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Old February 9th, 2011 (1:33 PM).
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    Slightly abrasive side note (hope you don't mind or anything):

    But in this line shouldn't it be 'you're lightning's defender' instead of your?
    Tip: If you're going to correct someone's grammar, please go all the way to avoid having a line still be grammatically incorrect after your suggestions.

    That being said, you're still missing something there. Namely, the line would have to read "you are a lightning defender" to avoid something that sounds like Engrish. "You are lightning defender" doesn't make sense on its own.

    Will probably come back to submit an actual review to this thread later.

    Also, it's called an Emolga.
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