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Psychic*Absol December 24th, 2008 10:58 AM

Hm, well, making Cynthia quite powerful is not wrong, I think. She is a champion, after all, and quite a good one nonetheless.
0=) The last sentence proves this, I think. Now she's having a REAL fight. Hm, yes, I like that. Makes the victory even more wondrous. ^.^
You haven't answered my question. Can I use that plot element (Karen being Will's former girlfriend) in my fic, too? (Sorta, of course, she won't be his FORMER girlfriend...)
Short post, 'cause it's Christmas for me already. ^.^
Ehm, yeah...
HAPPY CHRISTMAS TO EVERY MEMBER OF THE CLUB, EVEN THOSE WHO HAVEN'T POSTED IN CENTURIES! XD!!!

Crazy Packers Fan December 24th, 2008 11:16 AM

Oh, absolutely. If it's in my fanon, it makes it even better if it's in your fanon. I originally had planned on Will and her being a couple, before of course changing it to PsychicShipping.

And I don't mean to be hogging up the group, I don't want Alakazam not to feel welcome... we need you to post too!

Psychic*Absol December 25th, 2008 10:26 AM

*back from playing with presents Christmas dinner* You only notice how many relatives you have once a year...
Really? Thanks, thanks! That way, I may have a plot up for a sequel...of course, the plot is very thin, but I've been writing a lot for the current chapter (part 2 is now over nine pages long x.x and VERY psychicshippy, you'll love it), so I think that story might be finished before my birthday and then, I may start the sequel....
CPF, you've really influenced me with your continuous sequel writing. XD
Hm, my original pair for him was Janine, then my original character and well, now it's always Sabrina. ^^ (with a bunch of fangirls behind, trying to rip her apart *g*)

Well, Zammy's home right now, so we've got the club for ourselves and we can talk about Psychicshipping as much as we want to. Zammy won't can't mind.

Crazy Packers Fan December 26th, 2008 9:32 PM

I look forward to seeing it, anything Psychicshipping is always a good thing. I'm not sure how long it will take me to write the next chapter, I'm getting worried that I can't get Cynthia right... either she's too powerful or too weak. I want her to be stronger than Sabrina, though, but not *too* much...

It's also awfully hard to write something "dark" with Pokemon when I'm playing the new Mystery Dungeon game, which is ten times as cute as anything in the normal games.

Psychic*Absol December 27th, 2008 9:30 AM

Part 2 is finished, just have to wait till Zammy comes back. ^.^ It's in the end thirteen pages long, but I was too laze to split it up yet again. XD So if everything goes right, Part 3 will be the last + possible epilogue + possible sequel. ^.~
And it ended up so full of shippiness that I fear Zammy will collapse once he beta-reads it...

Hm...hm....that's a serious problem. Making Cynthia too weak would look unreal and cheap, making her too powerful would make Sabrina look a bit helpless which isn't good for us loyal fans. I can't really give you any advise, giving advise to other writers is always fishy, because it's their story and you shouldn't mess too much with it. All I can say is that Cynthia should indeed be more powerful than Sabrina, because she's a league champion (okay, okay, Sabrina won once again her, but still) and a dark/psychic, very powerful opponent if you ask me. And she seems to be quite intelligent.

*lol* I know. Try to write a mature scene between two persons in Pokemon *hint, hint* is not easy at all.

Crazy Packers Fan December 27th, 2008 10:50 PM

It sounds really great, if it's got that much Psychicshipping. Now I'm hoping you'll review Chapter 6, because I had a feeling you would like the beginning part of it. You know, the return of the character who's become like a sister to Sabrina...

