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Old April 4th, 2008 (12:12 PM).
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    I tried to be critical as I read this story, but I could only find two grammatical mistakes, other than that it's a great story.

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    Wes was bemused to why Cipher had given such a kid a Shadow Pokemon - despite having a decent Swablu that gave Makuhita a hard time, when commanding his Shadow Slugma to use Shadow Rush, he left his Iggybuff wide open to a powerful attack, sending him high into the air.
    Uhm, it's IGGLYBUFF, not IGGYBUFF.

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    the girl who could somehow see Shadow Pokemon are together?
    Together with who? I get what you meant, but the sentence was misworded.
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