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My poems- Once again XD
I have returned, cuz I found some poems I totally forgot about *blink* XD
Lets get it started then shall we? XD I will start with this one,since its dedicated to all those who died in Asia due to the Tsunami... If Only Tears Could Bring you Back These endless tears roll down my face, Mourning for you, for endless days, But I cant move on, and face the facts, If only tears could bring you back. Please watch us from above, Send us peace, light as a dove. If only I could change the past, If only tears could bring you back. Life goes on, never stops, I'm gratfeul for what I've got, I wait for you, through rolling grass, If only tears could bring you back. Now.... I'l post one more for now, I just found it. I'm gonna edit it later... Why I've always wondered- why is the world so cold? Fighting, Lying, Crying, Dying, its getting old. I wish it would all go away, To another Place, Away from me, its all waste. I dream of a land, far away, of hills of green. Why? why cant the world be this way? Must it be dry, like a drought ravaged ground? I wonder... Even nature fights, these ways, Lightning and thunder, clashing together, But there is some hope, a far away rainbow, Shedding light on the darkest of places. For I miss those Ruby lights, high in the sky. They would light up my face, so I wouldnt cry. But now I'm alone, away from home. I miss those days, long ago, But now...I'm alone. I've always wondered- why is the world so cold? Fighting, Lying, Dying… it’s getting old. I wish it would go far, far away. Away from me, and all its waste. Where did the peaceful silence go? Why did we end up this way? Must the world be arid like a drought ravaged ground? I wonder... Even nature fights these deadly ways, Lightning and thunder clashing together, But there is some hope, a far away rainbow, Shedding light in the darkest of places. For I miss those Ruby lights, high in the sky. They would light my face, so I wouldn’t cry. But now I'm alone, away from home. I miss those days, so long ago, But now...I’m all alone. I capitalized Ruby, because this poem is dedicated to Israel and my dog Ruby, and I just realized that I put "ruby" in the poem cuz it was in honor of her...Shes in Israel now... This is the beginning of song that I may or may not write: Your nothin', you always were, It went by in a blur, It was just a dream, Now your nothin' to me, It was all lies, what you've been sayin' Cuz you never existed, you were always nothin' *sits down* Comments are always accepted! XD |
They sound more like songs than poems. Either way, I like 'em!
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Meh, I made some of em songs ^^
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Wow, Eli, those poems are awsome!! First, the one dedicated to the people of Asia...this one has a really great flow it, and the words are also used in a great format. I see no spelling errors too, so that's wonderful! XD
Now on to Why...this one ish soo kawaii Eli! I didn't notice any spelling errors, and the flow to your poem is very well put together. I think the overall message of your poem really sticks out, and that's good. ^_____^ Now to the song...this song is good considering you;ve only started it, I likez teh song very much. Awsome job Eli, they're all very great. *glomps Eli* ~Kelsey |
0_0;;; Thank you! XD that was very insightful! XD
I hate spelling errors, though I do make typos from typing so fast... I'l put another up. 'twas my first, so it has many verions...I'l put up the first one I can find XD This is the oldest version, I'l find the newer ones later XD Oh here it is XD Life Life is but sorrow and tears, Where darkness looms and chaos leers, If Hope shall fail, Light will cease to shine, If Light will be forgotten, Hope shall die. When shall the sun, come out again? Will the clouds clear up, will the wars end? Will the blue bird sing, once again at dawn? Instead of the crow, with its evil caw? Life is but sorrow and tears, Fear not, for peace is near. |
Awwwwws, Eli, that last one was so cute! ^o^ There was only one spelling error. I think you meant Come instead of some. XD But other than that little thing, your poem is very good. Lately, everyone's been writing poems about hopelessness. ;-; It was very good though, Eli dear. ^_____^
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Nice,poems/songs,they are very touching,my fav is the one about peace.
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Thanks! ^^
Kelsey, thanks, I was typing to fast XD |
That's OK! I've made plenty of spelling errors in my time. XD No need to worry about it too much. ^o^
~Kelsey |
Allright! XD I think I'l post The Curse of Hate [email protected][email protected] its really long
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Woah Eli, they are wonderful! You have great inspiration!
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Yeah! actually, I did! XD!
Life was because these kids were teasing me about pokemon xD;; |
you poems/songs are awesome,Eli!they're very great.I like them very much.
