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Old November 7th, 2008 (7:41 PM).
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    Chapter is IMO tad less funny then the previous
    I actually laughed a lot more reading this chap than I did the Miror B battle chapter. You did a pretty amazing job.

    Here's a grammar mistake I found:

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    As for the Shadow Pokemon obtained, the number had grown to seventeen. In addition to the Yanma and Sudowoodo Wes had snagged, they had collected some more in the raid: in a a Remoraid, Mantine, Qwilfish, Dunsparce, Meditate and a Swablu.

    Just a small nitpick, but I don't want to get slammed by Astinus *shot*

    Some funny lines that I found:

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    “Oh, fine... what’s your name?”

    “Oh, it’s ‘Phillar Caractor’,”

    This one really got me laughing at what it is supposed to be.

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    I spent ages EV training my Magikarp
    Wait a second, Johnson is actually smart enough to understand the concept of EV training?

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    a television that could display shows in brilliant detail would also be able to sharpen pencils, and have a bagel-making unit at the side of all things
    BAGELS!!!! THIS TV IS WIN! GIVE ME SOME BAGELS!

    Great job with this fic. I really have enjoyed reading it. I hope you come up with antoher chapter soon!

    P.S. Happy belated b-day!

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