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RMXP - Pokemon Shiny Diamond (improved)
http://i487.photobucket.com/albums/rr240/RavenRescueTeam/sd.png ScreeniesThanks for elaynii to give me the logo.. The legend of Dialga, Palkia, and Giratina is beginning.. Introduction Finally! After four grueling years, you -being either Dawn or Lucas- are going to graduate high school! The excitement is in the air as your mother and all of your new friends achieve most prominent things you've ever done. Well, aside from stopping a deranged man from destroying the world in order to create a new, pure one.. graduating high school is pretty close though! As the principle calls your name, you feel your heart thudding in your chest as your make your way up to the stage. As that simple, yet unimaginably important piece of paper is laid into your hands, you can hear the crowd, along with your friends going wild! The ceremony is over, and now, all of the thrills of high school are as well. Now, all there is to do is go home and find a job. Right then and there, you decide that you are definitely not going to work. There's got to be something else you could do! You could always hand around the house, right? Wrong. Your mother would probably urge you to go out and get a job. As you lay in bed, deciding what to do, you hear a small purr. It was your mother's Glameow. At that moment, you knew what you had to do. Sinnoh wasn't the only region out there, right? There was Kanto, Johto, Hoenn, Unova.. There had to be somewhere else! Wait, there is that newly discovered region of Ueno! That is where you will be going to Ueno to become a Pokémon Trainer once more and make some new friends and allies along with some new Pokémon! Story As you enter the new new region of Ueno, you will see many familier faces... Team Plasma, now have a new boss, N, a crazed worshipper, of Giratina, who is determined, to put the world under his feet. As he try's to perfect his new super weapon, the only way, which is to summon Arceus and absorb his powers, he releases an army of mutant Pokemon upon Ueno, to stall the military. Then he sets out to the other regions and starts killing gym leaders. After awhile, he comes back, having been spoken to by Giratina, he is determined to capture you, for you hold the key to Ueno's fate. In the end you will have to choose, will you join Team Plasma, and be a ruler of the world, or will you fight and resist, the choice is yours. Spoiler:
[CENTER]Credits Poccil ~ Pokemon Essentials venom12 ~ Pokemon Essentials DS & OWs Neo-Spriteman ~ New BW Tiles Neo-Spriteman ~ Resized Tiles and Trainer Sprites ~~~~~Pkmn essentials DS credits~~~~~ Luka ~ VS Seq. and mouse model and etc... Cybersam and Astro ~ Mouse model CNG ~ Battle moves select menu Help14 ~ Pokedex Wichu ~ Sprites FL. ~ Eggs Change and Unova Pokemon ~~~~~Help with Neo-Spriteman~~~~~ Dewitty, Kymontian, Calis Project, Bulbapedia.net ~ Help Dewitty, Bulbapedia.Bulbagarden.net, Nintendo, Chocosrawloid, Kymotonian, milomilotic11, and Neo-Spriteman ~ Pokemon BW Trainers ~~~~~Inner Tiles~~~~~ Thurpok ~ Inner tiles Lost to credit Thurpok cuz i lost his name. -----Other----- tebited15 from deviantart ~ Lucas' sprite! (He said no need for credit..) Team Me ~ Everything None ~ Mapper (HIGHEST NEED) 3 places None ~ Scripter (HIGHEST NEED) 3 places Me ~ Spriter (HIGHEST NEED) 2 places Me ~ Beta Tester 0 places Elaynni ~ Introduction and Logo, hope you like them! Flamemaster ~ Story Support Bar: http://img146.imageshack.us/img146/1720/ubd9282.png HTML Code:
Pokemon Shiny Diamond: Playing means fun! Here, visit this link to see new features! http://pokemonshinydiamond.wordpress.com Features Archivements iPhone instead of Pokegear New Region VS sequences BW Tiles A bridge that connects between Ueno and Miho regions ------------ Archivements Name: Poke-Kick HowToGet: Kick a Caterpie at Sunring Town Prize: Potion Name: Gimmie-A-Gift! HowToGet: Get a Ditto from the Mystery gift man at Bigcorn's Pokecenter Prize: Tiny Mushroom Name: xD HowToGet: Answer Vinertion's Man that ask questions all wrong Prize: RageCandyBar and Galactic Key Name: Eevee HowToGet: Get back the Stolen Eevee from Team Plasma Prize: All Eevee evolutions |
the 2nd gen starters for sure!
