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My two Ideas for story
I have two ideas for story, I want to Write and I'm not sure which one I shall write, so I want there advice and pick the story I shall write about.
Here it's my two ideas. ~Why couldn't you love me, like I love you{A Amourshipping story}~ Bio: Ash, Serena, Clemont and Bonny are in Lumiose City after Ash won the Kalos League and finnaly become Pokemon master so have been his life long dream and his dream have finnaly come true after hard Battle With Alan and his charizard, so mega eveloution douring the Battle, it was not easy Battle but Ash was finnaly able to beat Alan's mega charizard and become Pokemon master, Ash and his friends was now in Lumiose City Pokemon Chenter when Ash got suprized visit from his long time bestfriend Misty and Brock, it was then Serena realishe at Ash don't love her, like she love him, who knows that might change. ~What must I do for to win Your heart and get you to love me{A Pokeshipping Story}~ Bio: This take Place two years after Ash won the Kalos League and become master. Ash it's now back in Pallet town where he was thinking about his future and what he it's doing next, it was then Misty come visit him for to tell him her good News, it was after Misty told Ash her News at Ash decide to win Misty heart and get Misty to love him again. Who it's Misty dating? and whould Ash be able to win Misty heart in the end? So that was my two ideas and which story do you think are best? |
Any story's a good story if it's interesting. More importantly, you really should work on your grammar or at least get a beta reader to help you if your above post is any indication of what we might expect grammar-wise.
As an aside which is strangely more to the point, I prefer the Pokeshipping story. Maybe because I only ever really watched the first three series of Pokemon. |
Do you know where I can ask for somebody to be beta Reader for my story?
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Hmm... We used to have a beta reader thread here somewhere but I guess that's gone now. Mmm... If you want I'll take a look at your first chapter though I can't guarantee I can help you with the rest. I do encourage you to try and improve your grammar in your own time though since a beta reader can only go so far.
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Hmm that would be hard since I don't know how to fix my grammar since I'm not good in English. I Guess I for Write the story in my Language and later translate in English.
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English isn't my first language either. But trust me, the fact that you're writing in English right now is an advantage that most non-English speaking people don't have. If you can understand it you can definitely fix it -- that goes for any language.
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Hey Amourshippingfan23, so I moved your thread into the Plot Bunny thread as this is the place to get feedback for your ideas.
Onto the ideas themselves. I admit Pokemon shipping hasn't caught my interest in a long while, but I'm sure the amour/pokeshippers would enjoy them. Couple things I want to point out, though. For your amourshipping story, will you have Serena and Ash at the end, or will it be one sided? Your pokeshipping fic, is the good news Misty having a new boyfriend/about to get married since you mention Misty seeing someone else I do agree with Miz en Scene in finding someone to help you smooth out the grammar. We have some Pokemon anime writers here, perhaps you can ask them to help you. |
Didn't want to make a new thread for it, but I need some help. I'm writing a fanfic featuring an original trainer as a castaway. The trainer comes from a region where gen 6 & 7 Pokemon and megas are unknown but they do exist on the islands she washes up on. For that reason, I can't call the Pokemon by name but describe them in detail.
I was wondering if you can name the Pokemon described in the following passage so the reader knows what Pokemon I'm talking about without presenting continuity issues. If you can, then I'll feel relieved since I did it right: Quote:
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I want to say... Litleo and Pyroar? I'm not too up to date on gen 6 Pokemon, I admit, but going through a list and comparing attributes seems to hint at those two being the most likely candidates.
People probably more familiar with gen 6 might get it, though I can't say for sure. If I might offer some advice, and if I'm right about their names, try to emphasise their feline characteristics more since those are their most prominent characteristics. You mention that they're "feline", which is a start. You could also describe the way they act (playful, proud, pounce: all words you could use to describe cats) or even compare them to other cat-like Pokemon (there are quite a few I'm sure). If your world contains actual, real world animals then you can just straight up compare them to lions. |
Yep, it's indeed describing a Pyroar.
On your other point, I actually did include what you suggested. I'm not fully done writing that sequence and I didn't want to post an unfinished and somewhat violent scene but the context of the excerpt is that the Pyroar pride actually attack the protagonist and I wrote it like a lion attack. So plenty of opportunities to describe lion-like behavior, such as roaring, leaping onto large prey, slashing, biting.... On top of that, I also included allusions to their typing (Fire/Normal), so hopefully it's enough: Quote:
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A new pokemon series/movie (Xerzus Wrath
Hello everyone, today I came up with an Idea for a new Pokemon series/ movie and I hope you like it.
