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Old August 26th, 2010 (7:07 AM). Edited February 10th, 2014 by derozio.
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    Your signatures are incredible! Do you have any tutorials? I love your style.
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    Old August 26th, 2010 (4:02 PM).
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    You finally made a gallery! :D


    Simply amazing. I love your work, I can't pick one but I love your large pieces and tags the most for some reason XD

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    I am lovin this one. I remember what movie this is from too XD

    I'll add to this with more critics when I have free time XD

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    Old August 30th, 2010 (10:35 PM).
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      Well i finally found your gallery after months O.O
      As usual your work's awesome; i like the running ahead LP :]
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      Old September 3rd, 2010 (4:46 PM).
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      Ha ha, thanks a lot, assault. And as for the tutorials..umm, not really. I plan on doing one or two soon, though. Just coz some people asked, you know. ;]
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      Simply amazing. I love your work, I can't pick one but I love your large pieces and tags the most for some reason XD

      http://i862.photobucket.com/albums/a...SC303/LP2a.png
      I am lovin this one. I remember what movie this is from too XD

      I'll add to this with more critics when I have free time XD

      Keep up the good work!
      Ha ha, yeah, that I did. I guess it took a lot of time to make this stupid gallery, eh?

      Thanks a lot, charizard. Your comment was appreciated. <3

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      As usual your work's awesome; i like the running ahead LP :]
      You've seen almost all of my works already so I don't think you'd need to visit this thing. :P

      Naah, but seriously, thanks. I'll be sure to try and keep improving. ;]

      And yush, update timez:
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      This tag above ^ has three versions, actually. Check the first post to see 'em. ;]

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      Old September 3rd, 2010 (5:20 PM).
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        Do you take requests?

        If so, could you please do one for me?

        I'd like a signature and avatar with an image of Feraligatr, colours black and blue and make it grungy and dark with a cool font saying Assault somewhere.



        ^The same size and style as that would be great.
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        Old September 3rd, 2010 (6:51 PM).
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        Wow, just wow. I love this ones. It seems to pop out to me (literally) the color usage is good and everything about it is just plain awesome. The other ones are good as well.

        @Assault; I'm pretty sure he doesn't take requests otherwise he would have said so in the first post :T
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          I absolutely love your FullMetal Alchemist icons!

          I also quite like;

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          Old September 3rd, 2010 (7:00 PM).
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            Really like the 4th to last one under the tags section, shows a wonderful sense of depth. Your style is simple, yet unique. Nice work.
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            Old September 5th, 2010 (10:39 AM).
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            Do you take requests?

            If so, could you please do one for me?

            I'd like a signature and avatar with an image of Feraligatr, colours black and blue and make it grungy and dark with a cool font saying Assault somewhere.

            ^The same size and style as that would be great. ^_^
            Well, not really. I don't think I'm qualified for requests as of yet. ;;
            So, sorry to disappoint you, but I won't really be doing it. Might give it a try sometime soon, though. Not as an 'official request' but more as a 'personalized request'. Yeah. XD;

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            Wow, just wow. I love this ones. It seems to pop out to me (literally) the color usage is good and everything about it is just plain awesome. The other ones are good as well.
            Ha ha, thanks, Charizard. <3

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            I leik mah FMA icons too. <3
            Thanks. But yeah, I still think I kinda suck at icons. D=
            And those two took some effort to make. Glad you liked em. <3

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            Really like the 4th to last one under the tags section, shows a wonderful sense of depth. Your style is simple, yet unique. Nice work^^.
            THAT took a lot of effort. Like, seriously. Dunno, but it took me nearly an hour or so. :x
            Glad that the result is appreciated by all of you, though. And I'm truly flattered due to the fact that my style was also appreciated by you. Arigatou. <3

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              Well, not really. I don't think I'm qualified for requests as of yet. ;;
              So, sorry to disappoint you, but I won't really be doing it. Might give it a try sometime soon, though. Not as an 'official request' but more as a 'personalized request'. Yeah. XD;
              That's fine dude. You should, I took requests for ages and I don't think I was as good as you.
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              Old September 11th, 2010 (2:36 AM).
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              That's fine dude. You should, I took requests for ages and I don't think I was as good as you.
              Well, if that's the case, I might actually go ahead and take requests. That'll happen soon. ;]

              Anyways, here's another update, guys:



              I don't really know how it turned out, to be honest. XD;
              And yeah, don't forget to give some serious C&C, guys. I need that badly. ;;
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              Commenting on the Blazing With Fury one.

