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Old September 26th, 2012 (9:19 PM).
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    Just as a note, the section's rules state that your chapters must be finished before you post them. I think what you did was stop writing because you were tired. You're not going to get in trouble for doing that, but it's more of an unnecessary thing. You can avoid this by using any word processing program on your computer. If that's not an option, you can send PMs to yourself on the forums with your story in it so you can work on it without actually creating a new thread.

    Right now, I'll also say that your paragraph spacing should be different. A new paragraph begins with a character's dialogue or every time you change the subject. You should also add in more description, like of the fight between the two Pokemon or why Spectra is the only one able to stop them or even more of Spectra's backstory, like how she wound up where she is with those particular Pokemon.
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