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Boo.

Age 25
Male
That thar Kingdom. The United one.
Seen July 13th, 2018
Posted June 27th, 2018
702 posts
9.9 Years
It's amazing the level of detail you managed to put into this, in such a short time. A well-deserving member of the SWC's top three, for sure.

I feel Sirinian was a well developed character and the way his mindset changes from beginning to end is very smooth, as opposed to him suddenly changing. I love the way you characterised Celebi (had me giggling, especially the part where she complained about Dialga). I also liked how you dealt with the culture clash, making it seem somewhat more realistic than Lorelei and Sirinian totally understanding each other at once.

I didn't notice anything wrong with it and really enjoyed it - the premise of the story is interesting and you executed it very well. No complaints here!
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Courtly intrigue; may contain lightning bolts and necromancy.