokemon faints it is returned to keep it safe, but if it isn't returned then it can be killed permanently and cannot be brought back. The second is called "Stasis". It follows the story of a boy who's a genius. He once fell into a coma after an accident, but was conscious the whole while and spent two entire years simply thinking about how the world worked. Through his intelligence and the time he spent, he gained a comprehensive understanding of how time and space works - thus allowing him to manipulate it to an extent. He was then approached by a man who paid him to reconfigure a master ball, claiming his brother was dying and he needed a ball that could capture a human - thus keeping his brother intact until a cure could be found for him. Immediately after the boy fixed the ball - the man captured him. The story begins 2500 years in the future, when the ball is finally opened again. Humans have become extinct all but for him. After his dissapearance, a breakthrough in genetic science meant people and pokemon began interbreeding - resulting in fertile offspring and thus interweaving pokemon and human over the course of a few hundred years. 2500 years later, there are no pure humans left, and all pokemon are anthropomorphic (humanoid). The jist of things is - the human is being hunted by an "imperial" type force led by a dictator, and so flees to a rebel army to remain safe. Since he's stuck, he's forced to work with the rebels in their fight against the imperials. But what he doesn't realise, is that the "evil dictator" is actually a clone of himself - formed from a freak accident after he was captured - who has used his power to stop his process of aging. The evil him is the bastion of all that is logic, and it is after the boy's pokeball so he can use it to clone himself. The boy from the past stands for logic also, but as he progresses on his adventure he learns the value of ethics and morality - even when they aren't logical solutions. So then there's a big rebel/imperial war scenario that he's caught up in. He's frail - being human - but he can manipulate time/space around inanimate objects which he uses offensively. The "Stasis" title refers to the pokeball system. That a pokeball freezes the pokemon's body and mind inside it - so a pokemon could be returned and then released a million years later, but the pokemon would only feel like it has been an instant. Also, abstract nouns are personified as auras and living forces. Luck, love, time, space - they're all cosmic entities which can be communicated with and controlled if a person knows how they work. Partway through the story - his intelligence and a chance occurence come together and he has a sudden realisation. He wakes up the next day with a complete understanding of luck and chance, and he can use it to his advantage - winning poker games, generating improbable circumstances that favour him - so forth. Also, many pokemon tend to be "half this and half-that". Eg. A mightyena that's a child of a mightyena and houndoom may be able to use flamethrower and other fire attacks due to slight adjustments in its anatomy as a result of its parenting. 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Pokemon Fanfic Idea up for grabs
Hey guys, I joined the pokecommunity today to offer a pokemon fanfic idea that I've had for quite a while and have developed quite a bit myself. I used to write my own stories, and I would do this myself if I had an infinite amount of time in a day, but since that is not the case, I would like to "pass down" this idea of mine, so to speak, to someone who is interested. I'm someone who thinks of ideas/stories randomly and sticks with them for months at a time, always imagining out scenes and aspects to the story when I'm bored and have nothing to do. So, if any of you are active pokemon fanfic writers and have a passion for it, and would like to have an idea to give you quite the headstart, you just might have found what you are looking for.
