[Pokémon] The Gym

THE FINAL EPISODE IS NOW POSTED!!! So here's a little fan fiction I conjured up in order to practice writing screenplays. Oh no, it's a script! (Oooooh, it's so unorthodox and spooky!) I used a wonderful program named Celtx that does all the proper formatting for me, but since I can't copy and paste the formatting, it won't look as professional here as it does on the PDF. Anyway, just a few things to note, this is basically written as The Office or the superior Parks and Recreation, except instead of an office it takes place at Brock's gym. Also, when you see (Talking Head) or (T.H.) in the script, it means the character is doing one of those interviews to the camera you see so much in reality shows. Anyway, here we go!


Episode 01: The Reporter
Episode 02: Exercise Tapes
Episode 03: Spelunking
Episode 04: The Challenger
Episode 05: Ribbon Cutting
Episode 06: The Convention
Episode 07: The Fangirl
Episode 08: Sweepstakes Mania
Episode 09: Kanto Gym Leader Council
Episode 10: The Trial
Episode 11: The Inspection
Episode 12: Brown Nosing
Episode 13: Sycophant Search


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

BROCK is pacing around the gym, giving directions to LIAM. The gym itself is just a large, drab, brown room, littered with rocks around.

LIAM begins polishing all the rocks around the gym as BROCK watches him with his arms crossed. LIAM starts complaining as he wipes his brow.


As LIAM continues to clean, a knocking noise comes in from the outside.


LIAM runs off carrying polish and a mop to the office as BROCK goes over to the gym's entrance and opens the door. A girl, GLADYS, walks into the gym.


GLADYS looks around and stares at the camera for a bit.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM OFFICE

LIAM is scurrying to find a place to put the cleaning supplies as BROCK and GLADYS enter.


GLADYS rummages through her purse until she takes out a tape recorder.


GLADYS turns the recorder on.


EXT. OUTSIDE PEWTER CITY GYM

With the interview complete, both BROCK and LIAM go outside to wish GLADYS goodbye.


BROCK is visibly hurt.


GLADYS walks away from the gym. BROCK and LIAM watch her leave.


INT. PEWTER BAR


BROCK and LIAM are sitting at the bar. The BARTENDER walks up to them.


BROCK points to a blond girl, JOYCE, sitting at a table by herself.


The BARTENDER passes the drinks to BROCK and LIAM.


BROCK chugs down the white whine spritzer in one gulp as LIAM watches, horrified.


BROCK swaggers over to JOYCE as LIAM watches, cringing.


JOYCE breaks out into a fit of giggles as BROCK stands, dumbfounded.


JOYCE breaks out into even more giggling.


BROCK returns to the bar table, his spirits diminished, as LIAM sips on his Shirley Temple.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

The next day, BROCK is pacing around the gym in a panic, as LIAM agrees with his every word.


A knocking is heard from outside.


BROCK heads over to the door and opens it to find a TRAINER waiting.


With that, BROCK slams the door.


INT. PEWTER CITY GAZETTE OFFICES

LIAM walks into the Pewter City Gazette Offices. He's wearing an earpiece and a watch with a microphone in it that allows him to communicate with Brock.


LIAM approaches the front desk to talk to a SECRETARY.


LIAM enters the office as Brock complains to him through the earpiece.


LIAM walks around and finally finds a door marked "GLADYS'S OFFICE", but is dismayed to find GLADYS is in the office after taking a quick peek. He speaks into the watch.


LIAM sneaks around the office, until he finds a door marked "EDITOR IN CHIEF". LIAM knocks on the door and the EDITOR IN CHIEF opens it.


As the EDITOR IN CHIEF heads to his desk to call GLADYS, LIAM sneaks around and hides around the corner of the outside of her office. He watches as GLADYS storms out of the office, fuming.


With GLADYS gone for the moment, LIAM hurries into her office. He looks around her desk, and sees on her computer she's working on an article about a robbery at the Pewter City Pokémart due that day. LIAM speaks into the watch.


LIAM fumbles around the desk for a bit until he finally finds the tape recorder stuffed away in a drawer.


LIAM takes a blank tape out of his pocket, removes the tape from the recorder, and puts the blank tape in, putting the tape with the interview in his pocket. Before he goes, he takes a pencil and writes "LIAM WAZ HERE" on the underside of the desk.


He runs out of the office, closes the door, and makes his exit.


With that, LIAM leaves the Pewter City Gazette Offices.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

LIAM skips into the gym.


LIAM places the tape in the middle of the arena.


BROCK throws a Pokéball and releases GEODUDE, a floating rock with arms coming out of its sides.


GEODUDE floats over to one of the many rocks that litter the floor of the arena, picks it up, floats over to the tape, and smashes it with the rock. The tape flies all over into pieces, and BROCK and LIAM cheer.


INT. PEWTER CITY GAZETTE OFFICES

GLADYS returns to her office, still fuming.


GLADYS sits at her desk, opens a new page on her word processor, and takes out the tape recorder. She presses play, but nothing plays back to her.


GLADYS takes more tapes out from her desk, puts them in the recorder, and plays them, but none of them are the recording she wants.

I would advise against centreing the text as can actually be hard to read it when it's formatted like so on forums (there's more on that sort of issue here). I believe it might be typical for scripts but it's not as easy to read, and sometimes it looks weird when the stage directions are set to the side as well - kinda conflicting.

I am not familiar with the term 'talking head's - maybe 'to screen' fits better but TH also works and if it's an official term used then kindly ignore this sentence. ;p

Overall I was rather amused by this - there were some particularly good jokes here, and they were well carried too. Brock did come off a bit too dumb for my liking and from what I know of him to make me feel convinced, but I suppose you went for a bit of exaggeration here with his character? However the character you did portray him as was consistent. Another complaint is that the other minor characters - such as the EDITOR IN CHIEF (caps required) appeared to be a bit too stupid in accepting a child's claim that on of his workers was corrupt just like that - it felt a somewhat weak way to write Gladys out of the room so to speak, and I feel a different 'distraction' would have worked better here - the joke had also, as a result of him just accepting his word there, came off as slightly weak. I had the same feeling with Liam writing his name on the tape - I wasn't sure why he did that nor could I come up with a realistic answer, so it seemed somewhat pointless and out of place for him to do such a thing there.

as I believe there's a lot of effort that goes into being a gym leader beyond battling that the public should be aware of. Like... um... well, personally, for me, I sink a ton of time into coming up with rock puns.

