Thread: [Pokémon] N's Journey
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Old June 9th, 2012 (4:19 AM).
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You have a very good concept here. Whilst the chapters were very brief, I enjoyed it. My advice would be to make some of the chapters a bit longer, by doing this you can add more detail and atmosphere for the chapters. Remember to space your work out more, so it's easier to read. You seem to be working on that in chapter three.

Hope that helps.

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