Thread: [Idea] Pokemon Morning/Night
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Old May 31st, 2013 (9:12 PM).
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    Alright, this is looking a lot better than before. Some of the sprites could use tweaking, but the grammar is much better.

    Here are a few things that could use adjustment:

    "Maple: I was out of the region for my studies, when your family shifted here."
    "shifted" may be technically correct, but I would say "moved" instead.

    "Is there something you want to tell me dear?"
    There's a continuation, add a comma after "me".

    "I heard some strange people talking about Lunar and Solar energy, When I was on my..."
    The comma doesn't belong there, because it's in the middle of a though that's ongoing, not at a pause. "When" also should not be be capitalized, as it is not a new sentence.

    I'm stoping everyone from harvesting the..."
    Misspelled "stopping". Two p's.

    Hope this helps!