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Stuff like this for instance certainly amused - from what I know of Brock he is canonically a smarter person than that as already said, but if you recognise that and go with this route for the purpose of comedy than that's all right too I suppose. =p

Hey there babe.

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A comma should follow or precede names/nicknames/etc, so a comma should go before 'babe' here as he's calling her by that name.

Yes sir! I'll be done with that in hardly any light years!

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I recognised the NPC who said that in the games straight away. XD

Kid's are innocent, so they'd never lie

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As a beside - should be "kids", not "kid's" (the latter implies something belonging to the kid).

The work of a gym leader never ends. I didn't battle any trainers who were trying to get my badge today, but I did prevent a threatening article from being released, and I feel one of those is more important than the other. And I feel it's the preventing an article from being released one. At the end of the day, when people look back on my legacy, sure, I may not have battled that often, but as long as there isn't a published article out there telling people I didn't battle that often, I'll be fine. And no one can ever take that away from me. Unless that article is ever published.

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The irony is beautiful given it's in a documentary. XD (Well a mockumentary, but still!)

Overall it's certainly an amusing idea here and a decently made screenplay - as said just consider de-centreing it and adjust the minor errors as well, as thinking out some scenarios so they don't come off as a touch too unconvincing - namely the 'distract her somehow' scene.

Hm... I really establish that most of the denizens of Pewter City are total idiots as I go on in, and if I was forced to order the characters in this by intelligence, it would go: Antagonistic Characters (such as Gladys) are smarter than Brock and Liam, and Brock and Liam are smarter than mostly everyone else. If you aren't going to find Brock outsmarting idiots with absurd schemes funny, you may not enjoy some of this (though luckily every episode doesn't revolve around Brock's schemes).

As for the hi-jinks at the Pewter City Gazette, your main issue seemed to be why everything had to happen the way it did, but don't worry about that. I planned this out for 13 episodes, and as it goes on, Brock will eventually have to face the consequences of his incompetence, of which this episode will play a big part in.

Finally, on the formatting, I've already written the first 6 chapters formatted that way, and no one else has brought up an issue with it, so I'd rather not change ships midstream. To be honest, I think it looks more professional anyway, as opposed to "Character Name: Dialogue".

INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA


BROCK is standing in the gym, watching his ONIX and GEODUDE. LIAM watches, sitting on a rock.


ONIX tries to race around the gym, but instead only manages to move about a few feet, causing an earthquake, shaking Brock around, and throwing LIAM off the rock he was sitting on.


LIAM falls onto the floor.


ONIX becomes all bright and shiny, and then tries running again. Although Onix is able to crawl around a tiny bit faster this time, he cause even more chaos doing it, as cracks start appearing in the gym floor and LIAM is forced into rolling on the ground.


BROCK takes out a Pokéball and returns ONIX.


GEODUDE tries to get up in the air, but instead crashes down into the ground, getting stuck, struggling to push itself out.


LIAM gets up off the ground and runs over to GEODUDE. After struggling for a bit, LIAM pulls GEODUDE out, but the force of GEODUDE flying up knocks LIAM backwards.


BROCK takes out a Pokéball and forces GEODUDE back in.


LIAM shakes his head as BROCK grins.


LIAM looks sheepishly into the camera.


LIAM holds a list up to the camera. At the top of the list is written "Pokémon Training Ideas" underlined. The rest is blank. LIAM shakes his head.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM OFFICE

BROCK sits down at his desk and starts banging his head on it.


BROCK picks up the remote control for the TV and turns it on.


BROCK flips around channels until an infomerical catches his eye. CHUCK is on the TV.


LIAM runs into the office.


BROCK boots the computer at his desk up and navigates to the chuckvideo.biz webpage. As he does so, LIAM talks to him.


BROCK furiously types in all of the needed information into the website and clicks on the ORDER button. With that done, he leans back in his chair.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

The next day, BROCK is in the gym when LIAM comes in holding a package.


LIAM hands BROCK the package and runs into the office to bring the TV out. As LIAM does that, BROCK rips open the package to find three tapes titled "Let's Chuck Tonight, Baby!" On the cover of the tapes are pictures of a shirtless Chuck with one of his fingers in his mouth.


LIAM runs back out with the TV, sets it up, and sees the cover art.



BROCK takes the tape out and places it into the VCR of the TV. CHUCK appears on the screen.


As CHUCK counts off on the TV, BROCK does push ups along with the count, although he has some difficulty. After ten push ups, the count stops.


BROCK does ten sit ups as CHUCK counts them off on the TV.


BROCK takes the TV remote and pauses the video.


BROCK runs over to one of the rocks littering the floor of the gym, bends over, and attempts to pick it up. He fails.


BROCK bends his knees more as he struggles to try and lift the rock, but still has no luck.


BROCK runs back over to the TV and starts the video again.


BROCK does ten jumping jacks as CHUCK counts them off.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM OFFICE

BROCK is sitting in his office when LIAM walks in.


BROCK hands the stack of fliers to LIAM.


LIAM runs out.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

BROCK and LIAM stand, overseeing the gym. Various mats are placed around the gym.


An elderly woman, HARRIET, walks into the gym.


HARRIET rummages through her handbag until she finds the required amount of money.


LIAM takes the money and brings it to the office. Next, a middle aged man, MERV, walks into the gym.


As MERV walks over to the mats, he trips and falls on a rock.


Finally, JOYCE walks into the gym.


BROCK walks over to JOYCE with a big, stupid grin on his face.


BROCK heads to the front of the mats, only three of which are occupied by HARRIET, MERV, and LIAM. JOYCE watches while standing in the back.


JOYCE giggles in the back at the question. BROCK waits until she's finished to answer him.


JOYCE laughs even harder at this question than she did at the previous one. BROCK once again waits for her to finish.


LIAM, HARRIET, and MERV all get into push up position.


LIAM, HARRIET, and MERV all start doing push ups, but LIAM is the only one able to do them. HARRIET and MERV both collapse on the floor after trying to lift themselves up once. JOYCE giggles at this.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM OFFICE

BROCK and LIAM enter the office. BROCK sits down.


At that moment, MERV walks into the office.