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^^ thanks so much Tabitha! greatly appreciated! ^^
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Eli, you rawk. XD Those are great. I really like he second poem cause it kinda shows how bad the world is XD
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Yeah, thats the point, Kev thankies! ^^
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I hate them, there awfully bad, ekk hell know to them!
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:'( eli....they're so beautiul, they go right to the heart, *coughthatoneabouttearsisfamilier* you should make a book with these, they're so skillfully made :'( ^^
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Thanks! XD when I get depressed I write my best poems ^^
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Nice poems. They´re quite sad too *gives rep*.
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Thanks!
I'm only good at writing depressing poems XD |
To follow what everyone said..... they're really good XD. I know how it is to write poetry while depressed (for some reason they seem to be my best work when I feel that way), so I can relate.
Nicely done all around, my only complaint is that you should post more ^^'. |
Thankies! I have another ^^
The Curse of Hate For all my life I’ve been pursued, By something which should have not been heard, My life has been sealed, with this fate, I posses the curse, the curse of hate. I try to run, I try to hide, But it always finds me, And burns me inside. I want to cry, to fade away But hate hasn’t taught me to feel pain Why cant people respect me the way I am, For I cannot lift the curse, of which I have. But maybe one day they will see, The person I am, and always will be. I dream of a place, where I belong, Where I can finally get along. But I wonder if this vision can be made real, This place where I can finally heal But if it cant, I want to make, This world I live in, a better place, But how can I help, with my unheard voice, I wish I could finally, make a choice, But for now I live on, behind this blackened gate, I posses the curse, the curse of hate. |
You should write music for that last "song-bit" in the first post. It sounds cool~
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Thankies JA! I Hope to, but I need a bit of help in how long the Stanzas should be ^^
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You don't need advice! Just go with the flow. :P
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Okay, I'l think about it in math ^^ XD
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Wow, Eli. ^___________^ Those are really good.
I agree with JA. ^_~ You should make a song out of the last piece on your first post. I love it. I'm hoping to read some more of your work some time soon! ~Karli |
^^ Thanks! I've been spending math classes on it xD yet I'm a bit stuck >>;;
heres one: (Unamed) Clouds of violet, streak the golden sky, For the sun is setting, nights on the rise. The stars come out, dancing through the night, The moon glows, with all her might. Dawn appears, for day is close, The sun is creeping out, as the river flows. And the clouds, so far away, To reach them, would take countless days, But just to watch them, passing by, Passing by, until the end of time. Then I had one for the play 2 nights ago, which the director promptly said no to. xD lesse if I can remember it: The Storm I walked upon, the dampened path, And then I saw the wonders of natures wrath. Rain shot down, the winds roar, Lightning and thunder, in an eternal war. I thought the sun had vanished, into a black abyss, Her light, warmth, and glorious bliss. I looked up, full of dread, I saw blue skies, with clouds scattering overhead. And at the end of the road, I saw a glowing rainbow. Colors of every hue and shade, Could be seen in that rainbow that day. I learnt a lesson, as I walked by, That things could turn bright again, even in the darkest time. Thats how I remember it. The end is different, I'l bring it home from school tommorow ^^ |
They are really cool, eli ^^, i like the new unmamed one, i should post some of my poetry soon xD
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Thanks! ^^ yeah, you really should! I'l go look for the rest of mine,but unfortunately, since I write in a ton of spiral notebooks, they get lost xD
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XD!, i need to find some out, but ok, ill be looking forward to the rest of ya poetry ^^; XD
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Heres the start of one:
The moon shines, across the emerald glade, Reflecting of the silver lake, In this place, a myth is told, Of a dragon with a crown of gold.. ---- >< what I want to do with it is describe the dragon with precious gems (For Example- Wings of crystal etc.) But I'm having trouble getting it to rhyme >< |
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But the second line...it bothers me..."Reflecting of the silver lake", unless you meant 'of' to be 'off', then I can see your reasoning. ^^ "Of a dragon with a crown of gold..." is a really good piece to this stanza. It seems like this poem will be a very descriptive and captivating poem. Narrative poems are very wonderful, for they are the ones that tell stories (my personal favorite). ^___^ So I do hope you keep working with this one, I'd love to see this finished product. ^^ ~Kelsey |
