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Old August 21st, 2008 (12:53 PM). Edited August 21st, 2008 by IceDragon2439.
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    It is a really good beginning and I like it. I enjoy the legendary dogs as well. The one thing I notcied was Entie should be Entei. At least thats what I usually see. But overall, I think it is good, just use Kcander's advice and it should be a good story. I hope to read further!
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