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Tell me, is my story okay now or still boring?
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Also, you credit them for their tiles, not their help unless they specifically told you how to do things. And use image tags, please |
WTh, your other thread was closed, because of not given the right credits... so you go make another one?
Atleast this time you have the right credits. Although bit a of a improvement... with the tiles.. but mapping and grammar still need a massive improvement... Your mapping style is very weird, try copy the style Nintendo, GAMEFREAK use.. |
At least you gave credits now. Your maps look awkward and too spacious. The houses in games aren't that big. I suggest looking at some mapping tutorials, or hire a new mapper. Capitalization, grammar, and spelling are my main pet peeves. Fix those things and your game looks decent graphic-wise.
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Here is my opinion:
Your plot doesn't sound interesting. I agree with the others by saying your maps are too wide open. I suggest condensing your maps and either A) Add depth to your current plot( You have a starting point but you need to make it interesting) B) Create a new and more interesting Plot or C) Recruit someone else to write a plot for you. The Yagerbomb has been dropped. |
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The 2nd leader, Drake, a Water Type! |
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Here's the trainer maker i used:
<object width="450" height="386"><param name="movie" value="http://backend.deviantart.com/embed/view.swf" /><param name="flashvars" value="id=75399413&width=1337" /><param name="allowScriptAccess" value="always" /><embed src="http://backend.deviantart.com/embed/view.swf" type="application/x-shockwave-flash" width="450" flashvars="id=75399413&width=1337" height="386" allowscriptaccess="always"></embed></object><br /><a href="http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/75399413/">Pokemon Trainer Creator</a> by ~<a class="u" href="http://magicalgirlyossy.deviantart.com/">MagicalGirlYossy</a> on <a href="http://www.deviantart.com">deviant</a><a href="http://www.deviantart.com">ART</a> Here's the trainer maker i used: http://www.deviantart.com/download/75399413/Pokemon_Trainer_Creator_by_MagicalGirlYossy.swf |
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So I'm going to make a comment that's going to be wholly ignored, but what do I care. The story is dull, boring and in no way make any sense, whatsoever. PLEASE read these comments and improve, because it seems like you might have some ideas, but you're not presenting them. |
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@ProdigyX @xCalierz I updated the story. What do you think guys? Oh my! I forgot the Features! New Region New Attacks Some Fakemon Meet Trainers, Leadera, and Elite 4 from the other 4 regions! And Progress! UENO [||||________] 25% Releasing Beta soon! BETA 1 [||||||||||||||___] 97% Editing things! Download link will be at first post or some posts! |
But still, where was the first adventure?
The story has more plot holes than the movie Devil. |
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The first adventure is at Sunring Town. btw. carmaniac didn't post here! |
Then what happened there?
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You get to Mt. Gold and battle team Galactic and they escape. But that's not the last time, it's the first. And you go to an Adventure and go to the Victory Road and you see them the last time. and then they escape, and battle Mars, Jupiter, Saturn, the grunts, and Cyrus and then you see Mark, your rival. The last time. His sprite at my avatar.
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That's pretty much just splicing different official game stories together.
It still doesn't make much sense. |
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KingSnivy, the only way you're going to improve your game, is by listening to other people's criticism. They're only trying to help you, and you ignore them.
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this whole thread is confusing.
storyline is probably less impressive than the official storylines. and that's saying something. Quote:
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What happended to your post that said you were leaving the PC.. and making your own new pc lol?
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Beat Cyrus until he gives up? Lol, thats actually funny. No, its not any better now. A few more sentences that didn't help at all.
