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Then you could still use your idea.
Or for another idea, have some medicine in a different place that the nurse needs, and it's Paul who offers to go get it. That way, it's not completely like what happened in the show when they were at Viridian City. (Since there is an episode where medicine had to be transferred by Ash and friends.) |
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Just remember to keep Jax's advice in mind. Like I said, the transferring of medicine has been done before, like the power being cut from the Center. If you're worried about doing something that's been done before, then perhaps Paul getting the medicine for a Pokemon or for a human wouldn't be the best way to go.
I can't believe that I skipped over this advice, but take a look at Paul through the course of the anime. Figure out which stage of his character you want to write about (him as a possible abusive trainer? Or later, when his character is more understood?) and take a look at how the anime writers handle him. That way, you'll understand the basis of his character and use that to explore him even deeper in your story. So ask yourself if the Paul you're writing about is at the stage where he's willing to help someone who got hurt, especially if Kairi got hurt through her own fault (because that will make her seem "weak" in his eyes). If he does decide to help her, then work out the reasons why he will through what you know about his character from the show and through what you could add in your story. Like, why would he change an important part of his personality to help this girl? Make sure the reason's a believable one for Paul to use, because you don't want to treat Kairi like she's so special Paul will completely change for her. So, I'll say study Paul in the anime. Look at how he treats the other characters in the show and how he acts. Everything about him that you can see. That way, as was said, you'll be giving more insight into the Paul character that readers are used to from the anime, not a new character who looks like Paul but isn't really him. |
But what if it wasn't Kairi's own fault she got hurt? What if it was Paul's fault she got hurt? Then he'd probably help her cause he'd feel guilty about it.
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I think its one of those situations where he'd help if there's no one else around to help but he wouldn't like it and would complain about it later.
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My Book, Drylor The First Artifact
Hey everyone, this section is for our own creations so I would like to share my most recent one! I just recently got my second book published this month, Drylor The First Artifact. It is about a man that suffers amnesia and as he slowly regains his memory he finds out that his brother has gone hay-wire and has started killing mass amounts of innocent people. Drylor The First Artifact is my second book but the very first I've wrote in the fantasy genre.
I'd like some opinions on what everyone thinks about it so below is what the back of the book says, I am curious if it perks your interests at all and if you saw it in a store if you would pick it up and buy it or put it back on the shelf. When a man wakes up inside a cage that is being carried through an underground city, he has no idea where he is or what has happened to him. As Von, a victim of amnesia, is taken to a jail cell to await his fate amongst elves, humans, dwarfs, gnomes, and halflings, he is told he is a member of the Royal Guard of Genisus. It is not long before he is transported to the palace where he meets an impatient king who eventually returns him to his jail cell while deciding his destiny. As Von’s memory slowly returns, he discovers that he is the only one who can protect Drylor—a world that abandoned him— from its greatest evil, his own brother. Through his journey to the truth, Von meets an unlikely group of friends who are willing to sacrifice everything to help him stop his brother Scarlet from annihilating the only world they have ever known. As Von’s past becomes clear and reveals his future, he soon realizes the only way he can end his brother’s heartless massacres is to find him and kill him. |
Is this fully written or not? You say that it's published, but would still like opinions on how the plot sounds. So I'm not sure if you're actually looking for opinions on the plot to change it, or if you're just advertising your book to gain readers. Because on a quick Google search, it seems like you're just joining every forum that you can, posting a thread like this, and then leaving.
Still, plot ideas go into the Plot Bunny thread, so this will be moved over there. |
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However, your original question was asking whether or not your ideas would work. People are answering that question by telling you things that you should watch out for in order to make it work. (Namely, they're saying that Paul isn't like this in canon and that there's no reason to believe he would act any differently off the camera compared to how he acts on. Because of that, it probably won't work, especially because Paul is a very recognizable and popular character with a personality a lot of fans are familiar with.) Your opinions are stating that you'll make the fic work despite the advice people are giving you. Therefore, there doesn't seem to be much else we can tell you because the way Paul is written is pretty much the one thing that could make or break your idea. So, yeah, you might as well just write it however you feel like tackling it. |
Help Me!!!