MERV exits the office.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

MERV and HARRIET are both on their mats when BROCK and LIAM walk back out.


MERV and HARRIET stand up.


As MERV and HARRIET begin their slow walk around the gym perimeter, with LIAM deciding to join them, BROCK approaches JOYCE.


LIAM, MERV, and HARRIET all finish their walk.


LIAM, MERV, and HARRIET all begin walking again, this time at a quicker pace, and all of them seem very impressed.


BROCK turns to JOYCE.


JOYCE leaves the gym, and LIAM, MERV, and HARRIET finish their lap around the gym.


MERV and HARRIET leave the gym.


INT. CIANWOOD CITY GYM

Wow, keep these coming! The Office is my favorite TV show, and this fic is done in a style that mirrors it while still having a sense of originality! I especially like the part in episode 2 when Liam says, "I reall like he way I wrote that 'T,' though!" I would try to utilize more TH based humor like that, but that's just a minor suggestion. Great work!

INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

It's early in the morning, and BROCK and LIAM are standing in the gym. In front of LIAM are two backpacks and a variety of other items. As BROCK names a pair of items, LIAM places them into the backpacks.


EXT. ROUTE 3

BROCK and LIAM have been walking along Route 3 for close to half an hour.


BROCK takes a bottle of water out of his backpack and starts to drink from it. LIAM takes his backpack off, lifts it up above his head, and starts doing squats.


EXT. Mt. MOON ENTRANCE

BROCK and LIAM finally arrive at the entrance to Mt. Moon.


BROCK and LIAM are about to enter the cave when they walk by two other people on the way in, ROARK and his assistant, HEATHER.


ROARK and HEATHER walk away.


BROCK and LIAM enter the cave.

INT. MT. MOON

BROCK and LIAM put on their hardhats and take out their pickaxes.


BROCK moves over to the cave wall and starts chipping away at it.


LIAM joins BROCK in chipping away at the cave wall.


LIAM decides to sing anyway.


BROCK decides to join in.


BROCK and LIAM are walking down the cave path.


As the two walk, LIAM happens to kick a stone.


LIAM runs to the stone and picks it up.


BROCK takes the stone from LIAM and examines it.


BROCK throws the moon stone away.


BROCK and LIAM now reach a crossroads in the tunnel.


BROCK opens up his backpack to take out a cheese and cracker platter, a bottle of wine, and a wine glass. BROCK and LIAM begin snacking on the cheese and crackers.


As BROCK pours himself a glass of wine, LIAM complains.


LIAM takes the wine glass and throws it at the ground, smashing it into pieces.


LIAM picks up his backpack and stands up.


LIAM goes down one of the tunnel paths. BROCK yells at him.


INT. MT MOON CAVERN

BROCK finds himself walking into a great big cavernous chamber of Mt. Moon. Some holes in the ceiling of the room provide natural light.


BROCK explores the chamber, when in the middle of the chamber he finds a large, shiny stone.


The redheaded gym leader, MISTY, appears in the cavern and approaches BROCK.


LIAM appears in the cavern.


LIAM picks up the stone, and he and BROCK leave the cavern.


MISTY walks over to the corner of the cavern.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

LIAM is in the center of the gym, doing squats with the large, shiny stone, when BROCK comes out from his office.


LIAM puts the stone down.


LIAM runs out of the gym to go get the mail as BROCK watches on. LIAM returns, carrying some envelopes in his hand.


LIAM begins to squat with each envelope as BROCK watches him, baffled.


INT. OREBURGH CITY GYM

ROARK is busy cleaning up the gym when HEATHER walks in, carrying a box of newspapers.


HEATHER places the box on the floor and lifts a paper up to show ROARK the headline: "LOCAL GYM LEADER AND PHILANTHROPIST MAKES MUSEUM DONATION".

Hokay, so I decided to sit down and read through this entire shebang because I saw it get nominated for lulzy awards on SPPf's awards shindig. Yay to getting a head start on figuring out who to vote for, amirite?

Let me start off by saying that the format's actually fine by me. See, the unwritten rule about formatting more applies to prose. This is because prose usually deals with larger chunks of uninterrupted text and a lack of visual signals (e.g., capslocked character names to draw a reader's eye directly to it). So, in other words, the reason why centering prose is a faux pas is because the reader has to stare at huge, unbroken chunks of text in weird alignment, whereas script formatting tends to feed a reader text in smaller pieces. I'm not even sure if I'm making sense here, but the short of it is you can do it this way without much of a problem. It helps that scripts are normally formatted like this (albeit with the lines themselves left-aligned in some plays) anyway, so a person reading a script just knows that it needs to be read differently compared to a book.

Speaking of script formatting, thank you for understanding that script =/= chat fic. :| Seriously, this is basically how a script is meant to be done. You don't go overboard with the outside details, but you're not really lazy about it. To be a bit more specific, I could basically picture exactly what's going on. You're careful to only write information in the stage directions that are absolutely necessary. For example, you might have Brock chugging a white wine spritzer because it's necessary for the actor to know what he should be doing at that point, but you don't bother to describe Joyce (beyond the fact that she's blonde – a detail that would be useful to the casting director) because it's not important for the actress to know what she looks like.

Moreover, you realize that you need a balance of stage directions (the ones that are necessary for the actors to use, anyway) and dialogue. It's the latter that most newbie authors tend to forget, so they end up with fics that can't be reproduced on stage or for a camera because there's just nothing to act out.

Tl;dr, thank you for actually writing a decent script fic.

Beyond that, let me just talk about the characters for a moment. I have to admit, I don't normally like OOC fic, but this is one of the rare cases where it's done correctly. You do it for the lulz, and you're consistent with the entire thought that (almost) everyone is an idiot. I have to admit, I loved watching Brock and Liam's shenanigans, and although I'm not a big fan of The Office, I can definitely see some influence in their dialogue, particularly in their talking-head moments. The third chapter was especially awesome for this thanks to the interactions between Brock and Roark. (I love the idea of Roark being both a jackass who believes he's a philanthropist and oblivious to how offensive he actually is at the same time. That entire line where he says he's sure a McDonald's franchise will open up to solve hunger? Pure gold there.)

