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Old June 7th, 2009 (9:47 AM).
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Wow, and I thought my fic deserved an R rating. Your fic here takes the R rating to a whole new level.
Just one correction, I think.
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Not wanting to see another friend die, Monferno, Luxio, and even Buneary joined together again to try to fight back the lawn mower, choosing to attack it instead of the rapidly regrowing vines. Not wanting to stand and watch without acting again, Riolu sprinted
Isn't it a bit repetitive?

Other than that, great fic can't wait for more.
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