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Journey to Isle of Jade

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First I'd like to say hello. I'm new to PC and new to writing fanfics, but certainly not new to writing in general. I've written since I was really small, about 5 years old or something. And because I'm not a native English speaker, I'd be rally happy if someone commented my grammar. And criticism is very welcome.
This story is not about saving the world, so it's not one of those really epic, movie-like fanfics, but it does have adventures and a conspiracy in it. And it might have romance in it. Oh, what the heck, just read it.


This fic is finished!
It also has a stand-alone sequel, Secret People.


Journey to Isle of Jade


Table of Contents:
All links lead to this thread. This is here just for your convinience.
Prologue (In this post, obviously)
Chapter 1 - Bulbasaur's story
Chapter 2 - About the Isle of Jade
Chapter 3 - A Bad Day
Chapter 4 - A Nightmare with Shoes
Chapter 5 - Chapter with a Lot of Yelling
Chapter 6 - Adan and Ivysaur
Chapter 7 - The Incident on Isle of Jade
Chapter 8 - Go Home, Cimi!
Chapter 9 - The Rescue Plan
Chapter 10 - The Rescue Plan B
Chapter 11 - Mr. Joseph Sheffield
Chapter 12 - Little Joseph
Chapter 13 - A Job to Be Done
Chapter 14 - Trust Me!
Chapter 15 - Jade Bracelet
Epilogue

Oh, and a sprite I made of Cimi!


Prologue

When Cimi had been eleven, she had started her journey as a trainer as did most of the children in her town. Her starter Pokémon had been a Ponyta she had known since she had been only six years old. Her uncle had a farm where he grew and bred fire-type Pokémon, mostly Ponytas, Vulpixes and Growlithes, and this particular Ponyta had gotten Cimi's interest. For a whole summer, this Ponyta and the six-year-old Cimi had played together. After the summer, Cimi had given the Ponyta its nickname Radeem.

"Why Radeem?", had her uncle asked,

"While it's still cute and small, you should give her a cute nickname!"

"I want her to keep her name", Cimi had answered,
"And she can't have a lame cute name when she's already a Rapidash."

After that, the Ponyta answered only to the name Radeem and when Cimi came back and called it's name the next summer, it came running. This was the reason Cimi's uncle gave Radeem to be Cimi's starter Pokémon.

A couple of months after Cimi had left, her parents and uncle came and visited her for her birthday. She was then staying in a small Pokémon Center and nurse Joy had also attended her 12th birthday. As a present, her parents gave her a Pichu, and what a fiery one he was. For his size he was awfully self-centered and he thought way too much of himself for his own good. He was always ready for a showdown with anyone who'd mess with him. Apart from that he was a jolly little lad, helpful and happy, and he also had a strong sense of justice. Cimi caught most of her Pokémon with this Pichu rather than using Radeem, because Pichu really loved a good fight and Radeem did not really care for those things, as proud and noble as she was. Cimi kept neither of these Pokémon in a pokeball because she often felt terribly lonely without her Pokémon around. Besides, riding Radeem was an excellent way to move from one place to another.

Her first catch had been a Ralts, one of a friendly and helpful nature. This Ralts soon began translating Radeem's speech, and in that role became invaluable for Cimi. Soon after Pichu had joined their party, Ralts evolved into a Kirlia, which made her even more joyous and helpful. She was mostly useless in a battle, as she was pretty weak for her species, and thus preferred being a translator. Because of her position, neither did she live in a pokeball. She often sat behind Cimi on Radeem's back and when she was on exceptionally good mood, she'd dance after them and sing little songs by herself.

But soon after getting her first badge, Cimi grew tired of being a trainer. She did not care for the fights, nor catching Pokémon, and thinking about the next gym battle made her slightly nautious. She did not like to hurt Pokémon, even if they loved fighting, and her only chances obviously were to hurt someone else's Pokémon or her own, which was even worse. So, she quitted being a trainer and released all her Pokémon to the wild. Most of them went back to freedom, now stronger and harder to capture, and lived their lives as they had lived before Cimi had captured them. But Pichu, Kirlia and Radeem, who had evolved into Rapidash, all wanted to stay with her, so she took them with her and went back home. Her mother and father were really happy to get their daughter back, and they had no problem with her bringing Pokémon with her.

Cimi went to work with her uncle on his ranch so she could think what she wanted to be. She did not care much about the idea of becoming a Pokémon breeder, and she didn't want to do entertainment either. She thought about starting as a Pokémon ranger, but that wouldn't have suited her either. So for many years she stayed as a helper on the ranch, until something rather strange happened that made her leave the ranch.

A very, very tired and hungry Bulbasaur appeared on the outskirts of the ranch.

Bulbasaurs were not native to her home area, and this one had clearly made a long trip.

The Bulbasaur tried to hide when Cimi rode towards it, Radeem's blazing tail behind her, Pichu standing between Radeem's ears and Kirlia sitting behind her. It was tired, so Cimi got to it before it managed to hide. Kirlia spoke with the Bulbasaur for a while, and Bulbasaur relaxed. Kirlia turned towards Cimi and said:
"I told him we're not going to catch him. I think he's okay now. Did you know Bulbasaurs could read?"

"What are you talking about", Cimi answered halfheartedly as she took her radio out so she could call someone to help them with the Bulbasaur.

"Well", said Kirlia,
"He said he read the sign pointing to a Pokémon ranch and thought he could get some food.."

There certainly was something strange to it.
And Cimi was to find out what it was.
 
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Well I must say that this is preaty good. Only noticed a few things:

"Why Radeem?", had her uncle asked,

"While it's still cute and small, you should give her a cute nickname!"

"I want her to keep her name", Cimi had answered,

"And she can't have a lame cute name when she's already a Rapidash."

After that, the Ponyta answered only to the name Radeem and when Cimi came back and called it's name the next summer, it came running. This was the reason Cimi's uncle gave Radeem to be Cimi's starter Pokémon.
Paragraphs need to be spaced in between them. You did this for most, but forgot to here.

A couple of months after Cimi had left, her parents and uncle came and visited her for her birthday. She was then staying in a small Pokémon Center and nurse Joy had also attended her 12th birthday. As a present, her parents gave her a Pichu, and what a fiery one he was. For his size he was awfully self-centered and he thought way too much of himself for his own good. He was always ready for a showdown with anyone who'd mess with him. Apart from that he was a jolly little lad, helpful and happy, and he also had a strong sense of justice. Cimi caught most of her Pokémon with this Pichu rather than using Radeem, because Pichu really loved a good fight and Radeem did not really care for those things, as proud and noble as she was. Cimi kept neither of these Pokémon in a pokeball because she often felt terribly lonely without her Pokémon around. Besides, riding Radeem was an excellent way to move from one place to another.

But soon after getting her first badge, Cimi grew tired of being a trainer. She did not care
for the fights, nor catching Pokémon, and thinking about the next gym battle made her slightly nauseous. She did not like to hurt Pokémon, even if they loved fighting, and her only chances obviously were

Cimi went to work with her uncle on his ranch so she could think what she wanted to be. She

The Bulbasaur tried to hide when Cimi rode towards it, Radeem's blazing tail behind her, Pichu standing between Radeem's ears and Kirlia sitting behind her. It was tired, so Cimi got to it before it managed to hide. Kirlia spoke with the Bulbasaur for a while, and Bulbasaur relaxed. Kirlia turned towards Cimi and said:

"I told him we're not going to catch him. I think he's okay now. Did you know Bulbasaurs could read?"

"What are you talking about", Cimi answered halfheartedly as she took her radio out so she could call someone to help them with the Bulbasaur.

"Well", said Kirlia,"He said he read the signs pointing to a Pokémon ranch and thought he could get some food.."
Just a few spelling mistakes.

The last line if you meaning to have the Bulbasaur reading more than one sigh leave it. If he is supposed to read more than one, then is should be as follows.
" He said he had read a sigh that pointed to a Pokémon ranch.
 

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Ah, those spelling mistakes... I make them often, because I write so fast and don't notice them. Well, as long as you people keep reporting them, I'll correct them as soon as I can... Thank you! Here's the next chapter.

Chapter 1 - Bulbasaur's Story

The Bulbasaur Cimi had found was so exhausted it couldn't spew out even half a "bulba" before it had eaten and slept a whole night. Cimi spent that night in the shelter with the Bulbasaur with Pichu guarding her jealously and Kirlia dancing around just in case the Bulbasaur would wake up. As morning came, they had all fallen asleep. But Bulbasaur was finally awake.

He stood up and looked a lot better now that he had slept. He stamped the floor a bit with his front paws and checked that his vines were okay. Then he started slowly moving towards the door.
"Where are you going", Kirlia asked silently and opened her eyes.

"Umm... Out", answered Bulbasaur.

"No, I mean... Where were you going? Why are you here?"

Bulbasaur looked at Kirlia. Oh how she annoyed him with her constant little dancing and stupid questions.
"Do Pokémon need a reason to roam around?" he asked, very annoyed.

"You're not roaming around", Kirlia said with a friendly expression,
"You want to get somewhere. You've traveled a long way."

Bulbasaur turned his head and looked at the human sleeping against the wall with a Pichu on her lap.
"She's not a trainer, is she?", he asked a little worried.

"No, she's not. She's more of a Pokémon helper now", Kirlia answered and tilted her head a bit. I wonder, she tought, why Bulbasaur is so afraid about getting caught. She had not disliked it at all, she even liked being in a Pokéball. It was all nice and cozy in there, and it never rained inside a Pokéball. She did not care for rain.

"Ah! Do you have a fear of enclosed spaces?", Kirlia asked, as it was the most likely answer.

"No, I don't!", Bulbasaur answered hastily, but admitted after a short silence:
"Well, I guess a bit..."

"And you've run away from a trainer, and you're escaping as far as you can get", Kirlia spouted happily, as she thought she had solved the mystery.

"It's not like that, really", Bulbasaur said,
"I was more like abandoned..."

"Oh, he's awake!", Cimi shouted in excitement and woke up Pichu, who fell down from her lap.

"Of course I am", answered Bulbasaur, but all Cimi could hear was "bulba bulbasaur".

During the next hours Cimi, Kirlia and Pichu made Bulbasaur tell the truth. He told them that he had been a starter Pokémon of a very demanding trainer. One time he had fought with his trainer, whom he had disobeyed, and had been forcefully put into a pokeball. When he later had forced his way out of it, he had been in a dark forest. He had then decided to leave on his own, and his destination was The Isle of Jade, where wild Bulbasaurs, Ivysaurs and Venusaurs roamed free in peace. His only problem was that any trainer who saw him tried to catch him with all their might, and since he was a grass type, it was not rare that he had to dodge some sort of flamethrower.

