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Psychic*Absol February 16th, 2009 9:09 AM

Well, I suppose the funny parts were not really consciously intentional, but rather just...happened. They'll continue to be there, though. Can't stay away from my writing style.

^.^ Another reason for me to wait all the two weeks+. I hope you're right, but almost everything is better than a half-dying, wounded Sabrina (okay, almost everything- a dead Sabrina is of course worse).

Yayayayayay!!! Another part makes me really, really happy! (I had a feeling that you wouldn't stop here, but knowing it for sure now is definitely good!) Hm, now I wonder what the plot will then be about! ^^

Starom February 16th, 2009 9:10 AM

Haha - this is cool ^^ Sabrina was always my favourite - Abra and family & Ghastly and family are my favourite pokemon too, so I guess it goes hand in hand? :D

Crazy Packers Fan February 16th, 2009 9:47 AM

You're welcome to join, Starom, as are all! (Speaking of which, when will Alakazam return? Please come back!)

Two weeks? You don't have to wait more than two minutes... I gave in and copied my story from ff.net to my mom's computer, and thus wrote Chapter 15 there. So, unless this computer goes down too (knock on wood), I'll keep on writing. Sabrina-centric chapter, BTW, and of course I know you'll love this one.

Psychic*Absol February 17th, 2009 9:54 AM

Welcome, Starom! Have fun here, post a lot and stay as insane as possible. 0=)

Well, Zammy is online (not right now, but I talked to him several times over the last days) and I told him he should post here again. Which he didn't. >> Hmpf.

Since that's ontopic...small announcement. Due to problems with the phone company, I might not be able to get online for 2+ days, starting tomorrow. ;.; Sorry about that.

Did you post that chapter already, CPF, because you said 'two minutes'? If that's the case, then I seem not to be able to see it on ff. net. ><

Crazy Packers Fan February 17th, 2009 10:03 AM

That's strange, because I can see it... I wonder why the new chapter isn't showing up for you. I hope it shows up soon.

Psychic*Absol February 17th, 2009 10:17 AM

Even stranger, when I try to access it through your ff. net profile, it works. It doesn't when I just browse through Pokemon.... Hm....nevermind, I got it now. ^^ Review now or after my possible downtime? XD

Edit: Just started reading....GOD I KNEW IT!!!!!! XD I'M PSYCHIC!!!!!! (ehm, okay, sorta) ^^ Yes, we're going to see little Roxette now!!!! (one day)
Zammy will...ehm...be angry? XD

Crazy Packers Fan February 17th, 2009 2:16 PM

I guess I must give away too much, because you were able to guess it. We won't actually see the baby until story #5, but at least we know it's coming. And yes, apparently Sabrina does not have the power to foresee her own pregnancy.

Edit: Chapters 16 & 17 are up, 18 is written, and I'm thinking about writing #19 right now. Oh, and look at my signature. I'm beginning to like her more and more all the time (so much that I'll let her win???).

Alakazam17 February 19th, 2009 4:17 PM

XD *takes a bow*

Wow, I guess I was missed, eh? Well I guess I didn't really know what to say as of late. I am really bad at reading(and to a lesser extent writing), heh, but I'd like to get caught up on your work, CPF. From what I hear from P*A, it's getting interesting(despite imminent PsychicShippiness =P).

As for Multiverse Chronicles, I am partially through the next chapter, and I hope to finish it up shortly. Thing is...I'm sick at the moment, and I tend to dislike writing while I'm coughing up junk. >_<

And as for the Japanese in your sig, I know the last three katakana letters say "Shirona," but I can't make out the first two. =P

Crazy Packers Fan February 19th, 2009 4:40 PM

The Japanese was a little blurry; I tried changing the color to make it clearer. Maybe now you can take a guess...

I'll be looking forward to seeing where Sabrina ends up next in your fic. I know she was with Naruto recently, and it ought to get even more interesting now that she's met him.

Meanwhile, I went nuts writing today and wrote three chapters, including the penultimate one, where someone's gonna die I won't spoil it yet. I'm going to wait to post each chapter until P*A gives me a review on each, because it's more fun that way. I already got too far ahead of her as it is.

Alakazam17 February 19th, 2009 4:50 PM

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Originally Posted by Crazy Packers Fan (Post 4367561)
The Japanese was a little blurry; I tried changing the color to make it clearer. Maybe now you can take a guess...

I'll be looking forward to seeing where Sabrina ends up next in your fic. I know she was with Naruto recently, and it ought to get even more interesting now that she's met him.

Meanwhile, I went nuts writing today and wrote three chapters, including the penultimate one, where someone's gonna die I won't spoil it yet. I'm going to wait to post each chapter until P*A gives me a review on each, because it's more fun that way. I already got too far ahead of her as it is.

Is it "taki?" XD "ki" looks kind of like that, but I think it has only two horizontal slashes-same with "e." Perhaps it's the kanji symbol for life?

Hm, she hasn't met Naruto yet, but that'll come soon. My next chapter is actually going to stray away from following one character for its entirety, instead focusing on nearly everyone for a short bit. And while I may get on it tonight, I'll probably do it tomorrow(hoping I'll feel better then).

Crazy Packers Fan February 20th, 2009 4:52 AM

Well, truth be told, I don't know how to pronounce what I typed in there myself. I just plugged in a certain word (*hint hint*) and I copied what came out.

I hope you feel better; I want to see your story!

Psychic*Absol February 20th, 2009 10:33 AM

See there, the P*A is back. =D And as soon as I re-appear, the psychicshipping-hater (aka Zammy) is back, too....carnival is getting to me I know.

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Originally Posted by Crazy Packers Fan (Post 4360516)
I guess I must give away too much, because you were able to guess it.

Nah, not your fault, CPF. I'm really, really good a guessing fanfic's plot and I drove some authors crazy with that, I must admit....

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Originally Posted by Crazy Packers Fan (Post 4360516)
We won't actually see the baby until story #5, but at least we know it's coming. And yes, apparently Sabrina does not have the power to foresee her own pregnancy.

We knew that it (she) would be there since the 'epilogue'. 0=) And, like I said, psychics can't foresee everything. I at least think so. (see my fic...Sabrina wouldn't have gone on that trip if she foresaw her own almost death)

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Oh, and look at my signature. I'm beginning to like her more and more all the time (so much that I'll let her win???).

O.O NOOOOOO!!!!

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Originally Posted by Crazy Packers Fan (Post 4360516)
I'm going to wait to post each chapter until P*A gives me a review on each, because it's more fun that way.

* a bit angry* I told you I would be offline for a few days (and you can be damn happy that my phone company let me online today because otherwise, you would be stuck for a weekend without ANY review), but I'll be a nice P*A and review ALL THREE chapters today. Yes, I can (commit typing suice that way).

First, the best chapter ever. *lol* I already had suspections when I read the title, btw. ^^

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“Just like with Giovanni, it cost Cynthia some of her powers trying to control my mind like that.
Let's hope it stays that way. >> *glares at Cynthia*
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“No, I’m serious,” Sabrina said. “If I didn’t come here, maybe I wouldn’t have found out what I know now.”
Let's agree on that she would have found out in a few months anyway, if not even just weeks.
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“I’m pregnant,” she told him.
*celebrates on Zammy's corpse* XD!!!!
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Surely he knew exactly when this came from, but he thought there was no chance that Sabrina had gotten pregnant from then.
Let's do the math....Sabrina's birthday was May 15th, we had agreed on. One month later, they married. Now, how much later does part 4 take place? Less than a year....hm....no, sorry, can't find out when (month) they baby's due. ><
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He thought he had taken all the necessary measures to prevent it…
LOL Either something broke *ggg* or Sabrina manipulated something or she manipulated Will or...the possibilities are endless *ggg*.
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“It’s not your fault,” she responded. “Oh, okay, maybe it is…
It takes two to tango...*ggg*
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Sabrina smiled. “I’ll bet against you,” she said. “You’ll think better than to do something as foolhardy as that.”
>.< I agree with her. Very bad idea, Will. You can't do that now that you're going to be a daddy. ;.;
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“Come on, now, it’s too late to change that,” Will replied. “If it’s a girl, I get to name her, and I have the perfect name for her.”
*g* Well, we know that it's going to be a girl. (And we know her name.)
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their first offspring.
The way this is worded makes me think they'll have more than one child.
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“Oh, we wish we could visit her ourselves,” one of the girls replied.

“It’s an honor to be invited by the queen,” another one said.
They sound like robots....
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“What kind of person would destroy such a lively place?” she wondered.
The one you're going to meet.
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Cynthia and Lucian lay in bed together, feeling as happy as ever.
I wonder if they'll ever have a child. The requirements are there, after all. *g* Hm, if they have a son, and then he and Roxette meet and...ehm, no, I won't think of plots. XD
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“And what is your purpose?” she questioned.

“To make the queen happy,” Lucian added.
Normally, I like relationsships where the girl rules, but this one is twisted.
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with no one around to stop them.
I so doubt that.
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“We are Team Rocket,” Karen announced.

“At least most of them are,” Silver added, pointing to Karen.
*gg*
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“Just as long as we don’t have to wear any of those ridiculous ‘R’ shirts,” Melody added, as Whitney laughed.
These shirts really seem to be not fashionable at all. The new TR should do something about it. *ggg*
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“Oh, relax,” Giselle replied. “I’m sure none of them will object to my presence here.”
Oo, just Oo
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“Oh, that’s right!” Giselle exclaimed. “You and that ridiculous mask! I can’t believe such a top-quality trainer would marry a man like you!”
*glares at Giselle* He was an Elite trainer, too, ya know? >>
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“Aren’t you, uh, sort of wanted by the police?” Will asked. “You know, by Cynthia’s orders?”

“Oh, that?” Giselle replied. “Why, I’m not worried! Are you, Joe?”

Joe looked around in fear, hoping no one would see his girlfriend.
*rolls her eyes* Obviously he is.
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“Reward? Making me happy is your reward, you fools!”
*giggles sarcastically* Oh, what a reward that is!
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“Oh, Lucian,” Cynthia said. “When will those fools ever learn? They shall never be able to make me happy.”

“There is someone who can do that, though, isn’t there?” Lucian asked with a smile.

“Only one,” Cynthia responded.
*sarcastic giggle continues* Yeah, only one. >> Thank God.

(second chapter title surprised me... I used that word, too, but in a different connection XD)
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“What kind of meal is this?” she snapped at Will. “Do you Saffron citizens eat this strange stuff all the time?”

“They’re called vegetables, Giselle,” Joe said.
lols at Giselle not knowing what vegetables are...omg....my Sabrina is a vegetarian, btw. ^^;;; I thought I should mention that. XD
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“Oh, I’m sorry, I didn’t realize you were one of those poor households,” she continued. “It must be an honor for a low-class family like yours to welcome in the Pokémon League champion into your house, isn’t it? Ha ha ha ha ha!”
I don't think Will& Sabrina are that poor, they have a mansion after all. And no. Just no. >> No honour there.
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and Joe slapped his hand over his forehead, Liza was thinking about more pressing issues.
I do the same here, Joe. And wtf, Liza thinking about pressing issues first? Man, without Sabrina, the household goes nuts.
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“Then maybe a couple of us should keep Lucian busy with an old-fashioned Pokémon battle,” Liza replied. “That would be you and me, Will.”
Psychic vs psychic, the classical, always good battle. ^^
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“Well, one thing’s for sure: I’m not allowing Sabrina to face her ever again,” Will commented. “No way do I ever want to see what I saw the last time.”
Agreed. Completely. >> Never again.
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“Well, what if I were to… spill the beans?” Cyrus asked.
Even though I do not know what that means, I have an idea about what it does and that surprises me. o,o A lot.
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“I’m off to the Celadon police station,” Will replied. “I’ve got to stop the police before they get themselves stopped by Cynthia.”
>.< And then Cynthia's going to stop you!
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They then noticed there were two mansions; one belonged to Sabrina’s parents, and the other of course to Sabrina.
Hm, leads me to a question...do her parents know that they'll become grandparents? ^-^
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“Okay, let me make this clear, we are Team Rocket - but we are not evil,”
*cough* As if.
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“That’s fine with me,” Giselle replied. “After all, pawns become queens.”
Haven't we already agreed that monarchy= bad?
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“And aren’t you the same guy I had to throw out of the hospital?”

“Wait, I thought that was another Jenny,” Will said.
Oo So she did not lose her memory of that?
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“What the heck is going on here?”

“Oh, so the man of the house chooses to join the party,” Liza said. “Have some fun, too, Will.”

“Liza, would you please tell me why she is here?” Will asked, pointing to Karen.
Several lol worthy things here. First, Will's quote, then Liza calling him the man of the house (funny thing is, he's going to stay the man of the house for some time...omg, poor Will, cornered by three women), and then, of course, Karen and Will. If Sabrina were here...ehm, heads might have rollen. XD
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“There’s no way to beat a Magnet Train,” Liza replied.
Teleport! ^.^
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Everyone turned their attention to Will save for Giselle.
How *surprising*.
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while Liza and I teleport,
Knew it.
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She smiled sweetly at Erika, who returned the favor.
I would interpret these smiles quite differently.
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“I just love flowers… they are really such an integral part of my life.”
*cough* And dark powers *cough*
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“What is with you two?” she asked. “Get up!”
Lol Agatha....*shakes head*
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“Well, you don’t expect the old woman to carry you, do you?” Agatha asked.
'Of course we do. >> Your bones aren't broken, are they?'
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“That’s the way it is when you’re facing the league champion,” Giselle replied
The sad thing is...she *is* strong.

Continuation in next post, as this one might seriously get too long. ><

Alakazam17 February 20th, 2009 10:39 AM

Haha, quite a review you have there, P*A. *is danced upon*

And I'm writing Chapter 16 now myself, and I'll hopefully have it finished this afternoon. =D

And I assume it means "Queen Shirona" then CPF. =P

Psychic*Absol February 20th, 2009 11:09 AM

^ afternoon? It's almost night for me. *ggg*

Yeah, continuation now...x.xGod I feel tired, but I want to finish this so I can read new chapters so CPF feels happy. ^^
BTW, I overread this first...SOMEONE'S GONNA DIE???!?!?!?! OH NOES!!!!!! O.O *faints*

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For all they knew, it was possible that Cynthia was innocent.
No chance. Absolutely no chance.
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The officer looked around, feeling awful about what she thought was about to occur. Then she fired the gun, closing her eyes, trying to avert herself from seeing Cynthia killed.

The bullet simply stopped in mid-air and dropped harmlessly to the ground.

“Unbelievable!” an officer yelled.
I've seen this happening quite often both in fanfics and (fictional) films about psychics.
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“How can you just call yourself queen? You weren’t born into royalty, you weren’t elected - you just made yourself queen!” another officer yelled.
That's how they always did it in former centuries.
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“My, my,” he said. “You’re so compassionate.”

“I know,” she replied with a sweet smile. “I spared their dogs.”
*nods weakly* She loves animals Pokemon.
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“You don’t know what happened to Sabrina, and I won’t let you know.
*lols* That can be interpreted in many ways...
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“By whom, may I ask, Queen Cynthia?” Erika questioned.

Cynthia looked at Erika innocently.

“It isn’t important,” Cynthia answered.
It is. But keep your underlings dumb, yeah, right, that's Cynthia's way.
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Sabrina lay in her hospital bed, feeling a sudden feeling of panic.

No, Will, no! she thought.

Images began flashing through her mind… she saw Will going through similar things to what she suffered when she last met Cynthia.

Will, hear me, she said telepathically. Whatever you do, do not attack Cynthia… please…

;.; Reason why I was scared for a moment that Will would die....
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Will felt a sudden panic feeling. “You know what,” he offered, “I think that we would be best off if Liza and I took Lucian out of the picture.”
^.^ Way better. I like Psychic vs psychic much better. (And no chance that Will might get in trouble).
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“In another dimension,” Lucian replied.

Will’s eyes sunk as he realized that they had been killed. “You and me, one-on-one,” he demanded to Lucian. “Come on, let’s go.”

“No, make that two-on-one!” Liza shouted. “I’m fighting him too!”
I like the way Will reacts to the killings and how he suggests the battle, but I hope it will end in a good way. ><
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Karen then looked over at all the other trainers, who were absolutely petrified - they had been frozen in place by Cynthia’s psychic powers.
>.< Ouch.
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“It’s a shame the teacher must kill her own pupil,”
Hm, will it be Karen that's going to be killed?
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Out came Cynthia’s most trusted Pokémon, Lucario.

“That isn’t fair!” Will complained. “A dark type in a battle between psychics?”

Lucario is Fighting/Steel. ^^;;;;;
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“Okay…” Lucian replied. “And how about… if I defeat you, then you die?”

Will was about to say something, but Liza interrupted him. “That sounds fair!” she shouted.
o,o No, it doesn't. It sounds bad. Will & Liza shouldn't die!!!
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Frowning, Will sent out his Xatu, suddenly much more worried about the outcome of the battle.
I'm too, now.
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While she wasn’t paying attention, I built up a dark barrier all around the room, stopping her from escaping.”

“I was paying attention,”
I'm not sure if that makes sense....
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Will lay on his back, completely wiped out. Lucario had danced right past his Xatu and Liza’s Medicham and began punching and scraping at the masked trainer.
Ouch. So Sabrina's vision almost comes true.
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“Who said this was a battle between Pokémon?” Lucian laughed. “Kill her!”

Lucario then made its move, perhaps to crush the 15-year-old girl.
O.O NO, NOT LIZA!!! ;.; Please not, I like the little twerp. Without her, it wouldn't be the same.


*sighs and faints* Finished. Seven pages in word. Next chapters please.

Crazy Packers Fan February 20th, 2009 11:37 AM

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Originally Posted by Psychic*Absol (Post 4369517)
Yeah, continuation now...x.xGod I feel tired, but I want to finish this so I can read new chapters so CPF feels happy. ^^

Okay, then, up goes another chapter... part 2 of the epic battle.

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BTW, I overread this first...SOMEONE'S GONNA DIE???!?!?!?! OH NOES!!!!!!

Maybe. Just maybe.

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Originally Posted by Psychic*Absol (Post 4369517)
Lucario is Fighting/Steel. ^^;;;;;

HUGE mistake there, and I'm glad you caught it before I posted Chapter 18. Why? You'll see. Fortunately I was able to manipulate things a little bit thanks to Cynthia's awesomeness.

On other matters, yes, it does say "Queen Shirona," as she would love to be called. Have you noticed that Erika always calls Cynthia "Queen Cynthia"? If you haven't, it's a good time to point that out right now.

The epilogue has been written, so this one is as good as done. I've got to keep on this writing kick and start the fifth one as soon as possible. It'll be really clear from the epilogue where the series is going.

Psychic*Absol February 20th, 2009 11:47 AM

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Originally Posted by Crazy Packers Fan (Post 4369576)
Okay, then, up goes another chapter... part 2 of the epic battle.

I actually went 'x.x' when I saw your post. I thought "oh no, not another chapter to review today..."XD Tomorrow, okay? I'm strained....

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Originally Posted by Crazy Packers Fan (Post 4369576)
HUGE mistake there, and I'm glad you caught it before I posted Chapter 18. Why? You'll see. Fortunately I was able to manipulate things a little bit thanks to Cynthia's awesomeness.

^.^ That's what reviewers are for. (actually, that's what beta-readers are for, but nevermind...)

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Originally Posted by Crazy Packers Fan (Post 4369576)
On other matters, yes, it does say "Queen Shirona," as she would love to be called. Have you noticed that Erika always calls Cynthia "Queen Cynthia"? If you haven't, it's a good time to point that out right now.

Oh, have you noticed that Erica....no, I haven't noticed that, actually.

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Originally Posted by Crazy Packers Fan (Post 4369576)
The epilogue has been written, so this one is as good as done. I've got to keep on this writing kick and start the fifth one as soon as possible. It'll be really clear from the epilogue where the series is going.

^.^ I'm happy about that. Be ready for Chapter 2 of my fic during the next days/weekend.

Crazy Packers Fan February 20th, 2009 11:51 AM

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Originally Posted by Psychic*Absol (Post 4369596)
I actually went 'x.x' when I saw your post. I thought "oh no, not another chapter to review today..."XD Tomorrow, okay? I'm strained....

I understand. Don't worry, I'll be ready for your review then, and then post the all-important Chapter 19. The title of it is a song from Star Wars Episode I, so you know it has to be something special.

Oh, and I can't wait to see Cynthia pop up in your fic. Will my Cynthia have an effect on the way you wrote yours? That'll be so interesting to see.

Psychic*Absol February 20th, 2009 12:07 PM

^^ Okay then. I have scipped over chapter 18, and I have to say, I started to 'hate' it when I saw the title and that only continued. >>;;;;;
(DON'T KILL LIZA&WILL PLEASE!!! XD)
I have seen Star Wars Episode one, but the chance that I know the title is slim.

Probably not. ^^;;; I have my own image of Cynthia and that one won't be destroyed so easily. BTW, her first appearance will be in Chapter two. Together with Lucian, too.
I rather think the way you described Will& Sabrina influences my story quite strongly. Actually, that's a bit sad, I hoped I could make them a bit different, but well, maybe I manage that over the sequel...lots of backstory for Will there, btw. ^^

Crazy Packers Fan February 20th, 2009 7:11 PM

Keep in mind, I like Cynthia. Or more accurately, I love Cynthia. So my intention isn't just to make her some supervillain with no feelings. That's why I include all her love scenes with Lucian... she really cares for him. And as you may have read, he really cares for her. But she is a little power-hungry too, and that hunger for power could lead to something bad happening to someone... all that, coming up (possibly) tomorrow.

BTW, Alakazam, I'll read your next chapter pretty soon.

Psychic*Absol February 21st, 2009 9:25 AM

Dear CPF, did you wait for me or why are you online now? XD Nah, just kidding. It's actually a first for me to go here before checking all the other forums...today with reason, of course.
Okay, will not longer let you and me wait and start the next review.
Did I mention that my longest review was 18 pages in word? XD
I still don't like the chapter title. >> Too pessimistic.
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Just as Lucario was about to crash into Liza, Medicham dived and tripped the Dark-type Pokémon, causing it to fall just short of nailing Liza.
*foxyay*
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“I taught it all Psychic moves,” Will muttered. “What a mistake.”
*coughs and hides her first Alakazam and her first Espeon* Common mistake, mister. 0=) (Though my first espeon was the complete opposite, knowing Bite, Shadow Ball....)
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“I give Sabrina credit for putting up with a man as stupid as you,” Liza replied
LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL You don't know how much I laughed when I first read this....omg....*shakes head* (Not to mention that Zammy liked it as well >>)
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He just wanted to keep himself busy while he figured Cynthia was crushing her opponents.
It almost sounds as if Lucian's stronger than her...but he isn't, is he?
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At that moment, Jasmine’s Steelix came rushing over towards the balls of energy
Deus ex machine. 0=)
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“Curse that thing!” Karen cried. “I would have won if I would have had the chance to keep going!”
I'm on your side, but this is too optimistic, Karen. >>;;;
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but those two can’t do much without their trainers, can they?”
Theoretically, they can. Pokemon often work without trainers. How would wild Pokemon survive otherwise?
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“Cynthia, you almost killed us!” Lance cried.
'So what?' (imagining what she would answer) >>;;;
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He then used his secret power - breathing fire out of his mouth.
*giggles* It has nothing to do with my breath....(okay, few will get this joke...)
BTW....this seriously makes me think we're in X-Men now....all these super powers....
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“That’s impossible!” Lorelei cried. “Steelix is strong against psychic and dark powers!”

“I’m just that good,” Cynthia replied.
x.x Did you ever ask if you overpowered her? No? Well, you did. XD
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“That really helped,” Liza said sarcastically.

“Hey, at least he did something,” Will replied.
Yeah, getting himself knocked out. >>;;;;
Hm, at least this is where our Wills are different. Mine is a better trainer, I suppose. ^^;;;;
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"Did I ever say Lucario was a normal Pokémon?" Lucian replied. "He's belonged to Cynthia... she's had a strange effect on him."
^.~
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"Now come on Lucian, we didn't actually mean you could kill us," he said.
Idiot. >.< You thought Lucian would play nice, eh?
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“Oh, for once I wish I was battling Cynthia, not you!”

“Oh, trust me, you don’t wish that,” Lucian replied.
Agreed there. Cynthia is...mad. o,o

Won't quote the whole dialogue of Will& Lucian there, but, whoa....o,o That sure is a weird love. But impressive. I mean...Lucian's the driving force behind, but at the same time, Cynthia's just as much in power as he is, he was just intelligent enough to let her...I'm actually biting my tongue to say this, but EVIL Lucian is...fascinating. o,o I suppose character-wise, he beats my Lucian. ^^;;;;;;
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Then everything on Will and Liza’s side of the room went black.
I've died a thousand deaths during the running of the whole story....>>;;;;
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But right at that moment, she was joined by an unwelcome visitor.

“Sorry I’m late!”
*headdesk* Nice introduction, Giselle. I knew it would be you without reading the next sentences.
But for once I'm happy you're here.
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“Doesn’t it hurt you to see me wearing this crown?”
Judging from Cynthia's fashion style and Giselle's character...yes.
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The two female league champions pushed their balls of dark energy at each other, and the ultimate clash was on.
*bites tongue before she can scream 'b*tch fight'*

Crazy Packers Fan February 21st, 2009 9:43 AM

All right, I'm glad you like it. The highlight of this chapter was writing about Lucian's love for Cynthia. I was trying to explain why he lets her have the power, and basically why she even lets him hang around. She really loves him, and I hope her humanity isn't lost in her evilness.

Now for the most important chapter in the whole story... Chapter 19.

Psychic*Absol February 21st, 2009 10:02 AM

^.^ Well, I don't want to spoil it, but with thinking about why and how Cynthia loves, you've come quite close to my story, too. (man, either Zammy gets onlien today or I'll post that thing without beta-reading. >>)

I'll read the chapter once it's up. ff. net is quite slow again today. >>

I've thought about who could be the one who dies (if there's anyone who does), but so far, I haven't really found an answer. It can't be anyone who appears in the epilogue, and that are quite a few persons. The only ones I can't spot so far are Karen and Lucian....hm...

I'm surprised I never asked this....do you actually like my reviews? ^^;;;; I try to put effort in them, but since I have my own style of reviewing, I assume not everyone likes it....

Crazy Packers Fan February 21st, 2009 10:08 AM

No, I love your reviews. I write each chapter just hoping to see how you're going to review them. Seriously, if you didn't review, I wouldn't want to write as much. So please, please keep reviewing!

Oh, and very important: you must remember that this story occurs "half-past" the epilogue. The Pokemon League tournament actually occurred before this story. The only thing that occurred during/after this story was Roxette's birth.

Psychic*Absol February 21st, 2009 10:59 AM

*blush* Really? Thank you so much! ^.^
Now I've got a (another) reason to review Chapter 19 today.

@[email protected] Goodness, then I give up trying to figure out who might die.

*switches over to chapter*
Hm, I like the title, actually. Duel of the Fates sounds cool.
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right away it was clear that Giselle’s power was more than enough to stand up against Cynthia.
*foxyay*....ehm, wait, why am I cheering for Giselle? Argh, when given the alternatives....
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“I’m glad the loser won’t be me.”
Great quote. Even coming from Cynthia. *nods*
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Lucian saw fingers over his eyes. Who could possibly be putting their hands around his eyes like this?

“Peek-a-boo!” Liza shouted.
lol Liza's fun. ^^ I like that tactic. It's funny and unorthodox. XD
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Sure enough, one of them ended up hitting Will, and this stopped him from teleporting.
I guess stromtrooper effect was out. Ouch. >.<
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Liza shrieked as he saw blood running down Will’s cheeks, as the punches began to open up wounds on Will’s head.
;.; He's already scarred, so...oh, wait, my mistake, is my fic. XD
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Slowly but surely, Cynthia’s ball of dark energy began to overpower Giselle’s.
Nooo....;.;
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“Oh, hi, Erika,” Cynthia said. “As you can tell, I’m having a bit of a problem with some people here.”

“I understand, Queen Cynthia,” Erika replied, seemingly not caring at all. “My, these are nice flowers.”
Anyone tell me what kind of drugs Erica is on?!?!?!? Walking right into the battle and the only thing she comments on are the flowers?!?!? x.x
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“Stop it!” Liza cried, rushing over to Lucario, trying to pull it away from beating Will to a pulp.

“Keep it up!” Lucian shouted,
I agree with Liza....STOP IT!!!
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Within seconds Will could not take it anymore and dropped to the ground, knocked out cold.
;.; Poor Will. *shoves Zammy away who is about to say somethign different*
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“It’s too bad that Sabrina didn’t show up to get beaten too.”
>> Luckily, she isn't. You know, Sabrina was actually lucky that Cynthia kicked her in the face, and not the stomach...for she might have lost the baby then. ;.;
Hm, a final battle without Sabrina is weird, though. XD
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“Were you planning on marrying that boy?” Cynthia questioned.

“Absolutely!” Giselle said. “In a couple years, maybe.”