Oh dear I didnt mean write across XP If ya could give me ideas, I'd be really appriciative ^^
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OK, maybe tell of how the dragon is like a king over an ancient empire. Then have him in some epic battle to fight for his life, or to keep the rule over his land or something. ^^ A narrative poem can be as long as you'd like. In fact, The Lay of the Lake, by Sir Walter Scott is about 300 stanzas. ^^;
But I don't expect you to make yours that long, Eli. XDXD ~Kelsey |
XD I made more! XD
The moon shines, across the emerald glade, Reflecting off the silver lake, In this place, a myth is told, Of a dragon with a crown of gold. Wings of crystal, smooth as glass, Which stretch across the dewy grass. Bearing fire, with a ruby glow, Scales of sapphire, blue as the water below. Eyes of jade, cold as ice, Roar like thunder, in the skies. >.< I suck at making endings....xD well, I found the poem I was looking for...I was inspired by a really horrid sight I saw: Bus 13 I saw that bus, a horrid sight, Of death, of chaos, and great fright. Its colors, green and white, Which once shone bright, Now peeled of from the blast, And with it, from the window panes, shattered glass. The only thing left, a rusted shell, And I realized that these people never came out of this burning hell. The people, innocent lives, Taken by evil, with its knives. I cry for them, tears of blood. They didnt have to die, but evil should. But now I sit and think empty thoughts, And think about what life really costs. I will never forget that scene, That bombed bus, bus 13. |
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Roar like thunder, in the skies. You may want to try "With a roar like thunder in the skies." It just flows a bit better. ^________^ I really liked that part of the poem. Are you finished with it already Eli? =3 Anyways, the poem gives you a great picture of a mighty and even malevolent dragon. It kind of makes me think of Lugia. <3 I really like the descriptions, Eli, and the flow to your poem is done neatly. ^^ Now, onto Bus 13. This poem was so sad! It makes one think of a green and white bus, casually striding down the highway, when all of a suden the bus is up in flames. All the people have died, it would truly be a horrifying sight. ;-; It really shows how precious life is, and it could end in a second. That's why it's improtant to live every moment of life to its fullest. ^___^ Awsome poems Eli, they were of pure shweetness. XD *glomps* ~Kelsey |
Naw, I said its gonna take me a while to finish it. XD actually, I do have a poem about Lugia, I can post it but its a different rhyming scheme, and it didnt work xD
Well, I didnt see it blow up itself. They were bringing the bus after it was blown up all around the world, in attempt to stop anti-semetism... |
Wow I really like these XD *snivels*. They are well written and make alot of sense ^^. I love them XD.
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Wow, you are a really talented poet Eli!
I was particularly drawn into The Curse of Hate. Great job! Keep it up! *gives Silver Taco of Poetic Excellence* |
XD! I am so touched...XD
Thanks guys ^^ I got another done: Footprints I saw some footprints, in the snow, Appearing to be trodden, not long ago. Thoughts arose in my head, Who is this person? what life has he led? I began to follow them, at steady pace, Past winding roads, a seeming maze. But there they lay, in the snow, Appearing to be trodden, not long ago. I couldn't give up, for I've reached this far, The sun is setting, 'tis turning dark. I walked ahead, in full speed, Wondering where these marks could lead. For if they end, I shall meet, The one who left them, in the street. But there they lay, in the snow, Appearing to be trodden, not long ago. Full of hope, I turned right, And saw a road, dark as night. I knew that moment, I had to leave, For I would never know where these prints would lead. But the prints still lay, in the snow, Appearing to be trodden, not long ago. |
oooh that was so cool! how you can tell these stories and make the words ryme in the most peotic ways! ^^ it's an awsome tallent! you're amazing!
so-who did the foot prints belong to? XD |
Actually, this happened in real life. XD I was walking back to my grandmothers house, and I saw these footprints which "Appeared to be trodden not long ago". So I followed them...and then they turned right, and I couldnt follow them, because I had to keep walking forward...I found another poem (similar to the rainbow one)
The Storm Lightning lights the clouded sky, Followed by rain, hail, and the thunders cry. This is nature’s power, a wondrous wrath, Yet we know not, the strength it hath, The rain beats down, hard and fast, The wind shrieks, like falling shards of broken glass, Then the hail, pounds endlessly, And on top, fighting in the night, Light and Sound clash, with all their might. And then, as if it never came, All is quiet, Just the noise, of pounding of rain. |
Yeah that is a great poem ^^> Plus Lizzie, at the end she said dhe had to leave so. So she never knew who the footprints belong to, atleast I think I am right XD. Anway great job ^^.
