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The beautiful grass where pikachu lays (poem)
The beautiful grass where Picachu lay
The beautiful mountains that Pikachu climbs The beautiful battles that Pikachu has The grass soft and moist from the fresh morning air The mountains standing bold and tall in the hot afternoon The epic scene with sparks flying and amasing moves The beautiful grass where Pikachu lay Under a fern tree in the meadows. |
We have a Poetry subsection for stuff like this...so I'll move this for you there.
I'll also note that you may want to do a bit of proofreading with it, as there's some minor mistakes here and there - e.g. Quote:
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thanks for the advice lol i will edit that right away :D
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I think you should replace "lays" with "lay"
The second to last line, "Beautiful" is still capitalized. And finally, I would assume "Pikachu" should be capitalized at every line, since it used this as a name. |
Like they said before, it's a decent poem, but could use a few fixes and edits. And I find how the first half goes into the second half. It's pretty cool.
So, yeah, good job! And, of course, good luck on your future work. |
thanks for the good advice guys i will make some edits on my poem
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You still need to correct your punctuation/spelling mistakes. To keep using 'beautiful' is a good idea, but it's a bit redundant. It's an okay poem, and you can make it better by just correcting some simple spelling/punctuation errors.
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