Thread: [Pokémon] Spring's Revenge
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Old August 9th, 2009 (10:26 PM).
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    I think Sabrina overreacted just a bit, lol. I almost started yelling at my computer when I Will was considering not telling Sabrina. That would have been very pooh-headed.

    Cynthia looked back, swallowing. Maybe it was more than just pitiful. Maybe it was wrong.
    Whoa. Cynthia, feeling regret? Where did that come from?

    Something that kinda bothered me was Sabrina's very different reactions to bad situations. She pretty much explodes when she thinks she will be blamed for losing Espeon, when it seems incredibly unlikely for others to even blame her. Then she takes Will's explanation of Cynthia relatively well.

    Other than that, decent chapter. Keep up the writing!
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