I've been writing Fan Fiction for almost two years now. But I've never written a Pokemon story, but I just got an idea for a Pokemon and Kim Possible crossover story. Does this sound like a stupid idea please tell me?
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Merging with the Plot Bunny thread as that's where fic idea feedback and all ought to go.
On paper it could be a good fic but it's really hard to say any more than that due to the lack of information. =p (E.g. would it be done seriously or as a comedy, what format would it be (one shot, chaptered, etc) and so forth - stuff mentioned in the first post really). Depends how you go about it really. |
I plan on it being a chapter story with some comedy and drama elements.
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But how do the two worlds cross together and what does the actual plot entail? I'll admit that I've written my own crossovers just because I wanted to see the two canons collide, but only one of them actually works for two reasons: I can get the characters together easily, and there a plot to go along with it.
How would Kim Possible and the Pokemon world cross together? I'm very foggy on Kim Possible canon, so... But I mean you could write absolute crack fic and just have KP wake up to find Pokemon everywhere, and her mission is to find out why. Or something like that. Take your crossover idea as "What would happen if Kim Possible and Pokemon were combined?" and go from there. Come up with stories and situations for the characters to get involved in and have to resolve. Then once you have a plot in mind, you can ask us how it'll work. Because right now we don't have any information because really, any crossover can possibly work. |
I really thinking about really using her brothers as the main characters. Seeing that they are tech wizs. I was going to have them find a dsi laying around that has a copy Heart Gold in it. They are going to play for a little while and then get bored with it. So then they will decide to bring a Pokemon to life. Then that when Kim Possible would come into play.
Because they bring to life HO-HO and its cause havoc in Middleton. Thanks you guys for the feedback. It really is helping. |
A Fan Fiction Series - Need Comments on Story!
Start: My Life Story
Around a month ago, I had a due date for a form for a course I picked for my next school year, Co-op Education. I went serious on the 3 choices I put on my form, since I was going to be interviewed soon. I picked Animator, Screenwriter, and Music Video Editor. I make flash animations with Maplestory characters, thanks to the character simulator, Bannedstory, and I have been since I turned 12. I wish to get a career that benefits me as a person, and as a Maplestory movie maker. That's why I broke it into the specific careers above. All my life, I was trying to express my imagination to the world. I noticed after I overheard my mom talking to someone a few years ago. Even before making maple videos, I've been doing childish things, such as making the first chapter of a novel (Monster Mysteries :3 ). I have a wild imagination, and it builds up every time I'm alone or taking stroll outside. It's because of this that I decided screenwriting. I wish to express my imagination through creating the screenplays to shows and stuff. ----------- That's where this forum post comes from. The best way to start a career is to get experience prior to actually having one. It started with these stories I do in English. I've never left 9/10s since the beginning of the semester, and I've been getting 10/10s ever since my first 10/10. (Coincidentally the first 10/10 happened after my Co-op form) :D Currently, I'm auditioning for a community production team on youtube, who make Maplestory videos. I'm giving myself a two week deadline from yesterday to make a video idea that I will never be able to animate myself. Now we get to the point of the forum post. End: My Life Story ------------ I had a secondary pokemon series in mind, but I know I will never get anywhere with it in my head, so I'm going to start a fan-fiction. It's based on a slightly older audience than the Ash&Pikachu trilogy, a rating of about 14+. I thought of it this way, because a big population of pokemon fans are only fans of the games, because the show today is too "corny". It seems like a genius idea, because the pokemon world is very well known, and an older audience is all you need for bigger production. :) ----- My series starts with a 15 year old boy, along with an Emolga. A new technology has been developed, and it's been in production as a civilization project for pokemon. The technology is a device that allows pokemon to speak the human language. It had to be safely tested, so only select pokemon get to try it. Only one thing was missing, they needed a normal pokemon to try it out, and not some G.I. Joe trained professional. The boy turns 16, and he's desperate to get some