Psychic*Absol December 28th, 2008 11:53 AM

^^ Believe me, it has. I rewrote the end because I didn't like how it first turned out and now it's even more shippy-full, with a twist, though. ^.~ I'll give you a small hint...if a red rose is a sign of love, what is a black rose then? *hides*
Reason I didn't review before was because I feared the review would be too big for me to write it while online, so I copied the chapter and started to write it in word. ^^;;;; I'll post it now though.
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He helplessly just stood there, not knowing what to do, as his teleporting powers would not work.
He is a weak psychic, after all...*open mouth but refrains from saying anything about her fic*
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“Hello!” a cute little voice shouted.
After that line, I just knew it was Liza. And you know what? I had waited for her to reappear, cause I had started to miss the little brat teaser...0=)
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“Then let’s get this party started,” Karen remarked.
Got bad feeling about this...>>
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Sabrina, Will and Liza sat in the dining room of Sabrina and Will’s mansion, with the wife of the house giving a death glare to her husband.

“I’m sorry, okay?” Will said.
LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLO....oh, poor, poor Will. Not. XD
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“She thinks that there couldn’t possibly be a stupider psychic in the history of psychics,” Liza told Will. “And she also wonders exactly how you would have paid for her ring if the two of you were trapped in those dark energy balls.”
Uhm, instalments? XD Uh, dear, so funny...
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“She thinks that you picked a very poor woman for your first ‘love,’” Liza added.

“We were just boyfriend and girlfriend, nothing special, okay?” Will said.
*Just* boyfriend and girlfriend? I think even that is stretching it...
And still, that paragraph was so funny I couldn't stop laughing. And so typical for them and their marriage. XD!
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“So would you!” Will protested.

“Don’t make me angrier,” Sabrina responded.
Otherwise? 0=)
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“Apparently Will’s old girlfriend is a member of a new Team Rocket.”

“Please don’t call her that,” Will requested.

“Karen revealed to me that-” Sabrina started to say.

“I know, I know!” Will shouted.

lol I can so imagine how Will is acting here, frantically trying to keep his wife from ripping his head off...*giggles*
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“But I can’t be friends with someone who’s ready to suck people into a black hole, can I?”
Oh, you can be everything if you try to...
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“Nothing,” Cynthia responded. “I’ve got it all under control.”
Very self-confident, she is.
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“You do realize that Dark-types are immune against Psychic attacks, don’t you?” Giselle lectured.

“What does that matter?” Melody asked. “Lugia’s stronger than any of those limitations!”

I doubt that. Okay, I did win with my espeon against Karen's umbreon because my pokemon was highly overlevel, but that was the game.
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“How strong could that possibly be?” Melody asked. “Surely they couldn’t hold that in forever?”
Depends on Cynthia's stamina, I suppose.
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Her own dark powers were able to deflect the power of the black hole, and she was able to cause the black hole to completely stop pulling them at all.
Whoa, Giselle's already getting stronger...
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2,125… 2,126… 2,127… 2,128. The last of the spectators walked into the building,
Whoa, Cyrus can count quite well, I would have given up by now. XD And so the real plan was to attack the water show and not only the gym leaders? Clever, clever.
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“Uh, like, excuse me?” a voice came from nearby. “Like, uh, what are you doing?”
Like, like, like...XD And Richie! My, I almost forgot about this guy. 0=)
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How is this helping Team Galactic, really? Cyrus thought to himself, as he helplessly was carried off to the Cerulean police station.
More like it's helping Cynthia. >>;;;
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He was placed in a jail cell with Fighting-type Pokémon holding onto his hands and feet to prevent him from doing anything.
Wouldn't a stell cell be less...um...difficult to arrange?
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“You’re probably right,” Lance replied.

“As always,” Lorelei said with a smile, mirroring another beautiful woman’s response to her husband.
*wide grin* 0=)
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“I wish my hatred of Giselle hadn’t blinded me from seeing through this plan,” Lance remarked.
*mumbles about her own hatred*...yeah, I like Cynthia more, but not as a villain...
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“Probably because… you’re right, again?” Will asked.
*falls down from her chair, laughing* Oh, Will, why even bother to ask?
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“Oh, come on, Will, I expect you to resist Sabrina’s ideas a little more than that,” Liza teased.
*g* No chance, absolutely no chance.
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Liza grinned. “Come on, Will, you scared?” she asked.

