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Old June 30th, 2010 (12:06 PM). Edited December 6th, 2011 by Bolens.
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Hack of: Pokemon Fire Red Version
Hack By: Bolens


Story.
There are three mountains (Flare Mountain, Bolt Mountain, and Glacier Mountain), over each of which presides a legendary bird. For the most part, the birds pretty much keep to themselves, and are rarely seen at all. Some don't even believe they exist. Two groups of people, however, have formed in light of their existence. The first of these groups is Team Umbra, whose goal is to one day harness the power of the three birds and use them for various misdeeds. Team Umbra is led by the impulsive and in many ways unpredictable Monroe, who is assisted by his underbosses, Damon and Veronica. Team Umbra, much like Team Rocket, presents to the public no illusions about their intentions, and they are widely regarded as the villains of the Kleeto region. Formed not in opposition to Team Umbra, but rather the perceived risk the legendary birds present to the safety of the region's people, is Team Aurora. Team Aurora's leader is a conservative and enigmatic man with an alluring charisma: Adrian. His deputies are Felicia and Emile. Team Aurora hopes to capture (imprison) the birds so that they cannot bring harm to the people of Kleeto. These teams are in constant disagreement, and Monroe, who isn't fooled by Adrian's heroic image, often provokes Adrian, trying to get him to lose his seemingly invincible composure.

Meanwhile, a young trainer sets out on his journey into the world and occasionally runs into or finds himself competing with a stubborn and resentful girl who has also been his neighbor for the past few years. This trainer makes fast enemies of Team Umbra, but Monroe's words of advice keep him too wary of Team Aurora to fully trust them either. As the trainer makes a name for himself, he is assisted by one of two men at various points in his travels: Xander or Eli. Xander is revealed to be the region's champion, and Eli, his older brother, is the owner of the mysterious ranch on the outskirts of Vastacre Town, a former student of Prof. Cypress', and the environmental activist whose work inspired the creation and protection of Venture Jungle, Kleeto's famed national park. Eli, who believes that no Pokémon should be unnecessarily, let alone wrongfully, displaced, as it will undoubtedly have adverse effects on the ecosystem from whence it was taken, inspires the player to take on Team Aurora as well for the benefit of Kleeto and every living being within it.

The trainer eventually gets ahold of three (Blaze, Thunder, Frost) orbs at the summits of Flare, Bolt, and Glacier Mountain respectively, one of which he develops an odd connection with. Throughout the course of his journey, two of these orbs are taken from him by force, courtesy of Team Umbra and Team Aurora. Just as the trainer completes the seventh league-sanctioned test of his mettle in Heightengale City, he receives a message from the leader of the New Clear City gym, Ray, about a strange power outage. When the trainer arrives to see what's going on, he enters the Power Plant at the base of Bolt Mountain. Ray, who is occupied with maintaining the city's emergency generators, can't keep the city's power on and also investigate the disturbance at Bolt Mountain's summit, so he sends the trainer in his place. The trainer sees various battles taking place between members of Team Umbra and Team Aurora, at which point his rival shows up. She rushes ahead through the makeshift indoor battlefield, headstrong and determined as ever. The trainer makes his way further up the mountain only to find Xander battling a great deal of members of both teams. He, like Ray, is not in a position to continue on, so he encourages the trainer to go on ahead and meet up with his rival. The trainer does this and accidentally steps, with his rival, into the crossfire of two battles taking place between the Umbra Underbosses and the Aurora Deputies. The trainer teams up with his rival for two double battles, first against Veronica and Emile, and then against Felicia and Damon. The rival's jealousy of the trainer's prowess finally begins to fade in favor of mutual respect. The two trainers, now officially allies, make their way to Bolt Summit, where a battle is taking place between two legendary birds controlled by Monroe and Adrian. The trainer and his rival begin to wonder where the third is, and Xander, who somehow got through the barrage of trainers seen earlier on, arrives just in time to tell the trainer that his orb will summon the remaining bird. He then offers, if applicable, to send the player's sixth Pokémon into the storage system so that he can battle with the bird who answers his orb's call, which the player, if applicable, accepts. The player uses his orb to call on the third legendary bird, whose presence and subsequent addition to his team re-energizes and heals all current party members. Adrian and Monroe decide to enact a brief truce so that they can defeat the trainer, take his legendary bird, and then continue their own feud without interruption. Xander admits that his Pokémon are too exhausted from their battles on the lower level of the mountain to be very effective against legendary Pokémon, and instead, the player's rival steps to the plate and demands to help. The battle then begins, with Monroe and Adrian sending out their legendary birds first and their final team afterward, while the player sends out his bird and his rival sends out her starter. When they are defeated, the two other legendary birds fly away, and the player reclaims their respective orbs. Ray arrives to announce that the main generators are up and running once again, and assists Xander in escorting the team leaders away from the mountain, presumably to jail, as they aren't seen again.