My only qualm when it comes to characterization is that I have to agree with bobandbill on a level. It feels like almost everyone is an idiot in this world, so there's so far very little consequences to their stupidity. That's why the first chapter rubbed me the wrong way a little – because I was reading the editor-in-chief's scene as just him humoring Liam (and maybe setting up for a bit of pwning) until I realized that he actually was as stupid as Brock and Liam were. Of course, this might just be another bit of Office flavor thrown in, and you might have something planned further down the line that answers this. Or maybe even the entire point of it is that Brock just never experiences consequences for his kind of behavior. It's still a bit too early to say, but I'm interested in seeing how you handle this kind of thing in future chapters.

In short, I have to say this was all kinds of awesome, and it definitely deserves those nominations. It's clear that you're very careful in building your characters, and the characters are definitely what drives this entire thing (especially thanks to its episodic nature). The humor is actually funny, and the antics aren't actually cringe-inducing. In short, it's really refreshing to see both a script fic done well and a comedy that makes me laugh, and this succeeds in both of areas.

I'll be keeping an eye on this one to see where you take it from here.

Hey, Godot! :D Wanted to read this fic and now I finally have the chance to do it! Okay, this review is broken into three parts as I'm reviewing each chapter.

Chapter One

BROCK
So I'm going to need you to polish up all the rocks so they look nice and rocky. And can you mop the floors too? They haven't been mopped since my parents visited... two years ago.​

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Ew….D:

Like... um... well, personally, for me, I sink a ton of time into coming up with rock puns. Yeah, so there's that and the battling too. Some days I just get exhausted from all the work.​

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The next two installments certainly amused me again. =) I rather liked the second one with the fitness videos - that was rather well structured I thought, and I felt it was funnier than the third one - but that's not to say the 3rd one wasn't funny either. =p Certainly the episodic format of the episodes fit pretty well and well-paced as well in my opinion.

Brock and Liam continue to amuse as well, and I am looking forward to seeing your spin on other gym leaders as well - it's neat to see them mentioned in this fic gradually, and as such I must echo Jax's sentiments on Roark as he's the most amusing minor character thus far for me, and he had some hilarious lines at the end there as well. =) Certainly Office-esque. The other minor characters in the 2nd and 3rd installments were better portrayed than the others in the first one I thought too - more interesting and more personality to them beyond the typical stupid person mould.

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA lots of reviews and this forum doesn't have multiquote I think!!! D:

First off, I'm thinking of changing the title to "The Gym: A Fanfic NOT Written By Shadow_Angel". :P

Jax, I'd like to thank you for complimenting the script. I'm pretty sure this is the first scriptfic in Pokemon fanfiction history that isn't a talk show or just some random crap thrown together by the other.

On the OOC-ness, I really don't care. In the games, the gym leaders have hardly any personality as it is (Koga's a ninja, Lt. Surge is AMERICAN!!!), so really I just threw everything out about them and started from scratch.

On all the idiots in this fic, I feel that from Episode 2 on they at least start being idiots with personality. In Episode 2 we got Merv and Harriet, and Episode 4 features even more new townspeople of Pewter that are just as ridiculous as they are. I also really like to make these guys recurring characters too, even if they do just pop up in maybe one episode afterward.

So thanks for the review, Jax. :3

Bay, I know you've read my older stuff, so I'm glad to see you think this is the best, because I also believe this is the best I've ever written. Also, I don't think Brock is very perverted in episode 4, so you can look forward to that. :P Thanks for the review as well. :3

Bob and or Bill, I'll agree with you that the third was the least funny of the bunch. That's probably because on my "Master Document" with all the plot points listed, all I had written for Episode 3 was "Brock and Liam go to Mt. Moon in order to find some Moon Stones and fossils, but instead run into trouble when they bump into Misty." Of course, as I started writing, I figured that wasn't much of a plot, so the whole Brock-Liam conflict was added in. :P But I really do like Episode 2, because of how outlandish the plot is.

I already mentioned the minor characters in my comments on Jax's reviews, so I won't bring them up again here. ;O But you'll probably be happy to know that Roark comes back and plays a pivotal part in Episodes 6 and 7. :O And thanks for the review as well. :3

Episode 4 will probably be posted today. Look forward to it! ^_^

INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

BROCK and LIAM are talking in the arena.

A knocking noise is heard coming from the gym door.

BROCK goes over to the door and opens it. A teenage trainer, HAL, is waiting at the door.


BROCK points at LIAM.

BROCK slams the door shut on HAL.


More knocking is heard on the door.


BROCK and LIAM wait, but the knocking does not stop.


BROCK goes to open the door, and when he does, HAL barges right into the gym.


BROCK and LIAM march into the office.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM OFFICE

BROCK and LIAM enter the office. BROCK plops right down into his chair, leaving LIAM standing.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

BROCK and LIAM walk back into the arena.


BROCK and HAL head over to opposite sides of the arena.


BROCK throws a Pokéball and releases GEODUDE, the floating Rock type.


HAL throws a Pokéball and releases BULBASAUR, a strange Grass and Poison type creature with a bulb growing on its back.


The bulb on the back of BULBASAUR opens up, releasing a vine. The vine flies straight at GEODUDE and starts smacking it around. GEODUDE cries out in pain...


... and collapses to the ground, fainted.


BROCK returns GEODUDE to its Pokéball.


BROCK throws a Pokéball that releases ONIX, a Rock type Pokémon that looks much like a towering snake made out of stones.


Once again BULBASAUR released its vine, and it whipped the mighty Onix around.


After roaring, Onix gets up and attempts to chase Bulbasaur. As soon as it gets close, however, Bulbasaur scurries out of the way. Onix, however, had already made a lunge at it, and ends up collapsing on the gym floor.

Once again, BULBASAUR whips ONIX around with its vine.


ONIX closes its eyes, defeated.


BROCK returns ONIX to its Pokéball as HAL returns BULBASAUR to its Pokéball.


LIAM runs off.

LIAM comes back with a Boulder Badge and gives it to BROCK.


BROCK hands HAL the badge and pushes him away.


HAL stomps out of the gym.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM OFFICE

The next morning, BROCK is at his desk, sleeping, when LIAM walks in.


BROCK jumps up awake.


LIAM picks up the TV remote and turns it on. An image of a news anchor, DIRK, appears on the screen.

The TV screen cuts to footage filmed outside the Pewter City Gym.


The footage cuts to HAL exiting the gym. The footage zooms up on HAL, where it is seen that he is clearly holding a Boulder Badge.


