![]() |
Poetry by Yours truly...
Hello all and welcome to my poetry Thread, You can see most of my poems in this thread please i want to here all your feedback.
Thank you Dizzy Dont Let them Put you down Dont let them put you down Dont ever have on a frown So why dont you turn it upside-down And make the sun your crown You might think I'm stupid You might think I'm mean But your only making yourself look bad Because your never going to make me sad Do it Right my love Anyone can tell you your wrong But you have to prove them wrong Dont let them get to you The beauty inside of you, my love So Do it Right my love Dont let them make you sad everyone wants to get to you they want to make you mad all your emotions,torn like the pictures on your wall just smile, smile,and you'll be right, my love The Darkness The Darkness Within will show your heart nothing can change your images except what you feel, what you feel If you think you are destroyed, your hurt Only you, you, can get over it No one else is here to make your decisions The Darkness taught us something we all sat in the dark, that we can all do everything by ourselves we need nothing, nothing, but ourselves The Darkness Dont Stop you'll get there Remember when you were a small child Thinking of what you wanted to be Taken away by simple things called away by the sea Now comes time to be what you wanted everything in place, nothing can make me feel greater than too see your happy face Dont Stop, Dont Quit, You'll get there someday Even when your world comes down, you'll be there someday Thank you, There will be more ^_^. |
Nice peom. hmm let me think of one..
Bold Always be bold, Always be true, You never know, How be to be If you don't know just ask me, because i know you and you know me We will be bold together and forever! |
Thank you Punkie, at least some people like my work.
|
I want Dont Let them Put you down to be in the contest I know i wont win so you can put it in anyways :)
|
Heres my Short Story which you could call a poem..
What ever Happened to Him? At first everyone liked him, he really thought he was liked. Then one day he started to fade away... becoming less popular and such. Everyone hated him. He left and Never came back. He was hated. |
Well, Dizzy, I have both criticism and compliments. You aren't very strong when it comes to rhyming, try free verse, most find it a lot easier. Also, it looks more like you're trying to write song lyrics rather than poetry. Enough criticizing, eheh. Now compliments. I especially like the poem 'The Darkness.' ^^;;; It's very melodic.
Perhaps now that I have torn your poetry to shreds you would give the same criticism to mine? -please note the light-hearted tone- Facade The thick piece of invisible concrete surrounds her Shrouding her life from all onlookers She is but a mortal who cannot be hurt She is overcome with fear Hurt, lust, need, and life all hidden Unsurfaced to the beings who come in contact with her This woman is me. |
Aww thank you Blaine :)Maybe I should write Songs instead lol.... Thats a very nice Poem you have there
|
Sorry for the Double Post but here is My Song :)
Destroyed - The Destructives (my band.. written by me though) I feel so lost just standing here Lost in Innocence through all these years Just never Looked at how bad you hurt me Now I realize it all You left me in the Cold I feel so Destroyed If I could Change it All Then I would Do it to you You Called me on that day I said I didnt want to talk to you You led me astray You used me for all your work You thought you got away with it all Well your wrong I feel so Destroyed If I could Change it All Then I would Do it to you i have to finish it of course.... |
Its ok Dizzy, I'll let it slide this time XP.
To tell you the truth, the song that you have thought of is quite brillent, and I could actully see a band preforming it if they had a chance, I really want to see you finish this and keep on doing your song writing and Poetry becuase your really good at this. |
:) Thank you Liquid Thunder
Half the Songs my band sings are about getting dumped or falling in Love. My band's Name is The Destructives if you wanted to know |
Dizzy.. What happened to thugmanics? LOL! Well. I can help you with your lyrics for your band...
|
Quote:
It's Thuganomics and its just a saying we have... we're not gangsta's No body is anyone that dresses like one is just a poser with the baggy pants and the attitude... |
thought you may want to read a few pointers I found on writing lyrics for songs
http://www.bbc.co.uk/radio2/soldonsong/artandcraft/home/writinglyrics.shtml this website has professional hints at lyrics writing... maybe just flip through it and that will send your song from great to perfection ^_^ |
I wanna write another song. Thank you frostweaver
|
Dizzy those are awsome! I wouldn't wan't to criticize you unless I had written poetry as well since it is very hard...oh hey what do you know, I have written a poem, 3 actually. Yours all have a bit of a dark side to them, thats a good thing though, it shows that you specilize in a certain theme. My theme is mostly deep sorta spiritual nature stuff, it all has a second meaning. I'd post my best poem 4 u to see but they are all VERY long (over 30 lines in my best). Keep it up, poetry is a great thing to get into.
|
Thank you so much Teara, Everyone says that I'm a better song writer though, so I write songs..WHO IS SPECIAL O?? lol :) Thank you
|
That's a great song Dizzy...it knda reminds of an evenescance song...
~HORN! |
Stars were shining bright that night
I stepped in the light it felt so right I stepped in the light it felt so right!! Can't look at you, and when i do I don't know what to say Why do you do this do me i ask I ask, I ask, I pray Tell me why you demand my love and you give none back, Why Why don't you give any back? The Almighty one made the sun and the moon, he made you, he made me. |
Sorry for Double posting again but if no one wants to read my poetry then just close down the thread... I want to make a song writing thread anyways.. :P
|
Poetry Anyone? (sorry for the triple post... I need to get this done lol)
The Day's of my Life Are like a Red Red Rose filled with Danger and Strife Just like Poetry to Prose ;) You like that one lol..... |
Hmm lets see you can re edit your post but very good work you have a talent that most people dont have me i cant make up anything *blank mind* hope to see more im probally giving you to much credit but keep up the good work.
|
Nah My Expertise is Song Writing and possibly remixing songs... But Poetry is fun. Thank you Rayquaza Champ for the Awesome Compliments :)
|
Wow! Poems from the Scorpio-boi! I should not be dissapointed! *reads*
These are great, Dizzy-boi! I didn't knew you wrote poems! That is soo rad! =D *Dies* |
OMG Cartoon thank you so much.. I wanna write Poems in Latin though... It just sounds better like that (lol You try pronouncing them big Words :P)
Thank you for reading my work. |
Why not try that? ^_^ You can make it something like a mix of spanish and latin or something like that =D
Example: "That was very malo" Besides, Latin is such a nice language, its a lot like spanish ^_^ And they spoke it in "The Passion of the Christ" I luv how the words were so similar to spanish =3 *dies* |
| All times are GMT -8. The time now is 3:49 AM. |
![]()
© 2002 - 2018 The PokéCommunity™, pokecommunity.com.
Pokémon characters and images belong to The Pokémon Company International and Nintendo. This website is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Nintendo, Creatures, GAMEFREAK, The Pokémon Company or The Pokémon Company International. We just love Pokémon.
All forum styles, their images (unless noted otherwise) and site designs are © 2002 - 2016 The PokéCommunity / PokéCommunity.com.
PokéCommunity™ is a trademark of The PokéCommunity. All rights reserved. Sponsor advertisements do not imply our endorsement of that product or service. User generated content remains the property of its creator.
Acknowledgements
Use of PokéCommunity Assets
vB Optimise by DragonByte Technologies Ltd © 2023.