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Look, KingSnivy, you truly need to take the advice of those that offer it. They aren't being rude, per se, they're just giving your some constructive criticism; which is vital for a developing game to become successful. I've taken notice that you support my game, Pokémon: Ironed Heart, which I thank you for. Let me ask you this: how do you think it has gotten this far?
It's simple. I have taken the advice and criticism that the other members of this forum have given me to make it a semi-successful game! Now, let me too give you some advice. Just focus on one thing at a time. I can tell you're getting ahead of yourself by adding in features and exciting yourself. While that's all well and good, you haven't put in much thought on the story. I'll help you all I can. You're eager to make a game, and I like that. First thing is first, I'll try and help you with your story. Send me a private message and we'll see if we can't clean this messy thread of yours up. |
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Well said :D +1, lets hope he reads it! Also kingshivy.. i think your rushing way to much, you got to take a lot of time to prepare for your game, which i don't think you have... maybe.. the plot you have now could be a draft, and your goal is to re-write this plot and try make it better, longer and more excitement... Read other peoples plots to get an idea, but ofc don't copy them. Also, i don't think you've practiced your skills enough for this game, your mapping isn't perfect.. maybe thats how you like your maps to be but other people disagree, which you also have to take in hand, of what other people want your game to be like, because in the end if your releasing this to the audience you got to give them what they want! Thats why its always important to take critisism from the audience.. If you need mapping advice.. i say like I've said many time to you, look and the maps Nintendo makes, i try use there style on your maps, gives you a great idea! Also please double check your grammar its terrible, people don't want to play a game with spelling mistakes, and don't go to far from what your capable of atm! |
I have some questioning to do!
1st. Why is Prof Rowan in this new region (he shud be in Si(n)noh) 2nd. Why is Diamond in this region? ---------------------------------- You need to improve your Mapping and Grammar (To be Honest i am also bad at both of them.) ---------------------------------- i like the inner tiles but in one event... (the pokeballs are out of the table ) ---------------------------------- Just like ProdigyX said Dont try to rush with the progress. The Game will become Meaningless if it has no sense. ---------------------------------- |
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1st. No problem with that... 2nd. Check out Wesley FG's hack, Light Platinum.. It is Light PLATINUM and haves a new region.. ---------------------------------- Mapping, i am training.. Grammar.. what are the words that haves the wrong grammar. ----------------------------------- Thanks.. i lost who's tiles are (glitch with the balls) ----------------------------------- Umm... okay And yeah, the game will be mean if it has no sense.. Quote:
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And for the PM, that game will be SUPAH creative.. KingSnivy approves.. |
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And you can find a tutorial to animate the battle sprites here. Credit to Luka S.J. |
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I want them to be like this! HIRING a Storyline writer! |
Follow that tutorial and it should work then.
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Seems like a pretty big cop out. |
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Rects? I just used gifs , i added zoom to sprites and updates. Just 4 flags for updates and flag for when it start to update for player pokemon here, and thats all but you need to know h\where to puts all updates.
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How about the new story? Cool or boring?
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I don't see a story. It's a nicely written introduction, though!
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You really should expand the story to overview the plot, or at least leave it at a good cliffhanger.
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It's only an introduction.
I would assume that flamemaster is writing the main plot, as that's what I have been told. |
Nice introduction, no story...
I'm amusing this is a remake of Diamond, so the plot should have something to do with Team Galactic reemerging, in my opinion. |
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The New Logo! How about it?
http://i487.photobucket.com/albums/rr240/RavenRescueTeam/sd.png Not by me, By elaynni Asking about the new story? Cool? |
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Elaynii, is nice enough to help you out so much, yet to don't even have the time or consideration to spell her name. It's not like it's just her, it's every single person who help's you out, you don't even look then advice. Please, sort it out. |
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BTW the logo looks good. |
I think flamemaster and I have the section filled up, but, I could be wrong.
I think the story itself is decent at best, but, it's a good start. It still lacks a few details here and there, but, it's okay. :3 |
If you actually look at KingSnivy's past on this forum, I'd give up on him.