So let's get to it. What is this idea of mine? It is quite lengthy if I tell you all the details, but I will list the most important and interesting parts immediately. Remember the trailers for Pokemon Black2/White2, showing a more serious, badass, and dramatic side to Pokemon? One that is more truly to, I guess you could say, traditional mainstream Anime standards like Naruto, Bleach? Well, this story would embody that exact same feeling and energy (as it was inspired from the trailers). The story takes place as an alternative pace of events to Black2/White2, 2 years later after the events of Pokemon Black and White. There is a group of three that make up the major characters (two guys, one girl), and one main. Team Plasma has succeeded much more than one would think - they now are well in the process of controlling all Unova - that includes the pokemon, and the trainers. Their goal is the cliche rule Unova but in addition, to have every trainer and pokemon (even the wild) under their control, so that all Unova's future generations of pokemon and people will be under the Plasma Empire. This Team Plasma is more serious than the one presented in the games, and they've been so successful because - get this - they are working in conspiracy with the gym leaders! The Gym Leaders are bad guys in this story - each ruling over their city or town, carrying out the plans of Team Plasma in their area, conducting studies on how to effectively control wild pokemon, and inducing fear into their citizens. From here, I will list more things for the sake of trying to keep it short( I know I can ramble on) - Gym Leaders working with Plasma - Elite Four, and Champion in on it as well, the strongest trainers. - Select trainers from the past (Hugh, Cheren, Heartbreaker Charles, Alder, N) part of a small and relatively weak resistance organization, with their own stories of what's happened since Hero v. N (Zekrom v. Reshiram) - Gym Leaders from other regions included (Flannery, Jasmine, Brock!) - Infiltration and Mission-Style invasion/combat of Gyms instead of "walk in and fight" - Increase of physical strategy in fights than normal pokemon games/show - Some moves tweaked a bit to add greater, cooler effects - 17 Gym Leaders - One for each type, included, which must be defeated - Kyurem, Ghetsis all still there - Drama between and among characters, ie. main girl character is Grimsley's little sister. This will be like an undercover sort of effort to overthrow the growing effects and success of Team Plasma, the team sort of stumbling in on it at first and then gaining momentum and support along the way. The team: (names can be changed, up to you) and their pokemon: [note that they all start with one pokemon, and catch more pokemon and evolve them as they go on] 1. Pierce - Arcanine (Ace) - lifetime companion - Lucario (Roy) - noble brawler - Sharpedo (Wrecker) - frenzied aggressor - Metagross (Nixon)- courageous protector - Gliscor (Raymond) - mischievous prankster - Braviary (Hunter) - confident warrior 2. Jackson (Best Friend and Competitor at times) - Floatzel(Rich) - lifetime companion - Gallade (Ambius) - reliable soldier - Houndoom (Hellhound) - cocky fighter - Skarmory (Noblewing) - Sharp-minded one - Rampardos (Spike) - Vicious Ripper - Beartic (Zero) - fights to protect Jackson 3. Rina (found along the way, rich girl who knows how to fight herself in ninja-like combat. Royalty and Bad-ass) - Roserade (Walter) - lifetime companion, like a butler to her, fulfills her every need. The only male on the team. Her trusty servant. - Lopunny (Valencia) - trusted pokemon when Walter's strength just isn't cutting it - Crobat (Shuriken) - High-energy pokemon, known to spin wildly while using steel wing, night slash, cross poison and the like to create a spinning shuriken effect, striking many enemies while hurling itself through the battlefield. - Weavile (Kunai) - Sneaky feline, known to use ice shards from its claws, and throwing them as projectiles. - Starmie (Lustra) - valuable jewel, psychic and water attacker. - Chandelure (Delura) - Vicious specialized attacker, will-o-wisping and phasing through walls and electronic devices to render them useless. I hope I haven't been too specific and haven't bored you all by now, but if anyone is interested in learning more, or has at the very least any further questions, please feel free to contact me via pm here or my email address [email protected] |
Well, it's me again, the person who starts projects but never finishes them. And yes, I'm thinking of starting another project.
I've decided to call it Fiore 2.0, and it's set a few years after the events of Pokemon Ranger. The idyllic Poke-paradise has fallen apart, and Pokemon have started attacking and killing humans, since most of Fiore is untouched nature, the Pokemon are more "wild". Many people have fled, even most of the rangers. The only ones still there are the rangers in Fall City, Fiore's largest and only city. To make matters worse, the Go-Rock Quads decided their superstar status was getting boring and decide that while Fiore's weak, they'll take over. And so it falls to the completely mismatched group of Fall City Rangers to save the region. Then, just because everything wasn't confusing enough, the alternate universe versions of the rangers who are part of Team Dim Sun appear in their universe. (I can't tell if Palkia or Giratina would have the powers to send them there). This will be a comedy, as it really won't take itself seriously. For one thing, one of the characters was raised by Mudkips, her AU version was raised by Tepigs, and three of the AU characters are a background character from Wreck-It Ralph and two Vocaloids. |
I have this, odd idea, in which Leaf, Kris, Lyra, May, Dawn, Hilda and Rosa have a girl's night out, i.e. they try to pair their best guy friends together with other guys. Oh, and apparently Leaf's a magician, Kris likes swimming, Lyra's a gamer girl, May's into girly, cute stuff, Dawn likes to sit in fridges, Hilda's a tomboy, and Rosa likes to eat pie...