His story made Cimi think intensively and had Pichu almost in tears, clinging to Cimi's leg. Kirlia swirled around on her place and tried to have a happy chit-chat with Bulbasaur.
"I've never heard there were Pokémon on the Island of Jade", Cimi said finally,
"But I guess they want to keep all the Pokémon there safe. Well, there's not much to do. We'll escort you, Bulbasaur!"

"Escort me?!", Bulbasaur gasped, his eyes widened. He did not know if this was a good idea or a really bad one.

"Yay", said Kirlia, so excited she stopped her dancing.

"Wouldn't that be awesome", Pichu thought, his eyes glittering and his mind already set on upcoming battles. He really liked being a hero.

"I'm tired of babysitting little Ponytas all year round", Cimi explained,
"And so is Radeem. We could really use an adventure, and Isle of Jade isn't that far away. Besides, you'll never get there by yourself. There are tons of trainers roaming around this area, and boy would they like to get their hands on you. And how were you planning on getting to that island? You're not some secret water type, are you?"

Bulbasaur's expression revealed that he had not even thought about all the water separating Isle of Jade from the mainland. He had simply made his journey watching out for trainers and hoping to get to his destination soon enough.

"Well, it's decided then", Cimi said, smiling to Bulbasaur with her brown eyes glowing. Bulbasaur could not say no, nor bring himself happy about the turn things had taken.

"Now we need to talk Radeem into this", Cimi said and stood up.

"That's not going to be easy", Pichu noted, and was certainly right.
 
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Ouch, I make really much mistakes with missing letters, or letters changing places, and two times out or three I write CImi instead on Cimi. Annoying! Here's another chapter too, this one's sort of back-up-story, so don't get annoyed about the story not moving forward on this one. I'm trying to bring out the characters a bit, but this chapter is also really important for the story. You need to know this. Okay, here you go.

Chapter 2 - About the Isle of Jade

Cimi's uncle told Cimi that they couldn't leave until Bulbasaur was in better condition. That in mind, Cimi thought of a perfect plan to make Radeem come with them without complaining. She gathered her Pokémon and Bulbasaur around and started telling them the story of Isle oh Jade.

"You see, during the ancient times, jade was thought of as a godly stone. It was thought to bring fortune to those carrying it, and so it was held high in value. It was very rare on the mainland, but on a certain island there were tons of jade, just to wait for someone to take it away. That island became known as the Isle of Jade back then", Cimi started her story.

"What's jade like?", Pichu wanted to know.

"It's kind of greeny, very modest-looking stone, I think... I've never actually seen any", Cimi said, trying to remember.

"Yeah, that's pretty much it", Bulbasaur said absent-mindedly.

"How do you know?", Kirlia asked kindly, out of curiousity.

"My trainer's mother had a jade pin she used every day, but it's really none of your business", he muttered angrily.

"But it was not easy to get to Isle of Jade!", Cimi shouted to stop the conversation and continued her story:

"The waters between mainland and the island were full of underwater rocks and there were mighty breezes blowing all winter, so many ships sank. The gap was too wide for a bridge, but too narrow for biggar ships. So, soon it was thought that gods cursed anyone who stole their precious stones. Only the most brave and most greedy dared to go and take any of the jade, and in time, the island was forgotten."

"Jade must look really beautiful, because why would any fool go onto such a cursed island in any other case", Radeem said holding her head high.

"Remember they thought jade had some macigal touch to it", Cimi reminded and went on.

"It took many, many years before decent people went on that island again. They tought it was a forsaken island with no Pokémon, no chance for growing anything and most importantly, no gold. The Isle of Jade is filled with who knows how old forests, so I really wouldn't wonder if they made it into a sanctuary for grass type Pokémon. Well, anyway, some people still liked jade a lot, so some jade miners started to live there and craft jewellery out of the stones. They still sell the cheapest jade accessories there nowadays. And, it is also said, that they're the best there are. Once a noble woman looked for a jewel that would suit her tastes and be as classy as she was. Her servants brought diamonds, pearls, rubys, emeralds and sapphires for her to see, but nothing was good enough, had it gold, silver or platinum around it. Even crystals were not enough for her. But a humble wife came from the Isle of Jade with a cheap jade ring with her, and that was what the noble woman had wanted. She paid the wife a fortune for the ring, so I guess jade does bring some sort of luck!"

"That must truly be a remarkable stone", Radeem said, her red, usually cold eyes glittering for excitement. Cimi grinned and continued.

"And the Isle of Jade has a lot of caves, some of them underwater, so it's a great place for venturing around. I've allways wanted to visit the place and see some of the caves, with jade stripes on the wall and..."

"Could we cut this", Bulbasaur interrupted. Everyone stared at him, very suprised about the sudden burst.

"I really don't care. Go elsewhere if you want to go on about the stupid island. I'm tired. Scram", Bulbasaur said angrily and went back to his corner. Everyone left the room silently after a moment, all very confused and a bit hurt of Bulbasaur's rude words.

"Sheesh!", said Radeem when they got outside. She was very hurt, as she was insanely proud and was rather easily hurt about anything. She was also very annoyed, because she didn't want to ask more of those childish stories, but still wanted to hear them.

"He's very upset about something", Kirlia said very sadly,
"I wonder if he told us everything."

"Of course he didn't", Pichu spouted and tried to get back inside,
"But I'll make him tell! Or at least we have to guard him with care, so he doesn't do anything suspicious..."

"Oh, cut it off, you brat", Radeem said, slightly annoyed,
"Don't waste your effort on that punk. You'd better get to sleep, cause I'm not carrying any sleeping Pichus!"

"What do you mean?", Pichu asked and took his fighting pose.

"When you sleep, you tend to let teeny tiny charges out your pouches. It doesn't feel nice."

"But why would you carry me? I have my feet, you know!"

"Aren't we leaving to Isle of Jade sometime tomorrow?", Radeem asked Cimi, completely ignoring Pichu.

"You still want to go?", Cimi asked astonished. She had completely given up hope when Bulbasaur had so rudely tossed them all out.

"That's the only way to get rid of that punk, right? Stop this nonsense and go do something useful. I'm rather hungry, so I'll go eat something. We have to be ready, it's a long way... Not that anyone of you would walk, though..."

Radeem galloped away so she didn't have to feel embarassed.
Kirlia, Pichu and Cimi stared after her.

"She wants to go", Pichu yelled in excitement.

"This is nice! We can help our friend Bulbasaur", Kirlia said and started her dancing again.

Cimi didn't say a thing. This had all gone so easily. She had expected something more troublesome. Well, I guess it's a good thing Radeem lets herself have a little fun, she thought to herself as she walked towards the main house, but still...

The scent of delicious food coming from the house dissolved her troubled thoughts. Her aunt was an excellent cook, and this smelled like Cimi's favourite food.
 
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He stood up and looked a lot better now that he had slept. He stamped the floor a bit with his front paws and checked

Bulbasaur looked at Kirlia. Oh how she annoyed him with her constant little dancing and stupid questions."Do Pokémon need a reason to roam around?" he asked, very annoyed.



Bulbasaur turned his head and looked at the human sleeping against the wall with a Pichu on her lap.


Kirlia answered and tilted her head a bit. "I wonder," she thought, "why Bulbasaur is so afraid about getting caught."
Her thoughts should be in quotes. You may put them in italics by placing "[ i] [/i]" around them
"Ah! Do you have a fear of enclosed spaces?," Kirlia asked, as it was the most likely answer.
Punctuation should be on the inside of the quotes.

tell the truth. He told them that he had been a starter Pokémon of a very demanding trainer. One time he had fought with his trainer, whom he had disobeyed, and had been forcefully put into a pokeball. When he later had forced his way out of it, he had been in a dark forest. He had then decided to leave on his own, and his destination was The Isle of Jade, where wild Bulbasaurs, Ivysaurs and Venusaurs roamed free in peace. His only problem was that any trainer who saw him tried to catch him with all their might, and since he was a grass type, it was not rare that he had to dodge some sort of flamethrower.
are you using a spell checker or word processor?



I like that the pokemon talk but the human does not understand.
 

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I'm sorry about those stupid mistakes... I don't use a spell checker, because it's bothersome to change its language all the time (I most often write in Finnish, you see). But if the story works fo someone, that's great! I'll have to write the next one really quick, cause this far this has been really boring. I'll put it tomorrow, my time. Thank you for reading these, kcander90, really!
 

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Well, since I wrote the next chapter, I might as well put it here. In this one, the story really begins to move. Stay tuned for more, and remember to criticise, rate and notify about my mistakes! Thank you.

Chapter 3 - A Bad Day

In a nearby forest, a boy sat down on the ground. He was lost and tired of walking. His bag was full of food he didn't like, his feet were aching and he thought his cap was ridiculous, but he had to wear it because of the sun. He had never been lost before a certain incident, and after that, he had practically done nothing else than being lost. He took off his cap, and shook his bluish-black hair. He put his bag on the ground beside him. A Pokédex slipped out. It was a regular red Pokédex, a bit old and worn out, "Adan" was written on the cover. His mother had the habit of writing his name to everything he owned, because as a small child he had lost his toys, keys and even his shoes all the time.

"That's so stupid," he mumbled and stuffed the Pokédex back to his bag.

On his belt there were five minimized pokéballs, and they all had a Pokémon inside them. Although Adan was already 15 years old, he had been a Pokémon trainer for just over a year now. When he had been eleven, he had passed his Pokémon school with the best grades, but had not left home to become a trainer. He had already gotten his Pokédex and his starter Pokémon, when it was discovered that his mom had a cancer. He had then decided to stay at home instead of starting as a Pokémon trainer. His mother had then died, three long years later, and a while after that, Adan and his Bulbasaur finally left for their quest to beat all the gym leaders and compete in the official Pokémon League, for that was shat his mother had wished for the past years. Everything had gone pretty well until the incident on the Isle of Jade. After that, he had been lost all the time, argued with Bulbasaur every day and now Bulbasaur, of all his Pokémon, was gone. Bulbasaur's pokéball was in his bag, but he was now looking for the Pokémon that should've been in it. He was certain that Bulbasaur would go back to Isle of Jade once it had escaped. If only he knew how to get back... he had completely lost the sense of directions he had always been so proud of. Bulbasaur, on the other hand, surely knew where to go, and so he would never find it.

"The heck with everything", Adan yelled and stood up. He stood there for a while, listening to the sounds of forest. Then he turned around and faced the Wurmple that had crawled its way to him.