“Yes, yes I am!” he exclaimed.
No surprise here. Even though he should know that he gets into trouble every chapter by now. 0=)
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“So am I,” Sabrina added. “And when that’s the case, there’s reason to worry.”
Much surprise here. And yes, much reason to worry. ><

Crazy Packers Fan December 29th, 2008 9:54 PM

I guess it would have made more sense for it to be a steel jail cell for Cyrus... so thanks for the review again. Always fun to focus on the Sabrina-Will relationship with Liza finding a way to bother them. And I'm probably the only fanfic writer in the world who doesn't just squeeze Liza and Tate together as one identity, instead focusing just on Liza.

And of course Chapter 7 is up, though you probably realized that by now.

Psychic*Absol December 30th, 2008 9:16 AM

XD I know how weird it is, sometime you need reviewers to point out your flaws because you can't find them out yourself *coughs*.
There were moments in chapter 7 were I wanted to hug Liza...and moments where I wanted to strangle her. 0=)
Hm, I can't say I'm free of this crime. >< I mostly use their game characters, as the anime, uhm...well, let's just say I did not like at all how they were portrayed. And in the game, Liza & Tate are mostly one 'person', with their speech pattern and so...
I did notice. 0=) I'm not sure if I'll be able to review tomorrow, New Year's Eve after all....(and I have to cook. o,o;;;;;;;; Bring the antidotes, plz.)

Crazy Packers Fan December 30th, 2008 9:51 PM

I don't like Liza and Tate just being thrown together as one person, although that's pretty much how most people view them. I've made Liza Sabrina's "little sister" in a way, and she's found her way into the Saffron family. Maybe it's not too fair to Tate that his sister gets all the attention in my story, but at least he's not combined with her as one entity.

Alakazam17 December 31st, 2008 7:39 AM

Well, I'm back, folks. And look at all this Psychic-Shippiness that's been thrown around while I was away....XD

I didn't white write as much as I thought I would, heh. Ironically enough, I haven't been worked on a Sabrina-centric chapter....because I'm writing a Will-centric chapter! =O But of course, I shall be working on his evil side, making a certain someone want to poke his eye out. XD

And you can email me the new chapter, P*A. I promise not to collapse if you promise not to collapse from reading my Will-centric stuff. =D

Psychic*Absol December 31st, 2008 8:55 AM

Maybe it is shafting Tate a bit, CPF, but hehe, his sister is fun enough to watch. 0=) She really has become a member of this (weird) family.

@Zammy Well, if you're not around to restrain us...0=)
O,O You, writing a Will-centric chapter? *collapses* *g*
Certain someone? You mean yourself? 0=)

^.~ Already did. And no, I won't collapse (again). How could I, if you write about such a cutie as Will? ^.^

Happy New Year to everyone! (Probably will be my last post this year, if Zammy doesn't beta-read with the speed of light. 0=)

Crazy Packers Fan December 31st, 2008 12:46 PM

Nice to see you back, Alakazam. We've made things all nice and PsychicShippy while you've been gone, please feel free to join in the fun!

Psychic*Absol January 1st, 2009 10:41 AM

Happy New Year everyone again...*yawns*....stayed up till three am....*dozes off*...
Meanwhile, here's the review for Chapter 7, CPF.

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Lucian gulped. “Cynthia, you aren’t the same woman I knew when I first fell in love with you,” he remarked.

Then he smiled evilly. “You’re so, so much better,” he added, kissing her again.
Hehe, almost caught me there. For a second, I thought Lucian was going to break with her, but, of course not. 0=)
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“How will we know if there’s an emergency?” Will asked her.

“You’ll be able to feel it,” she replied.
Of course. ^.^ Teh cuteness!!!
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“This could be very dangerous,” she said. “It’s very possible… I could have something very bad happen to me.”

“Sabrina, don’t say that,” Will responded.

“I’m serious,” Sabrina continued. “Now listen to me… if anything happens to me you’ve got to take over the gym in my absence.”

“That’s crazy talk,” Will replied. “I’m not even thinking about it.”