So , Its like this; While Ash is traveling trough a big city (one that hes never been before), he sees a Research building surrounded by some people(Team Apocalypse maybe?, if you could, please suggest me another name, because i find it too basic.) that captured all the research team. While they escort the research that fights back, Team Apocalypse are using strong Pokemon to attack the research team so that they will obey. Ash sees everything and is angered by their actions but knows that he cant act alone against this many people but one of the researchers is his father, then he stares and looking at his fathers injuries, he gets mad and uses his Pokemon to rescue his dad. Right after that one member of Team Apocalypse that was in charge (someone with high rank in their team) fights Ash alone (I could also make up some dialogs for them later ) He uses Yveltal, the legendary Pokemon to fight Ash, In the fight , Pikachu is severely injured and almost dies(maybe a bit too harsh ), the same as his others Pokemon that have been injured by Yveltal (The enemy didn't go all-out because it didn't want to attract the attention of the police . Ash faints upon loosing and wokes up in the hospital that was in the city . Standing near his bed , is one of the research team, that was away when they attacked. He tells Ash he is sorry for what happen to him and his father and tells Ash about them, that they are an organization made out of strong trainers and that they are lead by a man named Mr. Lexus that wants to awake a Legendary Pokemon , the strongest Pokemon that can be found on the face of earth (A new legendary, we gotta think of a better name and a lore) Xerzus (I just added the name of the god of destruction and Latin word Anguis witch also means dragon and modified them until i got that name LoL) the Legendary Pokemon that was locked away by a mysterious man centuries ago using 6 legendary Pokemon. with the intent to create a new world where no on will oppose him and where he can continue his experiments on Pokemon and humans to create the perfect being. He also tells Ash that his father was working with the researchers to find the clues about its whereabouts and make sure nobody tries to unleash Xerzus wrath. Ash , inflamed with the desire for revenge he starts to gather his strongest Pokemon and start the search of those legendary Pokemon that the mysterious man used to lock away Xerzus . That's all for now :), tell me what do you think and if you would like, tell me if I should add something. I already thought about an ending. I want Ash here to be more vengeful , serious , with a will of fire to save his dad and the hole world., I thought about those 6 legendary Pokemon the mysterious man used should be one from each legendary Pokemon that already exist , for example one from each trio and duo of legendaries Pokemon. You guys could help me choose them if you would like or do you think it would be too much to create another 6 legendaries Pokemon? I want to hear your opinions about every think, especially if this should be a movie or series |
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Hi,thanks for moving it to the right thread. You asked me why doesn't his dad go to talk to Ash, well his father is captured by Team Apocalypse along with all researchers except that one that went to Ash because he wasn't there at the building when Team Apocalypse attacked. Also I decided to "create" a new Pokemon because I wanted Xerzus to be kind of unstoppable when faced alone and that it requires 6 legendary pokemon to stop him which would make it an ultimate challenge for Ash. Oh, and I decided that Team Apocalypse should own Yveltal because it kinda resembles an "Bad" pokemon , just like their intentions.
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Just wrote the prologue for Eric Damon's origin story, and before I post the first official chapter, I need to figure some things out.
I've taken plenty of inspiration from both The Jungle Book and Tarzan. Chapter One will begin with him at the seven-year anniversary of him being discovered by Ajagar, who brought him into Mahatma's pride. This story arc will have Eric trying to figure out who he is, and there will be plenty of Pokémon to help him along the way, such as Shufo the Diggersby. (Yes, it's a play on the name Shofu of "Diggersby, tho?" fame) Also, Spoiler:
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Lately I've been mulling over an idea for an episodic fanfic. I was thinking about the episode structure of shows like Cowboy Bebop and Ghost in the Shell: Stand Alone Complex where there are "plot episodes" and "standalone episodes" interspersed between them (there's a subtle difference between "standalone" and "filler," but I'm not going to get into that right now). The plot episodes tell an overarching story, and the standalone episodes are usually focused on individual characters, or particular facets of the world they live in. I think this kind of structure would be perfect for a Pokemon show, and since I'm not a screenwriter I'm wondering if it could work as an episodic novel.