"Hi there, little one", Adan said to it and kneeled down,
"Can you tell me where I am and how can I get to Isle of Jade?"

"Well", answered the Wurmple,
"If you go east of here, say, for twenty minutes or so, you should reach a road that leads somewhat that way."

"I forgot", Adan said, very depressed,
"I don't understand you guys anymore. Could you just.... point, or something?"

The Wurmple, who felt bad for Adan, pointed her tail to the direction he thought was east. She was a Pokémon, and her sense of directions was more accurate, and it really did point to east. Adan left for the way she had shown, but it didn't take him long to lose the way again and turn south-east, so it took him almost an hour to reach the road. He was having a bad day, and the fact that there was a small stream between the forest and the road didn't help a bit. He stared at the stream for a while and then sighed.

"If only I was a Pokémon," he mumbled, "Preferably a Water type... This would all be so much easier." He took off his shoes, and threw them to the other side of the stream and went in the cold, cold water.

He was still trying to get his feet and pants dry again, when a red-haired girl came along the road.She was not alone, a Rapidash, Kirlia, and a Pichu were with her too. Adan started to quickly put his shoes on his wet feet so that he'd look as normal as possible.

"Umm, do you need help?" the girl asked. Adan turned around. The girl was right behind him, although she had just a few seconds ago been twenty meters away. She sat on her Rapidash and looked down on sitting Adan.

"Wha- Wow, you're fast", Adan gasped.

"Thank you", the Rapidash answered, but of course Adan didn't know this.

"Well, do you?" the girl asked again.

"I, um, no, I'm just a bit wet, coming across that stream and all", Adan explained. He was terrified about the girl noticing he had no shoes on. He had terrible experiences about walking bare-footed in front of people and did not want anymore of those.

"There's a little bridge just a bit down the road", the girl said and pointed to where she had came from, "So you really didn't have to get wet. But well, how were you supposed to know..."

"There usually are bridges over rivers, you know", mumbled the Pichu, who was sitting on the Rapidash's head, between her ears and clinging on to her horn. Pichu's words, however, were wasted, since Adan did not understand. On that moment, though, Adan wasn't even interested, because he was too busy sulking about the bridge he had not known about.

"What are you doing here?" asked the Kirlia that sat on the girl's shoulders. Adan understood this question, though he really didn't know how, and so he answered.

"Well, I'm trying to find my way to Isle of Jade", he explained, "You see..."

He was interrupted when another Pokémon came after the girl and her group. This was a dinosaur-like Pokémon, with a plant on his back.

"Bulba..?" Adan gasped, but was immediately disappointed. Bulbasaurs had onions on their backs, but this one had a flower bud and a couple of leaves.

"What is it?" the girl asked and looked at the Ivysaur that was following them,
"Is there something wrong?"

"No. You see, I'm looking for my Bulbasaur, I've lost him and I thought he'd head for Isle of Jade. I just thought for a bit... well, never mind. You should probably be going, and I have to dry myself a bit," Adan said. He hoped that they would leave him alone. He was in a really bad mood now, and the Ivysaur was watching him in a rather hostile way.

"No, we can start a campfire for you", said the girl, and hopped down from Rapidash's back, "You'll dry faster."

Adan couldn't tell if the girl really had a strange look on her face or if it was only his imagination. With the help of her Rapidash, the girl started a fire and invited Adan to sit with her. All her Pokémon stayed a bit away from them, Ivysaur even further than the rest.

"But Ivysaur only recently evolved," said Pichu, "Shouldn't we tell him? He's looking for his friend, you know."

"Don't be stupid," answered the Rapidash, "I don't think Ivysaur wants to be exposed. If he told us the truth, that's the trainer who abandoned him in the woods."

"He doesn't seem too bad," Kirlia thought and tilted her head a bit.

"I wonder who's telling the truth", Pichu said and sat down on Rapidash's head.

"In any case, this is going to be interesting", Rapidash said and smirked a bit,
"And don't sit on my head, you brat. Have some respect!"

Meanwhile, over by the campfire, the girl and Adan had started to prepare food.

"Oh, by the way", said the girl,
"My name is Cimi."

"I'm Adan. Nice to meet you", Adan answered, and lied every word.
 

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Here are my corrections.

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done nothing else than being lost. He took off his cap, and shook his bluish-black hair. He put his bag on the ground beside him. A Pokédex slipped out. It was a regular red Pokédex, a bit old and worn out, "Adan" was written on the cover. His mother had the habit of writing his name to everything he owned, because as a small child he had lost his toys, keys and even his shoes all the time.

"That's so stupid," he mumbled and stuffed the Pokédex back to his bag.

On his belt there were five minimized pokéballs, and they all had a Pokémon inside them. Although Adan was already 15 years old, he had been a Pokémon trainer for just over a year now. When he had been eleven, he had passed his Pokémon school with the best grades, but had not left home to become a trainer. He had already gotten his Pokédex and his starter Pokémon, when it was discovered that his mom had a cancer. He had then decided to stay at home instead of starting as a Pokémon trainer. His mother had then died, three long years later, and a while after that, Adan and his Bulbasaur finally left for their quest to beat all the gym leaders and compete in the official Pokémon League, for that was shat his mother had wished for the past years. Everything had gone pretty well until the incident on the Isle of Jade. After that, he had been lost all the time, argued with Bulbasaur every day and now Bulbasaur, of all his Pokémon, was gone. Bulbasaur's pokéball was in his bag, but he was now looking for the Pokémon that should've been in it. He was certain that Bulbasaur would go back to Isle of Jade once it had escaped. If only he knew how to get back... he had completely lost the sense of directions he had always been so proud of. Bulbasaur, on the other hand, surely knew where to go, and so he would never find it.

"The heck with everything", Adan yelled and stood up. He stood there for a while, listening to the sounds of forest. Then he turned around and faced the Wurmple that had crawled its way to him.


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"Its" and "it's" can be easily misplaced. If you are having problems, say "it is" in the sentce, if it sounds right and makes since then put "it's" there. If it doesn't make since the put "its" in.


"Hi there, little one", Adan said to it and kneeled down,

"Can you tell me where I am and how can I get to Isle of Jade?"

"Well," answered the Wurmple, "If you go east of here, say, for twenty minutes or so, you should reach a road that leads somewhat that way."
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when using quotes (" ") make sure you put the comma or other punctuation inside the quote. Also make sure that the whole statement is in the same paragraph. I left the paragraph below the same to show you how not to do it. The paragraph above is the way to do it.

"I forgot", Adan said, very depressed,
"I don't understand you guys anymore. Could you just.... point, or something?"

The Wurmple, who felt bad for Adan, pointed her tail to the direction he thought was east. She was a Pokémon, and her sense of directions was more accurate, and it really did point to east. Adan left for the way she had shown, but it didn't take him long to lose the way again and turn south-east, so it took him almost an hour to reach the road. He was having a bad day, and the fact that there was a small stream between the forest and the road didn't help a bit. He stared at the stream for a while and then sighed.

"If only I was a Pokémon," he mumbled, "Preferably a Water type... This would all be so much easier." He took off his shoes, and threw them to the other side of the stream and went in the cold, cold water.

He was still trying to get his feet and pants dry again, when a red-haired girl came along the road.She was not alone, a Rapidash, Kirlia, and a Pichu were with her too. Adan started to quickly put his shoes on his wet feet so that he'd look as normal as possible.

"Umm, do you need help?" the girl asked. Adan turned around. The girl was right behind him, although she had just a few seconds ago been twenty meters away. She sat on her Rapidash and looked down on sitting Adan.

"Wha- Wow, you're fast", Adan gasped.

"Thank you", the Rapidash answered, but of course Adan didn't know this.

"Well, do you?" the girl asked again.

"I, um, no, I'm just a bit wet, coming across that stream and all", Adan explained. He was terrified about the girl noticing he had no shoes on. He had terrible experiences about walking bare-footed in front of people and did not want anymore of those.

"There's a little bridge just a bit down the road", the girl said and pointed to where she had came from, "So you really didn't have to get wet. But well, how were you supposed to know..."

"There usually are bridges over rivers, you know", mumbled the Pichu, who was sitting on the Rapidash's head, between her ears and clinging on to her horn. Pichu's words, however, were wasted, since Adan did not understand. On that moment, though, Adan wasn't even interested, because he was too busy sulking about the bridge he had not known about.

"What are you doing here?" asked the Kirlia that sat on the girl's shoulders. Adan understood this question, though he really didn't know how, and so he answered.


"Well, I'm trying to find my way to Isle of Jade", he explained, "You see..."

He was interrupted when another Pokémon came after the girl and her group. This was a dinosaur-like Pokémon, with a plant on his back.

"Bulba..?" Adan gasped, but was immediately disappointed. Bulbasaurs had onions on their backs, but this one had a flower bud and a couple of leaves.

"What is it?" the girl asked and looked at the Ivysaur that was following them,
"Is there something wrong?"

"No. You see, I'm looking for my Bulbasaur, I've lost him and I thought he'd head for Isle of Jade. I just thought for a bit... well, never mind. You should probably be going, and I have to dry myself a bit," Adan said. He hoped that they would leave him alone. He was in a really bad mood now, and the Ivysaur was watching him in a rather hostile way.

"No, we can start a campfire for you", said the girl, and hopped down from Rapidash's back, "You'll dry faster."

Adan couldn't tell if the girl really had a strange look on her face or if it was only his imagination. With the help of her Rapidash, the girl started a fire and invited Adan to sit with her. All her Pokémon stayed a bit away from them, Ivysaur even further than the rest.

"But Ivysaur only recently evolved," said Pichu, "Shouldn't we tell him? He's looking for his friend, you know."

"Don't be stupid," answered the Rapidash, "I don't think Ivysaur wants to be exposed. If he told us the truth, that's the trainer who abandoned him in the woods."

"He doesn't seem too bad," Kirlia thought and tilted her head a bit.

"I wonder who's telling the truth?" Pichu said and sat down on Rapidash's head.

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you always end a sentence inside a quote with a comma, unless it is a question or exclamation.

"In any case, this is going to be interesting," Rapidash said and smirked a bit, "And don't sit on my head, you brat. Have some respect!"

Meanwhile, over by the campfire, the girl and Adan had started to prepare food.

"Oh, by the way," said the girl, "My name is Cimi."

"I'm Adan. Nice to meet you," Adan answered, and lied every word.


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Very interesting story you have going on. It is original. At least it isn't one of those stories that we can guess what's going to happen right away.

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Hello Again! I thought there would be a break, because I got my Pokémon Diamond on Thursday, but it seems I still have time for writing. And this time, I even used a spell check, so we'll see if poor kcander90 has to keep correcting every sentence I write...