BROCK grabs the remote from LIAM and shuts the TV off.


BROCK bangs his head on his desk as LIAM takes back the remote and starts doing squats with it.


LIAM answers BROCK as he continues to do squats.


LIAM finishes his squats and places the remote down.


EXT. PEWTER CITY GYM

LIAM exits the gym and finds a large line waiting for him. Among the people waiting in line are ARTIE, an obese kid, DALLAS, a twenty-something wearing a cowboy hat and a bolo tie, and MERV, in his trademark sunglasses and Hawaiian shirt.

LIAM walks over to DALLAS in the front of the line.

INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

LIAM walks back into the gym. BROCK is waiting for him.


EXT. PEWTER CITY GYM

LIAM exits the gym once again to find the crowd even more restless than before.

LIAM walks over to MERV.

LIAM grabs the hamburger from MERV and brings it over to ARTIE, shoving it in his face.

ARTIE downs the hamburger in one gulp.


LIAM sighs as the line of trainers waiting for a battle rushes into the gym. LIAM follows them in afterward.

INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

The trainers start milling around the gym. BROCK walks around, and notices MERV among the trainers waiting for a battle.

BROCK pushes MERV away.


DALLAS pushes himself through the crowd to get to BROCK.


BROCK moves to the front of the gym and calls out for everyone.


Suddenly, BROCK drops to the floor. A bottle of some sort falls out from under his sleeve.


LIAM runs over and picks up the bottle.


All the trainers except for DALLAS grumpily leave the gym.

BROCK opens his eyes and and gets up from the floor.

DALLAS storms out of the gym.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM OFFICE

The next day, BROCK is once again sleeping at his desk when LIAM rushes in.


BROCK jumps up from his desk!


LIAM grabs the remote and turns the TV on. As LIAM starts to do squats with the remote, BROCK watches as DIRK appears on the screen, this time with a picture of BROCK in the top right corner.

LIAM (TALKING HEAD)
Brock's stories about girls always end disastrously. One time he ended up hitting on a grandma. Another time he ended up hitting on HIS grandma. Don't even ask me how that happened.
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OH, WOW. Now I want to know how that happened. XD;

BROCK
Yeah. So I whistle at her and she turns around. Turns out it was a guy with a really long haircut.

LIAM (T.H.)
I told you so.​

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*sings Aerosmith's Dude Looks Like a Lady*

BROCK
I'm his brother. Well, I was his brother, but then he had to go and die. As his last remaining relative, I got stuck with all his stuff, including his bastard lovechild!​

BROCK points at LIAM.

BROCK
Look at that hideous child! I don't want to raise him! I don't have time! I'm a successful millionaire playboy! Now get out of my life, Hal!​

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Poor Liam. XD;

HAL
Listen here, Brock! I've heard stories about you before! My cousin is a reporter for the Pewter City Gazette and she told me about how you're always trying to trick challengers into thinking the gym is closed! That **** isn't going to work on me! I demand a match now!​

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Oh, dear. Looks like Gladys will come hunting Brock again soon. D:

HAL throws a Pokéball and releases BULBASAUR, a strange Grass and Poison type creature with a bulb growing on its back.

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Hm, to me personally I feel you don't need to describe how Bulbasaur looks like because the readers already know how that Pokemon looks like. It would be better if you give a quick description of it in its battle stance. Same goes with Onix as you did the same describing that Pokemon a bit latter. If it's a fifth gen Pokemon, maybe you can get off with that, although like Jax said physical descriptions aren't used too often in scripts. Sorry for being a bit rambly here. D:

BROCK
Did you know that Onixes like to smell other Onixes' butts? If Onix didn't scare you, I'm sure my impressive knowledge of Pokémon did!

HAL
That was even worse than your last fact!

BROCK
Listen buddy, if I had another Onix here I could prove it to you!

HAL​

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So Onixes are dogs? O.o; *coughDoctorDolittlereferencecough*

LIAM
It's pretty scary, sir. I'd say it's about twenty people long.

BROCK
Twenty people long... ugh!​

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Twenty people? That's not long, Brock. Try waiting in line where a hundred people were waiting outside in the heat to take a city job application test (this actually happened to me last August, oi). X_x

Really enjoyed this chapter a lot. Haha at Brock trying to think up ways to get himself out of battle. And yay fro the return of Merv! Poor him not able to make it to the bathroom in time and also the possibility of him getting a divorce from his wife! D:

I quite like Hal and Dallas there, but only because it's refreshing to see two people not falling for Brock's schemes, haha. Quite extreme for Dallas to want to fight Pokemon on his own. I assumed he had wrestled Ursaring a lot, lately? XD;

Again, funny work here. Not much going on plot wise, but it's still funny nonetheless. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Neko Godot said:

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA lots of reviews and this forum doesn't have multiquote I think!!! D:

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Actually, there is. It's just hard to see in some skins. XD; Basically, you know where it is on SPPf? Generally in the same place on PC. PC's also a vBulletin board, so basics like quote, multi-quote, and standard formatting (font face, color, size, italics, bold, alignment, whatever) will still be around because you can't really turn those kinds of things off even if it would be really nice if we could, just to get people to stop using purple font for the sake of those of us using Johto Elite. ಠ_ಠ

First off, I'm thinking of changing the title to "The Gym: A Fanfic NOT Written By Shadow_Angel". :P

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DO IT.

You're very welcome, by the way.

When it comes to OOC-ness, that's debatable. Some people will say that there is characterization; you just have to look for it. (For example, Surge is somewhat paranoid. I mean, not only did he plant a bush to block trainers from getting anywhere near his gym, he also rigged the doors to get to him with a lock that can only be unlocked if trainers choose the exact two trash cans the switches are hidden in. Screw you too, Surge.) Buuuuuut this is an age-old argument full of YMMV, so... yeah.

On all the idiots in this fic, I feel that from Episode 2 on they at least start being idiots with personality.

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This is very true, and that's one of the reasons why I really started enjoying myself through this. Incidentally, I thoroughly approve of the idea of making either of them (or both!) recurring characters. Harriet legitimately made me lol. Just... her talking-head segment. And I kinda feel like Brock needs to exploit the elderly more show his soft side by helping those older than him. Yes.