              Firstly, the render seems to fade in too much with the background - and overall the image is too light. If that was contrasted a bit more, it might look better. As for the background, it seems sort of dull. To the right, there's this empty space, which probably could have had more cd4's added in. The blurred effect in the background you seem to be using a bit and maybe you should try to add depth another way. As for the "fire", I'm not sure whether that's apart of the image or not, but I don't think it works too well, it just makes the image seem blurrier due to the colours. The text on the side, not a big fan of it. Either you could've done without the text (and the extra grey area behind it), or placed the text where the face is blurred in the background, put some cd4's around it (text) instead of adding in the face and it might've looked better. Just how I see it.
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              Old September 11th, 2010 (3:41 AM).
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              That made sense, nica. Looks like I messed up on that one. :P
              Thanks a lot, though. I'll see to it that it looks better. ;]
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                I've been doing graphics for one year now and I still fail. I absolutly LOVE your tags, they have so much potential. I would like a tutorial or two (wow that sounds mean). One question, would you accept gifts from a noob grapical artist?
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                  Well, if that's the case, I might actually go ahead and take requests. That'll happen soon. ;]

                  Anyways, here's another update, guys:



                  I don't really know how it turned out, to be honest. XD;
                  And yeah, don't forget to give some serious C&C, guys. I need that badly. ;;

                  I hope it does happen soon. If it does, please just go back and take my request first.
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                  Old September 11th, 2010 (6:32 PM).
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                    Could you do a request? I'd be really happy and would give you credit.

                    I want a colored version of Bulbasaur's Solarbeam in the Pokemon Adventures manga, you know, when Red is attacked by the Machoke in Giovanni's abandoned gym. Also, have the quote by Red " But I figured, plants turn sunlight into energy, and this guy had a bulb on his back, so...", as well as the phrase "The true power of Bulbasaur"

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                      Could you do a request? I'd be really happy and would give you credit.

                      I want a colored version of Bulbasaur's Solarbeam in the Pokemon Adventures manga, you know, when Red is attacked by the Machoke in Giovanni's abandoned gym. Also, have the quote by Red " But I figured, plants turn sunlight into energy, and this guy had a bulb on his back, so...", as well as the phrase "The true power of Bulbasaur"

                      The pic is the one in the middle of the page:
                      http://www.mangareader.net/458-28200-11/pokemon-adventures/chapter-2.html
                      If you'd have read mine and Derozio's previous posts you would have seen that he isn't taken request but he may think about starting shortly.
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                      Old September 13th, 2010 (2:34 PM). Edited September 13th, 2010 by aSeRo141414.
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                        This is what I like..

                        I like the use of the C4D.. btw where you get that C4D? just asking..
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                          If you'd have read mine and Derozio's previous posts you would have seen that he isn't taken request but he may think about starting shortly.
                          Oh, okay. Just let him know (or I will) that if he does, I'll request that sig
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                          Old September 24th, 2010 (10:16 AM).
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                          Signaturestop. From the same place you got the C4D for your current sig, bro. XD;

                          As for requests: As I said, I might do requests in the future. I don't really know when in the future, though. I might just start doing them once I'm less busy. But it doesn't really seem like I'm getting free anytime soon, so yeah.

                          @Benny: Even if I were to take requests, your request is kinda impossible for me to do. I don't color stuff, you see. XD;

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                          As you can see, this is my current signature image. I wanted to go for an edward theme and tried using a new style. A style new to me, anyway.


                          This one isn't really anything special, I guess. Just tried experimenting with depth.


                          Idk about this one. Just a random vertical tag.
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                          Old October 2nd, 2010 (8:21 AM).
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                          Since this thing has been dead for quite a while and coz I haven't really done any updates, I figured I might as well just put this in here. XD;



                          I'll just say that this tag is completely different from my usual ones. I went totally on a different route this time. And surprisingly, the results were good. At least, that's what I think. o3o
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                          Wow.. your graphics are amazing, Derozio.
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                            Alright, well, I've given you some little snippets of critique from the beginning, and you've improved a lot since then, as I said you would. But don't be too hasty, there's a long road ahead if you want to be much better than you are now. The graphics world is a dog eat dog one, sub-conscientiously; everyone competes. So let's press on.

