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Pikabowser Attempts Poetry
Hello. This will my first post in this thread. I think I'll kick things off with 5 Haikus and one Acrostic poem. Hope you enjoy them :3
Poems #1-5 Haikus Spoiler:
Poem #6 Acrostic Spoiler:
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Deleted your duplicate thread for you.
Anyways, these haikus are alright imo. I like the Haunter one the best, as it seemed to get its nature within the haiku pretty nicely, and after that the one of Pachirisu. I feel that 'evolves' sounds a bit off in the Ninjask/Shedninja haiku, and the middle link of skarmory's sounds a bit odd with the 'Though,' part - the comma somewhat unsettles it imo. As for the acrostic I quite liked the tale within the 2nd half - it wasn't just about it but how it hid from a storm, and I liked the last couple of lines in particular. Quote:
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But these were good all in all - I look forward to seeing other Pokemon poems from you. =) |
1a.) Yes I know That well "evolves" was the wrong word for it. It did bother me for a bit, but if I were to put "Two bug types", it would sound strange as well
1b.) The Skarmory haiku was the strangest one for me as well I didn't know what what to put for the second line so I tried that I guess it didn't work 2a.) It's a force of habit that I capitalize words that don't need to be capitalized. I'm trying to fix that 2b.) Ya.... I seen that now. Too many "tuffs of cotton". 2c.) Should of added the "a". I was in a middle of a gym battle while doing that part Other than that Thank you. I'll Just Edit a few things and start on my second set. Same thing as before: 5 Haikus and another Acrostic just to practice and get ready to write a free-verse. |
You're welcome. =)
As for 1a), maybe something like 'Two new forms'? Or maybe a complte reword, like say 'Both different and unique' or something along those lines. Up to you though. |
Here is part two of my poems
Poems: #Haiku 7-12 Spoiler:
Poem 13# Acrostic Spoiler:
I think I need to rework my thinking in these poems. Well, at least the last poem set was fixed up. Enjoy! |
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