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Tyler & Manda Forever ~♥~ [Collection]
Just going to explain what this poem is about. Me and my pair (FlurryTheGlaceon) are dating now (in real life) though we have not yet actually met, we have talked for a while. We are seperated by 2,323 miles, as I live in Washington, and she resides in Ohio. I hope one day we will meet... This poem is four-line stanzas, rhyming in ABCB format. ~ The Angel and the Star By Silver/Tyler, Dedicated to Flurry/Manda ~ 1The boy that fell from the stars, 2causing feathers to fall, punched the ground in agony, because he had lost it all. He looked to the sky, 3pain filled his teary eyes, he let out a whimper, as he took a mortal disguise. The angel was now lost, 4in a world of pain and hurt, he cried and he cried, because he was treated like dirt. He walked along the world, 5feeling empty and alone, darkness fell on him, his life taking a darker tone. He wanted to shout, 6he could no longer cry, his emotions exploded, and he asked the sky. "Why does this happen to me, why this cruel life, why the empty heart, pain worse than any knife?" 7 The sky did not respond, 8only dropped one of its stars, the boy watched it fall, and it crashed after flying far. "What is it," 9asked the boy, looking at the crashed star, his eyes suddenly filling with joy. A girl, a girl did fall, 10with emotions quite the same, she had endured much suffering, it was really quite a shame. She was just as shy as he, 11nicer than most anyone, yet she was treated so cruelly, and something must be done. Eventually, they met and talked, 12they soon became friends, closer than ever, but soon this friendship did end. Friendship ended, but this was not sad, 13in fact the boy was overjoyed, the first time in years, something filled the void. Their friendship did not die, 14in fact it got better, it evolved into something new, started on an electronic letter. What could change from friendship, 15giving it a quick shove, the only thing better, that was love. The angel-boy and the star-girl, 16now loving more than ever, got back onto their feet, to take on any endeavor. There was only one issue left, 17the distance that kept them apart, how could they love from afar, things were turning dark. The two faced each other, 18and hugged one another tight, and out of the darkness, came a beam of light. From the sky came moonlight, 19causing the darkness to fade, the boy looked to the girl, his feelings being made. "We may be seperated, 20by miles of Earth and land, but we will get through it, if you take my hand." The boy held her close, 21and looked at her with a smile, "If we believe in each other, we will conquer every mile." The boy looked on, 22"Though we may be seperated now, do not worry or lose hope, we will beat this somehow." The angel got closer, and softly kissed the star, "Just know that I'll always love you, No matter where you are." ~ Thank you for reading. Any feedback would be appreciated. If you have questions, don't understand a part, or want to know more, ask me or FlurryTheGlaceon. Wish us luck... ;)
Also, something I just noticed that makes me even happier... We admitted our love on May 22nd, my birthday is next month (June 22nd), and there are 22 stanzas, I swear that was a total coincidence, I only just counted them and put the numbers... :) 2 is my favorite number also... |
I'm not good at reviewing Poetry, so I'll just wish you good luck in your relationship. Hopefully some day you two can meet.
I'll also move this to the Poetry subforum for you. All poems go there. |
Thank you... *smiles* I wrote this because Manda went to bed (time zone difference of 2-4 hours or something...) and I wanted something to do...
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I like rhymes ^^ That's what I can say about the poem as a poem. I like poems and sometimes write my own but I'm not sure what to say in a review of one. The last four parts are really heartwarming, anyways.
You really like to proclaim your feelings loudly, don't you? I hope Flurry likes it :3 The best part is... They met in my forums~ |
hey RHCP what are you doing here? :) get bak to your RP forums! xD lol kidding.
very nice poem Silver, I wish my pair can do something like that xD I'll pray for you two, and I hope you two can get together asap :) Oh my god, this is my 1,000th Post! :) A MIRACLE~!!!! |
Awwwww. That is so sweet. :) I wish my pair did something like this for me. Maybe he will yet, I don't know. I hope you two get to meet each other soon.
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Relocated, now whenever I post poems (or maybe if she ever posts some :D) follow the link in my signature (click the heart), anything we make will go there now...
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I'll close this thread then, since you already have this poem located in another thread.
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