Thread: [Pokémon] Anima Ex Machina [R]
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Old December 6th, 2008 (2:12 AM).
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Ahhhhh, why didn't you make me read this earlier, Jaxxie? xD This is some more great writing from you, and I agree with Skunter in that I found the most recent chapter very interesting. Exposition is underrated. :D

I did find one little error, near the end of the chapter:

The intern motioned wildly at the other room. "Out in the hall! There's bodies out there!"
Last time I checked, the word "bodies" was plural, so wouldn't the last exclamation read "There are bodies out there!"? (Emphasis on the altered word, obviously, and not to replace the emphasis on "bodies". >>; )

But a little typo like that is never going to be enough to put me off a good fanfic. Now make sure you write some more. :D