Okay, in this chapter, we (are forced to) get to know Adan a bit, and maybe a bit more of Ivysaur, too. I have written the next two chapters already, and they're named the following:
Chapter 5 - Chapter with a Lot of Yelling
Chapter 6 - Adan and Ivysaur

And after those, the story gets a lot more exciting! So, keep reading, if someone does that in the first place. My thanks for all the readers, and please comment!

Chapter 4 - A Nightmare with Shoes

For Cimi and her Pokémon the first days with Adan were agony. When they first met him, none of them had the intention of travelling together, expecially not Adan. By the time he had left on his own twice, it came clear that he could not travel alone, not anywhere. He had left their camp twice, once in the evening and the second time in the morning, and appeared back after an hour or so, every time by accident. When he came back lost for the second time, Cimi decided not to let him leave anymore. Besides, she thought he might solve his disputes with his Ivysaur.

After the first night, it was also very clear that Adan was indeed Ivysaur's trainer, who, according to Ivysaur, had abandoned his starter, and according to himself, had lost his precious Pokémon by accident. Ivysaur, who had evolved just a day before after a fight with a wild Pidgeotto, sulked the whole time Adan stayed with them. He did not speak a word, made a couple of halfhearted attempts to escape and didn't care for food much either. This, though, was not an unusual state of things, as Ivysaur never ate eagerly any Pokémon food Cimi gave him. Cimi thought that might've been because it was all meant for fire type Pokémon and had decided to buy some grass brand food from the next store they came across.

Cimi, Pichu and Radeem had all suspicions towards Adan and his Ivysaur. Pichu was clearly on Adan's side, Radeem was on Ivysaur's side, Cimi didn't know who to believe and Kirlia didn't care much for the whole suspicion thing. This made the atmosphere rather unpleasant and everyone hoped for Adan and Ivysaur either to be friends again and tell the truth or to vanish to the opposite sides ofthe earth, both preferably as far away from them as could be. The true nightmare, however, began when they started to know Adan better.

The only positive outcome of Adan's continuous prensence was that Ivysaur slowly sulked less and less, wasn't all that grumpy anymore and even had little conversations with Kirlia, like this:

"Hmm? You don't like your food?" Kirlia asked one morning.

"No, not that much, really", Ivysaur mumbled.

"What kind of food do you like, then?"

"Well, my... trainers mother made some good stuff. I don't know what she put in it, but I've loved it since I was little."

"Oh? You didn't leave home when your trainer got you?"

"No, his mother was kind of sicky, so we stayed at his home for a couple of years."

"Really? What kind of sickness did she have?"

"Well, she had.... Wait, I don't want to talk about this! Go tease someone else!"

But Adan himself seemed to have no good traits in him at all. He didn't eat any food without complaining about it, he didn't change his clothes without someone pointing out that he was starting to get a bit smelly, and when washing clothes or dishes or doing anything useful, he'd always mutter how annoying and bothersome it all was. He never joined the conversation in an reasonable way, rather he'd say something like "you're wrong" and "I don't like Beedrills at all, can't you talk about something more fun?" and "I'm really hungry and there's nothing good to eat!". Bit by bit Cimi thought she'd understand Ivysaur even if it turned out he had escaped on it's free will. The worst of all was Adan's behaviour when they were walking. He complained about his shoes every two minutes and didn't listen to anything Cimi said to him, as Cimi was riding and he wasn't. Radeem didn't take Adan on her back no matter how Adan begged. This, however, seemed to make Ivysaur a bit more merry than he usually was.

The only way to make Adan happy and thus a bit better company was to make him talk about Pokémon battles. Even a slight mention about the subject made his eyes glitter with enthusiasm and he would discuss about strategies and ask about Cimi's battles for hours and hours. he also told glorious stories about his fights with his Bulbasaur, and those stories seemed to doften Ivysaurs heart a bit, as he always came closer to listen waht Adan had to say. Adan's stories often flattered his Bulbasaur and himself a bit more than was appropriate, but they were good stories. Even Kirlia, who didn't care for battles at all, listened to him as he told how he and his Bulbasaur had beaten their first gym leader and his fire type Pokémon, against all the odds. Pichu, of course, as obsessed to battles he was, would sit right next to Adan, listening, his eyes glittering as he imagined the situations in his small head, and his cheeks sparking with extra electricity he could not keep in.

"There we were, standing at our very first gym, and the leader sends out a Charmeleon! I was all ready to give up, but Bulbasaur was so pumped up he wanted to try anyway, and so we went for it. The fight was complete madness! I shouted commands and Bulbasaur only obeyed half, sometimes he should've obeyed but toher times he saved himself by disobeying. There was this one really close call, when I ordered it to do a Take Down. Just on the moment he was getting close enough, Charmeleon used Ember, and we knew it was his last one and he had been saving it. I was ready to give up any second before my poor Bulbasaur would get too hurt, but guess what?"

"What? What?" Pichu asked, barely keeping himself put.

"He was never going to do the darn Take Down! All the time he was going for a Vine Whip, but the gym leader and his Charmeleon thought he was going to obey me... So, the Ember missed, the Vine Wip was a successful hit, and it didn't take us long to win the fight after that. I think they could've given up right that moment, but the gym leader apparently wanted to torture his poor Charmeleon for nothing. They had no chance left!"

"Hmm", said Kirlia, "but wasn't that what they said about you before the fight? 'No chances'?"

"Ahh, that was a different thing", Adan answeared with a dreamy look in his eyes.

"It's great that you tell these stories, Adan", Cimi said, sitting by their campfire and making food for everyone, "but I really hope you don't teach Pichu to be disobedient... He's a handful now, and I don't want to think how many hands do I need if he gets any more self-confident."

"I have an idea", Adan said, looking at the food Cimi was making with great remorse, "What if I train Pichu a bit? It would be good for both of us."

Cimi gave them the permission and they went a bit further from the camp. Radeem came with Pichu, as she did not trust Adan. Kirlia came also with them, because she was curious. Adan looked down at his pokéballs.
"Let's see", he said, "do you want to fight Eevee or Beautifly?"

"Beautifly", Pichu yelled. He was so excited he couldn't even stay put. He had sometimes took part in the Pokémon Ranch's training classes, but those were for fire Pokémon, so they weren't as fun. Now he'd have real training, with a real trainer - not that he didn't prefer Cimi over every human, but still...

"I don't undestand you anyway", Adan said and smiled a bit helplessly, "so it'll be Eevee in any case."

He threw the pokéball and Eevee appeared. This Eevee had been Adan's first catch, and he was still waiting to get a water stone and evolve it into Vaporeon. This had been Eevee's choice, as she wanted to be nothing else than Vaporeon. She played in water whenever she had the chance and pretended to use water type moves.

"Wow", she said, "I've been there a long time."

"I'm sorry, Eevee", Adan said, almost if reading Eevee's mind, "I've been looking for Bulbasaur fo a couple of weeks now. Remember I lost him? That's why you don't get out often. Well, here's a chance to get a bit of excitement. We're going to train this Pichu a bit."

"Oh, boy", said Pichu.

Oh, but I have a weakness for electricity, Eevee thought for a second, before she took her fighting pose.

"All right!", she yelled, and the training began.

A bit later Cimi was tasting her food, sitting together with Ivysaur by the fire. Ivysaur was almost asleep, and as Cimi watched it, she felt a bit troubled. It would take them no longer than a week to reach the ferry for Island of Jade. She wondered if she could solve the mystery of Adan and his Ivysaur before it was time to part ways with them.

Suddently Kirlia was right next to her. She seemed to be in deep thoughts as she stared into the fire and stood completely still.

"You know", she finally said to Cimi, "there's something odd about Adan and the way he thinks. It's almost like... he thinks like a Pokémon..."
 

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Thanks for using spell check, but you still missed a few.

[FONT=&quot]traveling not [/FONT][FONT=&quot]travelling

[/FONT][FONT=&quot]especially not [/FONT][FONT=&quot]expecially

[/FONT][FONT=&quot]presence not [/FONT][FONT=&quot]prensence

[/FONT][FONT=&quot][/FONT][FONT=&quot]([/FONT][FONT=&quot]sicky is not a word, this sentence needs to be changed, but i will get to that later.[/FONT][FONT=&quot])

[/FONT][FONT=&quot]behavior not [/FONT][FONT=&quot]behaviour

[/FONT][FONT=&quot]what not [/FONT][FONT=&quot]waht

Whip not [/FONT][FONT=&quot]Wip

[/FONT][FONT=&quot]understand not [/FONT][FONT=&quot]undestand

[/FONT][FONT=&quot]Suddenly not [/FONT][FONT=&quot]Suddently
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By the time he had left on his own twice, it came clear that he could not travel alone, not anywhere.

not necessary

He had left their camp twice, once in the evening and the second time in the morning, and appeared back after an hour or so, both times by accident.

Both because it was only twice.

Cimi thought that might've been because it was all meant for fire type Pokémon and had decided to buy some grass type food from the next store they came across.

brand is a the company who makes something, such as Coke-a-Cola

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This is good, nice cliff hanger also. I cant wait to see what happens next.
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Hello everyone, I'm sorry for the long wait (if anyone waits)! I'll be posting two chapters now and more will follow, so stay tuned. Additionally, if anyone wants to see how I think Cimi and Adan and the rest of the gang look like, I can post some pictures too. I've also made a Cimi-sprite :nervous: Please enjoy!

Chapter 5 - Chapter with a Lot of Yelling

As they travelled on, the weather took a change for worse. It was raining almost all the time, and so Radeem was tired and everybody had to walk. During the worst downpours they had to take cover under the trees and all the time it seemed like there was something worse on it's way. All this made a day's walk almost a three day's walk, so to everyone it looked like they were never going to reach Isle of Jade, or even the ferry. But with every step they took, Adan seemed to complain less and less. Instead, he started sulking in his own, weird way, by hurrying a bit ahead of everyone else and then beating up some wild Pokémon with his own. To Cimi, this was even more annoying than his non-stop complaining, and a couple of times they had to take cover from an enraged flock of bird Pokémon or an army of Beedrill.

"I feel bad for my Pokémon, having to stay in their stupid balls", he explained when Cimi asked him to stop, and didn't stop. It took Cimi a while to realize Adan was, for some strange reason, sulking, and taking it out on innocent wild Pokémon. Knowing all this, Cimi decided to find out what was troubling Adan.

