Thread: [Pokémon] N's Journey
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Old July 11th, 2012 (3:02 AM).
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    Good chapter again.
    Bit short and you barely understand really with all the scene changes. One error I noticed.
    “Go Accelgor!”

    “Go Hydreigon!”

    They were both at their last Pokémon, which, ironically was their first Pokémon. A bead of sweat rolled down Adler’s neck.

    “I haven’t been in a battle this intense in years!”
    I'm sure he was called Alder!

    Tight corner? Intense battle? It took seconds!

    Well done again! I still insist that the Entralink is in the middle!

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