worth in his life. He decides to take his childhood friends, Emolga and two other humans - male and female - on a journey. Their local professor felt these were the perfect people to take the test, especially since they were 16. (The female would most likely seem to still be 15) The boy is already in possession of Emolga, so he just had to receive his pokeball. The other two get their starters. They then get introduced to the new technology, and their pokemon were taken to the lab and technical work was done to be able to speak. The characters get funny feelings when they first experience conversations with talking pokemon. :D Here's where the higher rating comes in; before they start their journey, a secret organization raids the lab. (I thought it would be nice to have one of the antagonists as a dewott with dual razor shells. He could dress like a mix of the new Team Rocket designs and Cad Bane from Star Wars: The Clone Wars.) The evil organization wishes to use the same technology used to give pokemon the human language, to control their minds. They cause a mini war at the lab, and the characters get caught in it. Once it's over, and the pokemon at the lab protect themselves, the protagonists begin their journey. (Other than emolgas, grovyles are my second favorite pokemon, so I gave this part to him) The heroes are required to take a highly skilled grovyle with them, so they can be protected from ambushes like the previous one. (Grovyle would eventually take ownership of the main character) The heroes then become vulnerable targets, considering they are travelling. This creates the conflict you see throughout the series. As Emolga finally polishes his battle skills, the heroes meet, catch and train other pokemon, while at the same time, fend themselves from the evil forces that try to abduct their pokemon for research. Oh yeah! I forgot to mention; what if I said that Emolga, Grovyle, and such talking pokemon were wearing clothes. It would make more sense to me that with civilization, comes society. :) ------ Tell me what you think about this series. I'm sorry for too much about myself, but I'd thought it would be nice to tell everyone about myself before I get started on my objective. |
I'll move this to the Plot Bunny thread if you want feedback on the story summary then.
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Agreeing that this does need some more information to it to help lessen reader confusion.
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So I guess what my problem is with what I know from canon and what you told about your story is that it's like other languages don't lead to civilization. It's only English that makes a society civilized. Another example of this again comes from the Pokemon anime: Team Rocket's Meowth. He talks like a human, walks like a human, and very rarely wears human clothes. He only does when he's trying to enter more into human society (like getting a job). Most of the time, though, he's running around without any clothes on. What does this technology actually do, then? And how would it be used to control minds if all it does is translate languages? And what's with the evil organization? With all that you said, all I'm picturing is one lone Dewott wearing clothes. Is there more people/Pokemon as a part of this organization? Do Pokemon mainly make up this organization, which would need some explanation, especially since canon really tells us that "there's no such thing as a bad Pokemon". Quote:
I think you should think some more on this story idea. You have the start of something, but there's a lot more that needs expanding. The technology, how it works, what it could lead to, how it changes the way Pokemon and humans interact... Those are the main things to think about because of how much the technology could change that world. While keeping in mind how the canon world works, depending on which canon you follow. |
Ok, so I think it's time for me to share my latest brilliance :D
What I'm plotting is basically a crossover between My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, and the Anime canon of Pokemon. The background is that after Team Galactic's downfall, Charon went on to create a new group dedicated to space/time research. Oh, but first the funny part: Equestria is actually a hidden land within the Pokemon world. I have the detail on how this is justified. And basically Ponies and Pokemon split according to legends thousands of years ago. Charon researches these legends and now plans to create a sort of powerful hybrid between an unicorn and a ditto. A ditto would have the most pure and manipulatable Pokemon DNA. Charon also finds out how to transcend the space/time warping to Equestria. However nothing material can go through. This is resolved by him using the powers of Musharna and dreams. The result is that a stream of dreams can go to and from Equestria. The dreams can also be manipulated and materialized