Sabrina then kissed him on the lips.

OMG, omg, omg...so romantic! *dies*...but Sabrina didn't dare to say 'die', too...just that something may happen to her. And of course, nothing too emotional, just 'take care of the gym'. Typical Sabrina. But at the time, so unbelievably cute. ^^
Of course, Will's reaction is cute, too. He doesn't want to think of it...awww...
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“Why is she talking like that?” Will asked Liza.

“I think she’s just trying to scare you, that’s all,” Liza replied.
I, for one, don't think she is. o,o
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She had been blocking Cynthia from reading her thoughts; had Cynthia somehow read right through her?
*If* Cynthia's Dark/Psychic, then that's useless.
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He knew that Cynthia’s expressions were always the opposite of her moods;
Hm, interesting idea...I might use that aspect for my version of Cynthia, too.
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Cynthia gave a warm laugh, then smiled innocently at Sabrina.
Prove that she's ready to explode.
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“Why yes, Sabrina, it is me,” she told her.
When someone tells you that so freely, it's obvious they feel superior to you. And if you are Sabrina, or another damn strong psychic, then it's obvious they ARE superior to you...
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“They couldn’t,” Cynthia responded. “I allowed them to escape, because I still have hope for Sabrina, that she will turn to become my accomplice. She knows exactly how powerful I am now. She will not have any choice but to join me.”
Team Rocket tried the same several times and failed. That's one thing Cynthia is dumb about. Sabrina would rather die then let herself be used. *nods*
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“I saved you, Sabrina!” Liza exclaimed. “Aren’t I special?”
Remember that I told you there are scenes in this chapter I want to hit Liza with a big, big mallet? This is one of them.
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“If you can’t beat her, join her!” Liza joked.
This is another.
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Will groaned. “You just think everyone’s out to use you for your powers, don’t you?” he asked his wife.
I think she's right about that. >> Power corrupts.
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“You don’t know anything about Pokémon!” Giselle snapped. “Lugia’s a Psychic-type, utterly weak against Dark-types and Dark powers! Even the most powerful Psychic Pokémon is hopeless against a powerful Dark barrier!”
Ah, the good old brat Giselle with the ego the size of a Whailmer is back.
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“But what can stop her, then?” Joe inquired. “If Psychics can’t, and Fighting-types can’t, what can?”
Bug? 0=) Both psychic and dark are weak to it. I should know. >>;;;;; (arachnophobia...>.<;;;)
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It was a pretty bizarre scene in Sabrina’s house: Sabrina staring blankly into the distance, without an emotion on her face; Liza chattering non-stop into Will’s ear; and Will looking like he would rather be anywhere but here at the moment.
Very bizarre, indeed. o,o
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“You know, I’m starting to become powerful, I’ll soon be more powerful than Sabrina,” Liza said. “This Cynthia thinks she’s something, let me at her! I’ll show her who’s boss around here. There’s no way I’m letting her get away with this!”
Misty, your mallet please.
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“I know,” Sabrina replied in a monotone voice.

“Well, what are we going to do?” Will asked.

“I don’t know,” Sabrina responded, in the same voice.
o,o Scares me somehow.
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“Come on, show a little emotion,” Will said.
Well, it's Sabrina we talk about, and we know how she emotional she gets...on the other hand...
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He tried reading her mind, but she blocked him.

“Oh, what is it now?” he asked. “Why do this to me?”
Ah, just like the old times now. Will should be used to this by now, he's freaking married to this woman! XD
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“Karen!” Will exclaimed.

The very mention of the name was enough to snap Sabrina out of her emotionless spell.

“What’s the meaning of saying that name?” she snapped. “You still like her?”
*ggg* Sometimes, Will just has the perfect ability to say exactly the wrong thing.
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“How? By rebuilding Team Rocket?” Sabrina asked angrily.