"He's always like that", Ivysaur said to Kirlia a couple of meters behind them. The rain that had Radeem completely worn out only perked up Ivysaur, the grass type he was. " When he's feeling bad, he makes it up by fighting. I hate that, I don't like fighting half the much he does. You have no idea how annoying that can be!"

"Did he make you fight wild Pokémon too, then?" Kirlia asked. On the moment, she was riding on Ivysaur. She did not like rain at all, she'd rather have spent all rainy days in her safe and comfy little Poké ball, but since Cimi didn't use those anymore, she adjusted to the situation.

"No, of course not", Ivysaur laughed, "How could he? No, I just told him to cut down trees or something instead. I don't like him bossing me around, but he is a bossy type, after all."

"So you just disobeyed him, then? But aren't you supposed to obey him, when you're his starter and all?" Kirlia asked again, in a very friendly way. She was never rude, and while she was very nosy, she did it such a way nobody got mad at her, except occasionally.

"Eh, um, that is... Well, I'm not going to fight all the innocent Pokémon for nothing, you know, and... all the trainers, that's a different thing...", Ivysaur seemed very confused. Kirlia decided that this was not a good subject to talk about. It seemed that Ivysaur had never thought about things that way.

"Why do you think he's feeling bad now?", she asked and leaned on Ivysaur's bud a bit.

"Beats me", said Ivysaur, "Most of the time he's like that I don't have a slightest idea why."

"Maybe it's about his mother", Kirlia suggested, wondering how Ivysaur didn't know even though he had spent so much time with his trainer, "You said his mother had a sickness of some sort."

"It can't be the reason", Ivysaur said, back to his old, grumpy, go-away style, "It can't be the reason, and don't ask why, because it just isn't. Can't we hurry? I'd like to get to that island before I die out of old age!"

But since Ivysaur didn't ask Kirlia to leave, she stayed on his back, smiling a bit to herself. She should translate a bit more of Ivysaur's words to Cimi, because she knew Cimi would like this Ivysaur. Maybe even so much, that he would stay with them, instead of going back to Adan...

And then Adan did something he should never have done. He grew tired of using the same moves all the time, and decided to ask Pichu to fight for him. Pichu, as Adan had noticed before, was pretty much all talk and no real ability. This was mostly because he really didn't fight a lot, and Adan thought he was doing this little spark a favor. Pichu had been a bit worried to fight in areal fight, but Adan managed to win him over. So, they ran over ahead while Cimi wasn't watching and waited for an encounter. Soon enough a wild Spearow crossed their way, and this is where Adan made his final mistake. After a moment of hesitation, he decided Pichu should fight the rather small bird. At first, they were both excited, but it soom became apparent that Pichu had no chances against the Spearow. Adan tried to withdraw, but without a Poké ball, the Spearow didn't care how far Pichu tried to go.

And Pichu fainted. While Adan was still trying to throw in another Poké ball, Spearow took Pichu in its claws and flew up to its nest. Adan was panicing, trying to get his Pokédex out of his pocket.
"Spearows don't eat meat, do they?", he muttered while trying to get the Pokédex to confirm Pichu's safety. He had only one flying Pokémon, and that one would've been no match for the Spearow. When he heard Cimi's voice, his heart stopped.

"Adan, have you seen Pichu?", Cimi shouted from several steps away.

After that, everything went wrong.

"Umm", answeared Adan, "How should I put this? He's... Well, he's up in that tree."

"Up in that...? Tell him to come down", Cimi said, rather annoyed. She was now almost next to Adan.

"That's not quite possible", Adan said, starting to panic again, "You see, he did not go there by himself. He was carried there, by a Spearow. And, umm, I think he's fainted, too..."

Cimi did not say anything. In a blink of an eye, she saw her dear Pichu in a tree, a Spearow guarding him, and most importantly, she saw what had happened. For a moment, her mouth was completely numb, and no words came from her lips. And then, suddently, a lot of them came, and in a very loud voice, too.

"You made him fight, didn't you? How could you?" she yelled at Adan.

"He wanted to fight, he just didn't admit it! You should've seen how excited he was", Adan yelled back, "Besides, my fighting is none of your business!"

"It is, if you use my Pokémon without my permission", Cimi screamed. She had never before been this angry at anyone.

"That's not the main point now", shouted Ivysaur, running towards them with Kirlia on his back, "We have to get him down, quickly!"

Kirlia translated this to Cimi, who immidiately calmed down considerably and tried to think. Before she had any time to act or even think thoroughly, Ivysaur and Kirlia were in full action. Kirlia ran towards the tree and Ivysaur was obviously trying to go behind the Spearow's back. Spearow decided to take on the weaker opponent, and as it took a dive towards Kirlia, Ivysaur quikly sent out his vines and saved Pichu from the tree. Seeing this, the Spearow was outraged and was about to use twice the power it had inteded. Both Ibysaur and Kirlia stopped for a fleeing moment, and Cimi saw that this was a major hole in their plot.

"Kirlia", Cimi yelled with all her might, "Use Teleport!"

In a blink of an eye, Kirlia was next to Ivysaur and the Spearow hitted ground on full speed.

"Confusion", Cimi shouted again, "Quick, Kirlia, use Confusion!"

Kirlia did what she was told to, and as the bird was trying to attack again, it hitted the tree instead and decided, all worn out and grumpy, to withdraw from this battle. Ivysaur and Kirlia hurried out of its sight. If it suddently snapped out from its confusion, who knows what it might've done...

When they all had escaped far enough, Ivysaur put the trembling Pichu in his rightful owner's lap. Cimi was trembling even more than Pichu, when she carefully sprayed a bit of potion on the poor creature. For a while, you could almost hear the heartbeats of Radeem, Kirlia and Ivysaur as they waited for something to happen. Cimi felt like she had no heart at all anymore. Finally, Pichu opened his eyes.
"Ouch", he said, and Kirlia didn't even have to translate. Cimi leaned over Pichu and cried with both her other Pokémon and Ivysaur comfoting the two.

Adan stood a bit futher from them. He felt really guilty, but he would never admit it. Rain on the road was getting more intense, but under the trees there was still quite warm and dry. Adan watched the silhouttes of a girl and all the Pokémon around her, and the warm-coloured light of the campfire was as fitting to the picture as waves are in the sea. He could hear Cimi crying. That was too much for him.

"Let her be happy with her little useless Pokémon", he muttered to himself. He could survive on his own. He could even find what he was looking for on his own. Besides, he didn't want to go near the Isle of Jade ever again. He lifted his bag from the ground.

"Hey", Ivysaur yelled suddently, "He's running away!"
Cimi lifted her head and watched Adan running ahead on the wet road. He had already gotten pretty far. It would be a real pain to catch him now.
"That idiot", she said to herself. "You idiot!", she shouted after Adan and turned to Radeem.

"It was pretty dry today, wasn't it?", she asked her Rapidash, "So I guess you're in pretty good condition now, and we shouldn't get that idiot get away with this. Want to run a bit, my dear?"

And boy, did Radeem want.
 

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Alright then, in this chapter the story takes an interesting turn. Don't stop rading, it's not nearly over yet! The next chapter, 7th one, will be called "The Incident on Isle of Jade" and in the 8th chapter our friends finally reach the famous Isle of Jade and an interesting turn of events takes place. The chapter has no name yet, though. Anyway, keep reading!
Oh, and by the way, this chapter was really written on an impulse, so it's bound to have at least billion spelling problems. Also, it's not very long.


Chapter 6 - Adan and Ivysaur

Adan sat next to their campfire. After all the running he did not have any energy left, so he had no other choice than to sit still, tied down by Ivysaur's vines. He was so mad, yet he didn't quite know was he mad to himself, Cimi or possibly even his stupid Bulbasaur. Never before had he wanted to be a Pokémon so badly.
"Let me go", he groaned, mostly just to himself.

"No way", answeared Ivysaur, and even Adan guessed his meaning right.

"Adan", Cimi said, "Why are you being such a... such a moron? How come they let you become a trainer in the first place? Shouldn't you be, you know, more responsible and stuff? When I first started, they asked me and my parents a ton of questions regarding my ability to take responsibility over a Pokémon..."

"I am responsible", Adan yelled, "I am responsible enough to be a trainer! At least I haven't quitted my journey like someone seems to have done, so don't you come talking to me when you're no better!"

"I'm no better?", Cimi asked astonished with her voice trembling, "Just how am I 'no better' than you are? All my Pokémon were healthy and happy this morning, because I look after them, unlike some people I happen to know."

"You don't know me", Adan said in a low tone, "You don't know me, stupid girl. You can lie to yourself all you want about your little Pichu being happy, but how come he hasn't evolved? He wants to fight, it's you who doesn't! Besides, I do look after my Pokémon. They're all healthy and happy in their balls!"

"Oh, is that right?", Cimi yelled back at him. She was really hurt by the remark about Pichu not evolving. "How come your Bulbasaur ran away then?"

"My Bulbasaur", Adan's voice faded, "Ran away? I never said he ran away! He didn't run away... Wait a sec!"

Adan turned towards Ivysaur, whose expression gave away the whole secret. Adan looked closely at Ivysaur and gasped a bit. Cimi's heart skipped a few beats.

"All this time, he was here, and you knew it?", Adan asked Cimi.

"He himself said we weren't allowed to tell you", Kirlia said in her usual polite manner, "But your stories are a bit different from each other. I wonder which one of you is telling us the truth?"

Adan, thought Pichu.
Ivysaur, thought Radeem.
I don't think I know anything anymore, thought Cimi.
I wonder if it's going to be a sunny day tomorrow, thought Kirlia.
I can't believe this, thought Adan.

"We both lie", muttered Ivysaur.

"I beg your pardon?", said Kirlia in a happy tone.

"We both lie", Ivysaur growled, "None of those two stories are true! I didn't quite run away, and he certainly didn't lose me by accident. We fought, that's the truth. He told me to leave, and I was so mad I left. We have both lied just to have your sympathy. Don't blame Adan too much, it's been much more hard to him than it has been to me..."

"Ivysaur?", Cimi asked, very confused. Radeem turned her back on both Adan and Ivysaur and decided never to trust any stranger again.

"Why did you fight?", Kirlia asked and tilted her head a bit. She was constantly whirling, hopping and dancing in other tiny moves, which annoyed Adan considerably.

"We always fought", Adan said and looked at Ivysaur again, "Could you, by any chance, let me go? I'm not going to run anywhere and you know it."

Ivysaur let his vines loosen and Adan squirmed away from their grasp.

"But why did you fight", Pichu insisted to know.

"It's a long story", Ivysaur said and tried not to face neither Cimi nor her Pokémon.