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And hiring a storyline writer... Gah, you're not ready yet. |
UPDATE _________The green color, bold and table have been removed. VS Mark that will make Pepsi get out of your nose WARNING: LOUD SOUND THAT MAY CAUSE YOU EAR RAPE! If it doesn't work, try here. |
Did you just seriously post an update because you edited the first post? Really?
Because that video doesn't seem like much; it's progress, but nearly anyone could do that. It's not much of an update. |
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You edited a vs screen with rainbow colors and did a cruddy edit of Blue from HGSS. Using Essentials DS, that's hardly an accomplishment.
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Lolz for today alot of new PMs and Pokemon Black at the league with alot of visitors xD
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People give you constructive criticism, and you just sit there, and ignore it. So everyone, lets just ignore his thread. Who's with me? |
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The game will take Essentials DS 5's scripts to Essential DS 4's
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i think he means, he's updating to the newer essentials ds.
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To try and stay on topic, i'll comment on the game although I dont have much to say. The story doesnt seem very intriguing but its more or less decent. But im curious as to why Leon needs to unleash mutant Pokemon to stall the military. In the main games, the evil organizations were known to most people but,for example, Team Galactic never did anything to bother the citizens so the police etc. never had to get involved. But this is your game, so Ueno's police force may not consist of lazy bums like Kanto's or Sinnohs but I feel that stalling the military is unnecessary unless the mutant Pokemon play at least a sufficient role in the plot or at least as something to do like a side story/quest or just to make the game longer. As for your screenshots, just looking at them make me not want to play this. You may have your own style of mapping or you might just be bad but your maps have A LOT of useless space. Try filling them up with things such as furniture in a house or plants, houses and people outside or just make the map smaller. |
Okay, I deleted all the spammish posts and posts that made no sense whatsoever. Please don't go offtopic, this thread is about the game, not about the author nor about the thread itself.
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@Went Thanks Went..
btw.. Now I am not at my computer so I stopped developing for 3 days, so I dont want a mod to close the thread -Snivy |
Your maps are really big and empty. Try to make smaller maps with better details.
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Your Room is WAY to big. I suggest you get better tiles, or improve your mapping.The tiles are ok, but you should use other peoples comments to improve your game.But, i wish you good luck with your game.
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@kox9sxe and @Miggs
Neo-Spriteman's deviantart account is posting examples of work to copy maps cause Neo-Spriteman is the Mapper and Eventer.. BACK TO DEVELOPING!! Actually i joked when i said 3 days!! It was 2 days. So, i will post a video for the Shiny Diamond opening due to Elaynii's introduction. |
The Shiny Diamond's Opening
READ! Spoiler:
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I can't say what's worse, the mapping or the grammar.
For one, why does mom a have pokemon center counter tiles in the house? Rowan: Good choice, Care it well. does not make any sense whatsoever. You need to get a translator for you game alone...To make it english. |
Well I can see a lot of things wrong with this game. The grammar...did you go to school? You must know by the age of FIVE that "I" when you're talking about yourself it's a captial? The maps are just...sorry, scabby. They are WAY to spacey. The VS sequence is scabby and probably rushed on Paint. You need to clean uip this game.
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@gsorby Well, how about your game Pokemon: The Nightmare? You stole the BAG, FIGHT, RUN, and POKEMON from O.G. Duke (omega groudon)'s Project "Pokemon Raptor"
And i have a new sprite for Lucas, it's made by this guy Tell me if it's good. (pic at attachments) |
Although GSorby and Omega Groudon's fight scenes look a little alike, they are not the same, which means he has not stolen them.
Lashing out at someone because they gave you bad criticism really isn't the way to go. Before flailing at someone and criticising their game for being similar to another game, remember you are making a Pokemon fan game, so your game bears resemblance to many others, including the official games. GSorby is right on many points, like the mapping etc, it needs work, but i'm sure you know that. They are too spacious, maps seem to feel more alive if you cram them full of stuff, but leave room for the player to explore. One turnoff for people playing your game, is spelling and grammar. People generally turn the game off if there's consistent bad spelling/grammar, so that's another issue to address. Although GSorby may not have gone about criticising your game the right way, and suggesting how to improve things, you should listen to him. Ultimately, you're making this game for the public to play, so let the public have their input. I'm not getting at you, I just thought it needed to be said. |
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Don't think his arabic, tho this is a improvement snivy.. CBF going criticism because your just going to back it down, but a improvement.
