Thread: [Pokémon] Hackers [15]
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Old September 22nd, 2012 (2:29 PM).
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    Originally Posted by c1234321 View Post
    Hello Cutlerine! First, Id like to say that I quite like this story. Its interesting to see a different perspective on hacking in Pokemon games, and it is also quite enjoyable.

    I really like Gwyn. He is a professional [email protected]$$ and pretty good at it too. However, I cant help but notice the similarities between his situation and the situation in White Collar. Both have a reformed criminal working for those who hunted him when he was a criminal, using his time as a law breaker to help the law enforcement. Its still a pretty cool premise and Gwyn does his job well.
    I can't say I've heard of White Collar, but whatever. I'm glad you like it.

    Originally Posted by c1234321 View Post
    I cant help but feel suspicious of Blaine. Just reading about him set off some warning bells in my mind. He just seems wrong to me. And I know it might be ridiculous to think that a person would go out of their way to steal something they created but seriously who else but Blaine and Gwyn have the biological and genetic intelligence to create the scratch that broke into the lab? And also, it would make sense for Blaine to want to steal the embryo. Whatever it is, its important. If Blaine stole it, he could first have someone else pay to produce it, then steal it and sell it for a high price. Its twisted, but very possible. Oh great; second chapter and Im already being a conspiracy theorist.
    If Blaine wanted the embryo for himself, he could've made it privately. No, I don't think he had anything to do with it.

    Originally Posted by c1234321 View Post
    It should be "it was strange enough that someone had actually GOTTEN into the Gym." There was one other situation where you used "this" where it should have been "these." Apart from those two minor mistakes, your grammar was superb. I look forward for the next chapter!
    I live in Britain, where the word 'gotten' died out several hundred years ago. It survives, as far as I'm aware, in America and possibly in a few other former colonial nations. I barely understand the surprisingly complex rules governing its use, let alone actually use it.

    As for the other bit, if you could let me know where that is, I'll fix it. I'll have a look myself, but it would help.


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