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                            Right off the bat here, the borders annoy me. Clipping mask borders are a no go, in fact, borders in general are a no go. I would avoid them at all costs as they were a technique primarily used by graphic artists about 2 or 3 years ago, now only beginners tend to do them until they realize they actually do nothing for a tag. Not a bit fan of your method of creating effects in this one to be true, the lighting on the hand is the wrong colour; don't put a spot light on something that already has the same colour, it'll just reduce contrast. So a white spot light over a white hand was a bad idea here, a warmer colour may have been nicer, given the fire in the background and the general warm texture of the tag. The text on the left is a little meh, but you'll hear me time and time again, giving out about your font choices, and I think I've mentioned that to you before, you need to pick fonts that match the theme of the tag, and this means downloading a lot of stuff from dafont or the likes. I kinda like the style you were going for, but you went on overkill with the effects and clashed styles with the border clipping masks which had heavy colour, and the body of the tag which is very un-saturated.


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                            Not a bit fan of this one, the colours all look washed out, but not in a way that would pass off as an intentional artists' technique as they just make the tag look really low quality to be true. Blurring images like this, which already lack in colour, is a bad idea also. The faces were lacking detail as it was, now they merely look like they had their quality stripped off. The boy you sharpened; is over sharpened, his face had too much light and the rest of his body isn't brought out at all, other than the torso. If you were trying to emphasize him, you should have brightened up the rest of him with the dodge tool or by using a white brush and playing with opacity and layer styles. Wouldn't be one of your better tags, a slight jump backwards.

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                            Again, not liking this one, it carries over a lot of what I said in the previous one, it's just horribly lacking in colour, it looks like you put a gradient map over it and left the opacity too high. Clipping masks are kind of cool, but the ones at the top left are not parallel to each other and it looks bad as they just seem wonky. I would recommend going down a different route if you're going to desaturate and strip colour from anime/cartoon styled images, because it just makes no sense. Do it with RL stock images, but do it tastefully, working with depth and lighting using levels and curves as well as brushing, using the channel mixer, selective colour etc. don't take short cuts. But, not one of your better ones again, I would jump away from that style pretty quickly if I was you.

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                            I actually like this one a lot, you didn't take off the colour of the stock image, you maintained it's original quality like you failed to do in the previous two. I think you know that it's one of your better tags, but I think it might be a little bit messy, don't worry too much about filling up space. That texture is a little too heavy also. The text, ruins the tag for 3 reasons: 1) Bad font choices 2) You should never put text stuck in a corner and 3) don't make text semi opaque like this.You'll need to cut out the borders also, they do nothing for a tag. You'll need to eventually get off the habit of repeating the stock image in a tag to fill space, it shouldn't be used so heavily or twice for that matter, it just shows poor technique, so try different directions and use it only where it would be tasteful.

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                            This will go back to your problem with quality, you're taking too much of it out of the tag. I think it's either an over use of gradient maps or by reducing the contrast with one of PS's tools. Whatever it is, you need to tone it down a little. This render is really easy to make a tag with as it has so much action and so much flow going for it that the tag artists just needs to slap it on a tag add a few effects and boom, an instantly nice tag. But, there's a few things that would urk me, again; font placement, get it out of the corners, and the "with fury" looks bad when it's not going in the same direction as the "Blazing", but you need to play with text a little more, try warping it with ctrl + t, and purely being innovative, these sort of generic fonts and colours aren't doing much for your text. This tag does have a lot of flow, I just wish the colours were more vibrant.

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                            I'll group these together since they're the same tag in retrospect. In any case, I like the first the most due to the colour. The text however, seems a little rough, over sharpened possibly. In general the tag is just very busy and messy. Over use of clipping masks, too many fractal stocks thrown about. Overall it's just too busy and it's plain to see. I prefer the top because it sort of masks the overuse of effects somewhat.