ANYWAY, just so I can get in today's reviewing quota because I enjoyed the first few chapters thoroughly, I thought it'd be a good idea to sit down and check out the fourth episode. So here we go!


The "I'm his brother and he died" bit may be the most brilliant cover-up ever created. Just want to start off on that note. (Also, that I also had to laugh at Brock's grandma escapades. This somehow explains so much about him.) Part of me would also like to someday see Brock as a gay barkeep.

You know, I was actually wondering how a battle would be handled. I mean, even though the world seems to be populated with idiots (or somehow, Brock is able to skirt by without actually having to battle), there's a few intelligent characters here and there (most of whom seem to be related to Gladys somehow, hilariously enough). So, of course, I figured it was bound to happen either way. I just didn't know how it'd be rendered, given this script style and Brock's (lack of) battling prowess. Honestly, though, I wasn't disappointed. The fact that Hal wiped the floor with Brock fit in so nicely, and even with details being as sparse as you can get them to allow for actor interpretation, I could visualize Bulbasaur Vine Whipping the crap out of Brock's Pokémon perfectly. And, of course, Brock's attempts to get Hal to surrender (with those lulzy tidbits of "Pokémon knowledge") were exactly what I would have expected from your version of his character.

I also thoroughly enjoyed the lampshading Brock did in the scene right after where he says that most people in the world are idiots. Lampshading, from what I've seen of people trying too hard to cram in references to TVTropes in humor fic, is a difficult thing to pull off in fanfiction, so it was awesome to see it done right.

Mmm, Marv. All of the new characters, really. I'm thoroughly enjoying how you're very careful with each character. You don't really give them too much depth (because this is an episodic comedy, so this isn't actually a bad thing), but each of them have their own quirks to make them entertaining. Dallas's analogies, Artie's over-the-top intellectual side, all of them make watching them interact a treat, just to see how they all end up playing up each other's actual stupidity, if that makes sense.

(...Although, really? Brock? Opening his eyes? Wat.)

Also, Dallas is a badass. I sort of want to see fic of someone fighting Pokémon with just his fists. Or just more Dallas. He's just a stroke of sheer awesome there.

And that last line was just the perfect way of wrapping this up.

In all, I have to say this chapter had everything that drew me into this series in the first place. It was actually funny with a plot that made me want to see what kind of mess Brock got into next and new characters who brought something new and hilarious to the table. I'm really looking forward to seeing what happens next, considering you do maintain threads of continuity and considering the fact that Brock just faked his own death. That can only mean Pewter City's going to start trying to figure out what to do with the gym -- or that someone's going to try seeing what's up. Either way, I sense shenanigans on the horizon, so I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.

Okay, there is multiquote, but I don't feel like using the quote function anyway! XP

Bay, to Brock, a line of twenty people waiting for a gym battle is his own personal hell. :P And Merv is great. He's one of my favorite recurring characters, along with Dallas.

Jax, I despise TV Tropes. I think it's the most pointless website ever and it really has no reason to exist in the first place. I really just don't get the point of it. @_@

Writing the battle was... interesting. I knew it was something I would have to do eventually, and I think I handled it well by Brock focusing more on getting Hal to surrender than on the actual battle. :P And you will get to see Dallas fight, soon-ish. And it will be great. :)

And as for Brock's "death", that is resolved at the beginning of the next chapter, which is coming up right after this! :D

INT. PEWTER CITY GYM OFFICE

BROCK has just seen his obituary on the TV. LIAM finishes his squats with the remote and puts it down.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

The next day, LIAM is standing around the gym, wearing dress clothes, when BROCK walks out of his office, wearing a tuxedo.


INT. PEWTER CITY MUSEUM LOBBY

BROCK and LIAM enter the museum. Various people in fancy dress and milling around, talking to each other.


The museum curator, an older bespectacled gentleman named MAGNUS, spots BROCK and seems shocked for a moment, but then walks over to greet him.


MAGNUS walks off to find his daughter.


MAGNUS returns with his curly, blond-haired daughter, MADELINE.

MADELINE grabs LIAM by the hand, and they run off.

BROCK walks around the lobby, when he bumps into ARTIE.

MAGNUS walks up to a podium with a microphone and makes an announcement.

ARTIE runs off remarkably fast for someone of his size into the dining room.


INT. PEWTER CITY MUSEUM DINING ROOM

BROCK walks into the dining room and finds his seat. LIAM enters and finds his seat next to him.


GLADYS takes her seat next to BROCK.


A WAITER comes to the table and serves everyone salad. LIAM picks the salad up and begins doing squats with it.

LIAM puts the salad back on the table and starts eating it.


The WAITER returns to clean up all the salad bowls and then serves the main course. LIAM begins doing squats with the filet mignon as BROCK and GLADYS watch.

LIAM finishes the squats and joins in the meal with both BROCK and GLADYS.


MAGNUS approaches the table.
BROCK stands up from the table, picking up his plate.


LIAM walks away as MAGNUS guides BROCK and GLADYS into the lounge.

INT. PEWTER CITY MUSEUM LOUNGE

MAGNUS leads BROCK and GLADYS into a room with a few comfortable looking couches and chairs and a wine cooler. A man dressed in a lab coat, WINSTON, is sitting on a chair. BROCK fumbles around with his food for a bit until he just places it on a couch.


BROCK and GLADYS both go to shake hands with WINSTON.


As WINSTON talks, MAGNUS shuffles around through the wine cooler.

MAGNUS returns with a bottle of wine and some wineglasses.


MAGNUS pours a glass for GLADYS and WINSTON, but before he pours another one, BROCK interrupts him.


MAGNUS is about to leave, but GLADYS stops him.

MAGNUS notices that her wineglass is already empty.


MAGNUS hands the bottle to GLADYS, who immediately pours herself another glass. MAGNUS then leaves to find beer for BROCK.

GLADYS takes a big sip from her wineglass.


GLADYS finishes all of the wine in her glass, puts the glass down, and starts drinking right from the bottle. MAGNUS returns with a beer for BROCK.


BROCK takes the beer from MAGNUS.

BROCK, GLADYS, MAGNUS, and WINSTON all leave the lounge, GLADYS still carrying the wine bottle.