So here's my idea: There are two trios of main characters. One consists of young trainers on a journey together through the Johto region, and the other consists of adults who are done journeying but whose careers involve Pokemon to varying degrees. The overarching plot involves all six. The main theme is that the world looks much less dangerous to optimistic, over-empowered children than to responsible adults, and that managing children's freedom-to-danger ratio is a difficult balancing act. The Characters: (Spoiler tag'd for length only) Spoiler:
Some of you may recognize five out of these six characters from short stories I've written for the SWC over the years. This fic will be in a different continuity, meaning... Spoiler:
...and other details will change, like how Jason and company will all be from Johto. They'll still be essentially the same people though, just more fleshed out. The Main Story: The main story kicks off with Derek, who's working deep undercover with the police to take down Team Rocket. His job becomes much more difficult when he spots his younger cousin Jason along with two other kids trying to stalk and take out a pair of Grunts. He abandons his present objective to get them out of harm's way, but he learns that this is only a temporary fix and that he'll have to do something to keep them away from Team Rocket. He can't order them to do so because he can't blow his cover to anyone outside of the police; he doesn't want to go to their parents lest they force them to end their journey and stay at home; and it doesn't help that he's terrible at talking to kids. In desperation he goes to his outgoing younger sister Jen, thinking that Jason will be more likely to listen to her. Derek's situation is complicated further when Jen's more inquisitive friend Hanna gets involved as well and discovers exactly what Derek's job is. In exchange for keeping his employment a secret and trying to dissuade the kids, Hanna wants to assist his sabotage efforts directly, and for that she wants him to steal her some of Team Rocket's technology for analysis. What was supposed to be solo-mission is rapidly becoming a team-mission despite his best efforts to stop it. At the very least he wants the pre-teens out of the picture before they learn what a huge difference there is between the Grunts and the Executives. On the other side of this are three brave kids who want to do the right thing in the vein of the heroes the reader is familiar with from the games and anime. But underneath the surface there is doubt. Jason doesn't want to admit to himself that he's mostly doing this to prove his (unexceptional) battling skills to the others. His friend Travis eventually realizes that they're in over their heads but he is afraid of being seen as a coward. And although their relatively new friend Krissy isn't lacking in confidence, she is seriously thinking about disappearing before they... Spoiler:
As for structure, I'm thinking the fic will begin in medias res with the first chapter being a plot-chapter. The plot-chapters will take place chronologically later than the standalone-chapters, which will be character-focused stories that lean more on the slice-of-life side. The intent is that the standalone-chapters create a fuller picture of what makes the characters tick and ultimately adds gravity to the climax of the plot-chapters. So here are my main questions to you all: Does this premise seem stale to you? I'm hoping it seems like more than just "three OTs are fighting Team Rocket." Do you like the idea of a fic that alternates between being a collection of short stories and something more like a proper novel? I think that starting with the main plot described above will be more interesting than starting with when Jason gets his first Pokemon and the trio is formed; do you agree? I also haven't decided on a title. The first one I thought of was Will Somebody Stop These Kids? but that feels off somehow. Maybe I'll name the plot-chapters "Will Somebody Stop These Kids? - Part 1" etc. in the style of Haruhi Suzumiya episode titles--basically the standalone ones have unique titles and the plot ones have a shared title. |
re: icomeanon6's ideas
The format you describe is certainly not a rarity and as you mention it is done with (and works well with) Ghost in the Shell: Stand Alone Complex. It is still done but less notable due to the medium format, with other shows, one example I'd say is notable is Batman Beyond's first season (ca. 1999), one could argue it was done with some spy procedurals of the 2000s like Alias. There is no particular reason I could see it not working with an episodic novel except for story length constraints, as this format can increase the feeling of arc fatigue. Now, before I get onto the idea proper, I just want to say one thing. Quote:
And *now* on to the idea proper: the plot idea is, basically, good. I'm not sure how much of it is doable within novel-style story constraints, depending on how much of the freedom-to-danger ratio you want to work with it can get somewhat long because, simply put, sometimes consequences (and danger) take their time. Think an injury while hiking with your Pokémon. It might mean little now, but if for some reason it healed wrong or it triggered a different subyacent issue... you won't hear the beginning of it for a while. Setting-wise, you might need to account for some things. Like what are 11-year-old children doing openly and repeatedly antagonizing Team Rocket. Given that your story theme is specifically children in danger, you need to somehow justify in-universe if children (not "Red" or "Gold", who are special cases, but "in general") are capable and allowed to just go and do that. If this is a world