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Old July 10th, 2010 (4:14 AM).
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    Hi, I've been writing for around 5-6 years now and I think I'm alright at it, I normally write short stories and I recently decided to start writing little songs/tunes. They're just for fun, and I was wondering if I could get opinions on a couple. :D

    *I wrote these last night at around 3AM, so I was very tired. My grammar might not be the best.

    Today I watched the sun rise
    Way up in the purple skies
    Far above my tiny head
    From the window to my bed
    And from it all I have thought about
    Living in insane doubt
    Trust in her pretty pink pouts, yeah
    And from it all I have learned
    Everything that I yearn
    Is obviously none of my concern, yeah
    None of my concern
    And from it all I have shot
    My dreams over a vacant lot
    Where they will sit and stink and rot
    Stink and rot, yeah
    And from it all I can say
    That today is the day
    I'm not the fondest of my lies
    Today's the day I watched the sun rise
    Yeah, I watched the sun rise

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    These skies aren't blue
    What is a boy to do?
    This grass sure ain't green
    The bugs are so mean
    They say the road is far
    But it won't long before I'm a star.

    When I'm a star, all you will see
    How little you actually mean to me
    When I'm star, I'll spit in your face
    Lack complete compassion for the human race
    and I'll sit back and bend the rules
    I've got the looks, the money and the tools
    Out run all you simple fools
    How much is my soul?

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