I don't understand either, it just happened.... |
I had this idea.
What happens when you put down that Pokemon game? To the character you're controlling? Does the world just stop, or does only the character? One day, a trainer just stops. He stops moving, he stops talking, he stops everything. They've seen this before and know their master tends to do this, sometimes for days on end. Three years pass and their master hasn't awoken. They are naturally disturbed, trying to get him to do something, anything. The Pokemon's bonds with their human is tested, as years pass and wild Pokemon keep trying to kill their master for food. The psychic Pokemon says he has very little brain-wave activity, confirming that he is essentially a statue. As each Pokemon remember fond memories, they struggle to decide to leave him or move on. Genre: Horror/Tragedy POV: Multiple, usually first person Length: About eight chapters including prologue and epilogue OC's: Yes, the trainer and his team of six |
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Few questions that come to mind - do the Pokemon know anyone else with the same 'ailment' as their trainer? Do other trainers notice during the three years, or indeed in the past? And does the trainer maintain the same appearance when staying on the spot like that for so long? Could certainly make for an interesting read, and indeed a rather unique set up. Worth a shot! |
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Actually, it's entirely possible that I dreamed that story rather than read it, but the point stands: that's the closest thing I can think of to this, and it was fantastic. Your concept is the same flavour of awesome, and I'd love to see it come to fruition. I would have to point out, though, the high likelihood - assuming other people in the Trainer's universe are of the same independent mind as the Pokémon - that someone would find him and attempt to move him, or interact with him or his Pokémon. Perhaps that could be avoided by putting him in some kind of deserted location - or maybe you want to explore that, I don't know. Actually, you probably don't want to explore that; it's too much for such a tightly-constructed story as this one seems to be. F.A.B. |
http://www.pokecommunity.com/showthread.php?p=7636085#post7636085
I am having writer's block on my InuYasha story. Can someone help me out here? |
What specifically are you stuck on? Are you not sure where the plot is going next? Or is it that the wording doesn't work for what you're trying to say?
If it's the plot, do you have an idea of where you'd want your characters to end up? The end goal, if you will. Did you make an outline of the plot before or while writing to get an idea of what would happen? Before someone can help you, you need some more information on what the problem is. The advice could change depending on what's giving you writer's block. |
The problem is I don't know what should happen next, at all. You would probably need to read what I got so far to help me out.
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Plan ahead a bit and try to figure out a goal that you want your characters to accomplish. Perhaps you want them to meet a certain enemy, maybe share a kiss, or maybe end up in some special place (or time!). And then - daydream and really feel what the characters are like. What would you do if you were them, and had a higher power (the author) nudging them to get to a special goal?
It's in times like these that having a baggage of roleplaying comes in handy ^^ Just my tip. |
Well that only works when someone will roleplay with me. I don't like the way this site roleplays. I like roleplaying one on one. And I like R rated roleplaying.
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You don't have to roleplay. You can think over the direction your story went and where you want it to go. If you have an idea how you want the story to end, you can look at where your characters are now and think of some way to nudge them back in that direction.
You say you don't know what will happen next. Is it just what will happen immediately next? Or the entire future plot is unknown? |
I'm having trouble with what should happen in the next chapter. I don't know what to do with it. All I know is it is leading up to my OC Sakura dying in the same way Midoriko did.
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