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Old October 1st, 2010 (4:02 PM).
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I LP, and not much else.
     
    Join Date: May 2010
    Location: The tiny country inbetween France and The Netherlands.
    Age: 27
    Gender: Male
    Nature: Relaxed
    Posts: 120
    This LP could be improved on. A lot of your jokes fall flat because they're very predictable, or have been done a lot already. You have very few images as well - didn't even capture a single part of the conversation with Oak and Gary in the lab.
    Also, but these may just be personal preferences, I wouldn't have picked a starter before asking the readers which one they want. I also wouldn't announce what I'm going to catch in the next update, that just ruins the surprise.

    That aside, I do appreciate the fact that you're using proper English and no immature jokes. I'm sure this LP could be better if you put some work into it.
    Good luck!
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