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Yeah XD I actually wanted to meet the person IRL XD
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right...>_<;; lol okay sry 'bout that XD they're really cool! you make poems seem so easy to write! it's a real tallent! you should collect them and send them to a contest somehwere...
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I tried, but they were all scams...XD I need an idea, anyone wanna inspire me? =3
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thats a good poem, eli ^^
no spelling errors, which is awesome |
^o^ Thanks! I make sure not to make any spelling errors...
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This poem seems to symbolize how you can see a trace left by someone, and you wonder about it, and the person who left the trace. It's like when you're in a crowded shopping mall and you see a certain person and you begin to wonder what their life's like. Do they have a family? Are they happy or sad? Do they live in a house or in an apartment? A lot of these different questions arise and you hope to find out some more information about the person. In your poem's case, you are curious as to who left the footprints, so you begin to follow them to find out who had left them. Soon you begin to wonder more about the person, making you ever more eager to find the person. I absolutely loved this poem Eli, it was very nicely written. *glomps* Keep it up! =3 ~Kelsey |
Aww thanks! ^_^
I need an idea, I just cant think of one.... |
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Good job with all of them though! ^_^ |
Thanks!
I'm planning on trying to do another Lugia poem again ^^ |
!!! I would love to read another poem from you, Eli. You have a true gift in poetry, I adore reading all your poems. *glomps* I can't wait for the next one. ^^
~Kelsey |
Hopefully I'l finish it soon XD I tend to work rather slowly sometimes
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That's all right Eli. ^_______________^ You should always take your time when writing a poem, because then you really put a lot of effort into it. ^^ There's no rush, we can hold out until you've got a new masterpiece set for us. *glomps*
~Kelsey |
^_^ I just got one done...its short but whatever XD
Falling Falling, falling, from the trees, Leaves of red, leaves of green. Falling, falling, to the ground, They fall in silence, with no sound. Falling, falling, forever light, Falling, falling, into the night. |
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I adored how it's symbolizing the autumn leaves, as they fall from their tree host to the earth below. In a way, it's somewhat of an adventure for them. They have to make a perilous journey from their home they once knew, to an all new world below. Yet there are many dangers, for the seemingly carefree leaf can be swept off course by the howling wind or struck down by some other outside force. ^^ I saw no spelling errors which ish awsome. ^_____^ I did, however, have trouble with one line: "They fall in silence, without sound." The part "without sound" kind of threw off the flow for me. I might recommend changing it to "without a sound" instead, but it's really your decision. ^o^ Yet another awsome poem Eli, keep 'em comin'! ^_~ ~Kelsey |
Omg, everything you said there I was thinking XD
Especiall the "Without sound" part... I was thinking I could change it to "With no sound" whatcha think? ^_^ |
Awwwwws. <3 *glomps*
Let's have a look see, shall we? "Falling, falling, with no sound." Well, I think it sounds better than "without sound", and either way, whether you have it be "with no sound" or "without a sound" shall sound wonderful once you read it through. ^________^ ~Kelsey |
Naw your right...I had to change it your right it does sound better ^__^ Thanks Kels!
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^_^ I got another one done today! I hope you enjoy it!
Solitary Rebel I am the one, left in the dark, The one forgotten, from the start. This is my life, a lonesome one, Without color, without a sun. I am a rebel, left behind, Rejected from human-kind. But I won't give in, I'm gonna' keep fighting, I won't stop running, I won't start crying. No one controls me, 'cuz I'm alone, Don't care if its dark, or if its cold. But I'll still be here, haunting your mind. And there's nowhere to go, nowhere to hide. And then you'll see how things can be, When you cannot escape, these dead dreams. An empty world, is where I stand, Of dried oceans, and arid land. There is nothing here, only me, A downed rebel with a doomed destiny. |
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"A downed rebel, with a doomed destiny." Did you possibly mean for 'downed' to be 'drowned'? ^o^ Also, in this line: "When you cannot escape, these dead dreams." The comma you have in this line tends to throw off the flow, making the rest of the poem kinda disoriented. ^^; So, I'd just recommend taking this out and see how it runs through then. ^___^ This poem had a lot of meaning to it. It made me think of a soldier, who feels that his fate has been sealed, yet doesn't seem to give up on the rest of his troops. He knows they can pull through. Even though he feels this is the end for him, he keeps on fighting until his very last breath. Awsome poem yet again Eli! Wootness, go you! XD *glomps* ~Kelsey |
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Kels, I put 'downed' because its like a "fallen rebel" I was considering putting in "drowned" though. ^^ Yeah it is kinda like a soldier! thanks! |
I figured you meant 'downed' but I wasn't sure. It makes sense either way, I'm just making sure I'm not already having malfunctions. XD I can't wait for teh next poem Eli. ^o^
~Kelsey |
^_^ I just need to be inspired XD
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Allright, I have a new one! Enjoy!