Features.
  • Gripping Storyline
  • New Tiles
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  • Day and Night
  • New Music
  • More To Come


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Old July 1st, 2010 (11:43 AM).
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    The tiles are okay... But I like the story. It's freaky and awesome. =]
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    Old July 1st, 2010 (11:55 AM).
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      There are a few grammatical mistakes in the 2nd video (the one about the nightmare), so please do check everything thoroughly. Also, I think a change of music for the nightmare would be handy (try the Deoxys theme, not the Battle theme, the theme where Deoxys emerges, but doesn't fight). Also, no offense, but your tiles aren't the greatest I've seen (as the houses seem... Weird, I think they miss outlines on the roofs), but keep up the good work! I expect good things from this sort of beginning!
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      Old July 1st, 2010 (12:20 PM).
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        Umm... ... :/
        The house tiles and indoor tiles
        are kinda plain :/
        u sshould make ur own palette if that is ur palette stick with the orginals
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        Old July 1st, 2010 (12:39 PM).
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          Looks pretty good so far. However, in the sixth screenshot it looks as though the pokemon healing machine is overlapping the professor's head.
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          Old July 1st, 2010 (12:42 PM).
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          @vietazn654-Thanks man.

          @Banjora Marxvile- Yes I know about the grammatical errors, they just kinda of happened. And with the tiles, I just wanted a change that would suit the alpha and pre-beta production stages of the hack. I hope to eventually get custom made tiles, but if not, then I will just touch up the other tiles.

          @Nintendork15- Yes, I plan to overhaul everything, but as of now, I have been busy scripting. I just don't have enough time to devote myself to hacking 24/7.
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          Old July 1st, 2010 (12:45 PM).
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          Looks pretty good so far. However, in the sixth screenshot it looks as though the pokemon healing machine is overlapping the professor's head.
          Thanks. Yeah, I forgot to set the background aspect to "Hero is blocking tile".
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          Old July 1st, 2010 (12:48 PM).
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          For some reason the Nightmare video stops halfway

          From what I can see in the video:
          -Mapping is a bit weird, the trees only overlap top to bottom and are oddly placed.
          -Grammar mistakes.
          -REALLY boring. If I was playing I'd just be sitting there tapping A to hurry the text up, it would be better if some visual effects could come in to this (perhaps seeing the shady figure mentioned) or a bit more interaction.

          Story wise... Well it doesn't really tell me anything, what happens in the story is summed up by that short video. Tell us more about the adventure, what are we playing to do?

          As for the features:

          -New Storyline <- That's a given.
          -New Tiles <- Most hacks do, and I'm not sure the tiles you have picked work. The indoor tiles and the houses lack definition and need an outline.
          -Fakemon <- Do you actually have any yet? If not I'd take this off.
          -Day and Night <- A Feature! Hurrah!
          -New Hero/Heroine <- Also rather standard.

          Anyway good luck, and I hope these comments can help in some way ><.
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          Old July 1st, 2010 (12:55 PM).
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          For some reason the Nightmare video stops halfway

          From what I can see in the video:
          -Mapping is a bit weird, the trees only overlap top to bottom and are oddly placed.
          -Grammar mistakes.
          -REALLY boring. If I was playing I'd just be sitting there tapping A to hurry the text up, it would be better if some visual effects could come in to this (perhaps seeing the shady figure mentioned) or a bit more interaction.

          Story wise... Well it doesn't really tell me anything, what happens in the story is summed up by that short video. Tell us more about the adventure, what are we playing to do?