"It's probably your fault anyway", Cimi said in a low voice and stared at Adan. This was, again, a bit too much for him to handle.

"It was not my fault!", he yelled, almost hysterical and pointing at Ivysaur, "It's his fault for being such a wuss all the time! Always blabbering nonsense about stuff like not wanting to fight and not even to start the stupid journey in the first place, even though that was Mother's last wish! Her last wish before she died! But he can't even pretend, for Mother's sake! It's all Adan's fault!"

Words flowed from his mouth at an unbelievable speed and volume, so he hardly had time to think what he was saying.

"Now you've done it, my friend", Ivysaur said with a deep sigh.

Adan covered his mouth with both of his hands.

"Why are you blaming yourself?", Kirlia asked, before suddently realizing. "Oh", she said.

"Umm", said Cimi, trying to verbalize her question, but she couldn't put her thoughts into words. Why would Adan say "It's all Adan's fault"? Something wasn't quite right here. Suddently both Adan and Ivysaur were looking very suspicious.

"I'm sorry", Adan mumbled. He was as red as a tomato.

"Yes, I think we're caught", Ivysaur said and looked Cimi straight in the eyes, "We're not at all what we look like. The starter Pokémon is the boy sitting in front of you, and I am his trainer... I am Adan. Sorry to fool you, but you would not have believed anyway..."

Cimi took a deep breath and looked back at Ivysaur, who stated to be a human, the boy called Adan. She didn't know what to think anymore, because 'What the heck is going on' would not have been enough. She looked at the boy and the Pokémon and could not see how Ivysaur could have been the trainer and Adan the Pokémon. Or... which one was Adan anyway?

"So... You switched... Bodies?" Cimi asked after coming to the conclusion she was crazy.

"That's basically it", said the human boy in front of her and grinned in a very confused way, "I once hatched from a Bulbasaur egg."

Again there was a long silence during which everyone tried to decide what to say, or more importantly, what to think.

"Look, we don't really know what to think about this ourselves, and...", said Ivysaur, but his voice faded in the middle of whatever it was he was about to say. Kirlia and Pichu stared at him in a way that made him feel uncomfortable. But the most uncomfortable thing was the way Cimi looked at him. He could feel her eyes even though he was not looking at her.

"We're eager to hear how you managed to get yourselves in this situation", Cimi finally said very, very silently, "If you want to tell us, that is."

And she said it in such a way it didn't really give Ivysaur and Adan any options.

//Edited! I made the ending of this chapter a bit longer and clearer and I think a bit better. I hope you enjoyed! //
 
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I always thought Pokemon names pluralized were just the pokemon's name...

like for example the plural for of Stantler would be:
Stantler
 

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So you're from Finland, eh? Very nice. I am rather intrigued by this story thus far, and will try to follow while continuing my own writing.

I noticed that, although consistently done, you tend to place the comma outside the quotation marks. I have seen few instances of this, and it usually reflects a writer's choice of style. Proper English dictates that the commas should be placed inside of the quotation marks. If this is a part of your style, then just say so and I won't bring it up again.

You also made another comma error, being that it was after a question in dialog. Here is an example of this:
"Why are you blaming yourself?", Kirlia asked, before suddently realizing.
Since you already ended the sentence with one punctuation mark, you don't need another after the quotation marks.

Anyway, this is very nice work for someone who's native tongue isn't English. Just thought I would point out some of your most obvious mistakes so you can work on those before worrying about the more complex ones. I hope my review helped!
 

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Before the next chapter

Proper English dictates that the commas should be placed inside of the quotation marks. If this is a part of your style, then just say so and I won't bring it up again.

Well, I did not know that. When writing proper Finnish the commas are placed outside the quotation marks without any options, so I'm kind of stuck to that way. If it's okay, I'll continue keeping them outside the quotation marks. That sure was a great piece of information, though, and I'll remember this in the future.

Besides the grammar and spelling mistakes I often do because I write faster than I should, I also sometimes forget words. So, if you find a word that looks a bit misplaced in my text (ie. 'object' instead of, say, 'item', like I noticed I had written on an upcoming chapter), please say so and suggest a better word. You know how annoying it is to forget a word...

Here's the schedule for upcoming chapters:
Later today: Chapter 7 - The Incident on Isle of Jade (100% ready, just need to spell check it)
Saturday: Chapter 8 - Go Home, Cimi! (100% ready, has to be checked)
Monday: Chapter 9 - The Rescue Plan (also 100% ready)
Sometime next week:
Chapter 10 - I'll not tell you the name yet, as it may still change (I'm working on this)
Chapter 11 - Has a name, but I'm not telling it
Chapter 12 - Also has a name that is highly likely to change

So, keep tuned, everyone!
Also, this is what Cimi looks like:
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I'll draw a real picture if someone wants =D She doesn't look like much as a sprite! It was hard to make that one, though.

So, my deepest thanks for those who have helped me or otherwise commented my work. Keep reading!
 

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Chapter 7

The history is revealed but the future gets only cloudier! Adan opens his heart in tonight's episode of "Journey to Isle of Jade". Tune in on Saturday to see what happens next!


Chapter 7 - The Incident on Isle of Jade

(Note: from now on, the one you knew as Ivysaur will be reffer as Adan and vice versa, because it's better to call them with names that go with their identities rather than appearences.)

Cimi sat in a humid forest. It was very late at night. In her lap, Pichu pretended to have fallen asleep. Next to her, Kirlia floated a bit above ground in a rather troubled stance and stared to the campfire in front of them. Behind them stood Radeem. She was feeling miserable because of all the humidity and rain of the last weeks.

At the other side of the campfire, there sat a boy with short, balck hair and grey eyes. This boy was actually not a boy, as Cimi and her Pokémon had just heard. In this human body there was a mind of an Ivysaur. So, logically - if you can say so in a situation like this - in the body of the Ivysaur next to him, there was a mind of a human boy called Adan. And this was all due to an incident that took place on Isle of Jade.

To make their story sensible, Adan had to start telling from the beginning. As with many other trainers, his story began when he had been eleven years old.

"I graduated from my school with the best grades of my class", he told Cimi. Of course, to Cimi it sounded like he said "Ivy ivy, saur ivysaur" and so on, but Kirlia translated Adan's speech for her telepathically. "I went to Pokémon Center like all the other beginning trainers in our town. They gave us Pokédexes and just as I had chosen Bulbasaur as my starter Pokémon, my father barged in. 'Adan, come quick', he yelled at me, 'your mother's really sick!'. Now, my dad, he's really of the more overprotective type and he panics easily, so I didn't think much of the scene. I followed him to the hospital, but step by step I started to realize this wasn't just one of his usual things. When we got to the hospital, my mother seemed just fine. But, well, she wasn't. They told me she had a colorec.tal cancer* or something, I don't remember what it was. I never wanted to believe in it, so I never memorized it's name... Anyway, it was obvious that she was going to die pretty soon. So, I decided not to leave while she was alive."

"Which made her unhappy", Ivysaur blurted, "She wanted nothing more to see you as a great trainer!"

"Shut up, how would you know", Adan said in a very annoyed tone, "Anyway, I already had this Bulbasaur with me, and I didn't want to return him anymore, so I kept him with me. I let him out of his ball so he could see what was going on. I had no intention of making him fight. But he wanted to fight! He wanted desperately to grow stronger and stonger, and I had to keep an eye on him all the time or he would run off to fight some poor wild Pokémon!"

"I wanted to be ready", Ivysaur mumbled so quietly nobody paid any attention to him.

"He's a handful, this Ivysaur of mine!", Adan said and laughed a bit, "Anyway, my mother would tell me to leave and become a trainer and I would say no. It went on for three years, and the very week my mother died she made me promise I would start my journey when she died. And then, well, she died."

A silence fell. Cimi felt like she should say something, but could not come up with anything that sounded sensible. She did not know how Adan had felt back then, nor she knew how he felt now, as she had never lost any family member. It was also hard to read the face of an Ivysaur when she had never seen one before. It was Kirlia and her limitless curiousity that broke this silence.

"What did she look like?"

"Hmm, she had black hair... I don't really know how long her hair was, it was always tied up in a knot. And her eyes were really dark, not like mine at all", Adan said and looked at his own face. It felt really weird, watching oneself like that. Expecially when the colours he saw were slightly different from what he used to see with his human eyes. Cimi watched Adan's face too, deep in her thoughts.

"Stop staring at me like that", Ivysaur said and blushed - a thing he could never have done as a Pokémon.

"Anyway", Adan said and stared back in to the fire again, "I then left to become a trainer as I had promised. I felt really bad, though, for leaving my dad all alone like that. He does have his younger sister, but I still feel bad about it. I didn't want to be a trainer anymore, but Bulbasaur disagreed with me. He kept telling me I had promised my mom, that my dad was expecting a lot from me, that I had the skill needed and it would be waisted if I didn't become a trainer. So, sometimes we fought a lot..."

"But not always", Ivysaur said in a really small voice.

"And then it was almost time for the memorial day of my mother's death", Adan said and sighed, "And because she had always loved jade, I thought we could bring her a jade bracelet or something as a souvenir. We were fairly close to Isle of Jade at that time, so I thought we could buy some there. You see, jade is a lot cheaper there than in anywhere else, and I'm not a rich kid. So, we took the ferry and went to Isle of Jade."

"The harbour was a nice place", Ivysaur told everyone and seemed pretty excited, "it was full of different sorts of Pokémon and trainers and mercants of all sorts. I think they sold everything there! And there were lots and lots of jade jewellery and other thing made of jade: they had little Pokémon made of jade, little statues made of jade, little trees made of jade... You could even ask for a jade sculpture of a Pokémon or a person, custom made to suit your tastes!"

"I didn't like the crowds", Adan said, "but there sure were some really nice little jade items there. I bought a bracelet as I had intended. My mom wasn't very flashy person, so I thought a modest gift would be best."

"I still have it in your backpack", Ivysaur kindly reminded.

"Really? That's great", Adan said and seemed a bit suprised, "So, I had let Bulbasaur out of its ball so it could look around a bit. Then these reporters came to us and said something like 'It's really unusual for a trainer to keep their Pokémon out of Pokéballs. I like you, kid. Can we use you two in a shoot?' I was really suprised, so I didn't get the chance to say yes or no before they dragged me off. We went into their van and they were really nice to us. They drove us into a cave, where the filming crew of some trainer show was already waiting. It was a really beautiful cave: you could see jade stripes in the walls and there was this pond at the back. It must've been the clearest water I've ever seen!"