Will thought about it for a moment. “Exactly!” he cried.
o,o Big, fat WTF?!?!? here.
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“Wait a minute, I make the decisions around here, right?” Sabrina asked.
lolrofletc. So quoteworthy. ^^
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“Liza, you’d better come,” Sabrina said. “Just in case Will gets us trapped in balls of dark energy again.”
...*after Will's plan failed and Liza got trapped in a dark ball too* Sabrina: *...*ready to rip his head off* Who's gonna save us now, hm? >>;;;; Will: *meep* XD!!!!!
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“Don’t become power-hungry, Liza,” Sabrina commanded.

“Why not, Sabrina?” Liza questioned. “I just want to be like you.”

“You don’t want to be like me,” Sabrina replied.

*nods* Not again, Liza. You had to be saved last time...(but if no one should want to be like Sabrina...me is not sure...)


Well, and now, just a small request...Zammy, if you have read the chapter and NOT died because of an overdose of psychicshipping, then send it, I know you're online (at least were when I started this post).
If you HAVE died, then...um...RIP. 0=)

Crazy Packers Fan January 2nd, 2009 12:26 PM

I hope you use that for your version of Cynthia... bonus points if you make Cynthia a villain!

Yet another case of Liza being annoying and energetic, while Sabrina remains emotionless (until a certain someone is brought up). I haven't worked on the next chapter, though, but I'll make sure I go to work on it soon.

Psychic*Absol January 2nd, 2009 12:37 PM

XD I'm afraid I won't try to get these bonus points...ehm, do I get any if I make her bad but not a villain? You'll see in which way (once I write that sequel and IF I already include Cynthia in there)....

XD Definitely. As if she's high on something... I guess Sabrina is quite jealous. Of course, if Will is stupid enough to WANT to go back to Karen (not in that emotional way, though)...
Chapter 3 b is also still on its way...>>;;;

Crazy Packers Fan January 4th, 2009 11:00 PM

Okay, BIG BIG bonus points if you make Cynthia what she's made herself in Chapter 8. Now I'm absolutely serious about Cynthia being power-hungry, and at the same time, the type of woman I'd love to date (minus the dark powers). Of course, there's no doubt that Sabrina hates this whole idea, which makes a Sabrina vs. Cynthia rivalry a reality at last.

Psychic*Absol January 5th, 2009 10:22 AM

You know where I read your new chapter today? At university! During a lecture! Hooray for mobile phones with internet connections and the uni's W-LAN. XD!!!
Ehm, yeah...I hope Sabrina doesn't kill Will when she wakes up again. Because I fear that she will. *ggg*
o,o I'm not so sure if I want my precious Cynthia (mind you, she's my second favourite girl!) that...immoral. I don't know, the way I describe her is already very dark (I can't tell you any examples or you would get spoilered, but let's say she doesn't care at all about the emotions of others) and I'm not sure if I can make her any darker without starting to turn her into a hateful character, which is something I don't want. >>;;; Let's just see how she turns out in the end...of course, I could make up a little rivalry between her and Sabrina, I have my ways...0=)
But...Queen Cynthia...anyone told you that this sounds quite sexy? XD
BTW, chapter 3 part 2 is (FINALLY) up. 0=)

Crazy Packers Fan January 5th, 2009 2:28 PM

This Cynthia you're describing seems like she'll be an awesome character in your upcoming story... of course mine is already villainous enough. I can't wait to see your review of this chapter... obviously Sabrina's about to kill Will because she's so angry, but before that, they found out how powerful Cynthia truly is.

Psychic*Absol January 6th, 2009 10:38 AM

Third rough day in a row...never before in my life I hated snow so much...x.x Well, I'm quite tired, so my review will be a bit shorter than usual. Sorry. x.x

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Silver and Jasmine sat in the living room of their house in Olivine City, enjoying a peaceful afternoon.
Whoa, had almost forgotten these two. ^^Nice you included them again.
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“Hello, you may know me as the new champion of the Pokémon League, Cynthia,” she announced. “But as of now I have a new title: queen.”

Lucian then walked into the room, placing a crown upon Cynthia’s head.