          As for the features:

          -New Storyline <- That's a given.
          -New Tiles <- Most hacks do, and I'm not sure the tiles you have picked work. The indoor tiles and the houses lack definition and need an outline.
          -Fakemon <- Do you actually have any yet? If not I'd take this off.
          -Day and Night <- A Feature! Hurrah!
          -New Hero/Heroine <- Also rather standard.

          Anyway good luck, and I hope these comments can help in some way ><.
          Yeah, thanks SwiftSign, I'll take what you said into consideration. With a hack though, there is so much to do for every little aspect. It requires a lot of work, but I'll stick with it. Once everything is square away I hope to release a pre-alpha of the hack. Hopefully. With story wise, The whole adventure is to find out what is in the world, after being a reclusive person for so long, the world has passed you by. Coming out everything has changed, and with the chance to have an adventure, you set out one with your Pokemon. Along the way many things will happen, from robbers robbing malls, other people battling you for Pokemon, and all sorts of things. I have a lot on the table to do, but also no time restrictions, so I'm set.
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          Old July 1st, 2010 (3:37 PM).
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          oh, um...fyi, i think you might have messed up the anchor links some how :\
          i thought i tested them, but it doesn't look like they are working quite right.
          I like the intro to the story btw
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          Old July 1st, 2010 (4:38 PM).
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          oh, um...fyi, i think you might have messed up the anchor links some how :\
          i thought i tested them, but it doesn't look like they are working quite right.
          I like the intro to the story btw
          Yeah, finally got it to work, just had to have the lines on perfect sync, thanks.
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            Yay the thread's up! And you used one of my ideas =]

            Are you gonna use any others besides the robbing of stores/malls?
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              The Good:

              `A very great potential story. This is the best aspect of a hack.
              ` Assuming those characters are going to be the ones in your hack, Great sprites.

              The Bad:
              ` Grammer. Please fix this as it is a major turnoff for a hack.
              ` Scripting needs to be a bit more reformed. For example, in your second video an error in your script caused your ROM to freeze. Not only that, but the Dialougue is weirdly formatted.
              Should be like this.

              Character: Blah blah blah\p
              Character2: Blah!?

              And not

              Character: Blah blah blah!!!\n Character2: Blah?

              Good luck on your hack. I would really like to play it :D
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              Old July 1st, 2010 (5:11 PM).
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              Yay the thread's up! And you used one of my ideas =]

              Are you gonna use any others besides the robbing of stores/malls?
              Yes, they will be implemented along the way as the story and scripting progresses.
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              Old July 13th, 2010 (12:01 AM).
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                looks good I like the story
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                Old July 18th, 2010 (5:04 AM).
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                I hope you might just ditch the current tiles and find new one or sprite them your self.
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                Old July 18th, 2010 (12:03 PM).
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                  The story is incredible! Could be written into a book
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                  Old July 18th, 2010 (5:44 PM).
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                    If you require a grammar corrector, I can help you do that.
                    Now, on to the story.

                    The story has potential. I like that. It makes the hack good.
                    The tiles seem to be a bit too overused... I don't know, this is just how I feel.

                    And for the Hero sprites in the logo, aren't those characters from Gundam?
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                    Old July 22nd, 2010 (4:38 PM). Edited July 24th, 2010 by hackerofdarkness.
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                    You might want to get alot of progress befour you show us your hack bolens.
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                    Old July 26th, 2010 (11:08 AM).
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                    Almost ready to release an Alpha that goes to the end of the first gym, expect it sometime this week.
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                    Old July 26th, 2010 (12:10 PM).
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                      This hack is very good, only you need to correct some grammatical errors, the grammar is important.
                      I like the tiles you're using...

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                      Old August 1st, 2010 (12:20 PM).
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                      Finally got around to uploading a preview of the hack. So far it is a little generic with spelling errors here and there, but game-play is not affected. It goes to the end of the first gym, and hopefully releases will keep coming until the game is finished. Thanks all.
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                      Old August 1st, 2010 (1:26 PM).
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                        I am intrigued by your story! Good stories for Pokemon hacks seem to be so rare. I'm gonna be keeping a close eye on this thread.

                        If you need someone to beta grammar/spelling for your dialogue, I can help. I'm also a half-decent plot critiquer if that sort of thing is needed.
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                        Old August 5th, 2010 (9:20 AM).
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                            You shouldn't put fake pokemon!
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