where children can regularly make criminal teams stumble, it stands to reason there is not much adult worrying about them being "in danger"; if it is not, and your three children get away with it because they are Special™, then you run the risk of circling around the issue of Evil Teams being useless to Adults Are Useless, which will instantly defeat your entire premise (because the adult side of the story is about what they have to do, and they are already supposed to be capable if they are *infiltrating* Team Rocket). Given that you plan to use the same adult charcacters for a long term in-story, one variable to play with it properly exposing their different perception of time. For children, everything is an adventure because two weeks is a huge percentage of their awake time; for adults it's just yet another period of lower your head and grind yourself for paycheck. So basically you have to oversee what justifies that your characters even think this can work out, and why is it even perceived as a possibility at a societal level. Regarding where to start, most people recommend starting where the story gets exciting / interesting. I can't recommend that because as a worldbuilder I have learnt that if you do that, you are dragged and slowed down too much by necessary exposition and flashbacks of the mechanics of the world and the motivations of the characters. Of course, I can't recommend either to start where the influence of the story begins, as that might put you too close to a gap in the timeline of events and on events that don't really need focus (the police infiltration - these kinds of operations take months if not years to properly set up). As a middle point, I'd recommend starting the story at the first crossroad: when the children intervene and that forces Derek's hand. That's the point where you can introduce the most characters or events without any of them stepping on each others' toes, because at that point pretty much every major character involved will have agency. Overall, if you want to give this a spin, by all means do so! Just credit me if for some reason you end up taking my title idea... :p |
I need book advice for a fanfic I'm writing.
Hi! I'm writing a fic about Ghetsis being kidnapped by Team Rocket, but I don't know what should happen to him once he's been kidnapped. I need ideas!
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Hey, welcome to the forum! I have as little idea about what should happen to Ghetsis as you do, but here are some questions that I think can you can use to piece it out:
Why did Team Rocket kidnap Ghetsis? Money? Ideological differences? Mistaken identity? Other, unspeakably unseemly reasons? How did Team Rocket kidnap Ghetsis? Is this part of a larger conflict between Team Rocket and Team Plasma? Does Team Plasma know their leader's been kidnapped? Why couldn't they stop it, and what are they doing about it? What kind of resources does Ghetsis have at his disposal? Does he have any of his Pokemon with him, or did they take everything and have him chained to a wall? Do you want him to try to escape on his own power, by manipulating members of Team Rocket, or by some other means entirely? For that matter, is this told more from the perspective of Ghetsis, Team Rocket, or both? Who are the other characters? What kind of story do you want to write? Is it action-packed and suspenseful? Funny? Tragic? Are you picturing something large in scope or something short and sweet? Is this going to be just the start of a larger story about the two Teams or just about Ghetsis's kidnapping/possible escape? Any of these are fine, but whatever happens to Ghetsis should be something that fits the kind of story you're going for. Hope this helps get your creative juices flowing. Good luck with your story! EDIT: Btw, the main forum's for posting fics, so the mod will probably move this to the Writer's Lounge. |
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I don't have time to check icomeanon6's idea right now but seems Venia offered some suggestions. As for Digimon Kaiser, I haven't check out your fic but inspirations from Jungle Book and Tarzan doe sound fun and has potential. |
Ghetsis and Touko working together?
I'm writing a fanfic about Ghetsis and Touko being forced to work together. I need ideas as to how they would interact with each other, considering their previous endeavors with each other.
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Am curious, will you be working on the Ghetsis being kidnapped by Team Rocket idea you mentioned last time, too? If so, hopefully you'll be able to manage both fics at the same time. Only thing I can think of is maybe there's some sort of antagonist or antagonistic force that forces them to work together. I think I would like it Touko is willing to help if Ghetsis turns himself in with Ghetsis reluctantly agreeing to the terms. If you'll combine those two ideas, though, maybe Ghetsis and Touko will go against Team Rocket together. Of course, if you go that route you'll need to think over why Team Rocket wants Ghetsis. |
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Hoy, so I thought of a Sun/Moon fic idea that will probably be a few parts. Will put it under spoilers though as it contains some Sun/Moon plot stuff.
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...Or Nanu, you know... a cop, can simply inform Grimsley of Skull and their antics. While it sounds boring, it's the event that leads Nanu to inform him that can prove entertaining. Like bobandbill said, interaction is probably best. Grimsley can interact with some grunts, and then Nanu and possibly Acerola can begin telling him of Skull.
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