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Old August 21st, 2013 (3:18 PM).
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The set-up you've got here is really aesthetically pleasing and easy to read, which adds a lot of quality to your guide. The Beemo cursor is a nice touch haha, and your excessive use of 'radical' brings that signature Adventure Time 'comical' feel into play. On top of that, your way of explaining things are light-hearted and easy to understand, so great job there. I picked up a few minor mistakes, but they can be fixed easily.

so Finn let's him tag along in his backpack
which help increase theses stats.
Obvious fixes here, just typos.
and also has a screen to show you Finn and Jake's stats/abilities, and a Map Screen (it hasn't been activated yet)
To make the sentence flow better, take out the first 'and' as well as 'also'.

Other than that, I like what you've done so far and I'm always a fan of anything Adventure Time. Keep at it ;]

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