Giratina ♀

what's your sign?

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Seen July 23rd, 2013
Posted July 22nd, 2013
1,439 posts
11.8 Years
Hrm.

Well, there’s not much to go by here except for the narrator repeating how much the world sucks after some post-apo catastrophe, so this review won’t be very long. It certainly got the message across, but I have to say that it was a little… detached. Some of these sentences could stand a few variations in punctuation marks so that they don’t sound so much like a list. Yes, I know it was supposed to be stream-of-consciousness stuff, but it’s just very difficult to follow. I’ll continue later, but for right now I’m being dragged off to do something else.

Bottom line: The period isn’t the only punctuation mark, but other than that it gets the message.

Also, I would think that it would go here, if they’re just a series of drabbles.