He was silent for a while again. Cimi and her Pokémon could easily guess the story was coming to the part where everything went wrong. A log snapped in their campfire and sent flocks of sparks flying into the humid air of the forest. Rain on the road had stopped, but there was little hope of the weather clearing up.

"Now I don't quite remember where it started to went wrong", Adan said in a bit troubled voice, "but we started to get annoyed after several hours of standing in the hot spotlights. The director would tell us to do this and that and then say it wasn't good and it had to be made over. there were no signs of any food or drinks, and we were really getting grumpy. Then, the fiming team left the cave saying stuff like 'it's too hot here' and 'I'm hungry, let's get some food'. When we tried to leave as well, the director told us to stay and practice our part. And that's were Bulbasaur flipped."

"Yeah", Ivysaur said and sounded a bit embarassed, "I said it was all Adan's fault, because no normal trainer would keep their Pokémon outside their Pokéballs in a place like that. And that's where Adan flipped. He said he'd done it for my sake and I should be grateful. So, we started to fight again."

"And then came the crucial part", Adan continued, "When Bulbasaur said he'd make a lot better trainer than I ever would and I told him I'd make a lot better Pokémon than he had even imagined. A silence fell between us. After a brief moment, we both noticed something odd was about to happen. The pond in the cave started to act strangely. First, there were just minor waves, but they got bigger by the second. Soon a creature flew up from the pond. I think it might've been a Pokémon of some sort... It was small and blue and... I don't really know... I talked to us in a gentle voice and said: 'Would you really? Then let's prove that, shall we?' And there was this bright light, the lamps in the cave were turning, and I heard the director shout something like 'it's true, it really excists' and 'we have to inform our boss' and then everything went black. When I came to my senses, I was Bulbasaur and Bulbasaur was me, and we have both been miserable ever since."

"So, you need to get to Isle of Jade so you can get back to your original bodies", Cimi concluded their story.

"Yeah, that's about it", Adan said and sighed, "But Bulbasaur got even more difficult to handle after that. He said he was the trainer now and I should obey him, he tried to make me fight wild Pokémon and he even tried to put me in a Pokéball. I absolutely hate cramped places like that, and when he managed to get me in that stupid ball, I totally freaked out. I stuggled until I got out and after that I ran and ran, because I was sure he had lost his mind completely to do such thing."

"I have never disliked being in a Pokéball", Kirlia said innocently.

"Nobody asked you", Radeem answeared in her usual grumpy way.

"Aren't you two a handful", Cimi said to Adan and Ivysaur and sighed, "We really can't leave you two by yourselves, can we? You'd just fight and either one would run off or something. No, we're still going to escort you to Isle of Jade."

"You're concerned about those journalists, aren't you", Adan said in a low tone.

"I am", Cimi answeared, "To me it doesn't seem like they really were journalists. I think they're trying to catch the Pokémon you saw in the cave. It must be a very powerful one to do such thing without even being in a fight, just for fun."

"So what", said Ivysaur, "Aren't we more important? There's only a couple of days left before Adan'd mom's memorial day!"

"Ivysaur", said Adan, "I don't know if you've thought of this, but if they catch that Pokémon, it won't be able to help us anymore."

A silence fell, once again. They decided to leave as early in the morning as they just possibly could. Nobody said it aloud, but they all still knew it. Before going to sleep, Adan and Cimi discussed a bit about their route choices and ferry fares. Their conversation had to stop, however, because Kirlia started to get so sleepy she would translate everything completely wrong.

When the morning finally broke, the sun rose to show that the sky had finally cleared up. It was light blue and the air was chilly. Cimi, adan and Ivysaur didn't really wake up, as they had never really fallen asleep. They ate a cold breakfast.

"The ferry leaves around noon, so we better hurry", Cimi said.

And for once, Ivysaur, the infamous whiner, did not complain.

*For those of you who don't know (I didn't), colorec.tal cancer is a cancer located in the large intestine. I had to put a dot in the middle because it would be covered in stars otherwise. Seesh!
 

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Chapter 9

Hello again! Here we have the 8th chapter, as I promised. Our friends finally reach Isle of Jade, but will things go smoothly? Read on and find out!

Chapter 8 - Go Home, Cimi!


Finally, they had made it. The forest, the road, even the ferry were all behind them now. Before their eyes, a lively harbour town market square buzzed with the voices of people and Pokémon. Almost everything that could be sold on a marketplace could be seen: there were stalls selling potions, berries, food for both people and Pokémon, all sorts of items, Pokéballs... And of course, a dazzling variety of items made of jade. Their feet were finally standing on the firm ground of Isle of Jade.

The ferry ride had took almost an hour. The waters between Isle of Jade and mainland were tricky, and the ferry line wanted to keep all their passengers and ferries, so they made the trip extra carefully. During the trip Adan and Cimi had talked casually about their travels as trainers, but neither of them put their heart on it. Kirlia translated Adan's speech for Cimi, but she seemed strangely absent-minded, too. Cimi wasn't too concerned about her, though, because Kirlia was always strongly affected by the moods of her companions.

When the ferry finally arrived at the harbour of Isle of Jade, Radeem didn't let anyone ride on its back, not even Pichu, because her pride had been hurt in a most unspeakable way. The ferry personel had said that a Pokémon of Radeem's size could not be kept out of its ball in a crowded ferry, so Cimi had to dig up Radeem's Pokéball and put her in it. Radeem, as a Pokémon that grew up on a ranch, had rarely been in it's ball, expecially after Cimi had quitted her journey. And beacuse Pichu, Kirlia and Adan all got to stay out of their balls - altough there had been quite a fight about Adan being free on the ferry - Radeem felt that the way she had been treated was most unfair and therefore unexcusable.
But nobody really cared at this point. If Radeem was petty enough to make a scene about something so small, it was her problem. Cimi was worried about the Pokémon in the cave, and altough she did not admit it, she was worried about Adan and Ivysaur, too. What if the two could never go back to their original bodies? It was a bit harsh punishment for their constant fighting. Of course, her worries were nothing comapred to Adan's and Ivysaur's.
Cimi also regretted some of the things she had said. She had a tendency to be a bit harsh and feisty herself, but thinking back now, she thought she had been a tad unreasonable at times. It made her almost cry to think how hard it must be to Adan and Ivysaur. For a Pokémon that loves battling to be stuck in a human body that knows no moves... No wonder Ivysaur had made Pichu, the enthusiastic fighter, to fight random wild Pokémon - it was still unexcusable, though. Suddently she could also understand Adan's quietness and shyness. She was angry, but she did not know was she angry at herself, at Adan or at Ivysaur, or was she just angry in general. Of course, this all made her a bit more confused and emotional.

"It's a lot different being here as a Pokémon", Adan said suddently and laughed a bit, "it feels weird not to be able to see what's on those tables." He pointed at all the jade stalls with his nose.

"I can imagine", Cimi mumbled, "You want me to lift you?"

"No, thanks, let's just hurry", Adan said in a way that made Cimi think he was mad at her. Actually Adan was quite suprised at Cimi's sudden kindness. They walked in silence again.

"Say, how long does it take to that cave?" Radeem asked Adan.

"I don't really know, we went by car last time", Adan said, and was suddently very confused.

"You do know where it is", Radeem demanded in an annoyed voice.

"Well, you know, I kind of know which way to go and all", Adan answeared. He felt really ankward now. How come he had not realized this before? There was no way he could find the cave very fast without some seriously amazing luck.

"Oh, men", Radeem said in a way that made her thoughts about Adan about as clear as a mirror, "Do you remember what it's entrance looked like, then?"

"Yes, that I do remember", Adan said and felt a tad pround of himself, "It was very round and had these piles of stone on both sides of it... Also, there was a stripe of jade that was about on the height of my head and as wide as my wrist."

"Which way was it?", Radeem asked. Her red eyes had started to glow in excitement she could not hide. She stared at Adan's green Ivysaur face.

"What is this, an interrogation? It was the route 607 we took back then", Adan said and tried to look away from Radeem. He felt like he was going to blush under her stare, even though his current Pokémon body was not capable of blushing.

"I'm going to find that cave for you", Radeem announced in a royal tone, "Because I am faster than any of the cars they might've used. If anyone can find this cave fast, it's me. Doesn't somebody want to praise me?"

"Very clever of you, Radeem", Cimi said. She started to get her energy back, bit by bit. It had been years since she had had this much action in one week, and this was going to be the most exciting day of her week - or her year, for that matter. "But you have to take Kirlia with you, so that you don't have to fight any foolish trainers that think you're a wild Pokémon, all right?"

"This is going to be exciting", Kirlia said and hovered to Radeem, "May I?"

"Kirlia always has the right to ride on my back", Radeem said politely - although just half an hour ago she had denied Kirlia this right - and lowered her flames a bit. Kirlia sat firmly on her back and everyone could see how hard it was to her not to start dancing out of excitement.

With that, the couple blasted off with an amazing speed.

"If she's that fast, we'll find the cave in no time", Adan said and was rather content.

"What's this about", yelled Ivysaur suddently. He had been in the backround during all this.

"What's what about", asked Cimi. Something about Ivysaur made her always a bit irritated.

"Why are you still helping us? We can find the damn cave by ourselves", Ivysaur demanded to know. He hated receiving help, expecially from Cimi. He had always hated to get switced out of battles because of low health or poisoning or such, he hated double battles and most of all he hated the situations where he actually really needed help. He knew it was not the helper's fault, but he could not forgive himself for needing the help in the first place, so he took it out on others - like basically every other emotion he ever had.

"No we can't", Adan told him. Nobody understood him, though, because Kirlia was no longer around.

"Maybe you can, but this'll make it faster. What's wrong with that", Cimi tried to calm Ivysaur down.

"Everything! You know, this whole thing with the cave and the fake reporters and the switching bodies stuff was our business to begin with. We are thankful for your help on getting us back here, but we can find the cave ourselves, so you can go home now", Ivysaur bursted his anger out without giving much thought to his words.

"I'm worried about that Pokémon in the cave! What if something bad's going to happen to it because of you? Besides, I want to see it! Can't I at least get that much for seeing you two here?", Cimi blasted back, now getting angry as well.

"Please, don't fight", Pichu tried to say in the middle.

"It's no use, little guy, they're even worse than me and Bulbasaur ever were", Adan sighed.

"You said yourself that Pokémon must be really strong, so I don't think it'll need your help or even want it. I'm tired of you and your constant yelling. You're even worse than Adan, with your stupid cute Pokémon that can't even fight like they're supposed to. Besides, you don't even like us", Ivysaur yelled even louder than before.

"I don't like you! Adan's a whole different story. And being strong doesn't necessarily mean not needing help. The strongest of the strongest are what they are because of the help they have received! You're just so full of yourself you can't see that", Cimi said, in adangerously gentle and low voice.