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Ok, i give up here.
You obviously just skipped past my last post which was trying to help, and decided to correct someone's grammar instead, getting some wrong yourself. I'm gonna give a last comment, then leave this thread. But you probably won't read or listen to it anyway. Scripts: Try and not leave everything as default. Otherwise your game will turn out like everyone else's using Venom12's mod in terms of looks. Try learning scripting yourself, and expanding the features. Mapping: This has been said before, your maps are too big and empty. A house inside doesn't need a 25 x 25 map, just the default size is fine with the edges cut off. Try and fill your maps with tiles, not just the bare minimum. You should try and listen to everyone who posts on this thread as they're trying to help. If you ignore them, well, they'll just get fed up and stop caring, like me :/ |
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Sure, a learning process, i get that. But it just annoys me when people ignore their public and just bypass completely what they've said.
Anyway, before this thread gets more out of hand/off topic. Good luck with your project KingSnivy, hope it all goes well. |
I was referring to Snivy silly :D
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Awesome! I love your maps, so full and professional!
And the Pokeballs falling off the table is a nice touch. Good job. :) |
The maps are awesome? You didnt see awesome maps, the maps are empty, have mixed style etc they looks really bad.
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New Mark's VS sprite! The game's OW will be to BW instead of HGSS if tebited15 finishes his Lucas sheet. |
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And yeah KingSnivy,I've checked the game and the so called "new" screenshots that you posted.You probably won't understand this but,the "new" screens is just one added screenshot stacked upon the old ones who are still unchanged.The screenshot("New") is pretty much showing the event talking before you get the pokemon with bad mapping(Again.) I really suggest you improve on your English before deciding to work on a game.I mean,come on! even Luka(Who apparently didn't know english well at first.) actually attempted to learn english and took into the constructive criticism. (Of course,Luka obviously pretty much knew it at the right level at that time.KingSnivy's pretty lost in it,I pretty much like checking in this thread for the mistakes and ignoring he does.) |
Can someone lock this thread due to updating the whole game?
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Unlocking due to indecisive thread creator.
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And now guys, i have prepared a little thing.
http://i1084.photobucket.com/albums/j403/KingSnivy1/capture000.jpg That's about the X-Transcriver thing i posted at Resource Center. I'm not Gleer, that's just a simple Name-Type. |
BigCorn Town? Can't you come up with a better Town name?
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Your maps are way too spaced out, just add a little more stuff in, or npc's like some pokemon or random people.
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And everyone else, please shut up about the maps. I'm remaking them on the 17th. So just bear with us. |
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Thanks 4 Neo-Spriteman cuz i added BW Tiles to the game! |
Can you give us a pre-view?
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That's an example only. Like it? ~KingSnivy |
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Just so you guys know, I'm confused as hell about if I'm the mapper or not D: I didn't make that. The maps will look something like this: clickhereifyouwannalive |
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I mean,he obviously maps,events,and sprites a little but the maps are obviously messed up and empty(Which you have to fix.),events have confusing grammar(Someone fixes the grammar),and sprites from resources. So is anyone actually on the team? because one,the first post containing info on the team isn't updated.And two,if Neo-Spriteman is on the team then where's the map he made? @King Snivy, Examples can show created maps you know,it doesn't have to be a quick placing of random tiles to show things off. |
This thread continues to be confusing.
That was a good map(neospriteman's one) Some of the paths are a bit small, but overall good. |
I am not helping you anymore. At first I felt sorry for you, but now that I'm reading more carefully, I see this:
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Click Here Skip to 1:50, and you'll see. Man, no. Just no. Don't use the tiles I gave you. Get them yourself, jackass. And, if I get banned, I get banned. So be it. Man, I got a headache. |
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