INT. PEWTER CITY MUSEUM EXHIBIT AREA

BROCK, MAGNUS, and WINSTON are standing in front of a fenced in area with a ribbon wrapped around it. Inside the fence are various fossil Pokémon, including KABUTO, a brown, dome shaped one. BROCK looks around and spots the stone he donated. A crowd has gathered around to watch the ribbon cutting, including GLADYS with the wine bottle, and MADELINE and LIAM together.


WINSTON is overwhelmed by all the clapping at his name and is unable to finish his sentence.


MAGNUS hands BROCK a gigantic pair of scissors.

BROCK points to the rock, though most people are bewildered, and no one applauds him except for an obviously drunk GLADYS.


GLADYS drops the now empty wine bottle, drawing attention to herself and gathering a few stares.


BROCK cuts the ribbon and the crowd begins to applaud.


The crowd turns around to face MADELINE and LIAM.


LIAM walks up to the petting zoo and hops the fence. He approaches the KABUTO.


LIAM goes to pet the KABUTO, but instead the KABUTO headbutts him.


LIAM goes flying into the fence, and then falls down to the ground.


Sure enough, KABUTO is moving towards LIAM.


KABUTO headbutts LIAM again, and this time LIAM crashes through the fence.


The crowd begins to mill around the museum, and no one actually does call and ambulance for LIAM. GLADYS approaches BROCK, who is staring at his rock, forlorn.

GLADYS breaks out into a fit of giggles.

GLADYS tries flashing the camera, but it turns away.


GLADYS places her arm around BROCK.


BROCK turns around to walk to the coatroom, but sees LIAM, still on the ground.


BROCK turns back to GLADYS.


GLADYS slumps down onto the floor and begins to take a nap. BROCK walks over to LIAM.


BROCK picks LIAM up and they leave the museum.

INT. PEWTER CITY HOSPITAL ROOM

The next day, LIAM wakes up from a long sleep to find BROCK waiting at a chair.


LIAM hops out of bed and runs out. BROCK follows.

Still pretty darn amusing, imo. =) I liked the two plots here and how they carried off others/each other as well, with the museum one playing off Brock thinking it was all about his findings, and also continuing the 'Brock is dead' which was amusing to see (ignoring that I half-expected it to anyway). The plot does appear to be moving nicely and I look forward to seeing the further developments. The battle was also amusing (if understandably one-sided, heh), and the excuses and other side characters just as amusing. Dallas is one in particular - I liked the comments in regards to indoor plumbing given he was Orre (making it a potentially understandable comment), and him wanting to fight the Pokemon with his fists was also a rather amusing concept (and one I would have liked to have seen truth be told. XD).

Gladys getting too drunk and then wanting to hit it off with Brock was an unexpected turn, I'll admit, although she did not strike me to be the character to end up doing such a thing - but I guess she was very much under the influence there. XD

LIAM (TALKING HEAD)
Brock's stories about girls always end disastrously. One time he ended up hitting on a grandma. Another time he ended up hitting on HIS grandma. Don't even ask me how that happened.

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Great way to open the episode, certainly. XD

BROCK
Hello my name is a Vlad, nice to meet, thank you!

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As novice a mistake as changing characters mid-way as Liam pointed out, it was an amusing attempt from Brock here. XD

I bet your so impressed with my Pokémon knowledge that you're just going to allow me the victory now!

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you're/you are over your.

DALLAS
Howdy then! The name's Dallas, and I'm more pleased than a Spheal on a snow day to meet you!
BROCK (T.H.)
What the hell is this guy talking about? Why would a Spheal care about a snow day? Spheals don't go to school!

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This was also a neat mis-assumption from Brock, I thought. XD

BROCK
Hi, Magnus. It turns out I'm alive! I guess you just can't trust the news media.

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Great line here. XD

GLADYS
Hmph... I can't believe the curator sat me next to you for dinner. But it sounds like I a found a goldmine of a story already!

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Missing that 'I' there in-between like and a.

And so concludes my uneventful and short review. =p

LIAM
I didn't know! I just heard she was attractive!

BROCK
From who, your friends during recess?!

LIAM (T.H.)
That's exactly who I heard it from.

LIAM
Definitely not, sir.​

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Haha, never trust your school friends. :P

ARTIE runs off remarkably fast for someone of his size into the dining room.

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RUN FAT BOY, RUN! *gets shot* Yay for the return of Artie, though! XD

GLADYS
Do you think you could leave the wine bottle here? I think I'm going to be drinking a lot of this tonight.​

MAGNUS notices that her wineglass is already empty.

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Oh boy, I think I'll know what's going to happen next…

GLADYS (T.H.)
Am I drunk? Uh... no! If I was drunk, would I try flashing the camera?​

GLADYS tries flashing the camera, but it turns away.

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I bet the cameraperson is female. :P

Another funny chapter here. Aw, I feel sorry for Liam, both for his "date" not interested in him and the Kabuto incident. XD And indeed, Winston is such a nerd. :P

Nice follow up from the ending last chapter, although I feel more people in the party be more shocked to see Brock. Probably this is just me, though.

I too am surprised Gladys was hitting on Brock, but I guess that what happens when you drink too much wine, haha. YOU MISSED YOUR CHANCE AT GETTING LAID, BROCK! D:

Sorry for short review. This episode is short, but still a lot of fun to read. :D Looking forward to next chapter!

First off, bobandbill. The Brock is dead plot is something I kind of wrote without thinking, so I realized at the beginning of the next episode "Oh ****, I need to resolve this." I think it turned out pretty well. Brock would ruin his plan over some free food, right? :P

Gladys getting drunk sure is interesting, but I guess alcohol makes people do things that they'll end up regretting.

Bay, this chapter was as long as all the others. :P And you seem pretty shocked at Brock missing his chance at getting laid. In the end though, Brock had to choose between Gladys and Liam, and I think it's nice that Brock and Liam have such a strong friendship, even though it has its bumps a lot of a time. It's one of those things that develops when you're basically with the other person for most of your time.

INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

BROCK and LIAM are in the gym, arguing. BROCK has two suitcases next to him.


BROCK takes out a sheet of paper from his pocket and starts reading from it.


BROCK gathers his suitcases and walks out of the gym.

INT. CELADON HOTEL LOBBY

BROCK walks into the hotel with his suitcases. The CLERK at the front desk greets him.


The CLERK hands BROCK the room key.


INT. CELADON HOTEL ROOM

BROCK walks into the room to find ROARK already on one of the beds, watching TV.


