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Hm, well, making Cynthia quite powerful is not wrong, I think. She is a champion, after all, and quite a good one nonetheless.
0=) The last sentence proves this, I think. Now she's having a REAL fight. Hm, yes, I like that. Makes the victory even more wondrous. ^.^ You haven't answered my question. Can I use that plot element (Karen being Will's former girlfriend) in my fic, too? (Sorta, of course, she won't be his FORMER girlfriend...) Short post, 'cause it's Christmas for me already. ^.^ Ehm, yeah... HAPPY CHRISTMAS TO EVERY MEMBER OF THE CLUB, EVEN THOSE WHO HAVEN'T POSTED IN CENTURIES! XD!!! |
Oh, absolutely. If it's in my fanon, it makes it even better if it's in your fanon. I originally had planned on Will and her being a couple, before of course changing it to PsychicShipping.
And I don't mean to be hogging up the group, I don't want Alakazam not to feel welcome... we need you to post too! |
*back from playing with presents Christmas dinner* You only notice how many relatives you have once a year...
Really? Thanks, thanks! That way, I may have a plot up for a sequel...of course, the plot is very thin, but I've been writing a lot for the current chapter (part 2 is now over nine pages long x.x and VERY psychicshippy, you'll love it), so I think that story might be finished before my birthday and then, I may start the sequel.... CPF, you've really influenced me with your continuous sequel writing. XD Hm, my original pair for him was Janine, then my original character and well, now it's always Sabrina. ^^ (with a bunch of fangirls behind, trying to rip her apart *g*) Well, Zammy's home right now, so we've got the club for ourselves and we can talk about Psychicshipping as much as we want to. Zammy won't can't mind. |
I look forward to seeing it, anything Psychicshipping is always a good thing. I'm not sure how long it will take me to write the next chapter, I'm getting worried that I can't get Cynthia right... either she's too powerful or too weak. I want her to be stronger than Sabrina, though, but not *too* much...
It's also awfully hard to write something "dark" with Pokemon when I'm playing the new Mystery Dungeon game, which is ten times as cute as anything in the normal games. |
Part 2 is finished, just have to wait till Zammy comes back. ^.^ It's in the end thirteen pages long, but I was too laze to split it up yet again. XD So if everything goes right, Part 3 will be the last + possible epilogue + possible sequel. ^.~
And it ended up so full of shippiness that I fear Zammy will collapse once he beta-reads it... Hm...hm....that's a serious problem. Making Cynthia too weak would look unreal and cheap, making her too powerful would make Sabrina look a bit helpless which isn't good for us loyal fans. I can't really give you any advise, giving advise to other writers is always fishy, because it's their story and you shouldn't mess too much with it. All I can say is that Cynthia should indeed be more powerful than Sabrina, because she's a league champion (okay, okay, Sabrina won once again her, but still) and a dark/psychic, very powerful opponent if you ask me. And she seems to be quite intelligent. *lol* I know. Try to write a mature scene between two persons in Pokemon *hint, hint* is not easy at all. |
It sounds really great, if it's got that much Psychicshipping. Now I'm hoping you'll review Chapter 6, because I had a feeling you would like the beginning part of it. You know, the return of the character who's become like a sister to Sabrina...
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^^ Believe me, it has. I rewrote the end because I didn't like how it first turned out and now it's even more shippy-full, with a twist, though. ^.~ I'll give you a small hint...if a red rose is a sign of love, what is a black rose then? *hides*
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I guess it would have made more sense for it to be a steel jail cell for Cyrus... so thanks for the review again. Always fun to focus on the Sabrina-Will relationship with Liza finding a way to bother them. And I'm probably the only fanfic writer in the world who doesn't just squeeze Liza and Tate together as one identity, instead focusing just on Liza.
And of course Chapter 7 is up, though you probably realized that by now. |
XD I know how weird it is, sometime you need reviewers to point out your flaws because you can't find them out yourself *coughs*.
There were moments in chapter 7 were I wanted to hug Liza...and moments where I wanted to strangle her. 0=) Hm, I can't say I'm free of this crime. >< I mostly use their game characters, as the anime, uhm...well, let's just say I did not like at all how they were portrayed. And in the game, Liza & Tate are mostly one 'person', with their speech pattern and so... I did notice. 0=) I'm not sure if I'll be able to review tomorrow, New Year's Eve after all....(and I have to cook. o,o;;;;;;;; Bring the antidotes, plz.) |
I don't like Liza and Tate just being thrown together as one person, although that's pretty much how most people view them. I've made Liza Sabrina's "little sister" in a way, and she's found her way into the Saffron family. Maybe it's not too fair to Tate that his sister gets all the attention in my story, but at least he's not combined with her as one entity.