thanks to Musharna. Twilight Sparkle, the main Pony character, got caught into the 'dream scheme' because her magical essence forced her dreams to be the strongest and least risky for the operation. So Twilight Sparkle ended up existing in two places at the same time: asleep in Equestria, and under a different time continuum in the Pokemon world under Charon's control. Then some bad genetic engineering stuff happens and she gives birth to Codename: PokèPony. So when the dream stream is shut down, space/time stabilizes and Twilight wakes up with fragments of memories of the dream. Which can be said that it occurred under 'inception' logic, but the dream was real and involved usage of Ph.D Quantum Mechanics and Parabolic Calculus ad nauseum. And... That wasn't the fanfic, that was its background and foundation for its story. I actually don't have a complete plot, but I feel like this is a lot to work with. So basically PokePony is the antagonist. I plan for her downfall to actually be tragic. Twilight Sparkle and her friends manage to teleport to the Pokemon world with the Pony Ruby. The pony ruby also happens to allow Twilight and her friends to change between pony and human form. I then initiate interaction between them and the main Pokemon cast Ash, Iris, and Cilan. Side stories include a little shipping between Ash and Twilight [Ash doesn't know that Twilight is a pony until she has to transform to save his life] and maybe give Ash a tour of Equestria. The main conflict would be that Charon is using PokéPony to steal Pokemon. Ash, Twilight, and co. try to intersect, and [for no details on cause, atm] PokéPony is sent on a semi-psychotic frenzy. Ash and co. conflict with Charon over the search and control of her. She is, after all, Twilight's daughter. So I'm not far from having a complete story. I'll appreciate comments and suggestions. |
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Seriously, DO IT. I gather that the entire bit about Inception and abuse of the laws of quantum physics will be made a bit clearer (with a lot of handwaving) in the fic, but beyond that? I'd read the **** out of this. The only suggestion I can think of revolves around the uncertainty of the plot. While I'd love to see the ponies and Team Ash interact, that plot's going to be your main pillar for supporting this crossover. I guess you can figure things out by asking yourself why Charon needed to make PokéPony and why he wants to use her to steal Pokémon. Once you figure that part out, you'll probably find it a bit easier to go from there. |
Questions for a Story I had Written A Long Time Ago
Once upon a time, I was seriously in love with Pokemon XD: Gale of Darkness. (I'm still in love with it but that's another story.) After I finished it, I thought it would be interesting to see a sequel be spawned out from it, particularly because of its ending and my own speculations about the main bad guys. So what started out as a game idea turned into a story idea. The plot went something like this (bear with me, I no longer have the story in front of me as I write this):
Thirty years has passed since the events of Michael(our hero) and the Snag Machine and the Orre region has been relatively peaceful since then. Cipher literally disappeared from the map and Grandmaster Greevil has long since been dead. Eldes had reformed and now works with Michael in the Pokemon Lab. Michael is now the new Pokemon Professor after the one before him retired and has a son. During this peacetime, Michael decided it was necessary to create an organization to make sure Shadow Pokemon never appear in the Orre region again, aptly named Alpha & Omega. For a while it didn't seem like they were ever going to be needed. Comments and questions are appreciated. |
Moved to the plot bunny thread as this what it is for.
One question I have is if Michael decides how this organisation is made and all then when does that happen during the 30 years gap given he's only a kid by the end of XD...so I imagine it wouldn't have been right away without a lot of help from other people. I also wonder why there's a need for him to use a Pokemon spliced from the DNA of multiple legendaries...and Pokemon like Bannette which aren't really regarded as that strong generally seems a bit odd to me and possibly hard to explain (such as - why use the DNA of a Mewtwo if they had/have a Mewtwo, and if not where did they get such DNA?). (as a note it's also the same name as a E4 member in Kanto which initially confused me because my mind went 'Shadow Lorelei what' XD). This Aiden fellow and the mysterious girl... would they also be a parallel to Wes and Rui in the first game? (As a note I would be curious if you'd touch on those two in the story or not). That and does Michael take part in this as well or would he just leave it up to his son (because around then he'd be 40... which isn't really that old). |
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