Time Summer dies, winter’s born, Empires built, countries torn. Unknown fates, and broken doors, All results of time and war. Time is merciless, unforgiving, Always moving, continues killing. Time never pauses, never ends, Creator of life, bringer of dread. Both angel and devil, dark and light, Fire and water, day and night. I learn to live, with this plight, Which is eternally bound, to my life. |
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xD thanks! any feedback, comments...? XD
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Allright...I have a new poem.. ^_^
Two Roses In a garden, late one night, Two roses grew, one red one white. Always together, side by side, For years and years, they never died. Through dark through light, One red one white. They never left the others side. But then one day, a gardner came, And picked the white, and went away. No longer do two roses stand, One white one red, hand in hand. The red rose stands, all alone, Without its beloved, the one white rose. |
I loved it, I kinda got it all metaforic ^^" (or was that the intention?)
It was brilliant! I hope I could write such great poems one day =D Nice, you can actually feel the lonesome-ness. How the red rose must have feeled. *sigh* Thumbs up! ^_^ |
Well, I believe thats how it is supposed to be...
I got this from a Hebrew Song, called 2 Roses( xD) Its a long song, but I summed it up in English... Thanks! ^^ |
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I love this picture you get from it: two beautiful, seemingly carefree roses (lovers) who never left each others' side. ^^ Through each day they saw the other through it, and never seemed to have any worries. But then, one lover is swept away, and the two part, not even getting to share a final kiss goodbye. Awwwws, it makes me sad! ;0; But it's so very good. ^^ Great work yet again Eli my dear, keep it up! ^o^ ~Kelsey |
Yeah! Thats exactly it! ^0^ thanks Kels! did ya read the other one? =3
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Time does bring life, but as time passes on you are one step closer to death. But in spite of that, people have learned to live and make do with what little time they have here on earth, which is, perhaps, life's greatest gift of all. <3<3 Nicely done once again Eli! *huggles* ~Kelsey |
=3 thanks....*has another idea brewing in her mind*
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^^ Got another done...
Poison of Love There's a reason why I choose stay, Away from love, and its terrible ways. I've seen it good, but mostly bad, It wreaks destruction, in its path. It turns people into monsters, and tears them apart, Leaves them alone, with broken hearts. But why must love leave them so fast? Shouldn't love forever last? Why can't they think about the good times they had? And just move on, forget the past. And I could have stopped tragedy, But I failed in agony, And I started it all, And I watched them fall. I should have been there, to stop the fight. And I should have been there, to show them the light. And trickling down, drops of blood, 'Tis the poison, the poison of love. |
Better Off Than Me
I don't understand why you think, Your life sucks, along with everything. Because it's all untrue, You and your stupid views, 'Cuz You're better off than me, So stop pretending not to see, 'Cuz you have a fate, and you're meant to be. You're not the one who's goin' down, And you're not the one, who falls with no sound. Don't think you're unloved, you've got friends, They'll be there for you, 'till the very end. People are worse off than you, In the streets without food. People dying of disease, so why can't you see, That you're better off than me. |
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You cannot always be so naive to think that love shall always last forever. But in truth, love can and does withstand all obstacles. <3<3 Quote:
Awsome poems Eli, me loves them allllllllllllllllllllllllllll as usual! <3<3<3 *huggles and snuggles* ~Kelsey |
Thankis! ^o^ I was waiting for you to post XD You give wonderful insight!!!