ROARK jumps off the bed and gives BROCK a big pat on the back.

INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

LIAM is sitting in the gym when he hears a knock on the door.


LIAM runs to the door and opens it. A TRAINER is standing outside.


The TRAINER closes the door.

INT. CELADON HOTEL LOBBY

BROCK and ROARK get off the elevator and walk into the lobby.


The convention coordinator, ALICE, spots BROCK and ROARK and walks up to them.


INT. PIZZERIA

BROCK and ROARK walk into the pizzeria. ROARK spots ROXANNE, another Rock type gym leader, already at a table, eating.


ROARK walks to the counter to make an order while BROCK talks to ROXANNE.

INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

LIAM is pacing around the gym when there is a knock on the door.


LIAM walks over to the door and opens it to find MERV waiting.


MERV walks away and LIAM shuts the gym door.

INT. PIZZERIA


ROARK returns with two plates of pizza.

ROXANNE laughs.


ROXANNE laughs again.


BROCK takes his plate of pizza and takes all the anchovies off. ROARK takes a bite into his pizza, and he tries to cover his disgust with the taste.


BROCK takes all the anchovies and throws them in the garbage.

INT. CELADON HOTEL CONVENTION HALL

BROCK, ROARK, and ROXANNE have returned to the hotel and are now checking out the convention.


ROXANNE laughs.


ROXANNE laughs some more.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

LIAM has raided the office refrigerator and is drinking a diet soda when there is a knock on the door again.


LIAM opens the door to find DALLAS waiting.


LIAM lifts the diet soda up.

DALLAS leaves and LIAM closes the door.

LIAM takes a sip of diet soda.

INT. CELADON HOTEL LOBBY

BROCK, ROARK, and ROXANNE are chatting in the lobby when ALICE approaches them.


INT. PEWTER CITY GYM ARENA

LIAM locks up the office door.


LIAM turns off the gym lights.


LIAM walks out of the gym and locks up the door.

INT. CELADON HOTEL ROOM

BROCK and ROARK are chatting in the hotel room.

There is a knock on the hotel room door.


ROXANNE walks into the room.


INT. CELADON HOTEL BAR

BROCK, ROARK, and ROXANNE walk into the bar, and they are all greeted by ALICE.


ROARK walks off.


BROCK walks off.


ALICE walks off. ROXANNE spots ROARK talking to a girl, LISA.

BROCK returns with two beers.


BROCK hands ROXANNE a beer.

ROARK walks off.


ROARK returns.


LISA storms away.

ROXANNE laughs.


The night continues on, and BROCK, ROARK, and ROXANNE continue to drink. Eventually, ROXANNE hits her limit.


ROXANNE runs off.

ROARK walks off. BROCK waits for quite some time, but ROXANNE fails to appear. Eventually ALICE approaches BROCK.


INT. CELADON HOTEL HALLWAY

BROCK is walking to his room.


BROCK gets to his hotel room and opens the door, and is shocked at the sight he sees: ROXANNE and ROARK in bed.

ROXANNE tries to pull some bedsheets over her.



INT. PEWTER CITY GAZETTE OFFICES

GLADYS is in her office, twiddling with her pen.

GLADYS drops her pen.

GLADYS gets down on the floor to pick up the pen under her desk, but makes an audible gasp and appears frustrated when she comes back up.

Before I start this review, going to reply your reply to my review. XD

Bay, this chapter was as long as all the others. :P And you seem pretty shocked at Brock missing his chance at getting laid. In the end though, Brock had to choose between Gladys and Liam, and I think it's nice that Brock and Liam have such a strong friendship, even though it has its bumps a lot of a time. It's one of those things that develops when you're basically with the other person for most of your time.

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Hm, I guess with Episode 5 I was able to read it quickly, hence why it felt short. XD

And haha, I'm not shocked. I like being overdramatic in my reviews sometimes. :P But yeah, I can tell the two have a strong friendship and I love that. Woot for Brock helping Liam! :D

Okay, with that out of the way, quick review time!

BROCK
****.

ROARK
Brock? We're rooming together for the convention! This is great!​

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Oh boy. Awkward moment there. XD

ROARK
I wouldn't worry about him! I put Heather in charge of my gym, and I'm sure she'll do a splendid job! Anyway, I saw in the papers that you donated a rare stone to the Pewter City Museum! That's great news! I'm always saying people need to improve the quality of their local museums!​

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And thus, Brock slaps himself in the head over that donation.

LIAM (T.H.)
Is Liam really a sissy name? I may need to reinvent myself!
​

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Yes, Liam is a sissy name. Reinvent as soon as possible. :P

BROCK (T.H.)
Roxanne and I have quite a story. Two years ago, at this very convention, Roxanne got drunk, and then we had sex. I don't get why girls only seem to be attracted to me when they're drunk.

ROXANNE (T.H.)
Brock and I? Nah, there's been nothing between us... wait... oh! Never mind! We had sex two years ago. I forgot about that! So yeah, I guess there was something between us. Wow, I can't believe I forgot that. I must have been pretty hammered.​

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BrockxRoxanne, my new OTP. :P

LIAM
Nobody ****s around with Regis!​

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Fo sho! :P

ROARK (T.H.)
I am of the opinion that you can't knock something until you try it! It's why I made out with someone in a bathroom once.

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Woot, go Roark! XD

ROARK (T.H.)
I'm not really a heavy drinker. If I start drinking, my judgment becomes cloudy, and I may start making some stupid decisions.

BROCK (OFF CAMERA)
Like putting anchovies on pizza?

ROARK (T.H.)
Shh... this is my interview!​

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Well, Brock has a point there, Roark.

BROCK gets to his hotel room and opens the door, and is shocked at the sight he sees: ROXANNE and ROARK in bed.

BROCK
What the hell? What the hell?!​

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Oh, BURN! Okay, I take back what I said about BrockxRoxanne: RoarkxRoxanne is my OTP. XD

Anyways, this is another fun chapter there. I love Liam's new persona there and also yay for Merv and Dallas! Too bad they didn't get to battle. :P

Haha, again love Roark in this episode and also Roxanne is fun in it too. She's been laughing a whole lot, though. O.o Haha, knew the two will end up together in bed, but it's still a funny scene to read.

Last part with Gladys...all I have to say is watch out, Liam! D: