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Crystal Walrus December 22nd, 2005 11:02 AM

Pokemon:The return of the Aqua's
 
Hi this is my second attempt on a comic so im not all that good after my horrible last one

Chapter 1:Boredom
http://img265.imageshack.us/my.php?image=mynewcomic9gj.png
http://img519.imageshack.us/img519/6918/mynewcomic21yf.png
http://img442.imageshack.us/img442/5809/mynewcomic31yw.png
http://img514.imageshack.us/img514/5901/mynewcomic43le.png
http://img414.imageshack.us/img414/9827/mynewcomic58iv.png
http://img467.imageshack.us/img467/473/underconstruction1zx.png
http://img25.imageshack.us/my.php?image=underconstruction8wa.png
chapter 2:Spliting up
http://img352.imageshack.us/my.php?image=mynewcomicpart82ud.png
http://img99.imageshack.us/my.php?image=untitledpic9vs.png
http://i41.photobucket.com/albums/e293/KygoreTrainer/frames-.gif(animated but its my first animation)

Note:Ive asked adamski148 to join thats why he's in and Wes is Shylocke's charecter,UL, RL and XD have also joined

credits:
Avatar and the spriters resource

Signomi December 22nd, 2005 11:08 AM

Nice start, though may I recommend that you change the font of your text, I had a little trouble trying to read it. I'd recommend either Tahoma or Verdana for text. Well anyway, keep at it with your comic ;)

Esupio December 22nd, 2005 11:37 AM

You have quite an ego don't you... finishing both leagues and the frontier missed one though. Johto league then you'd have a big ego.
Matthew Crowe, farming extrodinair! says:
and having a kyogre


well its kinda hard to give it a rating at this stage of the comic so meh

Crystal Walrus December 22nd, 2005 12:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Signomi
Nice start, though may I recommend that you change the font of your text, I had a little trouble trying to read it. I'd recommend either Tahoma or Verdana for text. Well anyway, keep at it with your comic ;)

Thanks for that Signomi i though the writing was a bit wrong wen i checked it first

oh and blazin espio i only have two pokemon so it makes it a little better,also he never went to orre so theyre are a lot of stronger trainers than him,oh yeah and the johto leuge is in kanto and he completed that leuge

Flaming Quilava December 22nd, 2005 12:26 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by kygore trainer
Thanks for that Signomi i though the writing was a bit wrong wen i checked it first

oh and blazin espio i only have two pokemon so it makes it a little better,also he never went to orre so theyre are a lot of stronger trainers than him,oh yeah and the johto leuge is in kanto and he completed that leuge

Ya thats true. Its like the same place. O and the comic is ok for now.:D

Crystal Walrus December 22nd, 2005 1:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ~Dragon~Master~
Ya thats true. Its like the same place. O and the comic is ok for now.:D

thanks,anyway heres the next part not so interesting but next eppy will be good http://img442.imageshack.us/img442/5809/mynewcomic31yw.png

Karasuma December 22nd, 2005 1:35 PM

Its okay. Thats all I can say for now.

Esupio December 22nd, 2005 2:01 PM

they can't expand the sea if you have kyroge ¬¬

Foxâ™  December 22nd, 2005 2:06 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by kygore trainer
Thanks for that Signomi i though the writing was a bit wrong wen i checked it first

oh and blazin espio i only have two pokemon so it makes it a little better,also he never went to orre so theyre are a lot of stronger trainers than him,oh yeah and the johto leuge is in kanto and he completed that leuge

No, quite supprisingly the Johto league is in Johto, quite frankly having a legendary at the start is rather foolish, espically one so essential to team aqua.

Esupio December 22nd, 2005 2:09 PM

Kanto has the kanto league
Johto has the jhoto league (i like that one has a ninja in it)
Hoenn has the hoenn league


How does kanto have the jhoto league?

Please explain this to me in anyway you will except torture

Signomi December 22nd, 2005 3:12 PM

Blazey, there was no need for that last sentence, for such sarcastic comments like that, you keep to yourself, refrain from cracking another one like that in the future, because that is not at all helpful to kygore trainer.

Hm, I didn't have much to say before, but concerning this 'completing leagues' and 'having legendaries' matter, I shall voice my opinion:

They may've been commonly used in fanfiction, but it can relate to this aswell, I see forms of Gary-stus in this comic. You're probably thinking what a Gary-stu is, same meaning as a Mary-stu, as you read the definition, it should define what two people in this thread had tried to tell you.

In this comic, there is a form of 'Gary-stu' in the characters, for instance, your characters have Uber pokemon, what is the story behind them? Is there a story behind their having such pokemon like Mew and Kyogre? By the looks of how this comic started, a reader wouldn't be particulary convinced that these characters could have pokemon such as those two without any sort story of how they got them, unless you planned for that for the future of this comic, or you have a plot trying to unfold, otherwise you'll find that the readers won't be very impressed with the use of your characters and your choice of their pokemon.