*walks around blindly, unknowing of what to write next* @[email protected] |
Okay, I've got one done...I sorta rushed to get it done, but I also put effort into [email protected][email protected]
The Child Today I met a child, One I would not forget for a while. Sunken eyes, staring into space, He walked slowly, without grace. I asked him what was wrong, And he told a story, rather long; "I had a twin, my very best friend, My father was drunk, my mother dead. Everything we did, my father would anger, And beat us hard, like we were strangers. We suffered long hard nights, Wondering if we should fight, But we held back, Our bones cracked. So then we said, we'd run away, He went too far, and it's just too late. No we can't go back, so we ran and ran. Father chased us, and grasped my brothers hand. I held onto him, I couldn't let go, I couldn't give into this man, crippled and old. My brother cried "Run, please hide!" And I did as he told, I left him behind. I ran in tears, and cowering fear. And here I've been, for many years" I heard his tale, began to cry, I yelled aloud, and screamed out "Why!?" But he merely smiled, and said to me; "I am alive, and proud to be." When I see a father hurt a son with his hand, I cry out loud "Why don't you understand..." |
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You poem showed what torture children all around the world go through. Being abused is such a horrible thing, and no child deserves to be haunted and paranoid that someone might be waiting around the corner to beat them. o.o; Well, the flow I think could use a bit of touch-ups. For example, "No we can't go back, so we ran and ran." This line's flow is kinda choppy, but a good way to fix it would just be to add a comma after "No". (No, we can't go back, so we ran and ran.) Awsome job Eli, dear! <3 I can't wait for teh next poem. ^o^ ~Kelsey |
Yeah, I noticed the flow was [email protected][email protected] I was trying to make it sound better....
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That's OK, Eli dear! ^^ Just keep working with it, and it shall come out to be even more wonderful than it already is. <3 You can also PM some of your works to me and I shall be happy to take a look at 'em. ^.~
~Kelsey |
I will don't worry ^____^ I'll start writing again...after today XD
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It really makes you think about the truth, really great poem! |
been reading your poems, eli, great job on all of them. my favorite is 'better off than me' it's really well written ^ ^
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C.O.H- Thanks!
Matt-Well ya get to see more ^____^ I'm starting to write a song based on it: Better Off Than Me Lost in my misery again, Does this road even have an end? Drifting down this path to hell, As much as you scream and yell, No ones out there to help, 'Cuz it's every man to himself, No one's gonna listen to you, Or care about what you do... But keep in mind- [Chorus] You have a life, You're meant to be, Stop complaining about untrue things. And I won't take this any longer, And I know that you're stronger, So wake up, and see, You're better off than me.[/chorus] You wanna go the path less taken, Then go ahead, just try and make it. You'll be back before tommorow, Drenched in the same old sorrow, It's what I deal with every day, And the darkness never really goes away... So make up your friggin' mind... [Chorus] That's what I have so far, it's far from perfection~ ~Eli |
well it looks good to me ^ ^ yay, eli wrote a song ^0^
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Lol, I've written before...sadly it didnt work too well but thanks! ^___^
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Omg, help writers block!!! @[email protected] XD I got something started but I dunno what it is XD
I added a bit, and there are some swears so I put "-" instead of "*" XD [TO BE NAMED] This is the CITY OF LONG LOST SOULS, The ones who DIED with HELPLESS goals. A WAR WAS FOUGHT TODAY. The HYPOCRITES against the BRAVE. The CORPSES never reached the GRAVE. And the BODIES were the SAME. PITY SEEKERS and F---ING LIARS, Now they BURN in BLOODY FIRES. I didn't FALL with these F-GS. I won't DIE under their FLAGS No I'm not done with it yet =P |
Thats great Eliana! thats a great job you did there!!
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Thanks!!! XD I put swears in because a boy in my class kept bugging me to...XD
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eh still it's good! I have made a few poems but their not even close to being as good as yours yours are WAY better than mine!
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Love Is Gone Dawn brought emptiness and confusion… And I don’t know why…am I in delusion? The light is now nowhere to be seen. Because your bright green eyes no longer hypnotize me, I am lost in the dark. Left alone, with an empty heart. Love has gone another path, Is it gone forever? Will it come back? Everything is grey, drenched by rain… Just return love, and stop the pain. October skies are getting old, Everything seems so dark and cold… And the light is gone… Rain has been falling far too long. My heart is crying, Severed and dying. Tomorrow will never come again, Rage and hate will come instead. On top of it all, I stand and watch, Now wondering about those bright green eyes, Green eyes by which I was once mesmerized… And I want to fall into them, once again, And I don’t want the light to leave, ever again... BTW- If you know codes, look for certain letters in the main part of the poem~ |
whoa...that's really sad...i hope it's not about...well anyway, it's really well written, good job..
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