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Yeah, she might THINK she got away with eavesdropping there. Somehow I can't help but get the feeling she's not as stealthy as she might like herself to be.
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Nice first appearnce with Chihiro there! I enjoyed her interaction with Arkus there and she seems like she'll have potential as a fun character. Like Sike, I'm also curious if she will manage to control her powers soon. Prety excited how this story will unfold!
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A short but interesting glimpse of how one of the beta agents work. The meion of Beta 5's past project comitted suicide caught my attention, makes me wonder if his latest project will do the same. Looking forward to more! |
I suppose this is the part where I start pondering the exact nature of their little cube-solver. There's the immediate possibility that comes to mind, but I'm just going to stick that on the maybe shelf. I might give the other subjects a little thought while I'm at it.
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Not much happening this chapter, but the interaction between Chihiro and Serisen is cute. Chihiro in a hisstory book already had me very curious as to what is going on with that. Looking forward to more!
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I'll admit some of the scientific terms you threw in there went over my head since Science isn't a strong suit of mine, lol. I can understand though in this type of setting the people involved won't dumb down the language and such.
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The part with the Vigoroth's comatose and the mention of "Darkrai's unique energy" makes me wonder what those people are up to. Don't think this will be the last time Darkrai will be referenced. Looking forward to more! |
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The part with Chihiro able to use the Aura, lucky Serisen wasn't that badly hurt. Hm I probably missed this, but I take it the teachers already knew about Chihiro using Aura? If not, I would think there would be a reaction over Chihiro able to use that. Either way, Chihiro must be overwhelmed after her parents revealed everything to her. Looking forward to more! |
Quite the intense discussion those directors had there. Yeah, I can already tell trying to convience Arkus that Darkrai was back won't be easy. Also can't help but notice the mention of Zoroark able to read both minds and computer storage. While I can understand the minds part due to their illusion ability, them also reading computer amuses me for some reason, haha. Beta Five serving as an envoy should be interesting (though I'm betting there will be quite a few obstcles along the way). Looking forward to more!
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I feel bad for both Chihiro and Serisen as now things are awkward for them. Hopefully that'll pass soon. Also not surprising Arkus would react that way when Chihiro asked that question. Yeah, I don't have that much to say as this chapter is more slowing down things after that gutter incident, but I still like it. Looking forward to more! |
Finally decided to take a look at this series, and I have to say it's pretty cool. I especially like the awkward interaction between Chihiro and Serisen, it makes sense pretty much for what happened, but I do hope they can work through it.
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I thought Fourteen's confession to Beta Five was cute and the awkardness between them works. Also I admit to chuckling over Beta Five's explaination of what love is to µ2.0. Even funnier Arwen and Aragon were referenced (I really enjoyed their interaction in the movies way back, heh). Looking forward to more!
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The part with Chiriro considering self-harm that was a tough read (in a good way!). I think you portrayed the subject of that in a tasteful manner. I like Arkus comforting Chiriro at the end there, very sweet. I'll admit Chiriro mentioning she was hungry reminded me a bit when Arkus and Alicia were starting their relationship and in one of their scenes it ended in a similar way. Looking forward to more!
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Director Lammers telling Beta Five he'll be director one day and then to not trust the other directors sounds pretty suspcious to me although I can already tell everyone's been clashing heads.
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Glad to see Serisen and Chihiro able to patch things up again. Thought the scene with Chihiro making the Zororark figurine is cute and it's nice of Serisen to comfort her. I do worry about him and the blood, though. I don't think he's really okay either. Looking forward to more! |
Yes, B5, you totally vaporized it. If we're now expanding the definition to include "did nothing of the sort", that is.
So there's that wild card in play. Wonder what that's going to yield. Disaster? (For whom?) Salvation? (For whom?) Worldwide root beer shortage? We just don't know. If we're expanding the definition of "we" to include "just us readers". |
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Some more interesting developments for this side of the story with more mentions of memory wipe. Looking forward to more! |
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I do feel sorry that Chihiro needed to be stayed away and isolated for a while. I do hope the Darkrai ordeal will be dealt with sooner than later, but something tells me it isn't going to be that easy. Notice here I took out "she felt" there and the sentence reads a bit faster. I can understand sometimes it might be unavoidable to use "felt", but in this particular cause we're already aware Chihiro's eyes is drooping and her shoudler's sagging. I read a blog post from Tumblr concerning filter words, but I'm sure if I saved it somewhere, haha. If I do, then I'll link it to you. A bittersweet but good read this chapter, looking forward to more! |
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Only three hundred humans still awake, huh? Welp, goodnight humanity. Kidding, kidding. In all seriousness, though, Arkus going to meet with the director shall be very interesting and I don't blame the agent for feeling skeptical at the end there. Looking forward to more! |
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The part with Five peeking at Arkus had me chuckled. Hm, I guess Arkus forgot he was called a Lucario before (unless I mis-remembered and the name Lucario didn't even come up)? Either way, this was still an enjoyable read and looking forward to more! |
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Like Sike, I too like the mention of scars during Five and Arkus's conversation. Also interesting as to why Arkus gave Five the name Ashi Taka. Darkrai attacking huh? I'm assuming they're the cause for what happened last chapter too. Geez. Also like Sike, the last paragraph of eighteen there has me curious too over Five feeling that way. Enjoyed the two chapters, hopefully will get to nineteen soon. EDIT- Okay, able to read Chapter Nineteen now. Nineteen Quote:
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So yeah, this chapter really kick start something crazy here. Looking forward to more! |
When the alpha ball was mentioned, my first initial thought was pokeballs. I think I already know where this is going.
Not surprised Taka chose the name arkus chose for him, though it's pretty bold of him to be in the alpha ball project. More interesting is how Doctor Lammers was in the same situation when Taka was overseeing µ2.0. Some very cool interesting developments here, looking forward to more! |
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