But remember, this is my opinion.

Though, this doesn't mean that it should suddenly be the end of your comic. I await to see what you have in store.

Esupio December 23rd, 2005 12:51 AM

heh...
I'll edit it out then *mumble*

Crystal Walrus December 23rd, 2005 3:43 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Signomi
Blazey, there was no need for that last sentence, for such sarcastic comments like that, you keep to yourself, refrain from cracking another one like that in the future, because that is not at all helpful to kygore trainer.

Hm, I didn't have much to say before, but concerning this 'completing leagues' and 'having legendaries' matter, I shall voice my opinion:

They may've been commonly used in fanfiction, but it can relate to this aswell, I see forms of Gary-stus in this comic. You're probably thinking what a Gary-stu is, same meaning as a Mary-stu, as you read the definition, it should define what two people in this thread had tried to tell you.

In this comic, there is a form of 'Gary-stu' in the characters, for instance, your characters have Uber pokemon, what is the story behind them? Is there a story behind their having such pokemon like Mew and Kyogre? By the looks of how this comic started, a reader wouldn't be particulary convinced that these characters could have pokemon such as those two without any sort story of how they got them, unless you planned for that for the future of this comic, or you have a plot trying to unfold, otherwise you'll find that the readers won't be very impressed with the use of your characters and your choice of their pokemon.

But remember, this is my opinion.

Though, this doesn't mean that it should suddenly be the end of your comic. I await to see what you have in store.

i was gonna add that part how i got my kyogre in 2 eppys but i dont know how adam got his il go ask him

Quote:

Originally Posted by vaati
No, quite supprisingly the Johto league is in Johto, quite frankly having a legendary at the start is rather foolish, espically one so essential to team aqua.

Yes but team Aqua are trying to steal it off me so they will then be able to expand the sea
And also in this comic groudon and raquaza are still wild so if kygore get in a fight with them two they can steal kygore

Esupio December 23rd, 2005 3:47 AM

but still how are team aqua gunna expand the sea without kyroge

Crystal Walrus December 23rd, 2005 4:20 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Blazin Espio
but still how are team aqua gunna expand the sea without kyroge

they are trying to get kygore off e so then they can expand the they have been trying other pokemon like garados but it didnt work

Goatman56 December 23rd, 2005 6:23 AM

No offense but this comic makes me yawn. Your grammar is awful, text hard to read, both you and your friend have legendarys (godmodding), attack effects suck, battle system is boring, text under panel, also the plot seems pretty boring. You get a 2/10.

Crystal Walrus December 24th, 2005 3:47 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Goatman56
No offense but this comic makes me yawn. Your grammar is awful, text hard to read, both you and your friend have legendarys (godmodding), attack effects suck, battle system is boring, text under panel, also the plot seems pretty boring. You get a 2/10.

1.i dont see anything wrong with my grammer
2.ive now changed the text
3.Iwont have mine for long somthing happens,also adam wanted a Mew
4.I couldnt find any anywhere so i tried from scratch
5.Most people do text under panel why cant I?

Signomi December 24th, 2005 3:58 AM

Text under panel is somewhat over used by many people in this forum, including myself, except I have the text on the side of the panel. People do like to see originality, otherwise when they see a comic like this, they'd go about with it being just another usual cliché, pokemon comic with text beneath the panels.

Esupio December 24th, 2005 4:11 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Signomi
Text under panel is somewhat over used by many people in this forum, including myself, except I have the text on the side of the panel. People do like to see originality, otherwise when they see a comic like this, they'd go about with it being just another usual cliché, pokemon comic with text beneath the panels.

you started it in this forum I beleive ¬¬;


A sprite fic is okay with TUP but a comic isn't it doesn't make it a comic, did stan lee use TUP?

Foxâ™  December 24th, 2005 4:50 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by kygore trainer
1.i dont see anything wrong with my grammer

That's a prime example of what's wrong with your grammer.

Smarties-chan December 24th, 2005 8:48 AM

No offense, but this comic isn't really that good... It's full of gramatical errors, text under panels is overused (I have had text under panels myself, but I have kinda grown tired of the panel system thingy...) And the plot seems rather cliché, if you ask me. Also, it's much more interesting to see a trainer without uberish pokemon, like Kyogre -.- Try to be a little more original, too early to give a proper rating, but the font is hard to read (even with a 2x zoom o.O), the plot is cliché and it's full of gramatical errors 2/10

Jaybob December 27th, 2005 6:13 AM

where am I!? the last one is a bit confusing but i think i got it.

Crystal Walrus December 27th, 2005 8:29 AM

your in soon ive got a good idea how u come into the comic

Karasuma December 31st, 2005 10:36 AM

May I be in the comic please? Its getting really good.

Crystal Walrus December 31st, 2005 10:48 AM

i allready told you you can be in i just need the sprite sheet name and pokemon


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