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Old July 24th, 2011 (4:54 AM).
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    What is with the "u mad" and the part after that on the first post? I did not get it? As for your video, why does everything look so... swirly?

    The story isn't bad, I see it's a continuation of N from B/W, makes sense. The introduction is weird though, it does not sound like Pokemon. I didn't know people went to school in Pokemon. Why don't we watch Ash in school then?
    well actually, in the pokemon books, ash goes toschool. they just edited that out when they made the show, just like they edited out how he really got pikachu.
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    Old July 24th, 2011 (5:12 AM).
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      Old July 24th, 2011 (4:44 PM).
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        First of all, HI DASPIRIT FROM DA!!!
        Okay, now lets explain, hmm.. "u mad?" was just a thing like a story or plot..
        And, for the video. Because I made the mode like Diamond/Pearl
        Yeah, I've had a Pokecommunity account for like 4 years now and go on almost daily, I just don't post much. I still fail to see the relevance of the "u mad" part. Does it have anything to do with the story? If so, then you should edit it into the story section. If not, I think you should remove it, because it is very random and confusing.

        As for that mode, It doesn't look too good. I think D/P still used real 3D for the overworld. That mode only angles everything based on the player. It would make sense if you put the other walls for the building and that they get more visible depending on the angle of the building.

        Cool website, by the way. The banner on the top that shows trees, you should edit that to show Pokemon instead.
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        Old July 24th, 2011 (5:08 PM).
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          Yeah, I've had a Pokecommunity account for like 4 years now and go on almost daily, I just don't post much. I still fail to see the relevance of the "u mad" part. Does it have anything to do with the story? If so, then you should edit it into the story section. If not, I think you should remove it, because it is very random and confusing.

          As for that mode, It doesn't look too good. I think D/P still used real 3D for the overworld. That mode only angles everything based on the player. It would make sense if you put the other walls for the building and that they get more visible depending on the angle of the building.

          Cool website, by the way. The banner on the top that shows trees, you should edit that to show Pokemon instead.
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          Old July 25th, 2011 (4:12 PM).
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            Doing my sectional rating system for this.

            The Game 4/5

            I respect the choice of starters, but a tad bit overused, correct?

            U mad? 2/5

            Eh? That was confusing...

            wut? 1/5

            Nice to know... Not that important, though...

            Introduction 4/5

            I love it. Elaynii put a lot of effort into this. Only thing I find
            wrong with it is that the video bears no resemblance to this...

            Story 3/5

            Needs to be written better. Snivy, you sure you can do all that?

            Screenshots 3/5

            This is where I say no. The graphics are horrible and look like
            you spent 15 minutes on it n MS paint. The rooms are still way
            too spaced out. The scripts arent modified at all. The systems are
            all the basic ones from Venom's kit. Your outdoor mapping is very
            bland. The trees are also cut off. I lost to give you something?
            No, I forgot to give you something.

            Video 3/5

            Why is Mom humping the counter..?

            Total: 20/35, or a 60% D.

            You need to work on this. A lot.
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            Old July 26th, 2011 (1:10 AM).
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              I lot of people have reprehended the work needed for this game already
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              Old July 26th, 2011 (8:06 AM). Edited July 27th, 2011 by TheMarkCrafter.
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                Old July 26th, 2011 (1:35 PM).
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                You'd be better off reporting your own post, then telling them you want the thread name changed. Because, if I recall, both Yuoaman and Cilerba are on a brief leave.
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                Old July 27th, 2011 (4:55 AM).
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                  This actually looks quite good! I do agree with Minezumi's post about the whole overview of the game however. Your video is alright, but the music actually... destroyed my ears, I'm listening through headphones but I'm using a HD Audio Program which increases volume significantly so I'm not really in any position to criticize you for that. Either way it's a good idea and I'll be keeping a close eye on this one, I wish I could offer you some help, but I'm working on some projects of my own over the summer.
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                  Old July 27th, 2011 (5:09 AM). Edited July 27th, 2011 by TheMarkCrafter.
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                    This actually looks quite good! I do agree with Minezumi's post about the whole overview of the game however. Your video is alright, but the music actually... destroyed my ears, I'm listening through headphones but I'm using a HD Audio Program which increases volume significantly so I'm not really in any position to criticize you for that. Either way it's a good idea and I'll be keeping a close eye on this one, I wish I could offer you some help, but I'm working on some projects of my own over the summer.
                    Thank you! I know why the music is DAT ANNOYING! Don't worry, Minezumi will give me some new music.
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                    Sorry for the double post, but why nobody will comment?
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                    Old July 29th, 2011 (6:57 PM). Edited July 29th, 2011 by titiy.
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                      Old July 30th, 2011 (12:04 AM).
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                        KingSnivy, I'm sorry but the quality of the video is not good and shows nothing about the story itself or anything other than to show what little you have done. In your first post the layout appears to be ameatur. What on earth is with the "U mad?" and "wut?" segments. You could at least spell out the words correctly and not use text/Internet abbreviation.