“Such a shame,” Cynthia replied. “Because there’s going to be a funeral for you and your boyfriend while I’m getting married to Lucian.”
I see the hint. ^^ And her and Lucian getting married, too? Hm....
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“What are you doing, yoga?” Giselle shouted at Erika. “Either help me, or help your queen, but don’t just stand there!”
Oo Erica has dark powers...could this be a clue? (At least she doesn't seem to be high....)
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“This is the end,” Cynthia stated.
Noooo...><
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However, the damage was done. The Victreebels had released Stun Spore into the air, and while Cynthia was continuing to battle Giselle, she was paralyzed by the Stun Spore. Giselle’s dark energy now overtook Cynthia’s, who had to release all of her power, finding herself completely immobile.
I admit, I'm good at guessing plot ideas, but THIS never came to my mind. Whoa....really good idea then. Erica's a clever girl, really. o,o
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But Giselle refused to crush Cynthia with her dark energy, feeling too scared to kill another person.
I would too...I like Cynthia. ;.; Not your Cynthia but Cynthia in general. ^^
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“Janine?” Erika asked. “How did you get here?”
Janine, the dea ex machine. XD
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“Just promise me you’ll spare my Lucian, that’s all I ask,” she cried.
Whoa, she really, really loves him. *cries*
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A few seconds later, Lucian came running into the room. “My Cynthia!” he cried. “What have you done to her?”
I suppose he rushed out of the battle with Liza then. ^^
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“Please, I beg you,” Lucian said. “Allow me to be jailed with her… she doesn’t deserve to be alone.”
Awwwww....he loves her, too. ^.^
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Liza went along with them to check in on the badly injured Will.
;.; Surprisingly, though, I somehow knew he would up in hospital (together with Sabrina again 0=) )
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“Giselle? Oh, why did it have to be her! I’ll hear about this for years!” Silver whined.
*sighs* Not only you, Silver, not only you...
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“Janine… she’s always in the right place at the right time,” Jasmine commented.
Dea ex machine, like I said.
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Two trainers did not wake up right away.
>.< Why did I know that it would be Will?
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“I know, I look awful,” Will commented. “I wish I could have helped it.”

“You look more handsome than ever,” Sabrina replied.
*giggles* Beneath his mask, no one will see it.
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“By the way, Will, I was just wondering… what were you planning on naming our baby… if it is a girl?” Sabrina asked.
I have a feeling she knows that it's going to be a girl.
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“Roxette,” Sabrina replied. “I like it.”
*g* I'll call probably call her Roxy all the time. Shorter and cuter.
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“This land is not to be ruled by royalty,” Goodshow replied.
Agreed. ^^
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Because of this, Giselle’s ego grew a little larger, but so did her heart,
*rolls eyes + yay* XD
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This included Janine, who was somewhat disappointed she did not get to kill Cynthia, but nevertheless satisfied that yet another foe of hers was defeated.
Hopefully forever *pokes dark energy balls*.
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Worst of all for Cynthia was the cold stone wall separating her from Lucian. She longed day and night to be with him, to hear his voice, to touch his skin, but she could not. She found herself totally lonely, powerless, helpless and in the dark. She could do nothing more but put her hands over her face and cry.
Omg...actually, does it have to be such a hard fate for her? ;.; I mean, she loves Lucian, she really does....that's so cruel....><

Finished. ^^

Crazy Packers Fan February 21st, 2009 11:25 AM

So no one died, I just threw that in there to throw you off. Maybe next story someone important will die, in this case all we lost were three Sinnoh Elite and a bunch of police officers and about 100 people in the Celadon Department Store (that's all!). Poor, poor Cynthia, I feel so bad for her ending up like this, but remember: another story's coming up. If she's not dead, then obviously she has a chance at returning... and when she does return, I think you'll have a soft spot for her again.

Originally she was going to get poisoned, put to sleep and possibly cut by Janine, but I decided she was too beautiful to have those things occur to her. Her crying in jail while thinking about Lucian is just so cute... see, it's possible to love a villain, after all. She really loves him, and next story you'll see how much.

And yes, Liza and Will survived. It's a big chapter for both of them in the epilogue... we know Will's becoming a father, what big thing is happening for Liza? You'll see in the epilogue, which is pretty much a bridge to story #5. I'll start writing it probably on Monday. The epilogue will be posted tomorrow.


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