"Oh, really? And you know this because? Cimi, I am sick of you and your company. Will you please go home and leave us alone? I would like nothing in this world better right now", Ivysaur said, but he still used the loud and angry tone he always used when he was mad.

For a couple of seconds, there was a silence. Cimi and Ivysaur stared furiously at each other and Pichu and Adan tried to come up with a way to calm them down, altough they already knew there was nothing they could do anymore.

"Fine. I hope you get back to your own bodies", Cimi finally said, leaned down to face Adan and smiled, "it was nice meeting you, Adan."

Then she started to walk back to the maketplace.

"Why is she leaving? What did you do", Adan yelled at Ivysaur, who of course didn't understand, "Cimi, gome back, you hear me? What about Radeem and Kirlia? Cimi!"

"Oh, shut up", Ivysaur said quietly and started to walk towards the route 607. Adan thought he had to make contact with Kirlia to get things straighten up, so he followed the human boy who carried a mind of a Pokémon.

A couple of kilometer further, Radeem and Kirlia had found a place that almost matched the description of the cave they were looking.

"See, the jade stripe and stone piles... It's all here", Kirlia said happily.

"But this can't be the place! See? There's no entrance to any cave", Radeem said. She was rather annoyed with Kirlia, once again. They decided to keep going for a while to find the cave Adan had described.

At a small street near the marketplace Cimi sat down. She felt awful and worried. Pichu sat on her lap and didn't say a thing.

"We have to wait for Radeem and Kirlia", Cimi said to him and patted his head.

"I know", Pichu said, "And you feel bad for saying things you didn't mean."

"Too bad I can't understand you right now", Cimi said and giggled in a gloomy way, because Pichu looked so serious. Suddently small sparks flew out from Pichu's pouches.

"What's wrong", Cimi asked the tiny Pokémon, when a pair of hands came out of nowhere and covered her mouth.

"You know too much, girl", a low male voice said. Pichu tried to give the mystery man an electric shock, but he was still too exhausted about his fight yesterday, so the shock ended up in being something that only tickled. The man shoved Pichu aside and grabbed Cimi.

"What is this", Cimi tried to scream but the hand covering her mouth made it difficult for her to breathe. Then she felt something hit her head from behind. The last thing she saw was Pichu running away like mad. Then there was only darkness.
 

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Umm, the next chapter will be a bit delayed. I've got to do some minor detailing and like, so just wait a bit longer. And by chapter 12 that I'm working on now, this story has taken a few steps to a direction even I could not predict. Anyway, I'll post it either tomorrow or the day after it, most likely tomorrow. Thanks!
 

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Hello, here we have the chapter number nine: The Rescue Plan! Next one will be up soon, it's already written and all.
And, I don't want to be naggy, but if there is someone who reads this, I would like to know that. If nobody reads this, I don't see the point in finishing the story at all... So, if you want to see the final conclusion of this story, please leave a comment telling that someone out there wants to know how this ends. Thank you, and sorry for being annoying!
Please enjoy!


Chapter 9 - The Rescue Plan

"The cave has no entrance anymore?!"

Both Adan and Ivysaur were shocked by the news. What in the world was going on here?
They stared at the solid rock wall in front of them. Radeem and Kirlia had led them here after deciding that this had got to be the place Adan had been talking about. No other place fitted his description like this did. The only fault was the obvious one: there was no cave.

"How can a cave disappear? Did they have some allmighty rock Pokémon to build this wall here?", Adan paniced.

"To me it looks like there never was a cave. See, the Jade stripe just continues straight trough the wall! It looks like it's been there forever", Radeem shared her honest opinion, which nobody really wanted to hear. That was beacuse she seemed to be right.

"And that's not even our only problem", Adan said. He felt miserable.

"What else is there?", Kirlia asked. She felt really troubled, too.

"Ivysaur said something to Cimi and she left", Adan said in a small voice.

"You what", Radeem shouted at Ivysaur.

"I told her to go home! She's still propably waiting for you, though", Ivysaur said. His tone and stance told Adan he really regretted that fight with Cimi, but Radeem did not have the advantage of knowing Ivysaur so well.

"I'm so going to roast you! Don't you think we're all useless when it comes to fights. I'm fully tutored and of a rather fine bloodline, too. You don't want to fight me. Why did you tell her to go home?" Radeem was furious.

"Ahh, why do you all keep yelling at me?" Ivysaur asked. He was really irritated.

"I'm going to get her", Radeem said let her flames rose higher than usually, "I'm going to get her here and she'll see this adventure trough. Just how selfish can you get? Sheesh! Kirlia, you stay here so we have a valid reason to come back, okay? And you don't have to translate that to him! Tell him you're here to see they don't escape!"

Radeem barged off and left Adan, Ivysaur and Kirlia to solve the mystery of the cave that vanished.

"You're unbelievable", Adan mumbled to Ivysaur and went closer to the solid rock wall in front of them.

"Are you sure this is the place", Kirlia asked. Her meaning was to lighten the mood a bit, but she did not succeed very well.

"Of course I am! This is insane", Adan suddently yelled in despair and sat down on his big, green Pokémon butt. There was a long silence after this. Adan tried to go trough every detail he could remember from the cave. The bushes seemed to be the same, the rock piles were the same... Everything matched! The wall must've grown there while we were away, he decided.

"Could you stop that annoying dancing", Ivysaur asked and broke the silence. Kirlia looked rather offensed, and that was the first time Adan had seen her like that.

"Don't take it out on poor Kirlia", Adan said to Ivysaur in a very strict tone, like a trainer would talk to a disobedient Pokémon.

"Shut up", Ivysaur said, turned his back at Kirlia and Adan and started to walk back towards the town. Suddently he stopped and stood there for a while, looking very suprised.

"It took that Radeem so little time to get Cimi? I'm impressed", he said to himself. And then he was suprised again.

"What if the Pokémon of the cave made this wall itself", Kirlia suggested, "To protect itself?"

"But if it's a Pokémon, it's most propably a Psychic type, if it can switch minds from body to body", Adan said, and then suddently realized. "What if the wall isn't real at all?"

He sent his vines towards the wall, and voíla! They went right trough.

"We were so stupid! Of course it's not real", Adan growled happily. He was just about to get up and walk trough the wall, when he heard Ivysaur's voice.

"Guys", Ivysaur shouted, "Cimi isn't with Radeem. It seems only Pichu came."

"She's that mad?" Adan asked Ivysaur, "What did you say to her?"

"Something's wrong", Kirlia said, "Cimi wouldn't do something like that. She doesn't like being alone, not at all."

They waited for two long and intimidating minutes for Radeem to arrive. She was exhausted, it was clear that she had runned faster than she usually did. Pichu on her back was also so exhausted it almost dropped off when Radeem stopped. They were both pale.

"They took Cimi! Someone came and took Cimi", Pichu yelled in panic.

"It seems Cimi has been kidnapped", Radeem said under her breath and tried to sound calm. There was a brief silence, but what it lacked it lenght, it made up in intensity.

"It must be those reporters", Ivysaur said. He looked rather agonized, and Adan knew he blamed himself.

"This man came", Pichu explained so fast it was hard even for other Pokémon to understand, "he came and said 'you know too much' and threw me aside and hit her in the head and I don't know what happened then but I ran and I ran because I knew only you can help her but now we can't find her! Was I stupid to run? Should I have stayed and fought?"

"You did the right thing, Pichu", Adan said and turned back to the cave, "Those reporters are our only clue to finding Cimi. We have to hurry to the Pokémon before they take it, too!"
The whole adventure had taken a turn for a more serious and dangerous one and Adan did not like it at all. They had to find Cimi! This was already becoming way too scary for a small town boy like him.

The gang started to enter the cave, when Kirlia suddently whispered:

"They're coming out! Everyone, hide, quikly!"

In a blink of an eye, even the massive body of Radeem was nowhere to be seen. 30 heartbeats later the wall that had covered the entrance to the cave disappeared. A whole crew of people came out. Some had cameras and reporter costumes, some had lab coats and some had uniforms that seemed like military clothing. With them, they had a couple of tough-looking Pokémon and two vans. The fact that they had drove their vans inside the cave made Adan realize these guys really didn't want to be seen. What they did in the cave must not have been anything legal, or at least anything very normal for a TV crew. Moreover, they had weird, round cage that seemed to be made of metal, electricity and spiky vines with them, carried on a special trolley. Inside the cage, there was the blue Pokémon Adan and Ivysaur had encountered before.

"We're too late", Pichu whispered to Adan in a deep state of desperation, "We'll never find Cimi and you'll never get back to the way you were!"

"Stop that nonsense", Adan disagreed with Pichu, "This is perfect! Now, all we have to do is to follow them to their base."

Pichu stared at Adan with an awful lot of respect in his large, black eyes.

Of course, it wasn't that easy. The only one of them who could really keep up with the vans their enemies had was Radeem. And she did not have the capacity of taking them all on her back no matter how strong she was. So, in the very short amount of time they had, it was decided (trough Kirlia's completely silent telepathy) that Ivysaur would ride Radeem as he wast the most suspicious of them all. Kirlia, Pichu and Adan could pretend to be wild Pokémon if they needed to make up a cover story, but Ivysaur had no excuses to hang around suspicious Pokémon catchers. After Radeem had confirmed the location of the enemy base, she would come get the other three. Pichu wanted to go with Radeem, because he wanted to be the first one to save Cimi. He strongly felt that the capturing of Cimi had been his fault. Radeem, however, did not want Pichu with her when she needed to run fast and concentrate on following the vans. Besides, in her words, "one annoying brat at a time is enough, thank you".

The first van started to slowly drive it's way along the seldom used dirt road that was partially covered by grass. The mysterious Pokémon was in it, so Radeem and Ivysaur took a bit of distance and started to follow it according to the plan. At this time, Pichu was so disapointed, he accidentally let a tiny charge out from his pouches. The sensitive radars of the military-clothed people noticed this.

"Hey, I think there are some Pokémon in the bushes", said a female voice.

"The more, the merrier", said a male voice and laughed. Adan, Pichu and Kirlia could hear the voice of footsteps coming closer. When someone touched the bush they were hiding in, they all paniced and started running.

"Don't want to be caught, huh?", said the male voice behind them, "too bad."

Three loud voices could be heard. Three arrows with sleeping potion on them flew, each with its own target and all three were all bullseyes. After that, there were three blue Pokéballs that each captured a Pokémon.

And so the plan to save Cimi and the mystery Pokémon had failed miserably.
 
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