                        And with the credits, I see practically every job done by someone else. You have said you are a spriter you could learn something else to contribute to YOUR game. That's the whole point, if you do 20% of the work on your game then it's really only your game by title which is worthless really.

                        Sorry to be so harsh but I think it may be the only way to get through as you have in the past rejected criticism (I see you commented on the music which is a start).
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                        Old August 2nd, 2011 (5:13 AM).
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                          Guys, I made a new title screen, and made a simple edit for the 1st post.
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                            1. Your first post is an eyesore. All the pink is really kind of annoying. It makes the text kind of hard to read in some parts of the post.
                            2. Shining Diamond was, to be honest, a better name than Shining Orbs. "Orbs" just doesn't sound like anything in a Pokémon universe.
                            3. Don't use trollslang like "u mad" and "wut". It's unprofessional, and the information contained in those segments is useless.
                            4. Both the Introduction and the Story are plagued with terrible grammar and punctuation. Your spelling could use some touching up.
                            5. In the video, your entire world shakes with each step. That's not a good thing. Maybe that's just because it's a video, but you should get that checked. You also have the character walking over areas that shouldn't be walked over.
                            6. Why is Lucas so skinny? Overworld sprites aren't that skinny, and if they are, their heads are normally sized. That Lucas sprite is honestly terrible. His head is massive compared to his body.
                            7. I must commend you. You've taken unoriginality and laziness to new lows. Your game lacks new characters, it mixes Dawn and Lucas with Generation 5 characters in an entirely new game, and you've credited yourself with "Logo".

                            I have to ask, and I expect an answer, what do you do on this project? Please don't just avoid the question. Really, answer it. Why did you start this project if you don't plan on doing anything for it other than taking bits and pieces of other stories and mashing them together?
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                              The css background is really eye hurting.
                              and the maps u ahve there are pretty empty/open too:\
                              i think everything i said until now was said though...
                              anyways good luck in doing this!
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                                Watched the video. Dialogue needs improvement, I recommend getting someone else to check it before you release anything. The story I find odd and without any explanation as to why. Why is N suddenly a crazed supporter of Giratina and why does he want to rule the world. What I got from Black and White is the the character of N wanted to liberate Pokemon from Humans peacefully so that they can live in harmony with one another. Also why does the player hold the fate of Ueno, did they discover some artifact, are they part of some ancient family clan, sheer luck? More explanation is needed. I'm going to be honest, you have a lot of work to do for your game. A lot of aspects of your game need much improvement.
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                                Old August 4th, 2011 (5:54 AM).
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                                  Watched the video. Dialogue needs improvement, I recommend getting someone else to check it before you release anything. The story I find odd and without any explanation as to why. Why is N suddenly a crazed supporter of Giratina and why does he want to rule the world. What I got from Black and White is the the character of N wanted to liberate Pokemon from Humans peacefully so that they can live in harmony with one another. Also why does the player hold the fate of Ueno, did they discover some artifact, are they part of some ancient family clan, sheer luck? More explanation is needed. I'm going to be honest, you have a lot of work to do for your game. A lot of aspects of your game need much improvement.
                                  Now, I changed the story, and deleted the video.
                                  N was replaced with Cyrus.
                                  Giratina was replaced with Reshiram
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                                  To be honest with you, KingSnivy...

                                  Leaving it as Giratina and replacing N with Cyrus would've made much more sense. Cyrus, if I recall correctly, was stuck in the Distortion World after the player defeated/captured Giratina.

                                  Be that as it may, I am still willing to help you with your dialog and plot.
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                                    What exactly is the point of having the pics and video still on there and just saying they are "outdated?"
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                                    Old August 4th, 2011 (1:56 PM).
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                                      UPDATE!
                                      I've updated the textbox, changed the SpriteWindow script lines 11 to 15, and made the font white, thanks to Abnegation for telling me how to do this.
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                                        UPDATE!
                                        I've updated the textbox, changed the SpriteWindow script lines 11 to 15, and made the font white, thanks to Abnegation for telling me how to do this.
                                        You didnt know how to make your font white?
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                                        You didnt know how to make your font white?
                                        He means transparent,like you're able to see the tiles while the text is visible.
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                                          From what I can see is your style is not cohesive. You have the 5th gen sprites with the 4th gen indoor tiles, and some of your outdoor tiles do not look that great with the transparency.
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