Wasn't there some guy in history who did the same? Napoleon? Sorry, my last history lesson was months ago...XD But cool. And have I mentioned that this title is quite sexy? Have I? XD
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How does someone just go and make themselves a queen? That doesn’t seem right,” Silver said.
The pokemon world's government is a joke, so...I would call myself lady or something, too...(btw, just noticed...in my story, I call Karen a 'queen'...whoa. double title once Cynthia appear! XD)
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“Maybe the time is right,” Jasmine remarked.

“It’s never right,” Silver mumbled.
Agreed. >>
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“If anyone should be queen, it should be me!” she exclaimed
*sighs* Same old Giselle.
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“I’ll gain back my position, and just for the sake of fairness, I’ll become the new queen of this land!”
>>;;; Not exactly a thing this land needs right now.
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“Yes, and we intend to join her!” Will yelled.
Right time for me to scream: WTF?!? again?
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Sabrina gulped as she looked down at the “R” on the shirt Karen handed her. What the heck is Will thinking? she thought. Doesn’t he know how much this hurts me?
>>;;; Have to agree, very unscrupulous from him. >> But sympathy is not a threat many men posses...

Not quoting the whole quarrel between Sabrina and Will, but...whoa. o,o This is serious. She's going to rip his head off. Or get divorced. Or both. Can't say that Will's plan was that smart, but I hoped myself that it would work some way (for Will's sake, as he's the one always getting overpowered by his girls[yes, I say girls, for Liza's as good as a member of this family ^^]). Now I can only say...omg, she's going to be pi angry when she wakes up. Very angry. Very, very angry.
Where are the atomic-proof holes, again? *gg*
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She pulled out a camera, snapping a picture of the five trainers.

“Well, isn’t that a shame, Team Rocket has been caught on camera, trying to invade the Pokémon League,” she said. “Now all the television networks will have something interesting to put on the air, a bunch of Pokémon trainers who tried to take down the queen.”

Ouch, ouch. Me not like this at all. ><;;;; Karen&Bruno deserves this, but not the three sweeties! ><

Crazy Packers Fan January 7th, 2009 5:55 AM

Hopefully I haven't made Cynthia *too* powerful, but I'm certainly making her stronger than Giovanni was last story. Obviously Sabrina will escape (right?), the question will be whether Will escapes after Sabrina's finished yelling at him.

Psychic*Absol January 7th, 2009 10:47 AM

No, no, not too powerful, just..uhm...power-addicted? Too power-addicted? But well, that's okay, I think. ^^
Sabrina *will* escape and Will will escape Cynthia too...it's rather the question if he escapes Sabrina! XD

Crazy Packers Fan January 8th, 2009 7:47 AM

So, do you like my new sig? I figured with a new story, a new sig was necessary... at least while she's in her current position. I don't think Cynthia is viewed as a villain in any other fanfics out there, so if someone were to see that sig out of context they may have no idea what it means.

Psychic*Absol January 8th, 2009 10:19 AM

^^ I noticed it (but forgot to mention it in my last post lol). Yeah, it's cool. Maybe you might include some song made by "Queen", *g*.
Hm, now, haven't seen such a fic yet, but then again, I only know a few other fics with Cynthia.
BTW, new question for the club (came up with this randomly): If you could be any one of Sabrina's pokemon, which would you be?
Which reminds me...have we scared Zammy off or why doesn't he use his high post count here? XD

Alakazam17 January 8th, 2009 1:58 PM

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Originally Posted by Psychic*Absol (Post 4262478)
^^ I noticed it (but forgot to mention it in my last post lol). Yeah, it's cool. Maybe you might include some song made by "Queen", *g*.
Hm, now, haven't seen such a fic yet, but then again, I only know a few other fics with Cynthia.
BTW, new question for the club (came up with this randomly): If you could be any one of Sabrina's pokemon, which would you be?
Which reminds me...have we scared Zammy off or why doesn't he use his high post count here? XD

I'd be an Alakazam, of course! :P

And no, you aren't scaring me, XD. I just haven't been finding any good ways to jump into the conversation. That is, until just now. ^^


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