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July 6th, 2012 (3:38 AM).
Don't mess with the lights...
Somewhere beyond the Veil
This is quite an interesting story. I don't usually read stuff like this, but it's so well written, like all of your other stories, that I may end up sticking with it! I think the background and such that you've set up is quite interesting. For some reason I think that you're going to end up making Riley get more annoying as the story goes on...which is exactly what you should do with an AI character like that. Ehehe. I think Gwyn has some definite potential to be an awesome character, and I'm going to be very interested in what you reveal of her background.
But this is only the first chapter, and so I'm not gonna be too judgey. Keep writing!
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