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Well, I'm back, folks. And look at all this Psychic-Shippiness that's been thrown around while I was away....XD
I didn't white write as much as I thought I would, heh. Ironically enough, I haven't been worked on a Sabrina-centric chapter....because I'm writing a Will-centric chapter! =O But of course, I shall be working on his evil side, making a certain someone want to poke his eye out. XD And you can email me the new chapter, P*A. I promise not to collapse if you promise not to collapse from reading my Will-centric stuff. =D |
Maybe it is shafting Tate a bit, CPF, but hehe, his sister is fun enough to watch. 0=) She really has become a member of this (weird) family.
@Zammy Well, if you're not around to restrain us...0=) O,O You, writing a Will-centric chapter? *collapses* *g* Certain someone? You mean yourself? 0=) ^.~ Already did. And no, I won't collapse (again). How could I, if you write about such a cutie as Will? ^.^ Happy New Year to everyone! (Probably will be my last post this year, if Zammy doesn't beta-read with the speed of light. 0=) |
Nice to see you back, Alakazam. We've made things all nice and PsychicShippy while you've been gone, please feel free to join in the fun!
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Happy New Year everyone again...*yawns*....stayed up till three am....*dozes off*...
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Well, and now, just a small request...Zammy, if you have read the chapter and NOT died because of an overdose of psychicshipping, then send it, I know you're online (at least were when I started this post). If you HAVE died, then...um...RIP. 0=) |
I hope you use that for your version of Cynthia... bonus points if you make Cynthia a villain!
Yet another case of Liza being annoying and energetic, while Sabrina remains emotionless (until a certain someone is brought up). I haven't worked on the next chapter, though, but I'll make sure I go to work on it soon. |
XD I'm afraid I won't try to get these bonus points...ehm, do I get any if I make her bad but not a villain? You'll see in which way (once I write that sequel and IF I already include Cynthia in there)....
XD Definitely. As if she's high on something... I guess Sabrina is quite jealous. Of course, if Will is stupid enough to WANT to go back to Karen (not in that emotional way, though)... Chapter 3 b is also still on its way...>>;;; |
Okay, BIG BIG bonus points if you make Cynthia what she's made herself in Chapter 8. Now I'm absolutely serious about Cynthia being power-hungry, and at the same time, the type of woman I'd love to date (minus the dark powers). Of course, there's no doubt that Sabrina hates this whole idea, which makes a Sabrina vs. Cynthia rivalry a reality at last.
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You know where I read your new chapter today? At university! During a lecture! Hooray for mobile phones with internet connections and the uni's W-LAN. XD!!!
Ehm, yeah...I hope Sabrina doesn't kill Will when she wakes up again. Because I fear that she will. *ggg* o,o I'm not so sure if I want my precious Cynthia (mind you, she's my second favourite girl!) that...immoral. I don't know, the way I describe her is already very dark (I can't tell you any examples or you would get spoilered, but let's say she doesn't care at all about the emotions of others) and I'm not sure if I can make her any darker without starting to turn her into a hateful character, which is something I don't want. >>;;; Let's just see how she turns out in the end...of course, I could make up a little rivalry between her and Sabrina, I have my ways...0=) But...Queen Cynthia...anyone told you that this sounds quite sexy? XD BTW, chapter 3 part 2 is (FINALLY) up. 0=) |
This Cynthia you're describing seems like she'll be an awesome character in your upcoming story... of course mine is already villainous enough. I can't wait to see your review of this chapter... obviously Sabrina's about to kill Will because she's so angry, but before that, they found out how powerful Cynthia truly is.
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Third rough day in a row...never before in my life I hated snow so much...x.x Well, I'm quite tired, so my review will be a bit shorter than usual. Sorry. x.x
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Not quoting the whole quarrel between Sabrina and Will, but...whoa. o,o This is serious. She's going to rip his head off. Or get divorced. Or both. Can't say that Will's plan was that smart, but I hoped myself that it would work some way (for Will's sake, as he's the one always getting overpowered by his girls[yes, I say girls, for Liza's as good as a member of this family ^^]). Now I can only say...omg, she's going to be pi angry when she wakes up. Very angry. Very, very angry. Where are the atomic-proof holes, again? *gg* Quote:
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Hopefully I haven't made Cynthia *too* powerful, but I'm certainly making her stronger than Giovanni was last story. Obviously Sabrina will escape (right?), the question will be whether Will escapes after Sabrina's finished yelling at him.
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No, no, not too powerful, just..uhm...power-addicted? Too power-addicted? But well, that's okay, I think. ^^
Sabrina *will* escape and Will will escape Cynthia too...it's rather the question if he escapes Sabrina! XD |
So, do you like my new sig? I figured with a new story, a new sig was necessary... at least while she's in her current position. I don't think Cynthia is viewed as a villain in any other fanfics out there, so if someone were to see that sig out of context they may have no idea what it means.
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^^ I noticed it (but forgot to mention it in my last post lol). Yeah, it's cool. Maybe you might include some song made by "Queen", *g*.
Hm, now, haven't seen such a fic yet, but then again, I only know a few other fics with Cynthia. BTW, new question for the club (came up with this randomly): If you could be any one of Sabrina's pokemon, which would you be? Which reminds me...have we scared Zammy off or why doesn't he use his high post count here? XD |
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