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                            I like the text method used here, but better positional and fonts would have made it more impressive. I'm not sure how much I like the blurring, again you're using whatever technique you use on your tags that brings down the contrast and it's really not working to a full extent, it's far too heavy. The dust stock is also too heavy and isn't really doing much for the tag, the colours need to be more vibrant and again, the lack of contrast kills it.

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                            TEXT TEXT AAAAAAAAAAAAH, again, the opacity, and the font choices. better placement here though. But eh, the tag as a whole doesn't appeal to me too much, I think it looks too low quality. It would be much better if everything looked more strong and not so wishy washy. I think that if you improved on the text (which I notice is influenced by Maly's tags), fixed the quality of almost everything, added a little more depth; it would be a more solid tag.

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                            For a tag, this is a little short to be honest. I kind of like the text positioning, it flows, but again, not the font choice. You kept the original quality of the render here which is something you should try to always maintain. The clipping masks though, I think you should head in another direction with those, as in, don't use them to make effects. The C4D is a nice one, though I think you should have used more C4D's than clipping masks to be honest, it's better practice. Just a few things needed to fix this one up, just watch out how you fill space and add depth.


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                            You got the right idea about where the action was coming from; his hands, and you played on it nicely. Though the tag as a whole is lacking, not only are his hands the focal, but his face is also, in fact, the entire render is. The entire tag feels a little flaky, the way you filled space doesn't appeal to me very much, again, probably due to the use of clipping masks. I think if you made it wider and seriously burned the edges in a circular sort of way, it would look a little better.

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                            Again, not wide enough, and borders don't help it much. I like where you were going with it though, except I dislike the opacity you put on the cards on the right, and again, the clipping masks. I think you have a habit of chopping things up and throwing them about the canvas, though this might work for physical art, I'm not sure it's something you should be doing in graphic design, it looks a little tacky. But I like this style, maybe a little too warm but a nice direction to head in anyway so long as you fix up a few things. .

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                            The text in this one, again follows the route of "Where Dero went wrong with text", so just look back at previous comments to see why this is bad placement etc. The tag itself again is a little messy and the colours are rather dull. I think you should bring out the reads and add a little more colour. Try making a new layer and with a soft brush at 65px ish, put a dot of colour (in a few different colours) around your tags and set the layer to "color" whilst adjusting opacity etc. So try that on future tags. But really, this one lacks in colour and composition primarily.

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                            Took me a while to actually find the focal here, which shows that you haven't brought it out enough. Every time I look at the tag, my eye jumps around to find where it should be going to. The tag itself is very monochrome and I think that going with that sort of brownish colour all over the tag was a bad idea, furthermore, I don't think that the render was all that great either. I kind of like the style but the colour is really awful, and again, the clipping masks aren't doing much in the way of effects.
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                            This one seems to lack effects really, the colours are also very dull again. I think that you've not gone through much trouble to make this like you have in other tags. I also feel that you should avoid renders like this, they don't offer much in the way of giving you options for colour. There's also a huge void to the left of the tag in which needs to be filled up.

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                            One of my favourite tags of yours. I love the render, but I like how you worked it. the only thing that concerns me is the texture you used, I think you should slow down with your use of textures in general. A little blurring would have sufficed.


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                            I'll finish with this one, as I feel I'm starting to repeat myself as a lot of your tags hold the same qualities. At any rate, this is probably your best. I would advise you move that text onto the black space on his torso. I love this C4D though I dislike the opacity. Whatever you did with his hand also throws me off a little though, I think the flow just jumps about when you look there. All in all it's one of your best tags by a long way.

                            As for LP's an icons, I think you need to be more technical in what you're attempting to do, the LP's are merely colour edits with a few techniques here and there and unappealing text thrown into th mix. I would advise you try something a little more challenging and add more effects before I come back to rate as what I see here doesn't differ greatly to some of your tags. The icons need work also, the only one I really liked was this - http://i862.photobucket.com/albums/ab183/ASC303/REPAIR1-1.png - I think that you should work with more IRL stocks, that's the way forward.

                            So a good body of work, I think you could definitely improve if you cut out some bad habits. You're always welcome to bug me on MSN PC for crit. Keep it going, you're getting good!

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