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No Whole Reflection
No Whole Reflection And I’m scared, If I just let you see me, That you’ll know who I really am. But for once, I would just like to be me, My total self, no image or sham. I’m in pieces, But none of them lying, Yet no whole reflection of the man. Maybe one day, In arms I’ll be crying, But being whole, just because I can. --- I've been writing more poetry lately and "No Whole Reflection" was a spur of the moment kind of on-my-mind-based thing, meaning it might not ‘flow’ all that well. But I want it more to be about a stream of thoughts and feelings, over something precisely crafted. But maybe it does need some tweaking, I'm not sure. I'm quite proud of it, though. |
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I really liked the poem, very deep and all, but some lines caught my attention, for example you start the poem with “And”, when it implies addition and must come with a previous sentence, some like this style though, so I’m not going very deep here. I liked the rhyming scheme too. And that’s it, there isn’t much to work on as the poem is great as it is.
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This is a clever, creative, and eye-catching poem. Although the second stanza didn't really make much of a sense to me, but aahh, that's poems. I have yet to look beyond the literal meaning of that second stanza, maybe that's why.
The poem itself is simple, yet dramatic to read. No confusing words that I would need an old dictionary to be able to understand. Like others have said, I also like the way you started the poem with "and". It seemed uninviting at first but along the way, it became creative. Kudos to you. |
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