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Old January 11th, 2010 (10:46 PM). Edited January 11th, 2010 by Rabbit.
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    Originally Posted by Totodile7 View Post
    Well here's an updated story :
    You start off in the town of Woodbark. However, when you go outside of your house, you see Prof. Treebark being cornered by a Team Rocket Grunt! He tells you to choose one of the Pokemon in his lab. You choose from Treecko, Charmander, and Totodile. Then you go out of the lab and have to beat the grunt with the Lv.3 Rattata. Then Treebark tells you to keep your new pokemon and take on the gym challenge. After you defeat the
    fourth gym leader, two Rocket Grunts come in and attack you and the leader! After you do a double battle against them with the leader, you follow them to Barnico Tower, and there you challenge the rocket leader for the first time! Then after he is defeated, team rocket retreat from the tower, and things go normally untill after the seventh gym, where
    you and your rival infiltrate the Rocket HQ. At the second last floor you're rival rushes ahead of you and climbs the stairs. When you head up, he has been beaten by the leader of team rocket, and then you challenge the leader for the second time. After he
    is beaten again, he leaves, saying something about a backup plan and Mt. Mohr. So you and your rival head of to Mt. Mohr, your rival staying ahead. At the peak, you meet up with your rival and the champion. Then the rocket leader uses a slowbro to confuse the recently summoned Lugia, and then you're plunged into a third battle against the rocket leader. After you win, you battle Lugia, controlled in another trainer battle, but you are able to heal before. Then Ho-Oh comes and battles Lugia, and Lugia snaps out of it's confusion the leader used to control it, and ties with Ho-Oh. Then they fly of, and the rocket leader gets angry and sends two rocket admin at you at once, but your rival aids you
    to battle them. Then everything goes normally, until after you beat the E4 and Champion, but I haven't thought of post main storyline stuff yet.
    (PS. The reason Team Rocket takes control of Lugia is because they're desperate to beat you so they can go back to their well... stuff they do. And to rob you)
    Sounds like the typical Pokemon game, so far. Whether that's a good thing or not is up to you. It's a little sparse, though. I'd need more details on just what TR is doing (for instance, why a grunt was attacking the Prof.) before I could judge the storyline as 'solid'. And I don't think you have enough plot-related events to keep the player's attention.

    Originally Posted by Flexar View Post
    Well, I've just thrown away a few hack ideas, but this one is too good to trash in my opinion.

    1000 Years in the past, warriors used mystical jewels to capture pokemon and battle wars, using those pokemon. Now you, the newest recruit to the army is getting their first pokemon, a choice of Charmander, Totodile and Treecko, and now you're being sent of to conquer the rest of Trandor (the continent the game is set on). First you must conquer the nearby town of Yamine, with your pokemon. Yamine is nothing out of the ordinary, just a small town of little significance. You are attacked by the guards, but beat them easily without even using your pokemon, just your sword. Then the captain (your rival) confronts you with a lvl 5 Pikachu. After winning, you return to the city, and to your king. He is impressed with your victory, and you can nickname your pokemon. He gives you an encylopedia to fill, and 5 mystic gems. Then you set off, to conquer all.
    I think the idea of Pokemon as tools of war has a lot of potential. For one thing, it can really take you far from the standard game layout. But...ditch the 'mystical jewels.' If you don't want to use PokeBalls because this is the Middle Ages, why not use leashes, or nets? If I had some mystical jewels, I'd use them for something more important than taming wild animals.

    Second... You're sending your rookie soldier on a journey to conquer an entire continent? He's barely a cadet! His Pokemon are puppies! What's the justification? It sounds like you're trying to follow the standard Pokemon plot as closely as possible, even though the context is entirely different. I'd hate to see this idea go down the road of 'eight gyms and Elite Four', because it deserves better.

    dreaming again
    of a train track ending at the edge of the sea